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I was kidding with the disclaimer! I browsed the net for writing stuff concerning her character or BtVS in general for my use and stumbled above the guide and thought what the hell, it would do no harm. Do it your way! To watch the episodes to learn the character is the best way anyway. And you're doing this kind of stuff for years. However, I've just finished reading 'Pleasurable Evil' again, this time to the end, and currently formulating a review.

I've browsed the site a bit and there is heavy morally dubious content there, too! Maybe not many that graphic as you intend in yours, but much worse from a morally point of view. This guide and the whole site is pretty old anyway. But to make sure to thank the writer properly for the guide you make an A/N below the disclaimer or at end of the story. "This work of fiction would not have been possible without the helpful guide of *** on www.****.us. Thanks Bro!" Seriously though, her manners and way of speaking is of course porn-y-fied! For instance, she lets steam in style of her berating of Giles and Angel in Reptile Boy (S02:E05). Maybe something feminism (she claimed to be a feminist). The "trailing off" is here in form of a penis in her mouth or because one of them starts to caress her vagina during her rant. That would be suitable. Porn can be a special kind of parody. *Edit* And why does "fiddlesticks" and "snackage" leads me to dirty thoughts again?

Yeah, that's pretty plausible. She's really smart in the technical terms of things. The progress to the dirty expressions could be a mix of encouragement/demanding of the guys ("Say it!"), deliberate learning as in she writes terms down in her mental notebook and reflects them accordingly ("Cock... check! Pussy... check!") and unconscious adaption of her behavior as well, the hornier and naughtier things get. Is that believable and fits to her? Maybe it'd make sense when she'd try for rather awkward belittlements at an earlier stage of the gang bang but not at the beginning. Sort of a transition from technical to naughty. She's not quite comfortable with the really nasty words, yet, but pressure from the guys and the whole situation makes her at least trying, with funny results. As further as it goes, she goes dirtier accordingly. What do you think? Is that Willow? Oh she often puts "age" (slayage) and "y" (witchy) at the end of words when she is comfortable. I don't know if you know stuff like this. And the Willow babble! I'd say the right way regarding her way-of-speaking attributes (-age, -y , babble, general cute words etc) would be a plausible mix. To not exagerate them. The "Babble" for instance, could appear two times. A nervous Willow babble at the beginning and a smutty Willow babble during an advanced fucking. Besides the normal sex babble many people do of course. *Edit* No she isn't a total innocent and could have really dirty and also outright mean thoughts, you're right. When she tried to scold or to tell a piece of her mind she appeared fuming in a cute way with awkward wordings and when she realized her ranting, she trailed off in misery and embarrassment. That could be porn-y-fied maybe, somehow.^^ *Edit #2* Found this, a small Willow Speak essay. Sounds accurate what it says. Might be helpful, I dunno. You did say way of speaking is your weakness.^^ The -age and -y stuff is in it, too.

I'm quite curious what words and belittlements you'll put into Willow's mouth in regards of sex and genitals. I can't remember any character in BtVS/AtS referring to his/her genital in any PG-13 way in whichever circumstance. Willow's little Miss Kitty Fantastico?^^ One exception is poophead or other words with poop which Willow used herself as attempted insult. For characterization issues you can use them of course. You're right. The holes are used and considered for fucking in this story. The vagina doesn't pee and gives birth and the anus doesn't fart and shit. With the mouth it's more complicated though because of the come=food issue. Sweet and fluffy is alright!!^^

LOL! Bowling grip Nice! That gave me a funny picture in my head.^^ Cum in dialogue, come in narrator! I'd say to put the colloquial terms into dialogue like cum, jizz, spunk, her flower and everything else Willow and the guys would say according to their character. If the narrator would use these terms as well, I'd get the feeling that the story is told from the POV of an additional character. I like the narrator to be detailed descriptive, telling what happens, how things look like and what is done with a breeze of omniscience. He know and is ought to tell how Willow feels and what she thinks when the penis slides into her anus for instance. Just not exaggerated! Not like she tells: "Oh yeah, that feels so good!" and then follow several paragraphs deeply analyzing her statement with complete psychological profile dealing with all aspects of her personality back to her childhood. Next says the guy: "Yeah, you like my prick sliding up your ass?" follows likewise with complete thoughts and feelings, references to his relationship with his parents, his attitude towards immigration, political opinions etc. That's an example for an over-exaggerated omniscient narrator for me.^^ And I've read these kind of stories. The narrator uses the more neutral terms like cock, pussy, sperm, anus (you can leave semen out, for some reason it reminds always of botany ) and of course the circumlocutions. They can be very arousing if well placed but also very distracting if wrong placed. The term love-tunnel is such an example. The first time I've read it, I snorted and found it utter ridiculous but later in a different story it just fit and was very arousing. Unfortunately, I can't give you an explicit guidance when it's good or bad placed. It's intuitive, I can tell when I read it. As for down turn circumlocutions, I'd say we see how it comes. I can tell terms like brown hole or birth canal are a no go. There may be terms, especially in dialogue, which I don't know and can't associate. But hey! What is Urban Dictionary for?^^ Salty goodness is a liked term for some reason, or when her asshole is happy from all the oral attention. It's fun to experience the author's creativity in regards of terms if he/she is good. Also like descriptive verbs, adjective, adverbs in narrator. For instance: He shoves his shaft not just down her throat but his *pulsing* shaft down her *clutching* throat. Or even better: He resolutely thrust his throbbing shaft forward into her little, cock-hungry mouth, past her soft, clasping lips, over her clinging and fluttering tongue and finally to its goal down her tight clutching throat, her initiated moan in delight muffled to a slight gagging tone, her small damp cavern coating his excited cock in hot and wet saliva. This is all from my readers perspective and may help you out. It's not supposed to press you into a style you don't like or which is just not yours. Write how you feel comfortable! *Edit #1* The bowling grip would be a nice "Eeep!" moment for Willow. Also throwing her over to the other three blokes sitting on the couch when they're done with her for now. Or pulling a pigling as in changing position while impaled on both ends. Hmmm hair as leash and letting her crawl much I already said. Ah, penis chasing, while in her mouth he moves back and she follows. Cock tickling. No hole left? I just rub myself between her feet or another part of her body. Just a few silly trifles. Might contribute to the atmosphere.

So mote it be! Thanks, I might come back to you for this. It's quite amazing what you can learn about language just by reading fanfiction and writing comments. I mean, I have basically just only school knowledge (grades rather below average due to laziness) to which I attended over ten years ago and no real need for use in RL either. Two years fanfiction brought me closer than eight years classes.^^ Adverse is that I lack the theoretical knowledge. I write mostly intuitiv though especially prepositions are giving me still a hard time. Speaking and hearing is a complete different issue though... "Huh? What? Can you write it down?" A trifle for potential use: If one of the bigger guys should also have rather big hands: For movement of Willow's body to a different position/location he grabs with one hand between her legs, thumb in ass, fingers in vagina, the other arm slung around her chest, and lifts her up. Basically using her holes for a better grip. Saw that in different videos, the girls didn't appear to be in any pain.

