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Go Veronica Go Chapter 8 is up Summary: Veronica has recently become the leader of the Vixens after taking it from Cheryl. However she didn’t know all that was involved in becoming head cheerleader… namely taking care of her Vixens in so many ways. https://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600099980&chapter=8

Go Veronica Go Chapter 8 is up Summary: Veronica has recently become the leader of the Vixens after taking it from Cheryl. However she didn’t know all that was involved in becoming head cheerleader… namely taking care of her Vixens in so many ways. https://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600099980&chapter=8

I definitely think there’s a consistency of characters to some extent. However, I do worry if the outcome isn’t quite what makes sense. The main character definitely has a specific outcome in mind for where they’re trying to end up. Which I think is consistent across all 3 of the chapters so far. That isn’t necessarily going to change. But I have seen stories on here that tend to follow a specific pattern. So I worry that this third character seems somewhat inconsistent in the pattern. To use an example non-specific to the story. Suppose you have a character casting a spell and the spell has the same effect on the first two characters and probably a fourth character. But the third character has the same spell cast on them and it doesn’t have the same effect, though somewhat similar outcome. The spell caster still ultimately gets what they want in the end. It feels like that’s what I’m doing. I’ve set up a magic spell being cast but don’t have an explanation for why it works differently on the third character. Perhaps it does because within the original canon, the main character has a different history with the third character to the first two.

I’m working on a story and trying to figure out how consistent I should be in how the chapters play out. As an example, I’ve written two chapters so far and working on the third. The first two involve one character seducing different characters per chapter. In the third chapter, there’s a third person who is being seduced. In the previous two chapters, the seduction had basically the same outcome. However in the third chapter it feels like I’m writing a somewhat different ending. At least in terms of how the characters end up compared to the third being seduced. So I’m not sure if this makes sense story wise because this third character will be involved in future chapters. Probably doing the same things as the first two characters will be doing. But I might be messing with the story consistency. It feels like the main character and the third character are leaving with a different relationship to each other than the first two. Would something like that bother you? Why or why not?

Oh the dominant one definitely has an attitude about her. It’s probably her defining characteristic. So maybe in this case it doesn’t really matter whether they have underwear on underneath. As long as it’s clear who is in charge and who isn’t.

This is more of a casual situation, if I understand what you mean by that. It’s their first time together. Also, the more dominant one has already sorta offered it as a reward for good behavior. In the sense of a “do what I say and you might see me naked” type scenario. For which the dominant one is now rewarding them. But the relationship isn’t defined in any formal sense.

This might seem like a somewhat odd question, but for context, I’m writing an FF piece where one of them is more in control than the other. In fact, they had planned to seduce the other woman prior to what I’m writing. Now I’m writing a part of it where the more dominant one in the relationship removes her clothing as part of a “power move”. However I’m trying to decide if they should have underwear on underneath the clothes. Given that the plan was to seduce them, it feels like it make sense for the dominant one to have no underwear on. At this point in the story, the one being seduced has pretty much gotten naked already. But part of me thinks that it feels more dominant to continue to have some clothing on for at least a while longer. Kinda also feels like a power move. What do you think?

I’m so glad you liked it and would be interested in a larger story. Funny enough I came up with the larger story before I had the idea of this chapter. But as I was writing this, it would work so well as a jumping off point. If you’re a fan of Toni being dicked down as you put it, you will probably like a future chapter of this series as well. So you prefer the third person perspective? I go back and forth between what to do. Usually because I go with whatever feels natural. But I will keep that in mind in the future.

Worming Their Way Out of Trouble Chapter 7 is up Summary: Tabitha and Toni are trying to do everything they can to save Pop’s and the Whyte Wyrm. So they decide to do a joint performance with a special part at the end for anyone in the audience, including their friends, to get involved. https://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600099980&chapter=7

Worming Their Way Out of Trouble Chapter 7 is up Summary: Tabitha and Toni are trying to do everything they can to save Pop’s and the Whyte Wyrm. So they decide to do a joint performance with a special part at the end for anyone in the audience, including their friends, to get involved. https://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600099980&chapter=7

So I think I’ve written some version of all three in various scenarios. But I guess I have been focusing on the word tag team because that’s a phrase that came up in crafting the story and in the dialogue. Though I would say that my “tag teams” are closer to the second option with the two guys on one girl and sort of a combination of the first and third when it’s the two women on one guy.

