Rexfan12345 Posted July 7, 2016 Report Share Posted July 7, 2016 Read the latest Omniharem chapter, and it was a good read. It did it's job, and I look forward to when you're able to make and upload the next one. As for ideas and suggestions, I'd still like to offer up the one I made a while back in a review on one of the chapters. Namely, that one of the alien girls that joins the harem (preferably Looma, but I'm not picky) adopts a nudist/exhibitionist lifestyle while living in Ben's home, namely because her culture says for her to do so after mating with her chosen lover. She can still put on clothes if she leaves the house, but once back in, they immediately come off, and she has to be always at the ready for when Ben's raring to go. Sound good? Just a suggestion, but I'd like to see this if at all possible. really cool idea, would be hot to see her in a apron naked or something. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snake_King Posted July 7, 2016 Report Share Posted July 7, 2016 really cool idea, would be hot to see her in a apron naked or something. That it would. I've kind of had this fantasy in the back of my mind where a girl or woman has sex with her lover and afterwards stops wearing clothes. It's a relatively minor one, but still a bit of fun. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 7, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2016 I like the idea of one, or a few, in particular being exhibitionists who are far more overt about their escapades and make it a point to be ready and randy at any moment but they're all going to become degrees of nudists. Julie imports fine silk kimonos for them to wear when answering the door but otherwise they will be wearing sexy lingerie or in the buff when inactive. I'm leaning towards either Emily or Molly for the next addition. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Edward Posted July 7, 2016 Report Share Posted July 7, 2016 The newest chapter was really hot! The blowjob scene was amazing. I like the use of sentences like "Ready to be stuffed like a doughnut?" and "Fill me with your spunk, Ben! Paint my bowels white with your jizz as a mark of your conquest". They are over the top, but when used in moderation they are fun. It would be possible that at some point one of the girls gives Ben a rimjob? It' a big turn on for me when girls eat man's ass, but I understand if it's not your thing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 7, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2016 I am fairly indifferent and it's not stated, but Julie totally rimmed out Gwen off screen when she was prepping her. Nothing is off the table for me but I didn't depict it because I know it's an off putting kink for some. I might sneak it in there later on and see what the reaction is but it will add a tag. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snake_King Posted July 7, 2016 Report Share Posted July 7, 2016 I like the idea of one, or a few, in particular being exhibitionists who are far more overt about their escapades and make it a point to be ready and randy at any moment but they're all going to become degrees of nudists. Julie imports fine silk kimonos for them to wear when answering the door but otherwise they will be wearing sexy lingerie or in the buff when inactive. I'm leaning towards either Emily or Molly for the next addition. I understand, as that does make sense when I think about it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 17, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2016 Naruko's Pact is up, the fic writ in response to the Futa!Naruko challange. At 12.5 thousand words it may be the longest chapter I have written. Snake_King helped a great deal in the planning phase and as an editor, which is why I am able to get it out in a week of converted effort instead of months. How that translates into quality, we'll find out but here it is... please read, review and enjoy. http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600105983 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest NorthSouthGorem Posted July 19, 2016 Report Share Posted July 19, 2016 Naruko's Pact is up, the fic writ in response to the Futa!Naruko challange. At 12.5 thousand words it may be the longest chapter I have written. Snake_King helped a great deal in the planning phase and as an editor, which is why I am able to get it out in a week of converted effort instead of months. How that translates into quality, we'll find out but here it is... please read, review and enjoy. http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600105983 My basic initial reaction: FUCK. YES. There are far too few good Naruto fics nowadays without Yaoi or NTR in them. Normally I'm a bit leery of Modern AUs for Naruto, but having such a long first chapter be devoted to Hinata gets you ALL the points from me. Keep it up! As for criticisms, the way you described Hinata's tits made them sound kinda...saggy, at certain points. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snake_King Posted July 19, 2016 Report Share Posted July 19, 2016 My basic initial reaction: FUCK. YES. There are far too few good Naruto fics nowadays without Yaoi or NTR in them. Normally I'm a bit leery of Modern AUs for Naruto, but having such a long first chapter be devoted to Hinata gets you ALL the points from me. Keep it up! As for criticisms, the way you described Hinata's tits made them sound kinda...saggy, at certain points. I'm not too fond of Yaoi or NTR myself, and I especially hate NTR. Glad you liked the chapter. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 20, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 20, 2016 I don't really like modern AUs either, they seem kind of pointless and the setting is usually the best part. I don't really read yaoi except for the occasional futa on male/futa as part of a longer story or an overeager orgy including one. I don't mind NTR (if it means what I think it does) but the amount of emphasis its been recieving lately is kind of disturbing. As for the saggy tits, I really don't know, guess I should throw in more words like full formed, well rounded, firm and womanly. Thanks for the praise. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rexfan12345 Posted July 20, 2016 Report Share Posted July 20, 2016 Really liked your Naruto story, really sexy. Also, how's the Ben 10 story coming a long? If you need any more ideas let me know. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 20, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 20, 2016 Halfway done with the next chapter. It's proving to be a some difficult- or at least atypical encounter due to the nature of the character involved. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thebooblover Posted July 20, 2016 Report Share Posted July 20, 2016 (edited) Halfway done with the next chapter. It's proving to be a some difficult- or at least atypical encounter due to the nature of the character involved. Hey Praetor, I wanted to know if you read those ideas I left for the next L&PD chapters. If you did, what did you think of them? Edited July 20, 2016 by thebooblover Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 20, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 20, 2016 They're solid. I already have something else in mind leading up to Queen Clarion that I am working with but the idea for the winter fairies can be used. I have no idea what I am going to do with Glimmer though and embarrassingly enough, this is the first time I am even really noticing her. Has she always been on the list? Also, did you have any elaborations in mind at all for the straight shota ideas? Anyways, the next chapter for L&PD has been restructured, I just need to final it out. Also, I know futa isn't your thing, but did you read the Naruko fic? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thebooblover Posted July 20, 2016 Report Share Posted July 20, 2016 They're solid. I already have something else in mind leading up to Queen Clarion that I am working with but the idea for the winter fairies can be used. I have no idea what I am going to do with Glimmer though and embarrassingly enough, this is the first time I am even really noticing her. Has she always been on the list? Also, did you have any elaborations in mind at all for the straight shota ideas? Anyways, the next chapter for L&PD has been restructured, I just need to final it out. Also, I know futa isn't your thing, but did you read the Naruko fic? Yes she was. As a matter of fact, I was thinking on some elaborations for the straight shota ideas. I see what I can come up with and then I write it on the thread. No, I didn't read it. Would you like me to? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 20, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 20, 2016 I think I was mixing her up with Gliss in my head. Anyways, not unless you want to read it. I was just curious. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rexfan12345 Posted July 21, 2016 Report Share Posted July 21, 2016 Okay, also if you need help with some characters, Ben 10 wiki is always handy. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fan Posted July 26, 2016 Report Share Posted July 26, 2016 Hey praetor fan of your work. Listen, I saw that Danny phantom challenge booblover posted and I have an idea for how the story can begin. Things have changed in the four years after the show ended. Danny didn't reveal his identit to the world, but he did to his parents. Tucker and his family moved away from amity after Tucker lost a re election campaign and his parents were offered a job. Sam's grandmother died of natural causes and left her access to all the family funds. She quickly got a home of her own away from her controlling parents. In a twist it turns ou vlad after his apparent death, left all his money to Danny, making him rich, but he was able to keep his head.Another change is that his father jack, died. He won a trip to take a tour of a famous fudge factory. But an accident there resulted in his death. We join Danny as he wakes up on his 18th birthday. Unfortunately, his sister and mother seem to forget due to work and college respectively. Danny's day doesn't improve as he is picked on by dash, beaten up, wrongly accused of starting a fight, and given detention. Afterwards his day lightens up on his date with Sam. However the restaurant is attacked by the lunch lady and the romantic mood is ruined. If that wasn't bad enough sam's parents show up and try to drag her home, blaming Danny for the destruction due to their unnecessary grudge. Frustrated, Danny goes home and falls asleep wishing he could get what he wanted as life always seems to mess with him. As he falls asleep Desiree appears and begins to grant Danny's wish. She reads his mind finding his love for Sam as well as huskily for various pornstars. She then works her magic, warping reality. Danny wakes up feeling strange and goes to the bathroom thinking it might have been his dinner last night. Danny is shocked to find his dick is now it's monstrous length. Danny goes downstairs to find his mom and sister gone, ghost convention and college respectively. Danny then gets s call from Sam saying she wants to meet up. Danny goes over to her apartment where she seduces him and they proceed to have sex. Afterwards Sam convinced Danny that they need another girl because she couldn't keep up with Danny the night before. With some minor reluctance, Danny agrees Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 27, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 27, 2016 Thank you for the support. It's a good start but my biggest issue is that his dad's unfortunate death means he should be a ghost during this fic and I am simply not comedic enough an author to make this as funny as it should be. I also need to actually watch the show. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fan Posted July 27, 2016 Report Share Posted July 27, 2016 Well, that's what YouTube Hulu and the Internet is for. If it helps I can give you a rundown about each character shown if that will help. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rexfan12345 Posted July 27, 2016 Report Share Posted July 27, 2016 How's the the Ben 10: Omniharem fix coming along? Sorry for asking so much. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted July 27, 2016 Author Report Share Posted July 27, 2016 It's not that I don't have the means, I have a Hulu, which is also how I do research for Omniverse although the Ben 10 wiki I am finding is as effective and quicker besides. It's a time thing, I don't even have enough to write the stories I have currently ongoing on top of prewriting for others and research. I am halfway done with the next chapter for Omniharem. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Fan Posted July 27, 2016 Report Share Posted July 27, 2016 Understandable. Looking forward to future stories and updates Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rexfan12345 Posted August 5, 2016 Report Share Posted August 5, 2016 How's it going with Omniharem? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Praetor Posted August 6, 2016 Author Report Share Posted August 6, 2016 Haven't even touched it. Still about halfway done with the next chapter. Been extremely busy and when I have been able to write at all it has been for other projects. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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