Yay! I'm looking forward to it! You know, it's the first time that I'm doing something like this, as in taking part in the progress. I had much fun so far! I hope I wasn't too finical, though... Many thanks and further thanks in advance. It is really appreciated. I have a feeling this will be an hell of a porn fic. When this monster is done, I'll attempt for a story on my own. I've thought of a shortfic for starters, around 2000-3000 words maybe. A Bukkake story, AU, BtVS, starring Willow with Faith as Co-Star. Buffy, Xander, Giles, Oz, Cordelia and Angel will have guest parts. The one or another OC, too. Might deal with mentioned characters, a few hundred men (& demons), a transparent bathtub in an hall and an hypothesis about the use of demonic ejaculate and magic in the cosmetics industry. Something rather silly for beginners. Too sick? I guess I'll have to search for a beta first, though, anyway. Edit: Ben Smith it is. I would probably had pictured this fellow from the video if you had kept the name. Might have been a down turner. He doesn't striked me very whedonly.^^ Edit #2: Ah, you referred to Benny Baily Forget the first Edit.

Oooooh, I can provide you with many German towns/villages with nasty names: Wichshausen (Wankville), Drangstedt (Lusttown), Fickmühlen (Fuckmills), Moese (Cunt), Busendorf (Bosomville), Hodenhagen (Nutshail), Schlitz (Slot), Geilenkirchen (Hornychurch), Blasen (Blowing), Petting, Vögelsen (BANGINGsen), Feucht (Wet), Sexau, Nutteln (SLUTeln), Titting and more... But Bielefeld it is. It's totally okay! Yeah, I imagined Dan's character to be like you implied from your character bits in the list. Totaly okay! How you intend to do the absently eating come from body/cup etc. is cool! As you said, like when you can't stop to eat popcorn when started. Slightly addictive but doesn't change her character or clouds her judgement and cognition. I like it, also the bridge to strawberry. Very nice! Thanks for the "tasty semen, thanks" inclusion. I'm curious with what you'll come up.

Wohoo! The story is gelling! You're right, with the inflation of semen that is. The basic idea is that she greedily and wanton awaits the load with her mouth wide open and her tongue out while groping/masturbating her breasts, vagina and body with her hands and shifting and squirming her body in needy impatience. The men (I'd say 1-3) are masturbating their penises while pointing them in close distance at her open mouth. It can be accompanied by degrading dirty talk from the guys. During the ejaculation(s) she appears to be nearly climaxing expressed by whimpering and moaning and she's desperate to catch every single drop. When her mouth is filled, she holds up her hands and forms a bowl with them by holding them under her chin, because he/they hasn't/haven't finished yet and her mouth is overflowing, with the superfluity leaking out down her chin and flowing in her hands. She visibly and vocally savors the taste. She's limited in her ability to articulate, though, with her filled mouth, which makes her do more muffled and gargling sounds which makes it more nasty. Willow moves her tongue around a bit as far as possible, deliberately gargles it and finally swallows it in an audible and overacted gulp and with expressed delight... and shows her appreciation by licking her lips, smiling shyly and thanking the donor(s). Subsequently, she drinks the seed out of her hands and licks them clean, likewise in delight and appreciation. The traditional porn ending (and maybe the ultimate male fantasy and not meant as the ending here in this story), but unique in Willow style if you can manage. That could be brought in by many occasions, by the huge amount which will be swallowed throughout the story anyway. To keep her somewhat in character is a facer though, I agree. Think of something, I dare you. It doesn't have to have its own spotlight scene but can perhaps be included in an already planned scenario of the story. Scratch the reward aspect of it. It doesn't have to be expressed as a reward. Only the display, described above, of Willow doing this would be cool. You can vary it of course, doesn't have to be exactly like I have described it here. The names are awesome! I'm already curious of the role each will be playing. Some is already indicated. I see Parker doesn't get to dump his load? The idea of an OC (George Levenstein) on which Willow used to have a crush makes sense and is in her character. She had many crushes, though Xander was pointed out the strongest. And that his family is befriended with hers gives it more foundation. Kudos! *Edit* Bielefeld doesn't exist! Ah sorry... you're not from here.^^ It's an insider, some kind of a running gag over here. Nobody ever seems to know somebody who is from Bielefeld, or was actually there. So Bielefeld doesn't exist. It's a myth. Some kind of a conspiracy. Our very own Area 51. "I was on my way from Gütersloh to Bad Oeyenhausen on the Autobahn 2. As I passed the exit to Bielefeld, suddenly-" "Wait. Did you say Bielefeld?" "Yeah. Why?" "Well, it doesn't exist." You always get such comments here when you mention Bielefeld.^^ *Edit #2* Just more random stuff which may be included/added to already planned practices if you seem to see them fitting. - Distortion: I couldn't think of another term. Means the hole (usually the mouth, but works on the other orifices too) is additionally to the penis stretching further manipulated as in 'distorted'. i.e. during fellatio he hooks both his forefingers into her mouth corners and pulls them apart, stretching the mouth in width thus distorts her face, all the time continuing to thrust with his penis into her mouth. More extrem is to use both forefinger and middle finger and spreads them out together with the pulling apart. Actually, it works with all finger including the thumb. It could also be used the whole hand, but that would be too extrem for my tastes. If you want to take it in, leave it by maximal two fingers per hand. On the other hand may be the distortion in the DVDA sufficient. - If you want to use a blindfold, it wouldn't bother me. Just not all the time. Maybe for once, like with the handcuffs. - Her hair can of course be used for leverage during any kind of sex, just not violently and unwanted painful. - The always refilled glass/cup full of come, which is provided for Willow as a form of hospitality, from which she occasionally takes a gulp somehow appeals to me. But I see the characterization issues here too^^. If you like it and can think of something... - We didn't talk about tit-f*cking! It is approved as an addendum although I'm not sure if Willow's breasts are too small for it. I may extend the list, if something crosses my mind. Just know that these are no requests but suggestions. Maybe you think "Right, I didn't thought about that! That's cool!" or it's a 'Nice to have' or you can also dismiss it completely. *Edit #3* Any analogy here? I don't think you are going to pull it up but Dan reminded me of it and I want to exclude it just in case. No Slash! Despite the inevitable touching of certain parts during hole sharing or standing close while crowding Willow for instance, please no graphic display of homosexual sexual and latent or open romantic interaction. Funny slapsticks in regards of Dan's repression tactics or whatever you may have in mind is cool and I can imagine how you intend to use it; just nothing graphic and it's solely Willow/Guys and not "Willow/Guys + Guy/Guy". In terms of tags: only M/F not M/M. Another exclusion: No Hentai effects. You can't see the outlines of Jonathan's penis on Willow's torso during penetration and despite the amounts of come, her stomach doesn't balloon obscenely when she is swallowing. Just in case. I'm fooling around a bit. On the other hand: You did write some real weird stuff.^^ *Edit #4* An idea to make it more in Willow's character regarding the wanton come receiving at the beginning of this post, should you struggle with it. I'd be comfortable with it, if she'd pretend this overacted/submissive/semen-is-the-tastiest-thing-in-the-world behavior. For one, the guy who gives her his seed, could be a demon bloke with the special attribute that his ejaculate tastes in fact really good. Not just in porn logic but in reality as well. Willow wouldn't mind the taste here and might even appreciate it a bit in fact. For her slutty/wanton behavior: It could be a kind of a reward from her to him. Maybe he in particular did her really good in a previous setting and his friend points out to her that he really likes it when the girl is submissive and cherishes the taste of his spunk, because he is a bit proud about his special attribute, some kind of a weird demon issue. His friend encourages her to give her best acting by which she complies. Oh and since she is in canon displayed as bad in acting and lying, you can make her wanton act also a bit awkward and funny to increase the willowyness in it. Just an idea. I shall see what you have thought to make it somewhat in character. As I said, this is an addendum to an already planned piece. And the point is the emphasizing of this particular c*m-shot. All other come eating occurrences like other highlighted come feedings, the bowl, the beer-bong, the chance hits etc. are of the normal taste variety and Willow's behavior is up to you.

