InBrightestDay

Thanks for the warm welcome!  For the purposes of future reviews, back on fanfiction.net I tended to leave one review per chapter (not duplicates, mind you, just leaving a review of each chapter as I went).  Is that okay here, or would you prefer that for completed fics I just leave one review for the whole thing?
I ask because some of the stuff I plan on reviewing is multiple chapters long.
I ran into the same thing with my sibling romance story over on Literotica.  The version you reviewed was actually an improved version, as a lot of the stuff about the siblings’ backstory was added while rewriting it.  Even now, I’m still seeing things with that story I want to change.

Twinpregnation reviewed! I just realised it has hit 5k hits so folks must still be reading it. I hope we’ll be seeing a lot more of the reviewer InBrightestDay here now they’ve registered! AFF likes writers! Also, they’re working on a really really really good story. But on to the review!
Thank you for reviewing this again!
I’m really glad you liked it and that the long term element works. I just like the idea that it isn’t some dirty lust thing but a deep affection that’ll last a lifetime. After all the bad ends I’ve written it is nice to have something positive. As a piece of pornography the big element was writing sex people found hot so I am glad that came across well too. Funnily enough it would have been connected to something else you read, but previous reviewers persuaded me it worked better without the appearances from other characters.
I do see where you’re coming from with the criticism and it feels like doing more of that would have improved it a hell of a lot. I re-wrote it from another of my stories of about half the length and added quite a bit on at the start, but I really feel now I could have done more. It’s definitely something to keep in mind if I did anything similar. I really appreciate the criticism.
Thank you again for this review and welcome to AFF!
Oooh! and to point out for AFF users that of the 100+ stories I have loaded on AFF there’s only 2 or maybe 3 of them that meet Literotica’s terms and conditions (I haven’t tried the third one yet). I’ll surely never have anything else I could load there! I’m not going anywhere unless, of course, the moderators finally decide they’ve had enough and place me under Damnatio memoriae.