JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Buffy Subdomain)

[julpups]

Don't worry. Since then, I'm taking the warnings seriously, as in realizing that there are authors out there who actually know their stuff.

Plus, I'm capable to discern between fiction and reality. I'm an adult even though it might not be implied in regards of my challenge to write a hardcore porn gangbang of a fictional character.

Edited February 12, 2016 by julpups

[JayDee]

So, basic chapter structure -

Chapter 1 Willow picked up, seduced (I'm looking at ways for Willow to convincingly consent to everything, think I can swing it) receives and gives oral and fucked first time, followed by blowjobs and groping, more vaginal, beginnings of degrading language & then Willow's first anal, swiftly followed by her first session air-tight (triple penetration)

Chapter 2 More gang fucking, getting in a lot of the little bits suggested thrown in, followed by Parker coming by on way to visit his old high school sweetheart/college fiancee, ends up screwing Willow and becoming asshole we know and liked seeing Cave Buffy knock down, Willow by then has tasted 29 men, semen gratitude scene with Jerry, Patrick and another guy

Chapter 3 Pizza delivery - Jonathan blindfolded, cuffed and brought in to rim Willow's well used ass, then they let him fuck her, when it turns out he has huge tool, followed by/during eating pizza, Willow entertained with magic dildo as pizza consumed and instructions given, possible ghost fuck? Moves into Kitty play, Willow has drink from bowl, vaginal, blow/rimming line up in kitty gear, hair leash, guys decide Willow needs a bigger drink, beer bong time.

Chapter 4 Willow plays Tekken while fucked as only one guy hasn't shown interest, beats that guy who finally stops playing for a hard standing fuck, before pulling out, Bowling grip throwing her to others she goes into DVDA double-blow and hand job, he goes back to game. He's harcore, and also didn't drink the potion. After that, Willow exhausted, gang grope getting her to come even more, guys come on her, posing Willow for camera, catching goofy fucked silly expression showing full extent of gaping etc, last few comeshots over/in her. High fives all round

Epilogue - Willow driven home, drenched panties and polaroids left for Oz, porno becomes wildly popular with stills breaking dial-up internet. Where are they now spoof ending etc.

I'm not done on the planning yet, there's a lot to include and the full bullet points I'm working on will try and specify more detail so I can refer while I am writing, but that's what I've got into shape. I'm aware of all the extra little bits that can fit into the chapters from the list of things you like to see and I'm still working on the balance for that, as I said, if there are ideas that don't get used, or even those that do, use 'em in another story - far as I'm concerned if anything I've suggested works for your story or as the basis of this or another request go ahead and toss it in!

Edited February 12, 2016 by JayDee

[julpups]

Heh, had to look what harcore means. Thought it was a typo at first.^^

Wow, the rough order of events are damn promising. You left me drooling a bit here.

Till now there isn't anything in it I don't want to see and I guess the different sex acts suggested will be displayed in your more detailed bullet point.(like the deepthroat with back on couch head hanging over edge display for instance)

May I suggest to post further bullet points etc per PM to avoid spoiling to other potential readers? The more detailed they become?

Again, absolutely awesome. I'm excited like a little boy at Christmas!

*Edit*

And may I add, that in particular Willow has the fitting face for a fucked goofy expression. I see it already in my mind!

Edited February 12, 2016 by julpups

[JayDee]

Yeah, that's as detailed as I'll put on the forum. Too much and I'd run afoul of the rules about too-much story content on this section of the site. And I don't want do do that. They never found the last writer who did, but the rumor is you can still hear their screams on a blue moon.

My aim next is to get part one first drafted as I think I have enough in place for the plan to get going, and doing so will get all the non-sex stuff written and also give you the best idea if it is going along as you'd like it. Not sure when it will be done due to my slow schedule, but I'd like to say within a couple weeks and possibly sooner. Chapter 2 is aimed to have a lot of the individual positions tried, I'm basically going through the thread, and copy pasting it into a check list as a guide, but I'll be using my own writing to tell the story.

Obviously, non-sex stuff is great in a regular erotica or non-erotic story and I wouldn't say a word against it, but keeping in with the porno tropes it's less important to this story. Willow's upset, Willow wants to feel wanted, golly there's a lot of guys who'd like to help. Cue the music.

Also, as long as 17 year old Jonathan gets to see some linoleum before the blindfold goes on, he'll want to take part in everything sexual. Xander said so. And from the same episode, Oz pointed out that Willow was trying to make out with him to make Xander jealous, so that's a character point that can come back for motivation. Admittedly, there's a small difference between "kiss" to make Xander jealous, and "three hole fuckathon" to make Oz jealous, but I'll chalk that one up to Rule 34. And Oz will still get his selection of Willow freeze frames.

