sweetmamajama

Ok so you vote no for the telling the audience? You think I shouldn't say anything? Also is that your opinion in general or just for the Divine Hand?

Yeah usually when something is too obvious its definitely a red herring, at least when a story is a good mystery. That’s my experience when I'm reading (or watching a movie) I usually look for the subtler hints. But you didn't answer my question ether Desi! Should I let the readers know that there's a hint or not? Cuz idk like the story I'm thinking about is not really a mystery, but it does have a lil mystery in it at the beginning, so idk if the readers will know whether or not to look for shit because of the genre.

I don't always actively search for hints ether. Sometimes you just get lost in the story and you forget. Sometimes you don't even know there's a mystery going on. It depends. But you didn't answer my question! Should I let the readers know that there's a hint or not?

I usually like to give my characters a name that has a meaning. I like using google translate and giving my character a name that means something in another language. Like for example my character Bai Hu, his name is white tiger: Bai – white, Hu - tiger in Chinese (according to google translate). And I use this method for naming places too. I also just like pick the names I like, you know, I like how they sound and shit. I tend to write down names I like so when I need a name I come back to that list. Or (like ppl already pointed out) baby name websites and shit like that.

So I’ve been thinking, what are some of the good ways to leave hints in a mystery? I like being subtle, but how subtle is too subtle? What if the audience doesn't seem to notice or even search for clues? Should I let them know that there is a hint and they can look for it if they want to find out “who done it”? Or should I just leave them to figure it out by themselves or just miss everything and only see the things in hindsight? Isn't it the point of leaving clues that a reader can figure shit out by themselves? That’s certainly the fun of it, at least for me. So what do you think? Any advice/suggestions?

Ok...I got nothing more to add. But yeah thanks clovey as always you are most helpful!

Well that seems great! Ill try that. Tnx Desi!

A random name generator? Whats that and where can I find it?

Ramble? You didn't ramble at all tcr wtf are you talking about?! Yeah I think that the description names are mostly the best naming tool for landmarks, especially if I translate them into a different language – red mountain would be Hong mountain in Chinese for example or crvena (planina) mountain in Serbian. So if I'm writing in English it would seem more special to the reader, you know. Anyone else have suggestions?

Ok so Ive seen post about naming characters and such, but that's really not what I have a problem with. Like the title says I oftenly find it hard finding names for places and cultures, cities, countries, names of gods and such. I know it depends what type of culture and setting were talking about, for example if I'm doing an ancient China inspired culture I'm not calling a city London or something. I usually gather the names I like and try to kinda spin them or something or I translate words (in google translate if I'm doing a foreign language) like idk “red mountain” or whatever. But I still come up short for many things. Ether the name I really like already exists or it sounds stupid. Does anyone have any suggestions or advice?

Ok let me put it to you like this: anything that works – I'm responsible for it, anything that doesn't work its the betas fault. ……..I love you clovey

The Divine Hand Chapter 1 Well thanks tcr for leaving a comment and praising my magnificence and my majestic art, I appreciate it. Oh and since clovey was betaing this one, any mistake is her fault! I wash my hands!

