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Fandom: Harry Potter Name of character: Bethany Crane Race of character: Human Age of character: 16 Height of character: 5'3" Weight of character: 135 pounds Brief background of character: Is the youngest child of a Muggle-Born couple, who adopted her when she was two years old. She has no memories of her birth family. She has had a happy childhood, however she knows that she is missing something. She is finely told of her birth parents. She is proud that they were pure-blood, however they were also Death Eaters in Voldemort's service and were killed when they refused to turn themselves in. This fact has her emotionally torn. Family was moderately wealthy though she does not have access to this money. Several members of her mother and father's families are trying to circumvent her rightful, legal claim on her property to get at the valuable relics within the vault. Eventually uses this by pretending to help her relatives to get this wealth in exchange for information on what Voldemort and his followers are up to. This results in her being ostracized by most of the students at Hogwarts. Though she is not trusted by those she claims to be helping either. While all this is going on she is plagued by a series of dreams and visions that show her just what will happen if she fails. She must help to gather information for Harry and the DA, however she is not trusted by either the DA or her pure-blood relatives which makes convincing both harder. The dreams and visions get clearer and more real as time goes on and her ability to tell what is real and what is in her dreams is slowly fading until she can no longer tell the difference between them. She has no idea how she can succeed when she can't even believe herself. Character's position or job: Student Strengths/Skills: Alchemy, Transfiguration Are these skills typical of the fandom? If not, why?: Yes Weaknesses/Bad habits: Can be thoughtless and immature, theatrical and cruel. Plagued by fears of her own design, second guesses herself. Can seem insensitive at times and can be domineering. Sometimes spaces out at odd moments. Distinctive features, if any: Stormy gray eyes and an aloof expression Are these features unique in the fandom? If so, why?: not unique Connections to canon characters (if any): Is related to the Goyles through her uncle by marriage. Mother was a Crabb. How does your character get on with those around him/her?: She is not in constant contact with the main characters since she is in Hufflepuff. What does the other characters think of your character when they met her/him?: She is quiet, however she slowly befriends Ginny. She is seen as aloof at times and nosy others. Some do not trust her because she is a pure blood and acts like it sometimes.

Title: No Rest For the Weary Author: Draygon_Icewing Rating: A++ (One scene of human on human loving and three scenes of Cybertronian luvin.) Summary: Sam and Mikaela are getting closer to their graduation and to each other. Their tranquility is shattered when old enemies with new faces appear on a mission for vengeance and conquest. Blatant SMBB, IHChromia Anal, Bi, Death, DP, Exhib, F/M/M, H/C, Language, M/F, OC, Oral, WIP Feedback: 25 wonderful reviews. I want to thank them all Fandom: Transformers (Movie-verse) URL: http://movies.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600091327

Thankyou those who reviewed Shadow War!

How do you deal with reviewers that have no sense of subtly? I use subtle cues and clues and foreshadowing a lot in my stories. You actually have to sit down with your thinking cap on and READ and not skim through. I hate it when someone reviews that they just didn't get what I was trying to say after they admit that they just skimmed through real fast. Then they have the nerve to tell me that I am leaving important information out when I include it all in the personal thoughts of the characters. My characters have thoughts and feelings, not just words. I also remember a beta telling me early on that it is better to 'show' what you mean and not 'tell' what you want to say. Some of these people are just out for a cheap thrill and care nothing for substance and all the work that goes into fleshing a scene out with the characters thoughts and feelings to 'show' what is going on rather than just 'telling' it in dialogue or outright narration.

This is a wonderful idea. I have already reviewed several wonderful stories I would not have seen without this thread. I have several fics spreading across more than half a dozen fandoms. My Harry Potter one is on hold since it is REALLY AU since the publishing of Book 7. The Star Trek one is on hold as well pending inspiration. It cycles through my obsessions pretty regularly these days. Take a gander at My Page and see what you think.

This is very true. However, minors looking for a cheap thrill can access the stories on FF.net where as here we try to protect their fragile little minds...and our fragile little asses from sueage.

I have only deleted on review. Why? Because the fucker read neither the summary or the Author's Note inside the story and commented on my story not holding completely with cannon. When I PMed him and told him that it had AU/AR in the warnings plus a note in the summary AND in the story itself, this person gave me the silent treatment. If someone is so stupid they can not read summaries or Author Notes then they have no business leaving a review complaining about the things that I CLEARLY warned about.

Bunghole comes to mind, but that's just too Bevis. Ummm...Taught ring of muscle, pucker... not many word you could use that are 'clean'.

I am afraid that would be me...now where is my 'bang'em silly'?

Chapter five up for your enjoyment. Make sure you leave a review, even if you thought it sucked. I would like to know what I am doing wrong when 200 people read but no one reviews.

This is very true. I get very irritated when I get hundreds of hits and no reviews.

Wow...I have never met another person with Aspergers. Great to know that I am not alone.

The way I write sex scenes is like riding a roller coaster. First, there's the build-up; flirting, touching, smiling, etc. Then there's kissing and the embrace. After that it gets into the beginning of foreplay and their thoughts considering the other person involved. Then comes the actual sex. It starts slow then goes faster and faster until you reach the peak and begin the exciting journey all the way back down. Then there's the after glow. You can fit all of that in the space of a paragraph or make it the entire story. It depends on the characters you are putting together, what their sexual styles are and how deep their feelings go.

