Guest Edyrn Posted January 9 Report Posted January 9 Hello and Happy New Year to you. The holidays and end of year celebrations finally passed, I was able to take the time to enjoy this new chapter. I really enjoyed it a lot, so I hope you wouldn't mind my questions and remarks. -In the chapter you refer to other actors who have filmed with Lara, but you don't give the number or details on the scenes. -The convention and glory hole part is excellent, almost too short in my point of view, with "only" 20 winners, Lara made "one mouthful" of it. XD But I find that there is a lack of description of her pleasure or the reasons for it, is it just that she is responding to her mental conditioning of the last few months? Or is she reacting with joy to all the "love" that her fans give her? I really liked the idea of the adult cartoon about her adventures, too bad we never see it, it would definitely be better than the nasty thing released on Netflix ^^ why Hillory to replace the butler Winston? You showed well in the first chapters how Winston had changed towards Lara, keeping him in Sarah's service was not possible? The end of the chapter is interesting, when Sarah tells him that everything was her idea; but when Lara tries to justify herself why no mention of the prison and the abuse suffered there? The trauma seems much more important in the "obedience" she has shown since? Even if I am well aware that it made the event more complicated since this part of the story was hidden from Sam. For the rest, isn't it a bit strange to do the birthday event with sex and the members of the charity since Lara doesn't know that they are the ones taking advantage of her in the game room? For the birthday gangbang, I suggest that only the women use their belts during the afternoon, and that at the end all the men offer her a bukkake, in addition to this radical new experience, it would make a superb new tableau, Lara posing proudly next to her cake. I really like your ideas on upcoming events, with a real preference for the retirement of a professor. Quote
CrossroadsMk2 Posted January 10 Author Report Posted January 10 Hi Edyrn, unfortunately I'm already 2/3 through writing the next chapter, so it's too late to change to just women. Lara not knowing it's the charity members using her in the playroom is addressed at the start of the next chapter (along with more gaslighting by Sam and Sarah, to make it seem like they were doing her a favour). Changing from Winston to Hillary is a strategic move on Sarah's part. Winston is Lara's last anchor to her former life. Even with his changed opinion towards Lara, she'll still be aware of his disapproval. Hillary, in addition to being completely loyal to Sarah, will support Lara's new lifestyle. Over the coming e, he'll make himself indispensable to Lara and ensure she stays on the right course. The choice is also a nod to the butler from the original Angelina Jolie Tomb Raider movies (and poor old Winston is getting old and would probably need to retire soon anyway). The gloryhole fan events are going to be a weekly thing, hence limiting numbers. Also, I wasn't chasing numbers for that scene, because I new bigger events were scheduled for later. I wasn't aware I wasn't describing Lara's enjoyment enough. I'll make a more conscious effort to do so - I think I got focused on moving the plot forward. As for the lack of mention of the Siberian torture, I think Lara wouldn't want to think about it, because of how guilty she feels about betraying Jonah, and how much it crushed her self-confidence being so easily defeated by the Trinity soldiers. Quote
Guest Edyrn Posted January 10 Report Posted January 10 Thank you very much for your replies, sorry for not commenting sooner. Quote
Guest Edyrn Posted January 10 Report Posted January 10 18 minutes ago, Guest Edyrn said: Thank you very much for your replies, sorry for not commenting sooner. Quote
CrossroadsMk2 Posted January 10 Author Report Posted January 10 Hi Edyrn, no need to apologise. Thanks for taking the time to read! Quote
Guest Ibex Posted January 10 Report Posted January 10 Hey, can’t wait till the next chapter comes out, definitely going to be a critical moment for Lara. Also really like your lesbian buissness woman with a foot fetish event idea for later on, hot! Quote
CrossroadsMk2 Posted January 11 Author Report Posted January 11 Hi Ibex, thanks for reading and commenting. Yeah, the next chapter is going to be crucial for explaining Lara's transformation from reluctant participant to insatiable slut. Quote
CrossroadsMk2 Posted yesterday at 06:42 PM Author Report Posted yesterday at 06:42 PM Hi everyone, sorry for the lack of updates recently - my personal life has been a bit hectic at the moment. The next chapter is finished and I'm in the process of proofreading it (in between doing other stuff). I'm going to try and make a push over the next couple of days to finish the proofreading and get it posted. Thanks for your patience. Quote
Guest LHunt Posted 9 hours ago Report Posted 9 hours ago Hey CrossroadsMk2, No problem. Take care of family before all else...hope the wife and twins are all doing well. Lead The Way! Quote
CrossroadsMk2 Posted 5 hours ago Author Report Posted 5 hours ago Hi everyone, Chapter 22 has posted. It's another long one, because there was a lot of plot stuff I wanted to cover, to explain the changes to Lara's personality. I hope you enjoy reading it. Hi LHunt, thanks for the good wishes. My wife is doing fine - twins not here yet, but the obstetrician says they'll be coming sometime in the next week. So life's about to get a lot more complicated! Quote
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