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    Cuzosu reacted to JayDee in Best or Worst review you've ever gotten   
    ...just how many synonyms for big had you used?
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    Cuzosu reacted to BronxWench in Best or Worst review you've ever gotten   
    I've had far too many amazing and wonderful reviews to try and pick just one.
    I really can't think of a worst review, per se, because I tend to think any review has value. Any time you provoke a reaction in a reader strong enough to make them review, you've done your job as a writer.
    Having said that, the only head scratcher I ever got was a review that informed me that I was using too many big words. I looked at the M tag (this was when I still posted on FFN) and just had to laugh.
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from Raymy in Truckers Are Pervs   
    Since I have a moment of down time, I'll share this.
    My man and I are going through training to drive semi trucks. Well, one thing truckers are given is a "handle" or a nickname other truckers use to identify them on the CB. One of our group is Smokin' Joe. My man, on the other hand.... Four of us were going over the pre-trip inspection and one thing we're supposed to do is check that nothing is damaged. So my man's listing off things that need to be checked for on the steering shaft, but he forgot to mention "bent"...so we reminded him. He went off on a tangent, one of the other guys and I looked askance at each other and tried (and failed) to bite back laughter because his phrasing was so easily misunderstood.... Now he's Bent Shaft among the four of us, and you should hear the razzing he gets.
    Yup. Truckers are pervs.
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    Cuzosu reacted to BronxWench in Slave versus Submissive   
    Given the right person, I might very well have chosen to explore submission. I would, however, make a miserable slave. I can't offer the obedience required of a slave, It's just not part of my make-up.
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    Cuzosu reacted to Kurahieiritr in Funny Typos   
    Wiping tears from my eyes as I read all of these great typo terror moments. My contribution came from several reviews I have collected over the years.
    #1 { in my opinion, detrimental to the writing style and injures the flow of the story. } When I read this, I wondered how typed words could get physically injured.
    #2{ But, I have just joined so I can not really say anything at all good job! }
    For the first week I pondered whether they were saying my writing style sucked, or that they were so new to reviewing stories they were not doing a good job. Considering how many coherent good jobs I received, I decided they were probably saying the same.
    #3{I still get the same thought wot happened when tak finished work and wot is kts idea of a first date.}
    It took me 5 minutes to stop seeing light bulbs in my head over the "wot" shorthand. Not certain as to why that happens. However wot looks to me as if it should be spell checked into the genuine word "watt" for some reason.
    #4 {when do u plan to update this chapi check it just about everyday but no luck. and thank u for putting in the missing parts so one can only gather what the next story will be like compelete }
    The story this child (?) or ditzy bad joke variety Blond (?) was reviewing was already marked completed in big bold letters. I ended the number one novel's final page with the obligatory Author's Note stating that the "Next story is Alternate Tracks, Sequel to A Rivalry Revealed."
    Is it only me, or do people not comprehend straight forward English in this day and age? Something has gone seriously wrong within the education system in place for American children I fear.
    And the grand Finale that had me twitching when I saw it two years ago: #5 {and i see

    it's a YAOI

    and YESH! i love YAOI!