Ok I'm just gonna go and get into this shit, coherency and dignity be damned! I have some things to get off my chest and possibly get or even give advice. Although idk if anyone should really take my advice might not be a good idea… don't recommend it! So I’ve had some difficulty with writing, ok a lot of difficulty. I just can’t fucking do it! I manage writing once in a month or 2 but that’s about it. This is kind of a recent problem but it’s also kinda not… I wrote things when I was about 12-14 and when I was about 15-16 and as I recall I was a super fast writer, I wasn’t good but I was fast! I took a break for a few years and I’m back now, s been about a year and I ain’t got shit to show for it! Also I really hate writing, it’s kind of a chore for me now and before you go like “wtf are you doing writing if you don’t like it?! bitch get off the stage!” let me try and explain wtf I’m talking about… So my mind is a strange and dark place, tangled in all sorts of crazy psychotic ideas, it’s a scary place for most ppl, ok? Since I was really young I used to come up with stories and such, and I still do. I have A LOT of ideas. Some better than others, but they’re there, in my head and idk what to do with them! I just need to get some of this shit out before it drives me insane! So writing is one of my outlets and probably the best one for me when it comes to storytelling at least. Idk is this crazy? Am sure I’m not the only one out there who feels this way! Now a lot of writers say they write for the sake of writing, they enjoy it, even if it doesn’t get them much feedback. I am not one of those ppl. I write cuz I need to share my stories with ppl, that’s all I care about. If I knew nobody would see something I write I would never write it at all. Ugh idk if I’m even expressing myself correctly it’s just hard to explain! I know many people must think this is wrong or narcissistic or not noble of me but it’s just how I feel. And it’s not just cuz I want ppl to suck on my balls and praise me (though, not gonna lie, that would be nice too). Um… it’s like when something happened to you and you have to tell it to someone, you know, you wouldn’t be satisfied just talking to yourself out loud, would you? That’s how I feel. I just have stories I need to share. If I was a good speaker and had an audience Id just sit down and tell them my story. But I’m kinda stuck with writing shit down, which wouldn’t be so bad if I liked doing it more… And this is the thing I don’t feel this way about my other art. I’ve been drawing, painting and doing all sorts of shit my entire life and I love doing it regardless of what people thing about my work. I’ve never questioned whether or not I would quit drawing or was it worth it. Sure sometimes you hit a road block, it is only natural, but at the end of the day I was always certain it was my true calling and still is. So yes, writing is more of a hobby and a side-thing to me, but storytelling is not. I need to share my stories and many times other forms of art just aren’t adequate enough. (And don’t you dare suggest graphic novels and comics! It’s even worse than writing! Trust me I tried…) And…ok I have no idea wtf I was talking about… welcome to my brain I guess! I said this was gonna be incoherent didn’t I?! But yeah, idk wtf to do… I don’t remember hating writing when I was younger. But I don’t remember liking it ether. Maybe I just got lazy, or lazier that it. Maybe that’s it! I don’t really know. It’s kinda funny, back then I didn’t have much time for writing but I did it anyway, I was pretty productive. Now I got time, I still got passion and better skills too but apparently I lack something else! Motivation? Inspiration? Discipline? Idk, could fucking be! Its discipline isn’t it….. fuck its always discipline! How dafuck is my depressed, emo, suicidal 13-yearold self more discipline than me?! I hate that bitch! But like I did decide to like get into writing again and really try this time, about a year ago, like I said. I picked a shorter, simpler story, a kinda fun one as an experiment, to see if I could stick it out, you know. I wrote 2 and a half chapters in a fucking year. That’s just… that’s really fucking disappointing… I mean it’s not a failure…per say…but it’s definitely not a success! And that’s not the only story I wanna write! By this fucking rate I won’t have anything done! And I’m free right now and it won’t last forever so I feel like I’m just wasting precious time! So I’ve been thinking of maybe getting a co-writer, somebody who can make my dreams come true, ya know. Idk should I? How dafuck does that even work?! I have no idea! I would also probably be the worst co-writer ever… I’m kind of a perfectionist when it comes to my work (it doesn’t really help…) and people may have accused me of being too harsh at times… So I’d probably destroy this person! But I mean how do you trust a stranger with your baby?! My friends don’t wanna do shit with me (I wonder why…) and I’m kinda scared just seeking out strangers. It didn’t really work out with the entire roleplaying thing, why should it work with this? Speaking of rp, that’s kinda how I got to the whole co-writer conclusion. I do apparently feel motivated enough to write while in a good rp. I’m even having fun writing and I feel all exited and giddy about it, so maybe that’s the thing for me! There is hope! My co-writer Jesus! I mean idk should I make an add? Anyone have experiences in this sort of thing? I’ve been thinking about it for awhile but I still just can’t decide if it’s a good idea in practice... I had an idea that maybe I should get someone to watch me write, like in google docks, you know, be there and just…keep me company. You know like when your jacking off (well chicks don’t jack off, but masturbating doesn’t really sound as funny as jacking it, so…) and its always better if somebody is watching you then when you’re doing it by yourself. Like it’s not as fun and as exiting, you know. So I thought maybe I’m like an exhibitionist writer! Maybe that’s the thing I need! Well to make the long story short –didn’t really work… Maybe I try it again, but yeah I doubt it’s gonna help much… I also wanted to talk more about feedback, cuz the lack of it just kills me. Like I said the feedback is the thing that I’m writing for. I’m sure all of you guys out there know what I’m talking about when I mention feedback though so idk why dafuck am I even complaining … I don’t even know why dafuck am I writing this! Some might say I’m writing for the wrong reasons; I kinda understand your point, but your wrong… the end! Lol I’m joking a bit (or am I..) I mean really, when we look at art, the audience it a very important thing. Art could be considered a form of communication. I went to art school btw, as you can see by my pretentious bullshit… But not to bore you (and myself) with this crap, I say to those who claim my reasons for writing are flawed: Fuck you! Ok… let me try this again… I say: Who are you to say to me that my reasons for expressing myself are wrong? Sure everyone has a right to opinion…including me and my opinion is that your opinion is wrong and you should shut up! …..umm…… Idk…. Even I don’t know what I’m talking about at this point… Like nobody ever even said to me anything about my reasons for writing, I just randomly started ranting about these possibly non-existent people! This isn’t even ranting at this point! This is just nonsensical gibberish! Who’s even reading this?! Go home brain your drunk! Why do you always close your eyes when we make love?! You know when I’m writing I like to have things like underlying themes and messages and pretentious crap like that. And I like to leave hints around too for readers to find. (and yes I’m just gonna move on like nothing happened…) You know Easter eggs? Well I call em Easter turds. (Trademark) But what’s the point of it when nobody cares or notices or even reads? Like should I make a note that there is a hint somewhere in there? I mean I understand my readers don’t have much faith in me (they’re right, I suck) but come on I can do stuff to! And it’s like if nobody says anything about my turds how am I supposed to know if they smell or not?! I forgot where I was going with this… I don’t fucking know where I was going with any of this shit! Wtf was the point of all of that?! Don’t ask me! I just feel like shit I guess… Ok rant over! Any questions?