Now to your last post: Yeah, her outfit is perfect! I thought of that too. An auburn bush sound decent. You're right, I keep forgetting it's playing in the nineties. Cat ears and the ass-vibrator with attached cat tail makes more sense with the bowl of semen. Keep the bowl! Or make both; for the bunny "outfit" they can paint their dicks orange and their glans green. Too silly? Just kidding anyway.^^ Seriously, the cat with a bowl of milk it is. The stuff I suggested doesn't have to be in the same degree of spotlight. What you've already revealed of your thoughts how the story will roughly be about, and how you may use my suggestions, really appeals to me! I'll will only add further thoughts to the stuff already mentioned (incl. Edit #7, did you read my thoughts about spilled beer and food btw?). Though, there is one more thing: The last suggestion with the come as reward. I bit my ass because it crossed my mind so late. I had it actually already in mind as I made the challenge, but kept forgetting it. Is it possible if I say 'pretty pretty please on top with cream and a cherry'? With as much guys as you can manage without to explode your story? At least three men? Anything what you can think of that Willow is receiving come directly from the source into her mouth as a reward and that she actually feels rewarded by it too? And that she's eagerly awaiting the load while he jerks and then savors and cherish the taste before she swallows which is followed by a "Thank you". *trying for puppy dog eyes, but failing pathetically, because I'm a 32 years old guy and what had worked with my mom 20 years ago, doesn't work now* No further new stuff will be brought up. Check!

*Edit #7* I was writing this during your post. I come back to you when I've read it! There could be situations where Willow isn't in focus, like when you make a small Angel part, particularly when he peeps through the windows, or two of the guys discuss what they should do next with her, basically the parts between the many spotlights-moments or when you focus on another part of the story. What I'm trying to say is: keep the impression that Willow is constantly f*cked, eats come, plays with herself, basically isn't just sitting around while other stuff is momentarily ostensible. You could indicate many actions she could be doing in the background: - More different positions with different numbers of participants, - She takes a occasional gulp of come from her glass which was previously filled by one of the demon blokes, - The one guy who secretly always kinda really liked her has finally a moment alone with her and makes gentle love to her in a 'scoop me up'... only to be interrupted by the two drunken idiots who jerk off and accidentally hit him instead of her. - She absently wipes some come of her body and sucks it off her fingers. - Masturbation - giving and receiving - etc.pp. and so on... All stuff during Willow-off-focus-moments which doesn't deserve an own spotlight-scene. Was that comprehensible? I kinda had a hard time writing this paragraph.