    i wonder who'll be the pair

    would be be my fave

    ahhaha

    i wonder why people don't review in this}
    I have yet to decide if the reviewer was high on crack, another illegal substance, or suffering from acute insomnia exacerbated by caffeine overdose and too much sugar when they sent their review.
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    Cuzosu reacted to Kurahieiritr in Is there an point where story content is not accepteble?   
    Quite a lively debate going on here. Some of it on topic and some off topic. I believe that Adultfanfiction net is about the freedom of expression first and foremost. I think I will use an illustration or two to tackle this specific topic. Three things stand out about this forum. Everyone loves to voice their own likes and dislikes. Some here seem to wish to see their dislikes removed.
    I took psychology courses back in the age of dinosaurs. (for those in the 20's age range to understand this is coming for your mom's peer age) Back in the era of T-Rex, learning a lot about history's significance on modern cultures etc was mandatory. Here's the rub, . . . Let's look at the end of World War One; Germany. The rise of Political Correct politeness was being government enforced through legislation. PC Nazi ethics have been directly linked to the creation of Concentration Camps and Jewish genocide during World War Two. That is a well documented historical fact, not a fictitious wishful thinking statement. When we embrace Political Correctness, we are censoring freedom of speech. To be PC, you have to censor yourself. The more afraid you are to speak your truth, the easier it is for the government to control you and your friends in the end. IT is the beginning of a shift toward victimization prone thin skinned individuals who refuse to try and improve their lives because P.C. has historically made others into villains instead of teaching personal self responsibility.
    Go to China and check out their lifestyle. P.C. is a law nobody dares argue. In fact for those too young to recall China's Tienanmen Square, crack your history books and learn how abusive Government becomes once it silences free speech. Learn the truth about Political Correctness and how it removes responsibility from the individual who often is already too lazy to stand up and raise their own children and worse. Free speech, even that which is rude, or infantile, gives human beings their number one emotional venting system. Remove the venting system, and the human being begins an unstoppable slow simmering emotional boiling of resentments. It has turned into genocidal tendencies at it's worst breaching points that humanity can never deny. Shut down the venting system, and the steam backs up.
    Ever heard of a steam engine? That is how emotions eventually work in a sense. Forcing steam to build to set levels of pressure to make a train that weighs several tons to move forward at very fast speeds is the same as forcing people to keep their resentments and fancies to themselves. Just like the steam engine will self destruct if the steam is not vented correctly, so will the individual's emotions blow up after P.C. fears can no longer restrain the pressure of resentments.
    This site has many diverse written formats for a reason. It is a venting system that can prevent the pressure build up from turning into destructive reality. Whether Cathartic or to simply needle those with holier than thou agendas, it has a place that should be respected by all. Removing topics that are uncomfortable for a set group is about breaking down the ability to vent emotions positive or negative that need a place to go. Shut off any taboo form writing and those who read and write them have less pressure release options to slow the explosion rate is my very well educated theory.
    Don't like the content? How about trying the do not read it rule? Allow those who need to vent such ideals room to contain their emotions through a non violent format. Those who act on such pressurized emotions are a different beast entirely. They require damage control measures because those are perpetrating harmful or even exceedingly violent crimes. If this site can help prevent even one such violent explosion by giving a person a place to write it out, or read it, kudos and congrats. It worked to relieve the building emotional pressure in an individual somewhere. Otherwise that individual backed into a pressurized emotional corner would have committed an atrocity.
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from Kurahieiritr in Is there an point where story content is not accepteble?   
    Do I have topics I will not write? Hm.... Explicitly, yes. Am I willing to mention most topics and how I feel about them in my writing, as shown through characters and their emotions? Yeah, I think I can safely say that.
    I come from a really open-minded family, where it concerns the blood relatives and adopted ones. This has influenced me quite a bit. I don't care about sexual preferences of any sort because if they're not doing sexual things with me, why should it impact me at all? Race doesn't matter to me, nor do culture or religion.