Author: sweetmamajama Title: The Divine Hand Summary: After getting captured by the authorities, a runaway slave, Ivanyav gets help from an unlikeliest of people. Enthralled with his savior, Ivanyav takes him home only to find out that the feeling may not be mutual. And I fucking suck at summaries… Feedback: Yaas please! I'll suck your dick for a review! ...Um I mean, I would appreciate some feedback, thank you. I'm not a size queen per say, I mean its not the size of the boat and all but I like me some long constructive criticism. Don't be stingy ppl! Mamas gotta eat! But that being said beggars cant be choosers and I appreciate all your feedback! Fandom Original work Pairing: M/M, OMC/OMC Warnings: Abuse, Angst, Rape/Dub-con, Unconcealed Drug use, Slavery, a bit of Master/Slave dynamics, Violence, just a lil bit of not too graphic Torture, references of mass murder Racism, some references of Somophilia and just weirdness...cuz it is me after all Additional tags: M/M, Rimming, Oral and Anal Sex, Anal fingering, a bit of D/s undertones, some H/C, Masturbation and of course some good old fashioned creepy Romance! Btw this story has also been published on AO3 under the same name and pen name, just so you know (the link if for the AFF only) Solo story or chaptered story: Chapters and still work in progress URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108110 Review Reply thread: So yeah I think that's all… Please do check out my story, I have 2 chapters at the time of posting this and the 2nd chapter is in my opinion better than the 1st so I did improve! This story is betaed by my wifu CloverReef and tcr so you guys know s gonna be on fleek! I haven't been writing for a while now and I'm finally getting back into it, its kinda hard battling with depression, anxiety and then finding the time and will to be motivated and maintain the levels of creativity (I'm also an artist so I kinda gotta split this shit in 2), you guys probably know what I'm fucking talking about. But yeah I wanted to warn you that my uploading schedule is all over the place so I cant guaranty a regular chapter every 1-2 weeks, I cant really guaranty shit! Well I can only promise that I will upload as soon as I'm done with a chapter and that you will be informed in case I ever decide to discontinue the story (which I really don't plan on doing at least any time soon). Like I already said feedback is highly appreciated, that is why I'm posting shit here to let you know that I care and wanna hear what u guys think. I'm not very sensitive so some harsh criticism wouldn't bother me much as long as your not being a totally asshole (there is a line there somewhere...don't cross it!) but yeah I'm very unlikely to get butt-hurt about shit. And I of course wouldn't complain if there's some ego-dick sucking going on *eyebrow wiggle* Also if you decide to leave a comment expect a fun colorful little reply – think of it as a reward. Anyway… I think that's it… Well thanks for reading and go read ma shit! ...Love you!

The Divine Hand Chapter 1 Congratulations! You are the first to comment and therefore you will forever hold a special place in my bosom! Yeah but seriously thanks for bothering to comment, means a lot. I know I'm late to reply but when I first got it I was jumping up and down and giggling like an idiot. And you'll get more, the chapter 2 is up and you'll still get more...eventually!

Welcome, my dearest children! So I made this tread to reply to reviews on ma shit in general. I may only have one story and one review at the time of posting this but hopefully there will be more stories from me and more reviews! I would just like to say that I appreciate all of the reviews, even the short ones, its still better than nothing. That being said don't be stingy ppl, I need to feed! FEED MEEE! My profile: http://members.adult-fanfiction.org/profile.php?no=1296972017 The Divine Hand: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108110

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Hi are you still willing to beta? This was posted in 2012 so I have to ask. I need a beta for my original fic, so if you're still up for it, let me know.