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Daneasaur 2012-10-24 id # 3000040017 Chapter 2 review: This was also very fun and had just the right amount of tension to keep it exciting, even without any actual sex scenes. Just a few spelling and grammar errors which were easily overlooked. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Thanks for another cool review hope you like chapter 3 even more.

norri 2012-10-23 id # 3000040013 still verygood ______________________________________________________________________________________________________ Thank you norri.

HenshinDaisuke 2012-10-22 id # 3000040011 Another groovy chapter, I'm rather enjoying the story but man do I ever wanna kick your rear for ending on a cliffhanger again! Would be interesting to see how Wheeljack reacts to the news if you find a way to work him into the story. Also might be something to get one of the other fembots into the story from the older series. Like Elita-1 one however her name was written. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Lookes like your going to have to get used to the cliffhangers I hope you like the way I worked Wheeljack into the story and Im sorry but for now Im trying to stick to the cannon of the Prime story line so if Elita-1 shows up in the later eps then I'll do something with her but otherwise we just have to work with what we have. You might like to know that I am trying to work a scene with Airachnid into the story.

fenrir 2012-10-22 id # 3000040010 A great chapter overall. I would like to see his mom's reaction in the next chapter. Also i found their reactions close to the show. when the kid is born i would like to see what megs would do when he finds out. Also the child could be like Sari from transformers animated. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Thank you for another review I think you will like how the story progresses but Arcee's and Jacks child will be unique and not like sari

Kael 2012-10-22 id # 3000040009 Why you hateing on Miko? Miko is the same age as Jack! just because she's more excitable about the Bots doesnt mean she's a Little Girl. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Sorry to make you think I was "hating on Milo," I actually love Miko and I was simply keeping to the nature of the character and what I felt were real reactions to her.

Paladin 2012-10-22 id # 3000040008 One thing I want to point out, Miko's 15... Rafe is the 12 year-old. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Thank you for both the review and the corection I have made the chang in the story.

HenshinDaisuke 2012-10-19 id # 3000039995 Love the story so far but I soooooo hate you for ending on a cliffhanger. Really want to see the next part soon. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________ Thanks for the review. There's nothing better than a good cliffhanger

Daneasaur 2012-10-18 id # 3000039991 Oh yes, sorry, forgot to leave a suggestion. I think you've captured the personalities of the entire cast perfectly. I suggest that Jack and Arcee can have some rough times but are never unfaithful to each other. An amusing idea WOULD be to punish Arachnid would be to have her in absurd restraints and forced to birth more bots as payment for killing Cliffjumper and Tailgate. This is, of course, after Jack and Arcee's baby is born and a small recap on how humans, like the bots, were born of Unicron (which is true to the prime canon as Earth was formed around the spark of unicron whereas cybertron was sorta built on his body... complicated). ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Thanks for the review and your suggestions, I am afraied that idea of punishing Airachnid this way (Though really hot) would violate the character of the Autobots. Perhaps in the futer if the Decepticons get ahold of her? But I think you may like what I have done with the Unicron thing.

I posted chapter three about five minutes after you asked. I hope you like it William.

The Long Awited Chapter Three Is Up Please have fun reading and reviewing. Author: Aysha c.c. Chapter Title: Birth + Summary: This chapter is huge! It has a lot of deep emotion. It has sex, Laughter,and Intrigue. It has some Cybertronian back story, and It also has a guest apperance from everyones favorite. dual sword wielding Autobot. Feedback: Read and Review with as much concrit as you want! and let me know how you think the story should develop and I will give it do consideration. Fandom: Transformers Prime Pairing: Jack/Arcee Warnings: AFFO, Fingering, Fist, M/F, Minor2, OC, Oral, Parody, Preg, TF, WAFF, WIP, Xeno Solo story or chaptered story: This will be a contuinuing fanfiction.

Do you have technology, science, even magic, or other abilities in your story that you need a convincing explanation of how it works? I am very good at coming up with just that, and I am offering my help to you. All you need to do is tell me whether it is technology, science, or magic, ect. Then tell me what it does and I will tell you how or why. This can even apply to alien plants and animal physiology. I'm offering because I think it will be fun, so post a reply and see what I can come up with.

I'm only suggesting you consider a change; I thought it might make things better for the authors.

It only shows an average not the individual votes so, and that is what we want to see. Sam voted: +++++ Hecter voted: +++ Jane voted: ++++ and so on. It would be nice to be able to get a true scense of what the people who vote are thinking. Maybe you can make it so that on the Arcive page it gives the average as it does now, but if you click on it, it gives you a list of thoese who voted an what they voted. But maybe you should also give the option to vote anonymously so on the list it says Anonymous voted: ++ this woud be cool becouse some people might fear retribution for being honest.