    Pedophiles are slightly different, but my views differ somewhat here from the legal perspective in the US. In the first place, I know there are places where the age of majority is 14. Secondly, there are, for example, celebrity marriages with 20 or more years between their ages, so if the minor is of age to be sexually active anyway (not 7-9, because I see that as the age of experimenting and that would be a gross abuse of authority over a child, but more...14-17, depending on how mature the kid is and if the family isn't trying to push the kid into it), then it seems hypocritical to me to call it pedophilia. If you go by US law, relationships with minors are borderline acceptable even with four years or less between them, unless both are minors. This being the case, why then would it not be pedophilia for anyone to be in a relationship with someone five years or more their junior? My parents are both in relationships with a 10 year age gap. This would make, in the one case, my dad's wife a pedophile. In the other, it would make my mom a pedophile. But they are all consenting adults (however much my dad's wife doesn't act like an adult toward me, which I don't understand as she's 36 years older than I am, but I guess that, just as some people never grow old at heart, some people never grow up in truth) and far be it from me to meddle. Mostly, I suppose I am saying, I think that if a person is mature enough to make adult decisions, mature enough that they could be emancipated, even if they aren't, then I don't see it as pedophilia. (This may also have something to do with my own somewhat precocious maturity, due to my being the older sibling and the way the families raised me. I'm not saying everyone has to see it that way, just that I do.)
    Scat play and similar things don't work for me, so I avoid them. I have an overly active imagination and a nose that's gotten rather picky after three sinus infections, in addition to my hereditary ear sensitivity. Nothing against anyone who likes it, I would just rather not read it myself.
    Bestiality doesn't bother me. This probably has to do with the fact that I like the animals I meet much more than I like the humans, on average. I don't mind that other people dislike bestiality. I'm sure there are things they like that I don't, too, and that's just a fact of life.
    Violence and gore...well, I grew up in a family of hunters, with two male cousins and then my younger twin brothers closest to me in age. I have a much different view of "violence" than most girls I know. I get told that I hit too hard when I'm giving a playful or friendly swat to a shoulder. And, what with the hunting, my usual reaction to guts is, "That smells. Let's get it out of sight soon, so the bears and scavengers don't wander too close."
    Do I think there is any content which is allowed here and should not be? No. I think this site is set up in a way that has created a haven for all of us whose needs don't quite fit in with modern society, wherever we live, and that trying to get even one thing banned would alienate those involved and make the rest of us oddballs, misfits and outcasts suddenly start wondering about whether we'd be banned next. It's Adult Fan Fiction for a reason, if not more than one. Minors in general have a bad tendency to flame and otherwise act immature, which makes me glad they're banned from here. Those of us allowed here for the most part mind our manners, keeping in mind that we haven't liked it when we've been banned, flamed, trolled, or spammed on other sites. To my mind, the simple fact that it's a kind of haven tells me, "It's okay to be and share who you are. Those who matter don't mind, and those who mind can just find something else to read. That's what we do here." And part of why it's a haven is this: the mods and admins respond quickly, use the same rules for everyone, and refuse to tolerate the kind of senseless, flamer-ridden arguments that now infest, for example, YouTube.
    So, no, I don't think there's anything that should be removed from this site that isn't already. I've never understood why anyone would read something they know they're not going to like anyway, same as I've never understood why people on YouTube go to videos or songs they know they're not going to enjoy, only to complain that the music, the genre, the artist, the person who posted the video, or the viewers as a whole are crap, are pathetic, are-- We all know the list goes on. It's why I'm thankful that such poor behavior is not allowed here. Isn't that kind of haven worth having to avoid the tags you don't like?
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from kagome26isawsome in What Song Are You Listening To?   
    "Tree's on Fire" (parody of Johnny Cash's "Ring of Fire")
    Cledus T. Judd
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from Raymy in Funny Typos   
    "This floxed me."
    *glares at typo, smacks self in the head* That's what I get for being unable to decide whether to type "foxed" or "flummoxed"....
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from RogueMudblood in Reviews That Make You Squee   
    Most of the reviews I get that make me smile tell me what I did with the characters/chapter/scene that made them smile/grin/laugh.
    My Bleach yaoi drabble collection, on FFnet, has reviews galore (something like 3-5 per chapter, average, I think) and is a squee-fest for readers and writer alike. Still, I think my biggest squee on reviews for the drabbles was for the 22nd. I laughed a lot, too.
    On a Gundam Wing story, I got these jewels:
    And, from the very lady whose story (Incalculable) inspired my Inconceivable:
    Yeah, I blushed and had a squee-fest. And then later reviews on later chapters had me thrilled. I, uh, had one of the characters use "sword-sticking" as a reference for sex *cough* and set myself and every reviewer in stitches.
    And then this brings me to the reviews on my original works that have made me squee. *cough* I should probably admit that I seriously adore the reviews I get on The Were King's Heir and its accompanying ficlets. Especially when I get praise from people I know, respect and perhaps even have a rapport with already.
    pittwitch 2013-03-13 id # 3000204490 Good job with the prompts! I find this to be interesting and rather easy to fall into as an excerpt from your other story. The ending was great foreshadowing of ominous things yet to be.