Gnah I didn't mean it like that! *Throwing myself down at your feet in submission* There are different types of genitalia, meaning form, color, size of particular parts etc. Are the nipples pink and very prominent or rather dark and flat but big in girth? How big are the areola, which color? Is her rectum rosy, small and cute or rather dark and slightly prolapsing? Long or short clitoris, outer labia covering inner labia or the other way around? I meant this kind of stuff. Or is that too much detail anyway? Sorry, that was not supposed to sound like I wanted explain female anatomy to you. That came out wrong obviously. Okay I give it a try, the rough preference description that is. All the parts pre-coital and unstretched: My preferences fit to Willow's character with her being the rather cute/sweet/shy variation and her Caucasian and pale appearance. So she gets- hmmm... let's call it the 'lolita' setting. Means in color rather pale and rosy and in size/girth/form unobtrusive and cute (but not preteen!). Nipples and areola are rather small and pink. If aroused, the erect nipples are visibly pointed out. The rectum is small and inconspicuous as well as rosy in color. The clitoris is only visible when spread and aroused. The outer labia covers most of the inner. When spread they are visible though. The color is a soft pink also at the inside when the vagina is spread open. Generally, the p*ssy is like it sounds. A cute little p*ssy. (Again, not preteen. I know how that sounds!) I don't think that Willow is that sort of girl who shaves or trims her pubic hair. At least not at that time; in the later seasons when it get's to p*ssy eating that could change though.^^ So she gets untrimmed pubic hair. If she is a natural redhead or not is your decision (*No, she doesn't dye it. Period!*) . Untrimmed means not rain forest! Give her a small bush above the clitoris. During the party they could shave her though or coax her to shave herself. What do you think? Ass to mouth is hot and approved; also other combinations. She could 'lubricate' the penis for her first anal penetration for example. The anti-bacterial aspect is cool. Big red bush is covered above. Felching as in the guys have to penetrate each other so she can clean them out? Then no. Or does she get a very long straw to suck the semen out of her own orifices? Then yes. Or do you mean the guys clean her out? Well, only maybe as a prank like you have planned with Jonathan. That's okay. I just took a short look at Urban Dictionary about what Felching is. Is there more to it? As for the swallowing; Well just the occasional spurt who lands in her mouth is swallowed immediately. You know, for example she is double penetrated on the couch and really into it, two blokes sneak up on the group and jerk off on her face and mouth. She is so into it right now from the double pleasure that she doesn't really think and just opens her mouth and greedily gulps every spurt down which hits home. But when in the next scene it's mainly about the come, like letting her gargle it, it's a different situation though. This all just came up in regards to deepthroating. When she is facef'cked, there is no come in her mouth (pre-climax). Let's take that as the golden rule. *Edit* Yep, 'special sauce', 'special dip' or 'secret ingredient' is all approved. When it comes to come-feeding, I have almost no pain threshold. Almost. *Put that stomach tube away! Right now!* *Edit #2* And here we go... I thought about the hygiene again. I figure the guys would every now and then go to the bathroom to clean themselves off with a washcloth or something other superficial. In the case their bodies came in contact with come on Willow's body, or to freshen their penises (though Willow does most of the c*ck-cleaning) Willow though doesn't have this opportunity.^^ About Willow's hygiene at the beginning; since she was originally out in hope for a breakthrough with Oz, she could have taken a foregone extensive shower with armpit/legs shaving, teeth brushing and other maintenance procedures etc. Perhaps a sort of girly best friend ritual with Buffy or something like that. As for her hygiene and anal sex: I know the porn actresses use enemas previously of the shooting. I would leave it up to you if you rather want to use porn logic, with Willow being just clean there naturally, or you may use an enema just once and not explicitly described if you prefer it more realistic. For example, two of the pretending-to-be-nice-and-considerate guys ("You'll see, it feels so much better.") go with her to the bathroom and it happens off-screen or you have another harmless way to clarify her cleanliness. The point is: No chocolate sausages! *Edit #3* Some more liked positions and practices and other thoughts. Some can be used as fill-ins or background noise while others get some spotlight. Some make more sense at the beginning others at end. And they can of course be combined with each other and additional stuff. And please add every position/practice which comes to your mind and you'd like to write too, should I not have mentioned it. Just consider my exclusions regarding warnings. The positions/practices/action I'll describe here are only that detailed because I'm getting quite into them while writing them. It doesn't mean I think you have no imagination! It is also writing practice for me, should I sometimes dare to write a story on my own. The ideas are there, it's just that my mind goes blank when I try to start. Hopefully, the comments I write, will help to loose up my head-block. Plus, I'm figuring it helps you to create a rough profile of my likes and dislikes to advance your intuition. Some stuff: She is penetrated from behind (doggystyle), vaginal or anal, very hard (almost brutally, but no pain), in a rapid and frantic pace. Her body jerks back and forth increasingly, her breasts wobble heavily. Loud slapping sounds from hips banging against her ass-cheeks and, in case of anal, testicles smacking against the labia. Willow does the banshee (as in screaming and wailing in pleasure), the guy grabs her hair and yanks her head back causing Willow to open her mouth wide in ecstasy and a little pain (the good pain). Her screaming is suddenly interrupted by another guy who takes her open mouth for better use. The screaming is replaced with the usual muffled wet gulping/gagging sound. His tempo and roughness matches the other guy's. It gets more frantic and faster and both guys come moaning and grunting simultaneously, holding themselves in to the hilt at both ends until they’ve finished (and then some; the guy in her mouth could tenderly look down into her eyes and give her some twisted-sweet compliment while patting her hair, while she looks back up into his, with wide open, red and watery eyes and with her nose buried deep in his pubic hair). BTW: Holding her head in place with his penis down her throat accompanied with vocal cheering, whistling and egging on, while counting, from the others (“Fifty-seven! Fifty-eight! Fifty-nine! SIXTY… wohoohooo…” *clap* *clap* *whistle* *whistle*) is hot, approved and appreciated. Another nice position is a form of the missionary position. He holds her legs apart on her calves, bend forward causing her hip to roll up, and also pounds into her very hard (anal or vaginal or swapping), her body and breasts jerking back and forth. Another guy is sitting on her face and grinds his rectum and testicles on her mouth/nose while she masturbates him with both hands in an increasing tempo and uses her tongue on his orifice and sac (multitasking). When they come the one pulls out, moves forward and straddles her chest and both come together in her open, awaiting mouth, with her having her tongue out. An example for variations or combinations could be that a third guy replaces the one in her vagina while the other two come in her mouth. Or during the vaginal or anal penetration with her hips rolled up, the camera guy films between her and his legs close-up. As for humiliation/degradation elements: During the beginning, before it becomes really naughty, the lead guy (Do you have a leader of them. Someone who is mostly in charge?) could show her off to the others. For instance, she is on her hands and knees and he pulls her ass-cheeks apart and presents her orifice to the others. They talk about how cute it looks and how they can’t wait to slide their pricks in, in how many ways they can make use of it etc. You know, kind of a discussion/appraisal about her attributes. Then they could make her crawl around a lot. They want to bang her on the table? They grab her by the hair (not violently and painful, Willow is compliant) and make her crawling over to the desired place, using her hair as a leash. I'll add more during the day. *Edit #4* A possible combination of humiliation and the use of sex-toys. They insert two big vibrators to the hilt each in her anus and vagina. The tools are attached to a safety belt around her waist, making it impossible for her to expel them. They turn both on to their highest levels and letting her do several tasks with which she's struggling of course since she repeatedly orgasms over and over again. One task could be to undress the two newcomers to the party. She has to undress them completely and then she has to suck them off, all the while moaning, whimpering and shivering through the ongoing double stimulation. Another task could be to let her lick the misfired come of the floor. Or something blunt and unsexual like washing the dishes xD. A funny/outright evil addition could be to attach a bunny-tail on the end of the anal vibrator and put some bunny-ears on her head. I'm sick! Then one possible magic sex-toy. I don't how it should look, maybe it's some kind of powder. Anyway, it caused her sexual stimulation without outer influence. All her erogenous zones are stimulated at the same time on their own accord. The result is: She lies on a low table (i.e.) trashing, moaning, whimpering and coming over and over again while the guys are standing around her in a circle and laughing at her for being a b*tch in heat and they occasionally jerk off on her. *Edit #5* Something less humiliating - the Group Grope or Gang Grope, short the GG: Willow lies on her back, stomach or side (doesn't really matter, she can also stand, her legs won't hold her for long though) and is repeatedly brought to orgasm by the hands of several guys. She's the only one who receives pleasure in this scenario. The guys just revel in Willow's screams and moans in lust and pleasure. Could be done by the nicer guys who might want to even the scores in regards of orgasms. They're groping all of her body simultan; fingers in ass and vagina, hands on breasts, fondling nipples, sucking on toes, muffling a moan with a kiss (there wasn't much about kissing in our brainstorm until now; kissing and french-kissing are allowed and wanted if it fits to the situation). They could alternate between soft, almost caressing, and rough, jerking on anus and vagina, twisting nipples etc. The 'squirting' would be appropriate here. Oh and they sex-talk to her which also alternates between tender to dirty. A bet between a few guys: Who can bring Willow to orgasm under one minute. Come as reward: They let Willow do something or ask her questions/riddles or stuff and if she does it good/answers right/comes to the right conclusion, she receives a load in her mouth as reward from the guy who gave her the challenge. Belongs rather to Master/Slave stories but it could be done at a later time where Willow's inhibitions are already pretty low and could be approached as some sort of fun drinking game. They could ask her school stuff for instance. Since she's very smart, there would be many rewards given. They won't say school isn't fun anymore. Much laughing, from the guys AND from Willow, would be suitable. It's a fun game after all. *Edit #6* I forgot: Some spilling of beer or food on her body is okay, it will be washed away by the come anyway. The magic formula here is no exaggeration. Seriously, if one guy drops half of is pasta on her back because he thinks it's a good idea to eat his spaghetti while he penetrates her posterior from behind, he should be decent enough to wipe it away, at least superficially. It would be funny as a slapstick though.^^ Balls licking, sucking, tugging and fondling is ought to appear in this story too. Just crossed my mind.

