BronxWench Posted April 25, 2011 Report Posted April 25, 2011 Prompt: Slumber From Sanura: Very awesome, the more i read of him the more I like Alister. Great prompt. Yes, well, the Chantry boy grew on me. I didn't like him the first few times I played, but he wore me down. From Darkling Willow: Very good. I like the feeling of hesitant attraction in that kiss. Alistair is quite innocent, so he's not one to rush into bed, but I think Wraith will wear him down! From bloodravyn: lol, loved! Thank you! From JayDee: Whoohoo, back again! It's great how casually Wraith tosses out the idea of Alistair sleeping in his tent, although from the kisses and hugs and their growing relationship it seems as if that might actually increase his chances of sudden molestation. If their kissing is annoying the witch, they ought to do more of it Also works in enough about what they're doing, and why, so those of us who haven't played the game can follow it all. Oh, yes, Wraith is trying to be subtle. And yes, annoying the witch is way too much fun. I'm glad that I'm at least making this somewhat intelligible for those who haven't been seduced by the CRPG! From Shadow Knight: I have to congratulate you on your subtlety. The way you have the Dalish Warden discern all the implications (in tone, mood, attitude, etc.) between Zathrian's clan and his own is simply inspiring. You can definitely tell that Wraith is a Dalish through and through, and that he's intimately familiar with his race's customs. I do like the interactions, as always, though I'm less than pleased with Zevran's appearance (though I'm grudgingly surprised you managed to include him in such a seamless, natural way under the word limit). I think that the bit about what exactly awoke from its slumber could be expounded upon (as an aside, AWESOME use of the prompt. VERY subtle and appropriate), but as usual we have this pesky word limit to worry about. I find it a little disappointing we don't get more about that crucial step between "first kiss" and "kisses and embraces are now commonplace" but like I said just now, I really do hate that word limit. I honestly don't have much else to criticise here. I like their dynamic. It stays close to the game and even the briefly-seen companions remain true to their selves (awesome dig on Morrigan at the end!). Keep it up! Wow... Thank you! Given that you've played the game and know it probably even better than I do, this is really wonderful! I'm glad to know I'm not too far off the mark, and even being subtle! Quote
BronxWench Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Posted April 25, 2011 Prompt: Nightfall From JayDee: [smutty remark] I bet Alistair has a place Wraith would fit right in [/smutty remark]With the jokey comment about sudden molestation in the slumber part, I figured Wraith was dropping a hint that he quite fancied some - so when he makes a similar reference here followed by the note that he doesn't dare for more, it's almost like he's a little frustrated the hint didn't get taken. Although I might be trying to read too much into it! I don't know the game plot so I don't know whether Zathrian's thirst for vengeance was justified, but I can certainly see from what you've shown of Wraith's character why making the choice would be tough for him. "She was beautiful, and yet an undercurrent of savagery ran through her words," That sounds rather like it applies to the forest itself, too... after all the beauty of nature often seems to have a right nasty side to it. Did I just totally spell out an obvious subtle comparison?... eep. Thank you! Well, Wraith is a little frustrated, but he's being patient. As for Zathrian, it's really a coin toss. You can argue for it either way, really. Nature, well, nature can be crueler more often than kind, so yeah... Quote
BronxWench Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Posted April 25, 2011 Prompt: Dream From JayDee: It was really sweet that it started with such warm intimite kissing, and Wraith's remaining fear of rejection in the kiss proving unfounded. I gotta say when I saw the HJ tag on the fic codes I though "YAY!" and I wasn't dissapointed, the jumbled heat mutual pleasure comes across really well and it's so great when you have Wraith's thought 'Alistair, mine.' pushing him over the edge. A real true five-plus stars effort. Wow! Thank you! You've stuck with this through the seemingly endless series of NoSex tags, and I'm glad that the sex, now that it's arrived, didn't disappoint! And Wraith's not the possessive type, nope, not at all... From bloodravyn: awww! Thank you! Quote
BronxWench Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Posted April 25, 2011 Prompt: Sheep From JayDee: WOW! When you start adding sex, you don't mess around! The second part of the story was hot. Very intimate and arousing. That's not to suggest the first part was lesser, with you building the tension of the challenge like that. I've not played the game of course, but from the story so far I hoped Wraith would come out on top or it would surely be ending.... (and so he did... twice!) Thank you! I'm glad it all worked, from the challenge to the claiming of the Chantry boy. That challenge actually did happen in one of my games, and it was a jaw-dropper! Quote
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