    I still find parenthetical asides to be highly distracting, though. Not so distracting as to shudder in horror, but distracting from the story itself.

    Thanks for sharing,
    Pw
    BronxWench 2013-03-13 id # 3000204495 I will confess to not having read the parent story, mostly due to lack of time, but I confess myself duly intrigued now.

    This was a wonderful snippet, a lovely little glimpse into your world, and you make it feel very natural and approachable. The use of the prompt words was very imaginative, and I'm even more intrigued by the potential tie-in. Feidreva 2013-03-19 id # 3000204804 I love this flash fic! Imagining the Sire in a decorating spree is priceless. I thought he were the kind to be collected and stern, but this...made me see him in a different way. (And Caimus is always so cute!) I'd love to read more of these short fics. I know all three of the above reviewers, in one way or another, and I was flattered as can be to get such reviews from them. Thoughtful, concise, and showing what they liked or disliked. PW's had me grinning because it told me good and bad points, what I was doing well and what could maybe be improved on. BW's had me dancing in my seat (and I just can't dance) because she was coming in as a first-time reader of the series, period, and it drew her in and made her curious. Fei's - well, Fei's a friend and has been one of my staunch supporters *bows to Fei* and so for her to tell me that she now sees the Sire in a different light...well, what greater compliment is there?
    On the main story line, most of the reviewers have commented on how they love Caimus, the Sire, and Jaden - and I take that as a major compliment, as they're my creations. There was also one reviewer who commented that she (I think?) doesn't usually read stories that don't have romance, but that she likes TWKH so far. Since it's outside what she'd normally read, I take that as high praise.
    As a whole, what makes me really enthuse about reviews is when people tell me what they like or dislike and why, and, if possible, make suggestions on how to improve it. And, okay, so I'm a sucker for people who tell me things like, "I was laughing so hard I fell of (the bed, the chair, the couch)! And then So-and-So came in and -" ... I kid you not, I once had a reviewer tell me that a relative walked into her room and asked her why she was laughing; of course she had no good way to answer that.... Maybe it's horrible of me, but I think it's neat that I can make people laugh so hard that they have to answer (or avoid answering) awkward questions. It's cool that I can make them lose that much self-control when they're wrapped up in my stories. To me, it means I'm doing a good job - and isn't that what we all want to do?
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    Cuzosu reacted to RogueMudblood in Funny Typos   
    from a published news article:
    Hyuk!
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    Cuzosu reacted to LoveLostFound in "fictional character I just fell in love with"game   
    Sesshomaru from Inuyasha. Do I really need to say why. Sighing right now thinking about him
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    Cuzosu reacted to ShadowsPale in "fictional character I just fell in love with"game   
    Riddick. Got to love a badass with a hidden heart.
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    Cuzosu reacted to kagome26isawsome in "fictional character I just fell in love with"game   
    Sebastian from black butler XD
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from SillySilenia in Back history   
    Yup. Nothing like growing up around people who make you think, "I should have said that!" after the fact to make your mind quick on the retort. Of course, it does make for better dialogue.
    Better back story, however, takes yet more practice. Or a family/personal tendency for pouncing on stories. I've read some back stories on characters that I found...lacking. I'll be kind and leave it at that.
    Ah, see, I knew we got along for a reason! (Or more than one. )
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from SillySilenia in Back history   
    "Natural" responses are a boon I am forever thankful for.
    Hm...I hadn't considered it from that angle before. My own reasons are to explore the depths of whatever character(s) I am writing. Emotionally more than physically.
    I think each character has a different rapport with his/hers/its respective creator/manipulator. Most of the ones I deal with either try to bribe me, persuade me to join them in ganging up on another unfortunate character, or (as my group from The Were King's Heir do) playfully pounce on me to give me significant looks and/or snarl at me.
    Could be, could be....
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    Cuzosu reacted to SillySilenia in Back history   
    I wish I could like that post more than once.
    Yeah, or complete, furious rage. Anger can result in sarcasm. Rage so bad a character is willing to torture another character to death is usually not a fitting moment for a dry remark. Most of those who can't tell the difference between sarcasm and whining are also those who can't tell the difference between descriptive and purple prose or between witty and boring. (-cough- Hey, those sound like key-characteristics of Sue-writers... how surprising-cough-)
    Aw, thanks for the compliment.
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from SillySilenia in Back history   
    *bows* Tongue in cheek. I write some really dry and/or snide bits off the top of my head sometimes. This makes me no less glad that you enjoyed it, though.
    Yes, it's a bit much when a writer misjudges the situation and throws snark in where there ought to be sorrow or some other such emotion. And anyone who can't tell the difference between sarcasm and whining needs a lesson in writing. Author's circle, anyone?
    Great minds think alike.
    Touche.
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    Cuzosu reacted to SillySilenia in Back history   
    You had me smirk at that bit of dialogue, Cuzosu.
    I agree, sarcasm and snark are wonderful in almost any circumstances. Pity that there are some people out there who apparently never got the key-word: almost. (That, and people who confuse 'sarcasm' with 'whine').
    I like it as a writer, because I know it gives my characters backstories and a past without me having to info-dump. I like it as a reader, because it means someone actually thought about their story and what way they want to write it - means they've put in effort.
    Ah... but is wisdom not exactly that anyway? Paying heed to life's lessons, I mean.