I was just thinking the same thing. In fact I actually came to this thread to make this same suggestion. It would be great if it were possible to see who was voting and how they rated the story. It would also keep people from voting for their own stories. Just a thought.

I think of myself as an organic writer. It always starts with a fantasy my mind concocts on its own. Then the basic plot develops around the fantasy and that is when I start writing. I like to let the story develop from there as I write it. for example in the transformers story I'm writing now I wrote two sex scenes for Jack and Arcee and I had not intended to write another sex scene between them for quite some time, but while working on chapter #3, which I am doing now, A sex scenes just wrote itself into the chapter. It is a bit of a pain in the ass because this chapter is supposed to be mainly about the birth of Jack & Arcee’s child and not to menschen that it is making the chapter longer than I had intended. But the scene fits. I think it is better not to try to have too much of the story planed out because you will try to force the story to fit into that plan and the story WILL come out feeling like it was forced. Instead let the story flow and grow organically and not only will your readers enjoy it more; you will enjoy writing it more as well.

Chapter Two Is Up Please have fun reading and reviewing. Author: Aysha c.c. Chapter Title: Mom! Summary: Arcee Jack Love Laughter Intrigue Feedback: Read and Review with as much concrit as you want! and let me know how you think the story should develop and I will give it do consideration. Fandom: Transformers Prime Pairing: Jack/Arcee Warnings: AFFO, Fingering, Fist, M/F, Minor2, OC, Oral, Parody, Preg, TF, WAFF, WIP, Xeno Solo story or chaptered story: This will be a contuinuing fanfiction. ULR to the story Transformers Prime The Truth Revealed If you want to check out the reviews (Edited so thet wont give away parts of the story) or if you want to make a comment see review/review reply thread here: http://www2.adultfan...truth-revealed/

Review # 5 Arrived at about 8pm at around 380 hits. Here is the review: skeletor22 denniskaylor71482@yahoo.com 2012-10-15 id#3000039984 I Really love where this story is going. I would have never thought Arcee would turn into such a nympho and Jacks sudden realizations are simply classic. kinda wish there was a bit more June dialogue and interactions. but other than that great story keep up please. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thank you for your review skeletor22.

Review # 4 arrived at abot 4pm. aaround 310 hits. here is the review. Daneasaur 2012-10-15 id# 3000039983 This is simply AMAZING! I have been waiting for a sweet romantic extension between Jack and Arcee and this was everything and more. PLEASE continue this! ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thank you Daneasaur for taking the time to review and for such a great review.

At about 830pm I got a nwe review for the story at around 250 hits so here it is. norri 2012-10-14 id # 3000039978 i enjoyed the story very much ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thank you norri for your review.

Hi everyone, just got a new review so here it is. Short but sweet and well appreciated. Recieved at about 10pm From: lee 2012-10-13 id # 3000039976 cool cant wait for more keep up the good work ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Thank you for your Review lee

I thought it would help to promote my story if I shared my reviews so here is the first one: I got this review after less than 85 hits at about 230pm Oct. 13th. fenrir 2012-10-13 id # 3000039974 Personally i have read my fair share of these stories. But this one was hands down the best. The way you made it work was amazing. As for were you could take this story the...: The rest is what he suggested and is a bit of a spoiler so I left it out. you can see the whole review in the review sectoin of the story. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ I would also like to thank fenrr for his/her feedback and let him/her know that I am considering his/her Arachnid sugestion

Author: Aysha c.c. Title: Transformers Prime The Truth Revealed Summary: Arcee Jack Love Sex Laughter Intrigue Feedback: Read and Review with as much concrit as you want! and let me know how you think the story should develop and I will give it do consideration. Fandom: Transformers Prime Pairing: Jack/Arcee Warnings: AFFO, Fingering, Fist, M/F, Minor2, OC, Oral, Parody, Preg, TF, WAFF, WIP, Xeno Solo story or chaptered story: This will be a contuinuing fanfiction. ULR to the story Transformers Prime The Truth Revealed If you want to check out the reviews (Edited so thet wont give away parts of the story) or if you want to make a comment see review/review reply thread here: http://www2.adultfan...truth-revealed/

If it turns me on it motivates me, if it makes me laugh it motivates me, if it has a great story it motivates me. Right now I am writing a Transformers Prime story as I am sure many of you know. The story is so erotic and funny I spend half the time I'm writing it turned on and the other half laughing my ass off! Beyond all of that It has what I think will be a great story line with what I hope will be a great OC that won't be "Mary Sue" Well anyway I am so well motivated that the story is practically writing itself. I write in complete silence, no music, no tv, nothing but my imagination and my keyboard! That's me.

You haven't told us what ether story is about and I for one will not be tricked into reading something M/M Not Now Not Ever

Seeing as I love these two I will have to give it a look when I get the chance. Right now I am writting and I don't want to get sidetracked but be asured I will check it out so it had better be good!