Praetor's Discussion Thread

[Praetor]

Chapter 2 of Omniharem is up. Wow, that was quick. Almost the same length in a seventh of the time. Normally I'd dilly dally on it, reading and rereading it over and over again for weeks while making extremely minute edits but I'm going out on a limb with this one to see what happens. It certainly is one of my sloppier works, like... in universe, a lot of body fluids being shared. Please read and review. http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095130&chapter=2

[Rexfan12345]

Chapter 2 of Omniharem is up. Wow, that was quick. Almost the same length in a seventh of the time. Normally I'd dilly dally on it, reading and rereading it over and over again for weeks while making extremely minute edits but I'm going out on a limb with this one to see what happens. It certainly is one of my sloppier works, like... in universe, a lot of body fluids being shared. Please read and review. http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095130&chapter=2

Just read it and have to say you did a great job with Julie and loved the milk parts.

[Guest Edward]

That was great!

But you use "Lucie" instead of "Julie" several times.

[Praetor]

Dang dyslexia, the fact that there is a Lucy and a Julie in this harem is going to get really confusing later on. Fixed it, now who's next? Ideas or suggestions please.

[Rexfan12345]

Dang dyslexia, the fact that there is a Lucy and a Julie in this harem is going to get really confusing later on. Fixed it, now who's next? Ideas or suggestions please.

Here is one have Attea and Looma next, they arrive at Ben's place and wants him to show them all the amazing things Bellwood has to offer, (Mr. Smoothy, Things in Undertown, and such) they then want to go to Ben's place and have some 'fun'.

What do you think? Also Ben 10 has an archive if you want to add this story there.

Edited June 7, 2016 by Rexfan12345

[Praetor]

I think that's a fine idea but I want to hold off on Attea and Looma for just a moment since that threesome promises to be a spectacle and I want to build towards it a little more. I feel like that'd be double dipping, they really should consolidate the categories especially now that Omniverse merges the ages of Ben 10. I also want to use some of Lunarsilver's ideas, with Gwen largely (at first) calling the shots on organizing the harem and getting them stylized dog collars.

[Rexfan12345]

I think that's a fine idea but I want to hold off on Attea and Looma for just a moment since that threesome promises to be a spectacle and I want to build towards it a little more. I feel like that'd be double dipping, they really should consolidate the categories especially now that Omniverse merges the ages of Ben 10. I also want to use some of Lunarsilver's ideas, with Gwen largely (at first) calling the shots on organizing the harem and getting them stylized dog collars.

Sounds like a great idea and I do like Lunarsilver's idea as well with the collars, how about Lucy? Love to see what you do with her.

[Praetor]

Chapter 3 of Omniharem is up. The lines 'reduced to a quivering mass of jelly by her orgasm' and 'shakes like a spinning blob of warm clay' came to mind when you asked how Lucy sounded so beware. Very little build up because Gwen set it up behind the scenes. I wanted to use a scenic, exotic setting because the penthouse is going to get really old fast if I use it every time, and crowded as the harem expands. So I picked a cruise liner because I was playing Resident Evil Revelations the other day so the imagery is still in my head. Honestly, I was drawing a blank while writing this one. I feel like I could have done more with the shapeshifting and intensity but whatever, here's what I got. On a semi related note, halfway done with the next chapter of L&PD, the issue is that I was unsatisfied with where that chapter went and after writing and editing it, I scraped it and started over. As always, read, review and enjoy. http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095130&chapter=3

[Rexfan12345]

Chapter 3 of Omniharem is up. The lines 'reduced to a quivering mass of jelly by her orgasm' and 'shakes like a spinning blob of warm clay' came to mind when you asked how Lucy sounded so beware. Very little build up because Gwen set it up behind the scenes. I wanted to use a scenic, exotic setting because the penthouse is going to get really old fast if I use it every time, and crowded as the harem expands. So I picked a cruise liner because I was playing Resident Evil Revelations the other day so the imagery is still in my head. Honestly, I was drawing a blank while writing this one. I feel like I could have done more with the shapeshifting and intensity but whatever, here's what I got. On a semi related note, halfway done with the next chapter of L&PD, the issue is that I was unsatisfied with where that chapter went and after writing and editing it, I scraped it and started over. As always, read, review and enjoy. http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095130&chapter=3

Really enjoyed the chapter, and liked how you written Lucy very much.