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from SillySilenia in Back history   
    Yes. I fully agree. And sarcasm and snark are wonderful in almost any circumstances.
    "I'm too young to die in jail!"
    "I'm too old to listen to whiners."
    "But we're stuck here!"
    "No...but if you don't stop whining, I'll leave you here. It takes two to tango, but only one to run."
    "Jeez, Char. B, that's a bit harsh, don't you think?"
    "Doubtful. Char. C's twittering has me looking around for birds."
    "And the rest of us?"
    "Let's get the flock out of here."
    Hints and layered meanings are a favorite of mine, too. And, like you, I love works that make people reread to catch all the meanings--both as a writer and as a reader.
    Exactly.
    Yes. Words to the wise...or at least, those wise enough to pay heed, hm?
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from BronxWench in Back history   
    Yes. I fully agree. And sarcasm and snark are wonderful in almost any circumstances.
    "I'm too young to die in jail!"
    "I'm too old to listen to whiners."
    "But we're stuck here!"
    "No...but if you don't stop whining, I'll leave you here. It takes two to tango, but only one to run."
    "Jeez, Char. B, that's a bit harsh, don't you think?"
    "Doubtful. Char. C's twittering has me looking around for birds."
    "And the rest of us?"
    "Let's get the flock out of here."
    Hints and layered meanings are a favorite of mine, too. And, like you, I love works that make people reread to catch all the meanings--both as a writer and as a reader.
    Exactly.
    Yes. Words to the wise...or at least, those wise enough to pay heed, hm?
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    Cuzosu reacted to SillySilenia in Back history   
    Exactly. If for some reason you have to introduce a skill not long before the skill has to be used, it's better to not do it by having the skill-possessing character mention it out of the blue. (There are exceptions, of course. Can be humorous if done well, especially if followed up by a deadpan snarker along the lines of 'anything else you should have told us about before?', but it's just as easy to do it wrong.)
    Perhaps my favorite way is dropping some small hints here-and-there a bit earlier, simple sentences that don't necessarily attract attention but that do hint at the skill (at the very least, hint at it in hindsight), however, that's not always possible - especially when earlier chapters/books/episodes/cartoons/name-media-form-here have already been released.
    When not possible, I agree that the ways you mentioned would work very well. Or have it be a skill closely linked to one the readers already know the character possesses. (Say, you have a character that has a lot of experience with potions. It wouldn't be much of an issue to reveal they also have knowledge about poisons. Or, like you said, picking pockets and picking locks.)
    Though basically, I guess this all comes down to, "before you tie your plot into a nice pretzel-shape, at least have a clue how to get it straight again". It's difficult to pull something off as anything else than an Ass Pull when it is an Ass Pull. (Also, I apologize for using tvtropes terminology. )
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from Kurahieiritr in Back history   
    A valid point, Silenia. Timing and phrasing are very important when introducing skills. If the skill is going to be used shortly, the best three options (in my opinion) are:
    to have another character present who already knows about said skill. This character would, at the appropriate time, presumably say something like, "Hey, you still practice that like you used to?" flashbacks. Show a scene where the character was using the skill and so would think of it and act without prompting. to have the main character (or another character, if you'd rather) see the skill being practiced in secret. This person can then bring it up as needed. Of course, there's always the option of having the person seen/caught using a different skill that can lead to being asked about the skill needed.
    "So, Char. B. I saw you picking pockets the other day. You, uh...pick locks, too, by any chance?"
    Or, for that matter, wearing something that could be considered a tell-tale sign.
    "Char. A, you wear arm guards. Do you use knives or am I lucky enough to be on the run with an archer who can pick our enemies off at a distance?"
    "Char. C, you've got calluses like a sword master. If I steal a sword, would you fight with it?"
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    Cuzosu reacted to SillySilenia in Back history   
    I agree with you there, Cuzosu. I also prefer only having the history of a character explained as it comes up, or as it is important, etc. However, it takes skill to do that well - it can easily come across as handwaving or cheating or a cop-out if a writer suddenly reveals to the readers that, because of this or that, Character knows a handy skill just at the appropriate time for that to be revealed.
    "Nah, we're not going to rot in this dungeon forever, Char. A. Did I never tell you that I, Char. B, am a lock-picking expert because of my time spent with the Thieves' Guild? What do you mean, "Did you spend time with the Thieves' Guild? I never knew that!"?"
    Three chapters later,
    "Gimme that bow, Char B. I know he's still [incredible distance] away, but I've hit targets from further than that! You... you didn't know? Oh, right... before your time. Still got the skill, though. Practice daily. Yes, you've never seen me - I practice stealth and marksmanship at the same time."
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    Cuzosu got a reaction from Kurahieiritr in Back history   
    The main thing I try to remember about back story on characters is that, apart from the main characters, I'm probably never going to know their entire past. I don't want to. I have enough details floating around in my head; I don't need that many more to add to my problems.
    Also, leaving some details unknown allows for "treats" to give to the readers later, kind of like throwing a dog a bone. Besides, mysterious characters are often a lure, too.
    The style I like most, as a reader and as a writer, is to only explain the history of a given character as it comes up...except in special cases, such as when using foreshadowing, where there's typically a flashback or a dream to hint at what lies ahead.
    As a writer, I don't like putting all the info on any character's past into only the first few chapters; it's an info dump...and most readers won't remember at least a good portion of the information.
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