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  1. JustS' Feedback & Response Thread

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    Kordde:

    This was rather nice. Wouldn't mind seeing Lara getting to know other canines or other members of the animal kingdom. Magically or scientifically induced pregnancies would also be welcome.
    Phil: Love stories about her with animals. Would like to see longer, more graphic stories with her and apes, pre historic animals & mythical creatures.

    Thanks for reading and feeding back guys, but this story is only going to feature dogs. There are plenty of other fics out there if you're looking for something else. I read a good Minotaur fic on AFF not too long ago.

  2. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    Since there's no mention of a forum your other story, I'll just bring it up her.

    You used the wrong "Tale" the one you used means story. The one you meant to use is "Tail"

    Nitpicking and grammar nazi i know, but it's just something i noticed.

    Thanks for letting me know man. I actually had that correct originally (I even researched the correct usage of the word for this meaning) but I mis-typed when creating the story on the site. I've fixed this now.

    I'm using my general feedback thread for discussion for this story: http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/59724-justs-feedback-response-thread/

  3. JustS' Feedback & Response Thread

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    I actually really liked the bit of action you had near the end of the wolf's snare. Having Lara gain a sort of command over canine wildlife would be pretty cool here. You could even include dynamics like power struggles, alpha/beta relationships. Or you could give individual dogs/wolves distinct preferences. One might really like lara's taste while another likes to dominate her even outside of sex (nipping or herding her around) things like that in the wolf's snare were the highlights for me.

    Thanks. There will be a lot of little touches like that. Thanks for the extra suggestions though. Since I'm not limited to that island like in Wolf's Snare there is potential for more variety here.

  4. JustS' Feedback & Response Thread

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    So I'm back with another Lara/dog fic: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089817

    This is a new story with no continuity with The Wolf's Snare. I picture this as the original Tomb Raider continuity but it's meant to be ambiguous. This will be a simple series of one-shots with no real story, made up of ideas I've had since TWS. As such, it probably won't drag on as long as that last story or be any where near as complicated, so it'll hopefully just be a lot of smut.

    Thank you to Fox_JJ, SailorNemesis and WotanAnubis for the reviews, and for nearly 2000 view already :)

    I don't have a solid title for this story yet so any suggestions on that would be appreciated.

  5. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    As long as we are fixing counts, ill just say that 10000 is Still way too low

    The piece had at least 105k hits on it. I'd know since my main piece fmc is also in the same category so I visit regularly.

    Oh yes, you're right. I'm bad at numbers and tracking my own traffic, but according to one of my last posts in was at over 90,000 before.

    DemonGoddess/mods: Is there a reason the number was reset to begin with? Could it be cranked back up to a nearer figure? Thanks in advance.

  6. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    I rather like chapter 5, 6, 8 and 13. Though I have gripes.

    5, best sex most moving parts, and most graphic, but at the same time feels a little rushed.

    6. Best development, but I dunno, I kind of wished there was sex, in it.

    8. Lara accepting her role as a bitch is great, and I love the doggy oral. The lesbian aspect seemed a little rushed though, the other chapters took time, to establish and you kind of just skipped over a large period of time to where Lara and Jen are now comfortable enough to start a sexual relationship with no real development.

    12. The lesbian stuff is a great change of pace, and pretty well written. I just wish there was more of it, for their first time, (Seriously, no boob sucking? But I guess that's a nitpick.)

    Thanks for the feedback and specifying which path you took. I'd be very interested to hear the opinions of anyone who read both paths all the way through to see which one came out better.

    Perhaps you are right with the rushed initial lesbianism stuff - I re-read that part the other day and it feels a little out of nowhere. I think I was trying to go for a surprise with that though, especially as Jennifer makes the first move. It probably needed a whole chapter to itself but whatever, it would be too complicated to implement something like that now.

  7. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    yep, I adjusted it according to other popular stories in your category, published in the same time range.

    Thanks DG :)

    Now that the story has been finished for a while now, I'm having fun reading back through it (I've forgotten large chunks of what I wrote!).

    As the result of this refresh, I got thinking about what peoples' favourite chapter was. Post yours below, if you feel like it!

    Also, I may have some news of interest to fans of this story to share soon. Stay tuned :)

  11. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    Some of those artists definitely inspired my fics, namely Beowulf1117. Noname55, Ozzy, LordAardvark are also some of the greats.

    Just thought I'd prod any of you beast fans towards my currently active fic, as I've just uploaded a new chapter. It's an original piece but it's straightforward and basically just a simple series of sex scenes. Its centres on a female porn star who exclusively stars in dog videos. Check it out.

  12. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    One thing I don't understad...Why isn't the other Wolf Sex commune in Path A? I mean, wouldn't it make just as much sense to have it in both endings?

    I'd like to think that maybe the wolf sex cult thing just didn't get off the ground due to lack of the magical pregnancy factor, but it's up for interpretation.

    The story has now received over 100,000, that's awesome! :dance: I wish there was a way to keep it up near the top of the listings so more people can find it, but its been a good run.

    I'm not sure I've mention this, but thanks for the last reviewer, Regis, for the kind words. Also thanks to the mysterious SailorNemesis who seems to read all my stuff.

    I hope to keep entertaining you all with more stories soon(ish).

  13. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    Thanks to all for the continuing feedback. I read everything you say but let me re-iterate that the story is over and there will not be more chapters nor a sequel. I feel that the whole wolf sex thing has gone pretty much as far as it could and I'm glad I can move on to other projects now.

    Though I think Lara's mindset is pretty clear at the end, the conclusion is open-ended enough that the reader can imagine whatever he/she wants to happen in the future.

