Review responses for "Multiversity" [Gravity Falls]

[GeorgeGlass]

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From all_possible_worlds on August 29, 2017

*chapter 5 review, spoilers up to that point*

I know I usually say you get every character right, but this time I do have to protest!

How are you so sure, so convinced, so absolutely certain... that in so many years of cons, flimflams, and foul dealings, Grunckle Stan has never been a pimp?!

 

Because I just can't imagine Stan ever using the phrase "upside your head" with a straight face.

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Heh, nah, honestly just pulling your leg. The bit about the Grunckle feeling uncomfortable at what he was saying about the kids was pretty good foreshadowing for his eventual acquiescence on the matter, and I can both see that as one the few moral lines he won't quite cross, as well as the twins happiness being among the few things Stan will put above money.

That's part of why I like writing Stan.

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The bit about "Dipper is Dipper" was also excellently planted just for this sort of occasion, and the "lesson" Dipper learns is disturbing, but believable (and the corollary, that they still care for each other much more that they are into each other, remains heartwarming).

After Dipper getting tossed into what seemed like a good situation that turned bad (in the shotaverse), I wanted Dipper to next be in a situation that seems bad but turns out to have a bright side.

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The sex was funny (Mabel is Mabel in any universe too, puns and all), and hot, as well as uncomfortable, and I haven't untangled that particular mix.

Hey, I don't expect everyone to like it. Although this story contains something for everyone (well, almost everyone, but we'll deal with that later), it also probably contains at least one thing that a given reader won't like.

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For something that caters to a fetish failing so far from my own repertoire, I couldn't have asked for it to go any better.

Thanks! And don't worry -- we're all done with incest. On to even weirder stuff!

[nukerat]

too bad this one is not exactly Monster falls AU which i found quite interesting.

and Pacifica with her bad fortune again, oops…

one thing i don’t understand, what has Sigmund Freud to do with this?

[GeorgeGlass]

Wendy is dating a burly manotaur with a red beard, and Wendy’s father is a burly man with a red beard, so Squatchie is commenting that Freud was right about girls wanting to marry their fathers.

[nukerat]

6 hours ago, GeorgeGlass said:

Wendy is dating a burly manotaur with a red beard, and Wendy’s father is a burly man with a red beard, so Squatchie is commenting that Freud was right about girls wanting to marry their fathers.

lol ok then

[GeorgeGlass]

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From all_possible_worlds on September 01, 2017
 

*monstrous spoilers for Chapter 6 ahead*

Darling it's better
Down where it's wetter
Take it from me

I understand why there is no reciprocal oral sex from Dipper's side in this story, given the plot. But at the same time, I feel deprived of the opportunity of humming "under the sea" all through any such a scene

'kay.

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Also, me reading this chapter: "Why does she have a French accent, and not Spanish like Mermando? (other than a 'Little Mermaid' joke) Oh, that's why! School as in boarding school or as in school of fish? Oh, I see!"

My friend and co-creator of this story, Eh Steve, came up with Mermadeline, and he and I worked out these bits to explain her accent. Who says exposition can’t be fun?

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I practically expected the next line to read "And, yes, [Dexter], I can read your mind" after that point. Kudos.

Thanks!

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Loved the different monster-romantic-interests you gave everyone, from the fact that a red-bearded manotaur counts as an indication that Wendy has daddy-issues, to Robbie dating a yokai,

Specifically, a yuki-onna (snow woman). I've had a bit of a thing for them ever since I watched Rosario + Vampire. Mizore the snow-girl is hot.

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to Thomson's ambiguously-existent date,

I'm going to have to remember “ambiguously-existent.” Nice.

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to the running gag about Pacifica and tentacle porn. At this rate, you better deliver on that last one at some point!

We'll see.

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I wonder if there is any particular significance to the fact that many of these single-fetish universes seem to only apply to teens, not to the adults. I guess all of them have weird consequences once reproduction enters the scene.

That's really the only reason.

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The "that's a little creepy" trio of lines are especially true to character, for both twins.

Thanks again!

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So, from very early on, this chapter hinted to be the reverse of Wendip, in that Mermadeline was way more into Dipper than the other way around. Even then, seeing Dipper swim to the middle of the lake with her was a bit unsettling, because, well, not to be specieist, but... mermaid, them folk drown people. Turns out is the other kind of mermaid, the sell your soul for a pair of legs to be with your guy kind, where is Ursula when you need her? But yeah, Dipper is right, scary kind of responsibility there!

If Ursula were involved, the accent question would be moot.

Thanks for the review!

 

[nukerat]

ok this chapter is too much, from candy’s “happy International women day” to...eh.

but one thing i must point out: Giffany’s hair is actually IDE cable used by old hard-disks.

Edited September 8, 2017 by nukerat

[GeorgeGlass]

29 minutes ago, nukerat said:

ok this chapter is too much, from candy’s “happy International women day” to...eh.

Not sure how you mean that.

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but one thing i must point out: Giffany’s hair is actually IDE cable used by old hard-disks.

This isn’t Giffany. Giffany has pink hair that is tied with IDE cable; this character has blue hair that is tied with USB cable.

[nukerat]

1 hour ago, GeorgeGlass said:

Not sure how you mean that

reference from the deadpool movie

1 hour ago, GeorgeGlass said:

This isn’t Giffany. Giffany has pink hair that is tied with IDE cable; this character has blue hair that is tied with USB cable.

looks like i jumped to the conclusion lol

[Guest ChromaPhrenia]

Has it ended when Aphrodite send Dipper home? Or is there new chapters waiting to be revealed?

[GeorgeGlass]

There are going to be three more chapters; I’ve just been in a bit of a slump regarding that story. I made some progress on it today, ,though.

