I want to remind people that this is a thread where the original poster is offering up an idea for a story, or requesting a story to be written, based on certain parameters that s/he would like to see written and read.
This is not a place for people to demand more "ideas" or "scenes" to be added to a story.
If you have nothing meaningful to add to the conversation, or are not interested in writing, nor assisting with the writing of this particular challenge/request, then please consider that before replying.
If you have ideas, or scenes that you would like to see in a story, then I strongly suggest that you start your own topic in the Challenges and Requests forum, under the appropriate sub-forum.