Oh I totally get that. This is actually a multi part story. These scenes are like chapter 9 and 10 of a multi chapter story. Yet it’s still kinda coming across this way in my head. In my previous threesome story, it was also a multiple chapter story though the chapters were much longer. Close to 30 pages per chapter. These are coming out to 15-30 pages per chapter.

Well this is part of what I’m kinda feeling is the issue. In my previous threesome series, the guy was “in charge” of the two women and kinda got what he wanted. Where as in this, the relationship status is somewhat unclear or less defined. The two women can be in charge or the two guys depending on the scenario. But because in the scenario of the two women, they’re just as into each other as the guys? It’s feeling like the women aren’t “teaming up” on the guy so much as including him in their own fun.

Well more in the sense of, as an example from the two men on one woman, the guys are focused on the woman and not on each other. Similarly, in the two women on one man scenario, the two women are mostly focused on the guy. Though in my two women on one men scenario, it’s less focused on the guy exclusively. So part of me feels like they aren’t being a “tag team”.

Curious what you think are the best kinds of “rules” around threesomes. I’m working on a story and it’s probably the second time I’ve gone in the threesome direction in stories but I’m not sure if I’m working things out correctly. In the story, there’s a couple threesomes involving two men and one woman, and now I’m writing some with two women on one guy. However, I’m thinking of it in terms of “tag teaming” and for whatever reason I feel like the “tag team” isn’t written as well for the two women stories. So what do you think makes for a good “tag team”?

I noticed something recently and apparently someone here posted 10 chapters of a single story on the same day. It’s happened with a couple stories though I wasn’t part of the fandom so I didn’t read them. Yet it got me curious whether you prefer to binge read or go at your own pace? My own process has usually been to post chapters once a month, only one story at a time and go at that pace. But I do wonder how much people like that? Would you prefer to have everything all at once even though it would mean you’d probably be waiting a long time for anything new from the next story? Or are you big on regular updates?

Well you’ll definitely appreciate my next stories after the one I posted gets fully put out. Both are purely FF in nature featuring Riverdale characters. More polyamory than gangbang too.

I wasn’t suggesting that polyamory and gangbangs are the same thing. I was more trying to square the inclusion of Archie in the polyamory with a lack of interest in men. I only have one Riverdale story outside of what’s on AFF and I’m looking at moving it to a new platform at the moment. Technically, the piece I posted here is an AU of the one I posted elsewhere. Also, not sure if I’m allowed to be specific about where it is outside here.

Okay well, then you’re probably going to like a few of the other stories I have planned. At least 2 of the stories are all women. There are two other chapters in OIR coming up you might enjoy then. I wouldn’t have guessed that given your interest in the polyamory of the current story. Most of the stuff I’ve written off AFF are femmeslash in nature.

I appreciate that, although I try to be my own thing for obvious reasons. However, I’d love any feedback you want to give on the stories I have written in the Riverdale fandom. I’m kinda out on a limb with the fandom. It’s probably the first one outside of my original fandom that I’m writing in. Though it won’t be the last.

Well I can’t guarantee that. It’s certainly under consideration but like I said, I’m a big Beronica shipper. Still, I liked that they finally tried new dynamics in season 7 like Vughead. Though I’ve been playing with a few different dynamics in some other stories. Including the one that comes up right after this story. Just gotta get two more chapters finished.

I didn’t mind the murder mystery or the fact that Jughead was involved. My big issue was how crazy some people got about the whole Bughead situation. I think it would’ve been more interesting if they had simply played the story differently. They made it so Bughead, Varchie and Choni were the only pairings allowed Like you said, it’s not the writers/author’s job to do everything the fans want. Which is what they did. For me, the more interesting story is to flip the traditional love triangle dynamic on its head. Instead of it being Archie trying to choose between Betty and Veronica, you make it that Betty has to choose between Archie and Veronica. Or maybe Veronica has to choose between Archie and Betty. Which is sorta what I wanna play with in the story I’m writing. At least on some basic level.

Then I suspect you’ll probably enjoy the complete story when I finally release it. Also, the next chapter of my “Only in Riverdale” story might be something you’d enjoy. You know, I liked what they did with season 7 and I think they were probably planning to do something like it before the fans got in the way with a lot of their crazy plans. It could’ve been so much more. As a Beronica shipper, I would’ve loved to see that fully explored beyond what we actually ended up getting.

Well I can’t guarantee a full polyamory story. Partly because I’m not clear on the definition of “full” in this context. I’m not really a Jarchie fan.

Oh it definitely didn’t go into as much detail as my story does. More just implied in retrospect, only barely scratching the surface. There was actually a “quad” relationship though.