DevilDuck

Oric13 came back to say this about Xander & Dawn: To Feel Alive: Which is really nice since I felt I might have fallen down on that piece some. Threeways are a bit like girl-on-girl in that I'm never quite happy with how it ends up.

A third review for Xander & Dawn: To Feel Alive came in proving the popularity of fanfiction. dest said: While the argument could be made that a near miss might have been better there would have only been room to really do that once before the inevitable discovery. By having it happen at the end of chapter 2 means that chapter 3, which is in the works, can start to deal with the fall out.

The second review for Xander & Dawn: To Feel Alive came in. Anon said: Well that's not entirely up to me but wnelson001 (whose plot it is) and I have roughed an outline for 6 more chapters.

I'm not sure this will bare much fruit but here goes. Author: DevilDuck Title: A Special Boy Summary: His mother and teachers all love 'Little' Billy Osborne. Feedback: I'm most interested in seeing if people want me to write more like this. Fandom: Original Warnings: INC, MC, M/F, Minor1, TF, Oral, Complete URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107358 Thank you for your time/interest.

I've gotten my first real review today in this case for my story Xander & Dawn: To Feel Alive. Oric13 said: Well a generally positive review; the accusation of brevity has been made before and is something I might have to address.

Heinlein described that sort of this a group or line marriage (depending on the book and the exact setup). The reason for line marriages in the book he first used them in was to preserve property rights; since new, younger, people were being regularly added to the marriage one death wouldn't cause the holdings to leave the hands of the family.

Now that my first complete story is up I thought it would be a good idea make one of these. I will use it to response to review while you can use it to harass me. So far, on this site, I have completed: 3 Girls Aspect of the Demon (a Buffy fan-fic) Dr. Nichols' Family Therapy Escape! Influence of the Demon (a Buffy fan-fic) Logbook of the Amalgam The Port of Maresh The Price of Doing Business (a Mad Men fan-fic) A Special Boy Teacher's Pet Xander & Dawn: To Feel Alive (a Buffy fan-fic) Incomplete: A Daughter's Revenge: A Master PC Story The Family Kent Narrative Experiments Shards of Reality: Sunnydale (a Buffy fan-fic) A Special Boy: Summer Shorts

Elsewhere I did a thing I call a story blender in which I would take three elements (Setting, Characters, Action/fetish) sent in separately, from different people, and try to build a story out of them. Now I will try to do the same thing here. So if you want to challenge me send me one of those three elements and once I have all three I'll whip something up.

@JayDee I once read a short comedy piece about a porn writer trying to work but being pestered by his highly sexed live-in girlfriend.

Elsewhere someone suggested that the daughter should just kill the father, that to do anything else would in the long term just be sadistic... I'm not sure they got the point of the story.

I was hoping there would be more suggestions before I circled back around but oh well. @Magusfang I have a few reasons why your suggestion won't work for me that I will hopefully layout in a clear manner: 0) I'm not really into feminization so I'm not likely to add more to the story. 1) So far the son's 'control' has been subtle; he's been making suggestions or asking leading questions so that each step seems to be the daughter's idea. 2) Something of cliche with these stories is the mid-story switch up wherein one of the subjects gains control; not only do I want to avoid that cliche that is kinda where this story starts. 3) Lastly and most importantly it would get in the way with my planned downer ending. The thing that most upset the daughter, that sent her off on her path of revenge was that the program was setup to keep her sixteen, every year she would turn sixteen again with everyone's memories being altered to match. My planned final chapter is to show the family celebration her birthday after all the changes and end with the reveal of the sixteen candles on her cake.

I threatened that I was going to do this and now I have. I’m in the middle of writing a multichapter story (which can be read elsewhere) and I’m struggling to fill in some gaps in my outline which affect the rhythm of the piece. Given the nature of the problem both this thread and the above link contain spoiler for the story in question. The story is my take on the Master PC idea (if you’re not familiar with it think of it as a digital genie); instead of following the first person in a group to get the program and seeing their orders as they are made my story focuses on the daughter of that person as she takes ‘control’. This creates something of a repeated pattern wherein an order is brought to the girls attention and the father is then punished for. The first chapter sees both daughter and son separately discovering that their father has the program; she is focused on setting things right while he is focused on manipulating his sister into using the program for his benefit. The second chapter is the first confrontation with their father and after a little exposition he is made permanently impotent. Chapter three is something of two-fer; first the father’s penis is shrunk while the son’s is expand for reasons of ‘irony’. This is then followed up by the mother’s sexual fixation being transferred to the son since the father can no longer fulfill her needs. Chapter four follows up on that with the daughter being unable to sleep do to the noise of the incestuous fucking going on down the hall (the sound damping effect being removed from the house to further torment her father). Those four chapters, as far as I’ve written, cover the events of one Friday afternoon and evening while my next planned point is Monday morning. No longer able to satisfy the harem he’d turn his office into the father has to call upon his children for help. This sets up a series of chapters wherein the boy fills in with his dick while the girl is unwittingly sent through the same sexual programing as the other new hires. Eventually, after the son has completely displaced their father in all aspects of life he, the man, will be completely feminized and turned into the family’s maid which leads into the end game. My primary problem is getting from Friday night to Monday morning (I don’t want to just skip the weekend) but there is room to add in details later on so if you have questions, suggestions, angry rants let me know. Oh, and thank you.

Whoa a fast response and from a mod no less. Okay let's see if I got this right: If I were start taking part in the monthly writing challenge I could create an anthology to house them all, have a table of content that list summaries, tags, and warnings for each 'response', but I would have to put that same warning at the top of each chapter. If, after chapter seven goes up, I decide I want to switch chapter five and six around I would have to delete chapters five, six, and seven? I couldn't just use the edit feature to, I don't know, edit the contents/title of the chapters? As for going off-topic I'll refrain from hijacking my own thread or even starting another for the time being but if anyone's interested I talked about the story in question elsewhere already.

Given the success of (and uniformity of response to) my last question I thought I would go ahead and ask a more challenging one. The Content Guidelines state that you cannot post an Author's Note as a chapter UNLESS they serve as a Table of Contents for "Twitfics, Drabbles, or One-Shot Collections". That 'unless' is important as I tend to favor the Anthology structure (especially when posting on another site) so I am very interested in what the conventions for anthologies are over here. How strong of a connection between stories is required to class it as an anthology? Must they share characters? Setting? Theme? If I chose to go back and write a follow up for one of the stories would I have the power to change the order they appear in the anthology? Thank you for your time. Bonus Off-Topic Question: I've looked around the forums some and I'm not sure where to go for help developing a story; I'm not looking for an editor, or a co-author, or someone to take over the story I'm just struggling to get from point C to E (I know there has to be a point D but I don't know what it should be). If you could point me in the write direction that would be nice.

(Sorry if they has been answered elsewhere but I'm new) So I was recently convinced to join the archive and I've started by posting a mulitchapter story and I'm wondering if it would be better to post all the chapters at once or put them up one at a time on some sort of schedule? If the latter, how often?