Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted February 12, 2015 Report Posted February 12, 2015 Sweet! I am excited to see what you do in the next chapter then, have an awesome time! Quote
Guest Ronin Posted February 12, 2015 Report Posted February 12, 2015 hey how about add these girls hanabi mogei or Naruko Naruto twin sister for sasuke to have sex with That's an interesting thought. Actually, would anyone mind Naruto using jutsu to turn into Naruko and have sex with Sasuke? Quote
SpartanAlchemist Posted February 12, 2015 Author Report Posted February 12, 2015 Hey all while I have no problem at all with you showing your support for Ronin here in the forum please make sure you do so as well in his story review section as well so that those who dont frequent the forums know that you like what he's doing. That being said, I like your Ronin, Ill be putting up a review when I'm done with this. Also with your Naruto to Naruko idea I have no problem with it so long as there no switching back while they're still going at it. Maybe Kushina tricking him into transforming and then having him try to seduce,to embarrass, Sasuke only for it to backfire on him? Just a thought so feel free to do as you were thinking if it was different. Quote
Guest Guest Posted February 13, 2015 Report Posted February 13, 2015 might have kyuubi split up naruto and naruko. so naruto is still around to humiliate Quote
Guest Ronin Posted February 13, 2015 Report Posted February 13, 2015 SA, that's a brilliant idea. I had a different method, but I like yours more. The notion of Kushina being complicit in turning her son into just another playthings for Sasuke is awesome. Quote
SpartanAlchemist Posted February 13, 2015 Author Report Posted February 13, 2015 SA, that's a brilliant idea. I had a different method, but I like yours more. The notion of Kushina being complicit in turning her son into just another playthings for Sasuke is awesome. I have my moments. Glad I could help out. Quote
jojo Posted February 13, 2015 Report Posted February 13, 2015 maybe Naruto daughter if he has one Quote
Guest Ronin Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 Ok, so chapter 2 is nearly done. Should be up in about 6-7 hours. Hope you guys like it! Quote
Guest Ronin Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 Ok, so part 2 is up! Its much dirtier, and even rougher on Kushina, so I hope you guys like it. http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600105716&chapter=2 Quote
jojo Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 hey ronin can I ask when hinata comes into the story so I know when she will start cheating on naruto Quote
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 You better believe I liked it Ronin. In some besides being smutty is was also kind of amusing in ways I don't really know maybe because it was the Kushina acted? Oh well something to think upon later. Quote
SpartanAlchemist Posted February 14, 2015 Author Report Posted February 14, 2015 Im afraid I am just OD'ing on my new Jiraiya/Kushina pairing obsession that I have developed. I'm looking for any excuse to write it. But that said as far as it being sensei/student, you can teach an old dog new tricks, you know If its something your interested in and enjoy writing what does it matter? Im a firm believer in if its something you enjoy writing you should so it. I could start getting all philosophical but I'll just keep it simple to keep from sounding like a snob. LadyTsunadeSenju 1 Quote
Guest Ronin Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 hey ronin can I ask when hinata comes into the story so I know when she will start cheating on naruto Well, I don't have anything concrete in mind as far as a timeline of future chapters, but the next two at least will deal with other characters. I think chapter 6 will be Hinata, and then sometime after that Naruko and then Naruko/Kushina/Hinata +Sasuke. Quote
JordoZ Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 Hey. I posted a review on the actual story, but I thought I'd post my suggestions here aswell for Ronin. Since Sasuke is 17, I thought it would show more of his prowess by making him and Naruto the younger brothers of their 21 year old sisters. Naruko and Sasuki - and Sakura being of their actual graduation group making her one of the 'cool older girls' kids young teens love to fantasize about fucking. And you could also then put the likes of Hanabi - Konohamaru's girlfriend or something in Sasuke and Naruto's graduation group. Allowing Sasuke to get a pair of sisters. As for the challenge itself. The story the challenge was based on, did you all notice that it's actually an open story or not? Meaning, anybody can add follow up chapters to it. I myself wrote a follow up chapter for it, as was the challenge. Although it's like 3k+ words it's not even closed to finish. I suppose I can post it though and write the rest as a part 2 next time I'm inspired to. Quote
Guest Ronin Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 That's a neat idea, but maybe for a different story. This one is, as people have noted pretty AU, Sasuke is rather out of character and the whole thing runs on ridiculous porn logic. I'm gonna leave Sasuke and Naruto only children. Elsewhere in this thread I mentioned the plan is for Naruto to use sexy jutsu and sleep with Sasuke. I'll admit, I haven't really read more than a few Naruto fanfics, so I don't know what's cliche to people, what they're sick of seeing, or anything like that. It's basically a big, PWP experiment for me. My other stories are much the same as far as having an "excuse plot" for sex. Quote
JordoZ Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 Anyway, I posted my idea to the Milf Kushina vs Perverted Student thread. I hope to see Naruko then next chapter because Mei, Konan and the like get boring to read after a while. Naruko and Kushina smut are the minority. My addition to the Milf Kushina vs Perverted Student story* Quote
Guest Guest Posted February 14, 2015 Report Posted February 14, 2015 when you do naruko chapter are you still gonna humiliate him because his mom are girlfriend are fucking sasuke or are you gonna make naruko lovestruck for sasuke. Quote
Guest Guest Posted February 15, 2015 Report Posted February 15, 2015 is minato gonna find out about his wife and son, and if so what will he do. leave, ignore it, submit to sasuke as a servant, or will sasuke just sharingan him into a servant. Quote
jojo Posted February 15, 2015 Report Posted February 15, 2015 ronin can I ask when chapter 3 will come out Quote
Guest Dpskg Posted February 16, 2015 Report Posted February 16, 2015 That's an interesting thought. Actually, would anyone mind Naruto using jutsu to turn into Naruko and have sex with Sasuke? This is just my opinion, but I think it'd be awesome if when Naruko gives in he just goes full wanton slut, milks sasuke dry and, given his prowess in the stamina department, gives sasuke a 'maybe this wasn't such a good idea' moment. Just thought that'd be fitting given their rivalry/friendship. Quote
Guest Ronin Posted February 16, 2015 Report Posted February 16, 2015 That's a good idea, but similar to what I had in mind. Naruko will prove almost too much for Sasuke to handle. At least, until Sasuke plays his trump card and reveals he banged Kushina and Hinata But i'm planning for Naruko to get over that pretty quickly-don't want to humiliate him too bad. Quote
Guest Dpskg Posted February 16, 2015 Report Posted February 16, 2015 That's a good idea, but similar to what I had in mind. Naruko will prove almost too much for Sasuke to handle. At least, until Sasuke plays his trump card and reveals he banged Kushina and Hinata But i'm planning for Naruko to get over that pretty quickly-don't want to humiliate him too bad. Yeah it would be fitting that naruto is the only one who could fuck him to exhaustion. And honestly with the hard on naruto had for sasuke in the manga its not hard to imagine him getting over it quickly. I could actually see him getting over it and proving he's the best lay sasuke will get in a sorta 'fuck all y'all, I'm better than y'all' moment. Quote
Guest Ronin Posted February 17, 2015 Report Posted February 17, 2015 Ok, so chapter 3 is just about ready. I'm going to be getting some feedback on it soon, hopefully, do some final edits, and it should be up later tonight. Tsunade/Sasuke, I hope you guys will like it! Quote
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