I have to agree with this. The only time that I can orgasm from penetration only is when I am on my period. I don't know why, but any other time, no matter how wet I get (And I fucking drip down my legs, people) I can't get enough stimulation from penetration to orgasm. I need my clit stimulated most of the time except for those five wonderful days I mentioned before. Also... Myth: Women can not get pregnant when they are on their period. Truth: FALSE!!! I have known several women who can not get pregnant at any other time! How's that for a biological kick in the nuts? Which is why protection at all times is necessary. And guys, when she's on the rag, wearing a condom can prevent her from getting the mother of all yeast infections since everything is wide open for obvious reasons.

Show of hands...how many people who practice this get thrush or trench-mouth?

Category name: Fallout 3 Section category to be in: Games Do you have any stories for it?: Yes -added YAY!!!

I have a story for Fallout 3 that should be in the Games category, however it is not there. How do I put in the request for one to be made?

I, like everyone else here get reviews consisting mostly of 'I liked your story, can't wait for the next chapter.' This tells me about as much as a phone book listing only last names. The ones that make me want to write even more come like this one (and it was from ff.net): "That was a very, very good story. Firstly, there was the pacing. It moved very slow, but that was crucial, by no means should it have been rushed. It takes its time so that we can visualize every detail that is described so well. Building the entire battlefield in vicious detail, rather than outright introducing the heroine gives the reader a view good idea of what is happening and understanding of the struggle. Sure, we have all played the games and seen it, but you still take the time to put into words what we've only seen. The motivation for the two sides was a great touch, and the bit with the Locust foreshadows the end. Because of this introduction, we aren't sure who were are going to be following, or if it is just going to be a third person commentary on the war, which at first i thought it was. "In this first part is the only real problem with the story. Its written too poetically. We don't need the overwhelming amount of metaphors and overly lyrical tone to the battlefield. Its cool, describe something so violent and disgusting with such beautiful words, but it gets old quickly. It was really annoying and i was going to leave this story without finishing it, but i am thrilled that i stuck with it, because that little flaw dies out by the second part. "The second part of the story is introducing the heroine. It was interesting to not start with her, but spend so much time establishing the scene, then revealing her as the main character. Delving so deeply into her past could have come out wrong, a lot of writers get too caught up in the then and forget about the now. Instead, it is given in such vivid detail that it just works. The hopeful tone that she feels in the then is a great contrast to the bleakness of the now. And even as we read her meeting the love of her life, we know that it will all come crashing down around her. Her confusion during Emergence Day, is it just an earthquake? Then the slaughter. "Lastly there was the final part, back to the now. That an interesting idea, cut off the snake's head and the drones would just walk into a hail of bullets. Despite the Queen's omnipresence, she still needs her minions to carry her words to the farthest reaches. The assassination and ensuing slaughter is done well, with just the right amount of vivid detail and a certain speediness that it never gets dull. The best thing is that there is no happy ending. She doesn't go off and is introduced to the Gears. She doesn't give a slow smile to Marcus, or Marcus gives her a nod of approval. She's a shadow, a hollow shell of what she once was. Delta doesn't even realize she saved them. And that last line is just a cute touch and a great way to go out. "All and all, this was an excellent story on a page that is really lacking them. It was a pleasure to read." These just do an ego good.

I personally have never had a problem with FF.nets censorship. As long as I mark it as Mature or for 16+ I have had no problem. That was also the first place I published including a poorly contrived site called Fandomination.com. Stay away from it since its for horrid writers and fan girls alike.

I used to be one of those who craved reviews like an addict craved his next hit. I took one constructive criticism so personally that I deleted the entire story which had grown to nearly ten chapters. What I realized later on, and I mean three years later on, was that this person had no personal vendetta against me. They were simply trying to improve my writing skills because they liked the ideas I had, they only had a problem with the method of execution. That being said, I do treasure reviews. Not the ones who use words so small even a three year old could read them. I usually try to ignore those. What I love, are the reviews that take three paragraphs or more because the person is describing what they liked or did not like about the piece. Then they try to gently correct me on things that I am either not doing or doing too much of. I will say this, however; kids today learn nothing from the school system. I graduated ten years ago and I learned more writing fan fiction than I ever could have even in my college level English and Literature classes. I credit the constructive criticism for this and years of repetition. Practice truly does make perfect. As for why I write, it is a combination of things. First, I need to get these down on some kind of medium, and it soon falls into the memory hole in a note book or the pages get lost and forgotten. Posting it on sites like this one allow for my creativity to roam free because of the lack of social taboos that are strictly enforced. This allows for the healthy growth of my own imagination and the creation of what I hope to be great stories. Now...seeing as the audience on AFF.net is so stingy with their opinions, why not give yours? Be as blunt as you like, I care not. I only wish to improve and one day be published. With original stories, of course. Lisa

Something for Either DC or Marvel universes How about a woman who finds out that she acquires the most dominant powers of the man she has intercourse with? Quotes: "What ever happened to just regrets the morning after?" "Give me one good reason I would want to read another's thoughts." "You want to save them? Fuck me! Now!" "When and where did I have sex with a porcupine?" "You wanna screw something? Here's a Cheerio."

That sounds horribly unsanitary...

Chapter 4 up. Getting close to a Baird/OFC romp. I might throw a Cole/OFCs in there too.

I understand what ya'll are talking about. I have never let my family read what I post. When my mom asked why, I told her that it was because I would probably be committed if some of the less understanding members of my family knew who was writing it. That and my family has experienced the devastation of incest and rape, so I have an aversion to writing the act. That's just me. My kick, being a woman, is the Crime Scene fetish. The first man I ever slept with freaked out when I started my period right in the middle of intercourse, but it felt really, really good for me. So, now I always wonder what it would have been like if he had not pussied out on me and kept going. I broke up with that dick-head by the way since he spent nearly an hour in the shower scrubbing his nether-regions.