My last Edit (#6) overlaps with your post, I think you missed it. When you're done with the bullet pointing/writing I'll proceed to small suggestions/comments/proofreading and such. Hey! I could've been the annoying little brother who sneaked to the frat house per trunk-taxi. Seriously though, I forgot about the time travel. Back then I was too young, now too old. The Angel part isn't necessary for the arousal; maybe just as a short break to take a breath (or to wash your hands or to apply some antiseptic ointment ). 'cos who watches a gangbang porn-clip in one go? They tend to be rather long. But it's not necessary and subordinate. If at all, maybe one or two paragraphs and only if it fits. Drooling sperm is okay, but I figure her mouth is usually empty, pre-climax-wise, since she's supposed to swallow every fluid immediately down which finds its way into her oral-orifice. Unless they're currently making her gargle it or ordering her to hold it until everybody has finished filling her mouth with salty goodness (I couldn't deny myself that comment) and then they 'allow' her to swallow (and ask her if it was 'good'). But in that case won't be a penis down her throat. What I meant is there is messy and unmessy deepthroating. Messy means that she produces much saliva and let's it deliberately 'drool' out. The thrusting of the penis as a similar effect than a mixer has on cream. It turns white, thick and what I find so gross; there are forming big bubbles which are coating her face, especially around her mouth, and on the penis. And in the 69 position with her on bottom, it runs up her face and eyes. It's just Ewww. But while I'm at 69: I already told you my favorite facef*ck position for her (on her back, head hanging over edge) and I encourage you to add any other position which comes to your mind; not just oral... anal and vaginal etc. likewise. But I digress, I also like the 69 position with her on top. He's eating out her forbidden fruit and love-tunnel simultaneously while she is sucking him by constantly going deeper and deeper. When it becomes frantic, he reaches forward under her arms and grabs her head on either side, holds it in place, and thrust furiously and deeply upwards with his legs spread and (again) his balls hurling up from the momentum and slapping against her nose/face. When he orgasms, he thrusts upwards and presses her head down at the same time and holds it during the climax. In addition, to make it more nasty, she can reach with her arms under his thigh and pulls them up while supporting his hands by pressing her head down, her nose buried in his testicles, face turning red, her eyes rolling back, some snot shooting out of her nose (not much and transparent!). Understood? This can be combined with the penis swapping with one kneeling behind and one in front of her of course. As for the Creampie, it will flow out that's out of question. I mean no deliberate *shitting out*.

I will always wonder how of all things 'Otto Normalverbraucher' has made it to a such a common term regarding 'German' among the Anglo-Saxon population on this planet. Literary it means Otto-average-consumer where 'Otto' is the name of one of the biggest catalog companies in Germany. You could find 'Den Otto Katalog' nearly in every household around 15 years ago. But since Amazon & Co. they have a though existence and are barely holding up. Back to porn: Somewhere in the middle they could do a blowjob or rimming chain/line/queue. Means the guys line up and Willow has work to do. Not all men, maybe five to ten, and you don't have to explicitly go through everyone individually, but, you know... more to fill the night.^^ Hmmm... cock-swapping; means the shaft penetrates a few times, then pulls out only to be immediately replaced by another, who thrusts also a few times, pulls out and is replaced by the first again and so on, interrupted just with an occasional close-up on the gaping orifice. Uh the beer-bong you've mentioned a few posts earlier is approved by the way. The needed huge amount of come could have been gathered previously before Willow showed up and been stored in some buckets. You said something about a demon potion which increases their libido, stamina etc where I suggested that it could also cause temporary infertility. In addition it could increase the semen production (which is actually weird: it makes infertil but increases the semen production) essentially, particularly right after the ingesting. Or they're just so depraved that they always have some buckets ejaculation in their refrigerator, just in case. Sorry, I have totally forgot about that. If I don't reply to something specific from you, consider it as approved. My receptiveness is sometimes a bit low. *Edit*: So a last one before I go to bed: I spend the most of the day with watching different kinds of porn to measure what I like and what I don't.^^ A slight adjustment concerning squirting: I just watched a lesbian porno where she was brought to orgasm by her participants hands, four-fingers-deep and roughly jerking. When she had climaxed she 'squirted'; but it was more like, I don't know... splashing? I'm trying to find the right term. It's more like oozing out in rather over-average amounts and through the rough and jerking hand-motion, some drops are flying around. It was accompanied with wet jerking sounds and loud and frantic pleasure-screaming. That is actually hot and you can use it, but I don't like it when she comes like a man, amount-wise, pressure-wise, distance-wise. Saliva: The lesser nice guys can occasionally spit into her face during a blowjob as a further sort of degradation. But occasionally and in small amounts. And no yellow, green or another color. Just normal spit as in transparent. As for Willow and saliva production during deepthroat; no messiness; strands of spit which are connected from her mouth to the penis after he pulled out are okay (and natural) and she can even push out a bit more spit which runs down her chin. I mean e.g.: He is lodged to the hilt and holds her for a while and then he pulls out roughly and fast. The sudden movements creates a mix of a gagging and burping sound followed by too much spit in her mouth which she pushes out. But not this messy deepthroat stuff which exists, where deliberately her whole face is coated (especially in the 69 positions) with white bubbly saliva, nearly vomit. That's just gross. Okay, good night. *Edit #2* Good morning! I have found this. Is actually from 'Gingerbread' and also completely unedited. Because I have a dirty mind, too. *Edit #3* Man, her face is so expressive.^^ *Edit #4* No more screencaps for now but a few more thoughts: Creampie: Though there obviously will be oozing out of all orifices, which is okay and wanted (lubrication), please don't make her hunker down and let her press it out in some sort of disguised scat action. I don't claim that you would, but since you're willing to write almost everything nasty, I thought it would be better to rule it out. But there can be a close-up at the end, maybe before the cockwhipping, of her holes filled with come for video-purposes. Angel: I just thought it could be funny to include Angel with a mini-mini arc into the story. Not as participant, mind you; I thought about something like: He walks the night for demon-hunting near the frat house and smells the sex and come. He's curious, tracks the smell down and ends up in front of the building. Angelus likes to peep and so does Angel, though he feels guilty about it. So he peers through the window and sees Willow in full gangbang. He is shocked but intrigued (He never get's any after all; damn curse!) He watches a bit further and after he is semi-assured that it's consent he becomes guilty for peeping on his one-and-only-love's best friend. He retreats to his mansion and broods. Could explain why he always seemed a bit awkward and uncomfortable around Willow and only barely talked to her. And it would put the whole 'Puppy' issue in 'Doppelgangerland' to a new perspective. Not meant as character bashing but as a little funny insertion. I like his character, especially in AtS S01-03. What do you think? *Edit #5* Another one. Concerning a possible German exchange student and your mentioning of including something tiny which only means something to one in a million: Willow is Jewish; I don't know if it was mentioned in the show if she can speak/understand Yiddish. Anyway, some forms of Yiddish have a lot in common with German regarding vocabulary and pronouncing. At least I think so. Please don't sue me if I'm spreading a myth and wrong facts. I thought of to have a German student, who occasionally slips unconsciously back to his mother language in the throws of passion and Willow is able to understand most of it and sometimes even tries to answer accordingly. You know, some kind of strange sex-talk where the others are confusedly scratching their heads. It could be rough, nasty, funny or altogether that doesn't matter. About how his character should be, I would leave to you. He can be one of the open meanies, the disguised with sweet-talking meanies or the rather compassionate/considerate/tentative type since he is a bit unsure of himself with being in a foreign country (not speaking of the Hellmouth) thus an outsider and all. I could be helpful by translating figuratively. e.g.: "Suck my d*ck, b*tch!" would be "Lutsch' mein' Schwanz du Nutte!" (lit.: "Suck my tail you h**ker!") But he keeps to be a background character, means he seldom and randomly pops up and then goes back into his corner (fig.). We don't want to chase away the majority of potential readers who wouldn't understand it (with this being an English-speaking forum and all). To avoid any mary-sueing, which would be awkward and a tiny little bit abject too, don't make him about six feet tall, brunette, green-eyed, around twenty pounds too much weight and bulky, then we're golden (okay, you can't be for sure^^). I'm too old to pass as High school/college student anyway. But to put you at least at ease for sure with the name (should you want to name him): forenames: http://www.firstnamesgermany.com/ surnames: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_the_most_common_surnames_in_Germany They are pretty up-to-date and realistic, so you won't end up with Hans-Peter Müller. Masturbating as in hand-jobs/finger-f*cking: Approved. I like the picture of Willow jerking him off and pointing his shaft at her open mouth; and as I mentioned above, finger-fucking on her with that kind of 'squirting' and with her keening and screaming is pretty hot. Oh, and no fisting. Four-fingers-deep is enough, with this story being physical-suffer free and all. As for BDSM: a random spank during anal sex is okay, also to cuff her hands behind her back with handcuffs during a particular blow job when it's consent. But nothing further like bondage or full spanking-sessions etc. *Edit #6* I just keep going if you don't mind.^^ About the looks of Willow's vagina, breasts, after and anus (color, form etc.) and overall her naked body: Some older Playboy pics of AH give a good impression about texture, color, freckles etc. about her naked skin below the shoulders But their aren't any nude pictures, so since I implied earlier that I like a descriptive narrator who not only says that there is a p*ssy but also describes how it looks like and what it does (i.e. gaping rectum exerts and relaxes after anal sex, vagina leaks out juice etc, moving throat-muscles during swallowing etc.), I'd like to give you an imaginary description. Do you wish a description per text from me (I'm not so good at that) or should I rather send you a few screencaps per PM? Only if that don't offend you. Would be some close-ups, randomly picked from the net. And do you know something else what wasn't mentioned yet (for including or excluding)? Oh and in addition to cock-swapping - hole-swapping: Means he does her from behind (i.e.) and alternates from hole to hole.

