Wilde_Guess
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Hi, Deadman.
8 hours ago, Deadman said:I’m not sure I know the reference, but funny enough, the fandom does have a character named Ethel in the show.
The reference is to “Cold Ethyl” by Alice Cooper. If your story is BTVS, that’s even better. To paraphrase Hall and Oates, “Some chicks are better left undead...”
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Hi, all.
3 hours ago, GeorgeGlass said:Maybe she rubs an ice cube over her lover's lips before they kiss, and afterward says, "Mmm, I love them cold." This would be especially pause-worthy if she works in a morgue or a funeral home.
… perhaps even more so if her name is Ethyl?
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Hi, all.
On 2/7/2024 at 4:39 AM, WarrenTheConey said:Not knowing the characters makes it hard to know how they would react to a 'slight' of any kind.
That being said, any mention of a broken promise during a 'make up', would probably turn into an argument or fight. So that should be avoided at all costs.
Your best bet, at least I think, would be to show one fully engaged and committed to their love making, and to have the other show the slightest sign that they are not equally engaged.
It would have to be something that can easily played off as nothing, like rolling her eyes at a sweet little declaration of love, or maybe letting out a noticeable sigh when she's asked to do something physical.
… would spreading your newspaper across her shoulder-blades to read while engaging in the act be a bit too much? Or perhaps using her breasts to prop up your smartphone but not using it for the camera?
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Hi, @Desiderius Price and all.
7 hours ago, Desiderius Price said:As an author that gets almost no reviews… an “Atta boy Love this!” would be GREAT. Mentioning points you like, wonderful. If there’s something you don’t… butter it up on both sides with what did work/loved, sandwich in the bad, so it doesn’t come off utterly negative.
To the all the above, I would add, “First, read the story.” There are some readers “out there,” in multiple meanings of the phrase, who will pan a story over points that were covered in the story with crystal clarity had they only bothered to read it.
Otherwise, @WarrenTheConey’s key points are a very good start. Keeping in mind that beta readers are scarcer than hen’s teeth, most fanfiction writers are having to figure out everything all on their own. Any advice sincerely and honestly given will help the writer in posting a better story.
The “great story, keep posting” reviews are also nice, especially for longer stories. While I don’t write for reviews, I also don’t turn my nose up at good reviews that only tell me that the reader is enjoying the story.
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