As long as Tumblr never hears about the story, it'll be fine. So nobody tell tumblr. *Looks wildly around. Oh Shit, the Tumblrians! They found me! I don't know how, but they found me! Run Marty!*

[julpups]

Fiddlesticks! It's natural to experience further from kissing to more daring stuff when you grow up.^^

You know, for some reason I'm really curious about the where are they now spoof ending. How about a step ending (do you call it like that)? Means in particular a series of short chronological insights into Willow's/the Scooby's lives with references to some highlighted BtVS moments.

For instance, at first a job questionnaire scene with Willow, Buffy, Xander and Faith at school. Faith was immediately reformed after she heard of Willow's gangbang, as in she was heavily impressed, decided her fucked up life is nothing compared to the redhead's mindset and since then tried to become friends with her, obtrusively. Not sure if Oz' would be still around Striking, but not admitted, adjustments of Willow's job interests, as in Business Administration paired with her ongoing interests in magic, in particular in magic sex toys/spells and internet/computers. Buffy and Xander are still awkward and uncomfortable with the issue but decided that nothing can break their friendship bonds.

Next a scene somewhere in S04 with Willow patenting some of her magic sex toys designs, with Faith as her co-partner. Willow is really clever and smart, so no wonder she develops her carrier so early.

The dreams in Restless are much more erotic and at the end they wake up each having an orgasm. Tara joined Willow and Faith after she overcame her shyness and after she experienced Willow's talents in person. The three found a company, mostly with the money Willow gained of the video.

Willow, Tara and Faith liaise with Giles and Anya and the Magic Box. Anya is immediately convinced and sees the money-making potential. Giles needs more convincing but agrees eventually.

Willow, Faith, Tara, Anya and Giles become millionaires. Their business is booming. Buffy and Dawn are jealous but Willow and Giles support them with money. Xander is happy 'cuz he benefits from Anya's wealth. He proposes much earlier.

Willow doesn't attack Glory with plain agony but with agonizing orgasms.

Buffy's resurrection is conducted naked. Not that it's necessary but since the gangbang, Willow insists that every spell has to be done naked. Tara knows it's a lie but finds it funny so she keeps quiet.

Tara never got shot, since she never got up and clothed. They're living in a huge mansion now anyway, and hired Warren as an employee since they saw the potential in his sex robots. Jonathan is a famous porn star and always with a different beautiful woman when they met. The video definitively worked in his favor. Andrew is sadly still playing monopoly, alone. But he has more time to think about himself and realizes his homosexuality much earlier.

Buffy is furious. The potentials found her chest with her toys (a gift from Willow, a compensation for pulling her out of heaven), but they didn't read the manuals.

And so on...

Each scene really short, like some dialogue lines with a tiny narrator thrown in, then to the next scene. And much more ironic-comedic as the actual gangbang.

Something like that? Or do have already an concrete idea?

*Edit*

And what's the issue with tumblr?

Edited February 13, 2016 by julpups

[JayDee]

No, it'll just be spoofing the old film endings, like one sentence a person! I won't want to write more than a few words for it, because by that point I'll be pretty creatively exhausted

But keep your ideas together, you never know when they'll go for as story you write!

As for tumblr? The SJWs don't have a sense of humor about the kind of things I write.

[julpups]

Yeah, I get that.

Never really knew/cared about tumblr. So that's new.

Anyway, have fun with the drafts. From Monday on I won't be able to stalk this thread like I did the past week. So you can count on my replies at the evenings (CET).

Well, unless I'm bored and alone in the office that is...

Edited February 13, 2016 by julpups

[JayDee]

Alone, bored in the office, and thinking about Willow getting gangbanged? Hope nobody comes in suddenly and you have to stand up!

[julpups]

The monitor would block the view! And gangbanged is such a hard word...

I'm working in transportation and shipping (No, not the pizza delivery boy!). It's full of weird and fucked up people anyway (incl. customers). Catching your operator wanking off in the toilette? The colleague casually powdering her nose in the office while you think "What the..."? Customers beating up your boss? Your boss beating up customers? Already happened; so me wearing an hard on wouldn't be much of a shocker.

Is adding a cover picture to stories on AFF.org possible, btw? I could look for a screencap with a silly goofy expression...

[JayDee]

Yeah, but if I wrote about "mass-participation snuggling" I'd be kicked out of the pornographer's guild.

Nah, no pictures here. Probably for the best - there's users who would abuse the privilege I suspect.

[julpups]

Yeah, the side would be probably full of porn fakes. Might attract some lawyers...

[JayDee]

Hey, sorry, things are looking to get hectic again here so it may be slightly longer for part one - but don't worry I've got all the notes and started on it so it will get done!

Edit – It didn’t get done

Edited August 10, 2017 by JayDee

[julpups]

Thanks for the progress report. And don't worry the anticipation is almost as fun. Hope you get your stuff sorted out in your favor!