Thanks for the screencap! If you take a German exchange student, then take one from North-Germany. Superficially viewed, they have dry humor (similar to Brits with irony, sarcasm & cynicism), appear a bit grumpy, are sometimes unintentionally funny, short-sentenced and deadpanning (actually a bit like Angel without the pained look and the handsomeness). I can provide some German terms here and there and help how Germans formulate if they try to speak English. But if at all, then just as a small sub-sub-sub-sub-plot-aspect since most readers won't understand it anyway. And no rolling 'r' please; that are the Austrians.^^ Oh, and don't Mary Sue me! That would be pretty much overkill. So back to seriousness: Yeah, the cockwhipping would fit at best at the end or the mid-end. The occasional pulling out and ejaculating on her body followed by an absent shaking off is hot and approved. I like the idea with the occasional eye-washing. It would also be a measure to stay in her good graces when they're gentle with her here and there. You're right, the fic is not supposed to make Willow physically suffer (much). I figure the same applies to the deepthroating and facefu***** parts which makes the eyes red and tearful as well. While we're at it, have you thought about gag-reflex and cutting off oxygen? She could have no, or a very weak gag-reflex since it isn't told otherwise in the show. Or she will be taught into it. What do you prefer? For the oxygen: Either we take the easy way, like many porn-fics do, and breathing through the nose is possible while a penis is locked to the hilt in her throat or they pull out regularly to let her breath. She should be able to hold her breath for an over-average time-span though. I like the facefu***** going on for a while without interruption. *Edit*: As for the manners of the guys: I already like how you want to approach it with first the sweet-talking, cuddling, fondling then crowding etc; how you had described in your first post. You could add to the humiliation-parts, twisted sweet talking parts too (well it's actually humiliation too). Like: *** "Oohh, what's this? That are some cute little titties you've got there." He gently pulled on her nipple. "Hey guys!" he shouted. "Don't you think this beautiful slut has fantastic tits?" "Yeah!" "Awesome!" "Come on sweetie," he coaxed her gently. "Show them. Don't be shy" Shyly she turned around and jutted her breasts out, provoking the crowd the cheer and to whistle in approval. Willow blushed and looked down. *** Yeah I know, I suck at it; but I hope you get what I mean.

Definitely better than my scenario; it doesn't look too silly and is more stable. An idea to improve the angles: Make it a bigger couch. You know, those where you rest on not by sitting but by lying. Those where the seating-area is much bigger in depth. I don't know the word. In German it's called 'Liegesofa'. The two guys responsible for her vagina, lie on their backs side by side with their heads resting on the couch-back. They are slightly turned to each other with their inner legs straight side by side and their outer legs spread outwards, knees bend and in the air. They're rather skinny so their hips won't be in the way to put the penises abreast too much. The spread legs give their a better angle for upwards thrusting. What they're lacking in body mass they compensate with very long and thick manhoods and big and heavy testicles (they could be two of the demon fellows). I kinda like it when the balls move up and down from the momentum by upward thrusts, makes it kinda nastier. Willow is straddled over both skinny waists, her legs each outside of the guy's outer legs, chest to their chests and bend over to expose her rectum. The two guy's responsible for the anal pleasure are rather bulky in figure and well-hung as well. One mounts her, so he is bend over her back, her and his after are on top of each other. The other one kneels behind her. As you said two guys sword fighting behind the couch and additionally the last two on the sides for the handjob. Occasionally, some of the others could try to push one away to get to a hole ("Man, others want a shot too!"), or try to drive a wedge between them to jerk off on her. As for squirting: She can of course have much self-produced lubrication, so that the guy who ate her out has his mouth, chin and nose covered in her juice. But the actual squirting is reserved for the males. There you can let off steam how you desire. The one can fire huge amounts with much pressure and fast tempo while the other has to come close to her, holds his member on her forehead (e.g.) where it rather oozes out and runs down her face. I wrote the warning 'cock-whipping' in the request. They could coax her to kneel on the floor with her face turned upwards. The guys are gathered close around her and whipping their shafts on her face and tongue. The purpose of that scenario is to have a proper intro or outro for the video. You know, how it is often in those trailers of porn-clips. Just an idea.