[Guest Hazendrome]

On Fri Feb 02 2018 at 10:08 AM, GeorgeGlass said:

There are going to be three more chapters; I’ve just been in a bit of a slump regarding that story. I made some progress on it today, ,though.

Chapter 9 pls 

[GeorgeGlass]

11 hours ago, Guest Hazendrome said:

Chapter 9 pls 

It’s in the works, but it’s slow going because I don’t get to use most of the canon characters in this chapter. I have to create a lot of new ones.

[nukerat]

• On 3/22/2018 at 10:51 AM, GeorgeGlass said:

  • It’s in the works, but it’s slow going because I don’t get to use most of the canon characters in this chapter. I have to create a lot of new ones.

can’t wait for an update~

Edited March 23, 2018 by nukerat

[Guest Star wars player 1]

Hi it's me, I found the page for your reviews on your 'Multiversy' story and I decided to leave a comment here since I've been a little busy this week, so when you have the time to reply to this comment,  I will not be able to reply as soon as I usually do,  anyway I also wanted to say that I read your story earlier this week , particularly the 8th chapter, and I must say, it's a great chapter, lots of unexpected things in it, and the whole story is great as well, anyway hope you're doing well and hope to hear from you again,  oh p.s., When you have the time to reply to this comment, you should check the page for the reviews of your 'Hot Yoga' story, I've been leaving a few comments over the past few days, so when you have time maybe you can reply to my comments on that page, but the decision to reply to my comments is yours to make, anyway, I hope you're doing well and hope you have a nice rest of the day, bye and good luck with your stories Mr.Glass

[GeorgeGlass]

Glad you’re enjoying “Multiversity.” I’ve been a bit stuck on that one since chapter 8, but I recently had a discussion with my friend and collaborator Eh Steve that I think will help me with the next couple of chapters.

[GeorgeGlass]

 

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From DebbieCync on May 12, 2018

Great story, a nice setup with a satisfying ending.

 

Thank you! It’s not actually over, though; it’s just taking me a while to write the next chapter. 

 

[GeorgeGlass]

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From nukerat on July 03, 2018

is there gonna be a part two with Tiffany?

 

Oh, you know there is. Dipper ain’t done with her yet.  

[GeorgeGlass]

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From Fairy-Slayer on July 13, 2018

Sorry for not keeping up on as much of your stories as I'd like, and more so for not giving them the full thoughtful treatment they deserve. 

 

Not at all. I'm happy to get any length of review from you, at any time. 

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However, after several months I finally caught up on "Multiversity" today and I love how it's playing out, especially how Dipper keeps learning a key piece of knowledge about himself – his own universe's self – each step of the way.

Oh, no, I've accidentally written a "journey of self-discovery" story, just like I inadvertently wrote a "coming of age" story with "Quiet." I might as well just move to Europe and make indie movies.

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Of course, the deliciously detailed action is pretty lovely too, but the mini-plots for each world and the tension are all top-notch; there are always nice tidbits that foreshadow the little twists very nicely too. Of course, half the time when something makes me raise an eyebrow it turns out not to be a twist at all (like a certain meeting Dipper overheard in chapter 4), but the ones that do appear are very natural for the timelines. Heh, so even in the latest one (9) I already see some potential for a twist, but with the lesson he's learned there it may or may not pan out.

Once you read chapter 10, I'll be interested to find out what twist you might have been expecting.

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Anyway, thanks for continuing to write and share so much great stuff. Take care.

Thank you, and you too!

[GeorgeGlass]

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From nategoat on August 10, 2018

Weird fic but I am not going to lie, i love it. 

 

Hey, weird is what Gravity Falls is all about. Glad you like the story!

[Guest Dexter]

So what is this story exactly building up to? I would assume it’s for Dipper to realize some stuff about himself, but then to what end? The first chapter opens after Mansion Mistery Noir, with Dipper feeling uncertain about his feelings for Pacifica. So I would assume this is building up to Dipper visiting all these girls, going through all these situations and experiences and ending up with Pacifica after he realizes whatever lesson he must learn from aphrodite? Or something else? I don’t know, though I do say I would like to eventually see Pacifica and Dipper doing it too. He’s done with the other girls so it’s a given at this point. 

[GeorgeGlass]

There are just two chapters left to go, so you’ll find out the answers to all of those questions pretty soon. Stay tuned!

[nukerat]

only two chapters left? we won’t see a dipperXpacifica moment?

[GeorgeGlass]

4 hours ago, nukerat said:

only two chapters left? we won’t see a dipperXpacifica moment?

Now, I didn’t say that...

[Guest Dexter]

Questions aside, i’d like to say though that I really enjoy your story. You manage to somehow still keep the characters in tune with the characterization in the show despite the NSFW and well, the sex.  I could actually see your version of aphrodite appearing on it. This chain-smoking past-her-prime tired greek godess. I would also imagine Stan would try to hit on her. But really, great sex scenes while keeping the humor of the show? If I could rate it, I would give you five stars. I hope you write more Gravity Falls stuff down the line, but I am happy with what we got thus far. 

[GeorgeGlass]

On 8/17/2018 at 10:26 PM, Guest Dexter said:

Questions aside, i’d like to say though that I really enjoy your story. You manage to somehow still keep the characters in tune with the characterization in the show despite the NSFW and well, the sex. 

Thank you! My foremost goal is always to be true to the characters.

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I could actually see your version of aphrodite appearing on it. This chain-smoking past-her-prime tired greek godess. I would also imagine Stan would try to hit on her.

Oh, he totally would. And her speech pattern is somewhat based on his.

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But really, great sex scenes while keeping the humor of the show? If I could rate it, I would give you five stars. I hope you write more Gravity Falls stuff down the line, but I am happy with what we got thus far.

Thank you!

I have just sent chapter 10 off to beta, so it should be ready soon!