C_Wade

how could I have ever doubted you

she will wear a maid outfit in the second chapter, the episode is almost done already but I always want to have one or two chapters as back up before I post

And thanks for that, as for your review, I purposefully never mentioned a name when I was describing the Hokage or Daimyo, so the prologue would fit no matter which time-line I would use. The first episode will be two chapters of Satsuki (f/sasuke) which was ‘requested’ by CuriousWriter who helped me out a lot. Tsunade will either be the second or third episode and Kushina will feature in the fourth. Also, nothing speaks against writing several episode’s of the same character, so if you want to see anything specific you can tell me

This is mainly for sharing/contributing/discussing ideas for my story Daimyo’s Den. Feedback is also very welcome. If you have a wish for a certain Character/Theme this is also the place to ask, I promise I will consider it, however keep in mind that I don’t have the time, or the will, to write everything. Link: http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106100

I think we had this topic often enough by now, and the author made his opinion clear on that matter. It’s his decision if he wants to change it in the future.

Yes there are lots of things like these that are confusing. Like the difference between into and in to more in general. He dived in to the pool. He drove the car into the garage. For example.

So in the example above it would be change in attitude then? As Frank is pleased because of Bob’s change in attitude. Also, thanks for the explanation, now it really makes sense!

Thanks for clearing that up, its always little issues like this that bother me the most and I get stuck until I resolve them.

I’m not quite certain what the difference between the phrases ‘a change in attitude’ and ‘a change of attitude’ is. I know both of them exist, however the German translations don’t distinguish very well between them. Is there a specific distinction between them? And if yes, what is it? Let’s say we have this very simple (and stupid) example: “You have changed.” said Frank when he noticed Bob’s change in/of attitude. Which one would I use and why?

Its not like there aren’t any other ways to make a pregnant scene, → henge for the belly and swollen breasts, and some seals (or jutsu, whatever) to make her lactate quick and easy, and if even that is a no go, simply make an omake/bad-end where she ends up pregnant and is shown a few months later. This way there is no child, and all the kinks are fulfilled, if the chapter/scene is written from the clients perspective, then it wouldn’t even be obvious that naruko isn’t really pregnant, at least until afterwards

This might actually work, at least from the ‘no baby in the story sense’, but there are a few other problems I see with it 1 nobody in konoha would want a child from the demon brat 1b naruko’s looks are very unique, especially the whisker-marks, nobody would think that it wasn’t her child 2 as an orphan, i don’t think naruko would just give away her child, even for money, it would literally be the only family she has.

I don’t understand why she always needs to be abused/humiliated/tortured. I mean once in a while… meh it’s just not mine. Anyways, this story is called #1 Slut, not #1 trainwreck Just let her fuck for fuckings sake once in a while, or for money of course...

I was just thinking, why would she do whatever it is you had her do, on her birthday especially, instead of...idk eating ramen with the hokage or something. But of course, if you do something like someone hires her as entertainment for the festival and offers enough incentive… i.e. money, then I guess that would work. I was just thinking, if it were me, why would I do something unpleasant on my birthday?

That is most likely because your story is very polarizing, especially in the 2nd chapter. While the first still pandered to a rather large audience (as long as you don’t mind loli), the second one is rather… well, extreme might be the wrong word, but it definitely wasn’t for everyone. And the fact remains, that many just don’t review when they dislike something. Also, when you read through this thread you will find that a lot of the suggestions are rather extreme, and while you seem to be a person who is very open-minded regarding sexual fetishes, most people tend to have a few things that turn them on, and they tend to stick to those. maybe doing every birthday might be extreme, after all, you need a certain amount of content/chapters between each one, and that would probably drag the time until part 1 unnecessarily long unless you want a very detailed ‘build-up’. As for the birthday thing in general, maybe that should (have) waited until later in the story? Until Naruko was a bit sluttier, right now whoring is more of a job, and a mildly unpleasant one at that, and who like to work on their birthdays? But that’s just my opinion...

Not much, still writing the outline and trying to figure out how to avoid the same mistakes that ruined the previous version for me, also I keep getting distracted by other ideas. Don’t expect anything on this anytime soon, but I’ll post here once that changes.

Exactly what I was getting at, nice to see someone shares that opinion.

There are tons of things a potential child of Naruko could do, and there are lots of ‘reasons’ as to why Naruko gets pregnant. But why would it happen in the this story. This story is aboout Naruko becoming the biggest slut, ever. Why does the story need a child? I’m not saying it is a bad thing, I just don’t see the point of it...

Just making Naruko pregnant for the sake of a few scenes seems a little bland though. What role would the child have later in the story? I just can't see it...

Once I have some more time I might take you up on that XD If you want me to read over it just send me a pm, otherwise another proof-read never hurts, better publish a better chapter a bit later Not much else to do during the academy days, maybe have her work through the clan kids? You could make an anatomy class, where naruko gets called to the front as model, but that might be a bit obvious for the rest...

or in the forest of death in one of oroshimaru’s abandoned labs? he looks like the type to make tentacle monsters if you mean pussy diplomacy then so-so, I have the ending completely outlined but I have problems with keeping the chapters interesting, since it kind of is always the same Also I keep getting distracted by new ideas I get…

Well, this is an AU fanfiction… so if you want tentacle summons, what is stopping you? Kishimoto already put dolphin horses, 6-tailed slugs and octopus-oxes into the manga, so why not tentacle summons?

I always thought that Zetsu is some kind of plant tentacle monster in disguise… And I guess with all the summons and Ninja animals it is only a matter of time, I mean, Kakashi already has talking dogs… One thing that just came to my mind… Will Naruko have a reverse sexy no jutsu? To get female customers?

Well, if you want to use jutsu I guess summoning is one thing to do, I don’t really care for beast stuff, but it isn’t a no-go for me either. Otherwise he could also use the shadow clone to ‘demonstrate’. Another thought I had was some teacher/student role-play (maybe with costume), since he is called the professor… or a combination of those.

Although by the time she gets her shadow clones she will be genin, at least if you follow canon on that one (an extension for BitterNTR’s Hiruzen Idea, maybe she also offers her body in exchange for techinques? that way she could gain Shadow clones faster). And once she is genin I think the story will concentrate more on her whoring herself out on missions, and not in Konoha as a prostitute I think?

This turned out longer than expected… So I take it that means she is still younger than 9 years old? Because it isn't explicitly stated anywhere. So if my assumption is correct I was wondering about your story pacing, as in, how much time/chapters will be spend before the actual beginning of Part I? Will you just time-skip along or actually write it out? I like that, maybe she could do a strip-tease for them as well? I always think thats hot but barely anybody writes it... Another question, will this be Naruko only, or will some of the other girls eventually join? E.g., maybe Hinata still idolizes Naruko and wants to be just like her? I’m sure there are ways to include the other girls as well, should that be an avenue you wish to take. I think at that point Naruko is pretty much ‘gone’. Considering she started whoring herself out when she was still a little kid. I think a better question might be, how open she is with her depravity. Will everybody know what a slut she is? Maybe only the adults know, kind of like with her jinchuriki status? Or something else? Depending on how closely you want to follow canon, there are tons of things that could be done differently. For example, Naruko could sleep with Gato’s men to turn them against him, or sleep with Zabuza/Haku and convince them to go with them against Gato. She could also ‘motivate’ the workers, so that they don’t quit working on the bridge. During the 1st chunin exam she could notice that one of the examiners is a former customer of her, and she lures him outside to convince him to give her the answers. In the 2nd task she could offer Orochimaru her body to spare her teammates lives… But I think it’s all kind of early to answer questions like that, since we really don’t know much about how Naruko will develope yet...