Sorry, I thought you were referring to the guys with saying 'her flower'. For Willow though it makes sense and is okay. Yeah, but Jonathan's 'ego-boost' backfired spectacularly and he was left even more pathetic and pitiful than before. I agree with the sound effects. If at all, then only very seldom and well placed for emphasizing. Usually it's better to write 'she grunted' instead of *grunt* anyway. e.g.: Quote from the story 'Restless Nights' by Inell, BtVS S02 Angelus/Willow: ... "Mmmmmmm, you're a good little c*cks*cker lover," I say smiling down at you and you just grunt your reply, too busy at your craft to pause. ... I didn't mean that I don't want circumlocutions, just that you don't have to use them. I've read good stories using both, straightforward and circumlocution wording. The effect can be the same, it depends on the author. Why not coaxing Willow to 'play' with her magic toys in front of them? Speaking of teaching, they could throw in suggestions what she should do and say. But at later time not right at the beginning. They order her in various positions, shoot close-up photos and film it. And when she is about to come, some guys stand up, masturbate and ejaculate on her. Something like that maybe. I was thinking about the DVDA double blow double hand-job thingy. I like it and would be thrilled when you include it, but I was wondering about the logistics behind such an act with so many participants. You know, with the many limbs and hips and the limited angles for optimal penetration. I thought of one position, where two men lie on the floor, two men stand on both feet while the other four would stand each on one feet... Willow would be on her knees bent over. Very tricky and risky that they end up in an inextricable tangle on the floor. Have you already something in mind?

Uh I forgot: No choking! They can hold her down on her neck/throat and stuff. But no cutting off of her respiratory system. It kinda reminds me every time of David Carradine and his 'little accident' which is worse than a cold shower. *Edit: Though I realize that deepthroating is a cutting off of respiratory as well. Just not with their hands or strings and stuff.*

As for bodywriting: I'm okay with it, just don't exaggerate it. Don't cover her body for example with names of the guys under each attached a list like: Johnny: Mouth : 3 Vagina: 4 Rectum: 2 Percy: Mouth: 5 Vagina: 6 Rectum: 8 Fisted: 1 etc. She should appear thoroughly fu- ummh ummh 'loved' and not like a clown. They could occasionally draw funny pictures on her body with their come though.^^ I'm totally okay with your Jonathan bits. I kinda liked him anyway and he deserves a tiny ego-boost. As for Warren: If I remember right, he was introduced into the show as a former Sunnydale High student. So technically he is around. I like the idea of him being the looser who has to keep cave outside, looking for police or other intruders and stuff. He never is allowed to touch or even to look at Willow (he doesn't even gets a copy of the video^^) which boosts his later misogynist attitude because even Willow rejects him dismissively, although she is already totally into the action. But it's up to you. If you can't think of something or don't want to, I wouldn't mind. Better no Warren at all than inadvertently too much Warren. I won't mind a magic dildo. Are they length- and girth-shifting? That Willow won't know who actually deflowered here and consciously not notices the actual deflowering appeals to me. I don't see the first guy asking her -"Are you sure?"- anyway. As for turn-ons and -offs in terms: I'm okay with most of them, just nothing regarding the excluded warnings like scat, watersports etc. What I mean is: Don't let the English exchange student say- "You know, I had eggs and beans for breakfast."- while she eats out his anal orifice. In regards to come-feeding I like terms like: "Here comes your dinner, bi***." And keep it varied. The guys don't behave all the same. Where the one is very vocal, the other one can be rather silent. He just grabs her, holds her down while he penetrates her posterior furiously accompanied with an occasional grunting. Willow though shouldn't be much vocal in nasty terms. She won't scream all the time: "Oh yeah, f*** my tiny little teen ass****... oooh I love it." It should be more like: "Uh uh uh uh yeah yeah uh UH UH Oh god! I'm coming uh uh..." And much keening. Or like: "You like that, huh? Bi**?" "Uh huh" *slap* *slap* *slap* (don't display sounds like I did here, at least not much. I find that rather annoying, especially in spanking fics. It's just for emphasizing purpose.) "You like when I'm treating you like a whore?" *grunt* "yeah... yeah..." They can pressure her to dirty talk though. "Say it!" he demanded. "Say you love to get fu**** by thirty dudes like the bi*** in heat you are!" As for 'muff' and 'her flower': the latter sounds rather like a belittlement. Something what maybe Pippi Langstrumpf would say. Or is it supposed to be a real nasty term, colloquial-wise? Concerning narrator/dialogue: The narrator should not be as vocal as the characters regarding strong terms but rather more descriptive. I don't mean that you use romantic circumlocutions like 'member', 'shaft' or 'nether folds' etc but don't use the colloquial terms the characters use in dialogue. Keep it neutral, terms-wise, by using the common explicit terms like cock, asshole, pussy, cunt etc and describe explicitly how her anal orifice looks like or how her throat bulges out during fellatio etc.

Still on my couch, so a relatively quick reply. Don't worry. I didn't expect you to be finished in one week, I'm just exited I have something to do during the next days. I was looking forward to a quiet week with lots of lazing around, reading fanfiction, playing video-games, watching movies (both porn and 'movies'). Now I can wholeheartedly nerd around about BtVS and porn, so expect several posts from me and don't be surprised or feel pressured when I'm replying fast to you. I do have a RL, just not next week. About story-length: 10.000 words sound decent, but more would be cool. I offer my help to anything non-creative to support you. When the introduction is around 3.000 words, make the sex around 8.000 and the aftermath around 1.000. But it's too early to measure it right anyway. About way of speaking: I considered your dialogues in 'Pleasurable Evil' and 'The Key's Shaft' alright, though I've read 'Pleasurable Evil' only until Willow was torn apart, then I had to quit from shock. As I mentioned: Soft spot. Just don't neglect dialogue altogether. Narrator only stories are always so arduous, especially in a foreign language. ^^ But I'm confident you'll be doing alright. I like the demon potion thingy. You could add a temporary infertility caused by it. That put at least the guys at ease. I'd figure they wouldn't want a child to deal with either. For Willow's ease though... hmmm... beside that she's very smart, she tends to be flippant, especially concerning magic. Maybe she forgets about a possible pregnancy in the throws of passion. She can be horrified later in the aftermath. Would actually fit to her character. She often acted first and was sorry afterwards. They're are not starting with vaginal penetration; at that point she is aroused sufficient... The lubricant issue is cool and I don't mind the rape tag. It IS still rape actually. The gangbang being actually a party, with coming and going (/pun understood and laughed) guys, drinking beer, playing video-games etc. is pretty cool and provides for variation. Approved! As for guy hygiene/looking: The guys should be clean and decent looking. Not necessarily solely athletes or model types, rather a reasonable mix. After all, Tara, Oz and Kennedy weren't the Cordelia or Angel types either but Willow was attracted to them. Their tools should be above-average in length and girth (seven to nine inch) where the demons provide the big guns. They're normal looking, showered, wearing fresh clothes and boxers and important (!): their assholes are clean in advance, not licked clean by Willow! During the act, it's clear that they'll become sweaty and will inevitably come into contact with some come on Willow's body here and there, but Willow's the only one who is a mess afterwards. Cum smells, that's okay. Uh before I forget: Do you want to include Warren Mears? Please don't... that would be a huge spoiler for some reason. *brrr* If you include him, then only as the guy who is even more pitiful than Jonathan. As far as I understood you, Jonathon get's at least to eat out her ass. Warren can stand guard outside or something... As for the expanded come display: If you mean more come-play, like letting her lick the come from the floor or putting tubes in her holes to fill her up with more of it thus everything come-wise is okay. When you have further stuff in mind, it's okay too, but no scat, vomit, watersports or bloodplay! The only fluids are come, sweat, the occasional spitting on her face during fellatio, and the inevitable virginal blood after her deflowering. Some saliva from her during deepthroating is okay, too, but not so much and NO vomiting. Tallymarks as in cutting her? Then no. No blood. Bodywriting not like they draw lines with a marker on her body each time they come in/on her. But when they finally have finished with her, they can write with a red lipstick in huge letters something like 'gangbanged' (I think you can think about something more profound) on her chest before they place her in front of Oz' crypt. About pregnancy I told earlier. The virginity issue could be sweet out-talked/conciliated? Have you an idea? The scariest story I have read so far, was a BtVS story on AFF about Buffy and Dawn being put under a thrall from Willow and Tara in S06. They loosed their maturity and independence and behaved like toddlers. Willow diapers Buffy, sings lullabies etc. Complete free of the gross warnings. There is a faint kiss on Buffy's shaved pussy, but it's rather meant as affecting nuzzling. And some inevitable scat, because hello? Diapers? But I found it utterly disturbing. I don't remember the name and it was a few month ago. I forgot the sex-toys warning: They can penetrate her with dildos in various sizes or let her walk around with a butt-plug during a break or something like that. But no gynecological instruments or such scary stuff^^