[Guest Snake_King]

I have been enjoying the story so far, and I look forward to seeing the next one. I take it that you haven't been able to update due to personal things going on?

Also, is there going to be an anal scene soon?

[Praetor]

Complex real world business keeps getting in the way. I've been too busy to even think about the fics, pretty much writing in brief five minute increments. I wrote a 'short' (4000 word) threesome that centers around Ben's first anal and am thinking of posting it as a short separate, interlude 'thanks for waiting' kind of chapter since I can't find a way to bridge it into the encounter for the next chick to join the harem (who I also haven't decided on yet).

[Snake_King]

Complex real world business keeps getting in the way. I've been too busy to even think about the fics, pretty much writing in brief five minute increments. I wrote a 'short' (4000 word) threesome that centers around Ben's first anal and am thinking of posting it as a short separate, interlude 'thanks for waiting' kind of chapter since I can't find a way to bridge it into the encounter for the next chick to join the harem (who I also haven't decided on yet).

How about Looma for the next girl? Just throwing it out there as a suggestion, and you don't have to do that if you don't want to. And who's the anal scene with?

[Praetor]

Looma and Atea are cuming soon but I want one more traditional m/f scene to avoid writing threesomes back to back (they're exhausting and confusing to write). Gwen, who else would be Ben's first? They find that they really like it.

[Snake_King]

I guess that should be obvious about it being Gwen. And I was just asking about Looma, but I understand what you mean about the threesome. Oh well, I look forward to it, and I wish you luck.

[Snake_King]

I don't mean to nag or anything of the sort, but just when do you estimate that you'll be able to post the chapter? I'll understand whatever your answer maybe, as no one is a stranger to waiting.

[Praetor]

It's not nagging, it's encouraging really. Nice to know my work is appreciated (it is really hard to take pride in writing smut). As long as you're not mean about it. I'm probably going to post the foursome with anal as a separate stand alone chapter whenever I finish editing it because it is too long to be awkwardly merged with the next one. Work will commence immediately on the next chapter that I optimistically hope will be done by end of next week.

[Snake_King]

Alright, I wish you the best of luck.

In the meantime, I've got stuff of my own to write, as well as to get ready for college next week, and I'm hoping that someone decides to take up my challenges.

[Praetor]

I just finished my last class for collage. I should get my useless degree from cracker jack university in the mail by the end of the month. Then I need to figure out how to build that into an actual degree. Anyways, short chappy for Omniharem is up. My second foursome and first drawn from the ground up as one. At 4300 (approx) words, it is a decent length lemon with no story, so basically a usual chapter with out the plot. Please read and review and hope you enjoy. http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095130&chapter=4

[thebooblover]

Hey there.

Just wanted to know how the other stories are going. Any progress on them?

[Praetor]

None, real life keeps rudely interrupting. The next chapter of L&PD is still halfway done, Ben 10/Mortal Kombat is still in the planning phase. Big Harem 6 is being reformatted. Haven't even touched the HTTYD porn parody. Mounting the World is in need of editing and a better title. I have the first chapter more or less down but have no idea what direction to take from there. I had 6 chapters worth of material for the Haunted House fic that were lost in a tragic hard drive failure that just needed to be edited, I still get all pouty when I try to rewrite it. I am very intrigued by the Resident Evil challenge on your fan fiction forum but am getting pretty tired of writing Ben 10. I am very intrigued by the Spellbook challenge but am obviously overbooked enough as it is. I am also considering doing one or two of the straight shota ideas for kicks. Sorry, I know it's not what you wanted to hear.

