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im creating some flashbacks for Naruto and i want people to tell me what they think of what ive done to him in the way of, what did you feel from it, does it sound like some thing that would, could or might have happened, did it make you cry etc.

Images now turned to a single candle being light stuck in a chocolate cupcake with sprinkles on it, a Six year old Naruto looking at it while sitting at his kitchen table also looking out the small window across from him as he began to sadly sing to him self while chocking back on his own tears.

“Happy … Happy Birthday … Happy Birthday Too me … Ha … Hap… Happy

Birth…. Day…To…. Me…. Happy Birthday To Me”

Suddenly as a brick came flying thru the window Naruto ducked under his table to hide from the broken glass flying thru the air as the brick its self lands directly on his cupcake, hiding under the table he slowly peeks up at the damage to see that his cupcake has been smashed and covered in glass, but what hurts him the most is the words DIE painted on the brick as tears well up in the little boys eyes once again.

There then came shouts from outside the window as people chanted

“DIE DEMON DIE”

“GO TO HELL MONSTER”

“GET OUT OF OUR VILLAGE”

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