Uh, what just came to my mind: As for you being needlessly verbose on set-ups: I don't mind! I rather like a long introduction and detailed build-up, as long as it is the small part compared to the sex. As I made the challenge, I figured it would be among characterization and plot the strongest challenge to make a long, explicit, detailed even a bit exzessiv gangbang, without it becoming boring after a while, because everything repeats itself at some point. To keep it varied. This is the difference of fiction and a video-clip regarding porn I'd say. To keep the reader on track, the author has to be creative to stimulate the reader's imagination. I'd really hate it if you'd write the first three men have their goings on Willow and then comes: 'Six hours later, Willow lay on the floor in a big puddle of cum with a huge smile plastered on her face...' I mean what the fuck? That would be almost as bad like when somebody writes a blowjob and the man refused to come in her mouth, he rather wants to come 'inside' her. She then asks him uncertainly if she does it wrong, whereupon he assures her that she's just too talented my sweet-doodeldidoo... It's fiction! The man is allowed to come more than once! The women do so either. Human-lookalike demons would be nice. Could explain the huge amounts of come better than really productive prostates... And I missed your working title by the first reading. Oh my god! That could also be the story title. I wouldn't mind!

First of all *Yippieh*! RL is overrated anyway As fate would have it, I have the coming week off from work and nothing planned. So basically I'll be on my couch, mouse in one hand and keyboard in the other, and only get up to answer the pizza delivery boy, to go to bed or to use the bathroom (or to take a beer from the refrigerator). Plenty of time to nerd around to the heart's content. It's 6:15 pm now where I am located, so should I don't answer almost immediately during the next week, I'm probably sleeping. As for the story: I don't know how much 'dirty talk' is allowed in the forum, so I will use soft words like penis, vagina, aroused etc. If I did something wrong, please tell me. I'm basically d'accord with the setting you came up so far. I won't interfere with your plot thoughts unless you ask me about something specific. I want to clarify what I mean with the con/non-con stuff: I don't like rape fics where the victim suffers through violence and/or open humiliation/degradation. It's nothing against this kind of story or the appropriate author. I just end up to feel too sorry for the victim and I don't think this is a right basic setting to enjoy a rape fic. Especially when it's Willow, who is my favorite BtVS character, I just can't stand it.^^ She's kind of a soft spot. I do read non adult rated fics through any genres with her as main character on FF, AoOO etc. as well. Important is that she enjoys it mostly and isn't traumatized, debil or damaged beyond repair in the aftermath. She will be freaked though; if she wouldn't be, I'd call that OOC. So I'd agree with dafdes that a intimidation/consent thing is a good way. You could add something which lowers her inhibitions or increases her stamina like a misrouted spell from Willow herself. Something like that maybe, but that's up to you. Just nothing too heavy; she must stay in character (as much as possible) regarding her essence, manners and way of speaking etc.. Even during the act, so that the reader is always reminded 'Yep, that is Willow Rosenberg from BtVS... who gets screwed by 30+ men' Again, the setting you have so far really appeals to me. I also like that some men will be given names and faces which will be recognized. As for the rimming; she'll definitely gives plenty but she'll be also at the receiving end. I actually had thought that she is introduced into the gangbang slowly thus similar to your approach. Means at first she is at the receiving end of the pleasure. You know, for example she sits on the coach, left and right of her a man, sweet talking how pretty she is, they start to softly grope her, then slow undressing, they grope her breasts, nipples, one goes down and licks her vagina next her rectum and then one of her hand is casually guided to a penis, after some time she opens her eyes the first after a longer time and a penis stares into her face, he coaxes her to take into her mouth, she's already so aroused that she complies, more men join her on the coach, they move to the floor etc. pp. and so on... An enhancing process. As for the DVDA double blow double wank: I had to look at Urban Dictionary what that means. Yeah, foreigner and generally not that familiar with the terms... But definitely approved! I'll go at bit more specific regarding some warnings: Face-penetration: Preferred in every position known. Favored is the one where she lies on her back, her head slightly hanging over the edge and his testicles slapping/pressing against her nose/face (depends on the size of mentioned testicles, I guess) Come-bath: Means how it sounds: belly, womb and bowels full with it, body from head to toe drenched in it and she's laying in a big puddle of it. So no realism here. There is plenty of come and immediate recharging as well. It's porn after all. I just had a picture in my depraved mind where she is lying on her back on a low table, legs spread, knees to her chest, hip rolled up, hands reached down under her legs on her cheeks, spreading gaping vagina and rectum open, her breast jutted out, her head tilted upwards, her mouth wide open with tongue out and a soft smile on her face. The men gathered around her, furiously masturbating and pointing their... you know what I mean and how it ends. I want to add come-feeding here: from a glass, through a hopper and directly from the source. Gaping orifices: like in the average porn clips. For example, he's in a sitting position, she's sitting in his lap with her back to his front, he holds her legs apart while he penetrates her, he slips out, holds the orifice open and the camera zooms in. That's all for now. Uh, by the way: I'm not native English and still learning. Ask, when you don't understand what the hell I'm talking about. Cheers.