[thebooblover]

None, real life keeps rudely interrupting. The next chapter of L&PD is still halfway done, Ben 10/Mortal Kombat is still in the planning phase. Big Harem 6 is being reformatted. Haven't even touched the HTTYD porn parody. Mounting the World is in need of editing and a better title. I have the first chapter more or less down but have no idea what direction to take from there. I had 6 chapters worth of material for the Haunted House fic that were lost in a tragic hard drive failure that just needed to be edited, I still get all pouty when I try to rewrite it. I am very intrigued by the Resident Evil challenge on your fan fiction forum but am getting pretty tired of writing Ben 10. I am very intrigued by the Spellbook challenge but am obviously overbooked enough as it is. I am also considering doing one or two of the straight shota ideas for kicks. Sorry, I know it's not what you wanted to hear.

Nah it's okay. Just take your time.

[Praetor]

One thing that really does help is discussion. The input from various readers and Rexfan really expedite the writing process, which is a key reason why Omniharem is outpacing L&PD even though that's been in the works much longer. As I indicated, a lot of the issues stem from a lack of direction, so if you have any ideas or suggestions, no matter how minute, please share them here or in a PM. Also, have you read any of Omniharem and if so, what do you think?

[thebooblover]

One thing that really does help is discussion. The input from various readers and Rexfan really expedite the writing process, which is a key reason why Omniharem is outpacing L&PD even though that's been in the works much longer. As I indicated, a lot of the issues stem from a lack of direction, so if you have any ideas or suggestions, no matter how minute, please share them here or in a PM. Also, have you read any of Omniharem and if so, what do you think?

Well a have a few ideas for L&PD:

For the chapter with Queen Clarion, you could have her summon Terrence to speak with him in private about rumors of him being seen fucking Tink's friends, but it's just a front so she can seduce and have sex with him, mainly because Lord Milori's dick isn't very big. You could have them be joined by Glimmer, who was summoned by Clarion to be fucked by Terrence as well because Rumble also has a tiny dick.

For the chapter with Spike, Gliss and Periwinkle, you could have him get to Peri's house after Tink already left. Spike and Gliss, not wanting to make it feel like his trip there was for nothing, both start seducing him as they also heard the rumors about his dick being huge, which leads to a threesome. Peri then shows up and it's shocked at both the scene of her friends being fucked by Terrence, and at seeing how huge dick is. The girls want her to join them, but Peri is nervous because she's a virgin, as well as embarassed of how huge her breasts are. After the girls and Terrence reassure her, she decides to join them.

Also I did read the Omniharem fic and I think it's great so far.

Edited July 7, 2016 by thebooblover

[Rexfan12345]

I just finished my last class for collage. I should get my useless degree from cracker jack university in the mail by the end of the month. Then I need to figure out how to build that into an actual degree. Anyways, short chappy for Omniharem is up. My second foursome and first drawn from the ground up as one. At 4300 (approx) words, it is a decent length lemon with no story, so basically a usual chapter with out the plot. Please read and review and hope you enjoy. http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095130&chapter=4

Really enjoyed this threesome chapter. Really great work. Also, who do you have planned next for the harem? I'm really enjoying this story so far. Edited July 7, 2016 by Rexfan12345

[Snake_King]

One thing that really does help is discussion. The input from various readers and Rexfan really expedite the writing process, which is a key reason why Omniharem is outpacing L&PD even though that's been in the works much longer. As I indicated, a lot of the issues stem from a lack of direction, so if you have any ideas or suggestions, no matter how minute, please share them here or in a PM. Also, have you read any of Omniharem and if so, what do you think?

Read the latest Omniharem chapter, and it was a good read. It did it's job, and I look forward to when you're able to make and upload the next one.

As for ideas and suggestions, I'd still like to offer up the one I made a while back in a review on one of the chapters. Namely, that one of the alien girls that joins the harem (preferably Looma, but I'm not picky) adopts a nudist/exhibitionist lifestyle while living in Ben's home, namely because her culture says for her to do so after mating with her chosen lover. She can still put on clothes if she leaves the house, but once back in, they immediately come off, and she has to be always at the ready for when Ben's raring to go. Sound good? Just a suggestion, but I'd like to see this if at all possible.