    Just for lols, here are some of the potential ideas for endings I considered at one point or another:

    A) Lara ends up leaving the island and going back to her normal life, but takes with her her love of dog sex

    B) Lara leaves the island, only to return to spend her wealth on constructing homes and other modern things for the wolf-loving women

    C) Lara finds a means to leave the island like a boat but destroys it so she can stay with the pack and never be found.

    Thanks everyone for reading (nearly 100,000 views now!) and getting invested in this silly smutty story. I hope you check out some of my other AFF works and invest a little of your minds and hearts in those, too.

  15. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    Are you open to the idea of an epilogue, where a search party has been launched to find Lara, and Roth discovers her on the island (possibly mid orgy) , and tries to convince her to come home, and she refuses. Just a thought.

    An interesting idea but Lara's arc of deciding to stay with the wolves is basically complete (which is especially clear in the final chapter). Not sure what would be the point of someone then coming in to try and convince her otherwise, especially after how the final chapter takes us out.

    The last chapters are now basically done. I've crammed in as many sexy ideas as I had left (each path chapter is around 6000 words!) so I hope no one is dissapointed with the amount and variety of action. I'm planning to post them on Friday/Saturday night so, get hype, I guess.

  16. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    Another bit with Lara sucking whilst being fucked. (On jennifer performong oral on her while she sucks a wolf (anal-oral perhaps)

    Boob sucking (seriously, not even once? That kinda seems odd considering y'know lesbians)

    More scissoring, (but with Lara taking charge, she's been a little too submissisve with sex, and after how dominant she's showed she can be.)

    69 again?

    Sounds like you want a lot more Lara x Jen action, which (just judging from the feedback received) didn't seem all that popular. That said, there is some differing girl on girl action in both versions of the last chapter. Can't say much without giving spoilers or giving you a huge breakdown of my thought process, but you'll get some variety.

    Your ideas may not show up exactly, What_Up, but you've got me thinking about a few things. Thanks and I hope you're happy with the final chapters.

    Since I'll probably finish the A path over the weekend, let this be everyone's last warning: Now's your last chance to make your suggestions. Make 'em good.

  17. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    Came for the plot, stayed for the sex.

    Still would've stayed for the plot regardless.

    Meanwhile, really enjoyed your updates. Definitely appreciate the additional digression in the route A and route B plots.

    Thanks for the nice words about the story. I suppose at this point I should've embraced the idea that there will always be people who want fuller stories to keep returning to while others just want some quick spank material.

    Would actually suggest that at some point things take a bad turn for Lara (only has to be temporary, although the audience doesn't need to know that). Increased stakes/angst/suspense is always welcome.

    As mentioned before, the next chapter will be the last and will return to a lot of down-and-dirty action, but also serve to rap things up satisfactorily (hopefully). I think Lara's been through enough rough times with whole bandit thing, so its time for her to kick back and indulge herself ;)

    I'm about 90% complete on said last chapters - right now, I'm trying to devise a punchy final paragraph to go out on. However, Path A is turning out a little less interesting than B (Path B readers know why after the end of the last chapter) so that's holding me back too. I guess if anyone's got any smutty ideas or requests (preferably that are different to what has already come before in earlier chapters) now's your last chance to make them to me. No promises that they'll definitely make it in though, of course.

  20. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    So Lara's gonna kill fools, then come.he.strip off an' fuck wolves? Or will she rest first?

    Let's just say when the bandits are dealt with we're going immediately back to smutsville. :)

    The next chapter is almost done, and work has started on the following, final one. I've got to say it's a relief to be finally capping off this story after a well over a year and a half since the first part. If I have no major life distractions I'm expecting it to all be done and posted before October.

  21. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    Maybe it's just me, but I was expecting Lara to be less conscience bound, from living with the wolves possibly even somewhat feral. But at the same time, it's good.that you didn't. But that said, HOW COULD YOU HAVE LARA SAY SHE LOVES THE WOLVES.IN FRONT OF JENNIFER AND NOT HAVE HER SAY "I LOVE YOU" TO JENNIFER? Shame on you.

    In my mind she is not that far removed from humanity, what with her having only been on the island a few months and having Jennifer around. Potentially in the future she could go more than way though, I suppose.

    You know what, that didn't even occur to me. I don't like 'I love you' scenes usually and it feels like her and Jennifer are kind of beyond saying it. Lara, Jennifer and the wolves have such, shall we say, non-traditional lives that maybe that phrase doesn't really even work as we would use it. Maybe if other readers are bothered by this I might consider changing it at some point.

  23. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    Chapter 14A and 14B are now online.

    Please note, I have retconned a prior mention of Lara being 2-months pregnant in the B story line. She is now just a couple of weeks preggo. You'll understand why once all is said and done in this and the following chapter.

    And yes, the grand finale of smut is coming. It's actually developing and getting more elaborate over time. Both it and the penultimate chapter are coming alone nicely.

  25. The Wolf's Snare - feedback, review replies, notes and crazy ramblings

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    I'd err on the side of extra clarity. I've received email reviews from readers in the past where because they skimmed the plot in order to get to the sex they ended up needlessly confused. You have to assume some of your readers may be distracted with all the blood lost to their genitals, haha.

    Thanks for that feedback guys. I've put in two line break-type things that I hope make things more clear.

    This is a heads-up that the next chapter is coming very soon. As always, I have written much more than planned so this next plot-heavy part will be broken up into two chapters instead of one now.

    However, I will be planting a particular seed throughout these plotty bits that will hopefully pay off to your liking in the smut-filled finale (at least in one of the two paths anyway). Stay tuned.

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