Mr_Fairplay

Yeah, now that i've looked at it from a different angle, i guess you're right, even in chapter 33 during the aftermath, Kayla's starting to come around but it's still hurting her, i'm guessing (and i'm hoping) that Kayla does not sleep with someone else to even out the odds, Jack and Kayla do not have that sorta relationship as far as i can tell, and Kayla does not seem like the kinda person to demand that thing, but you never know. They have a really beautiful relationship and that would ruin the relationship, this is gonna come out so gay, but i love Jack and Kayla. Jack is surprisingly not that possessive of Kayla, if i was in his position and given i had a girlfriend like Kayla, i'd hang on to her like my life depended on it, and i'd be possessive of her as hell. It could be Jack's shrink, you know who he sees after Walburn suicide, he did offer Jack some relationship advice, so there may be a possibility that he makes a return, and now he helps Jack and Kayla through this hurdle of their relationship, but if this happened, it would be...kinda boring actually. I'm rooting for a fight, and the post-fight hospital situation, what are your preferences?

Dude, but still, it's awesome man, it came out better than expected, let's see what Joe does, man this suspense is killing me. Here's some appropriate back story to go with your content, it's just general, like points and stuff, not properly written like you have. After they come back from the cabin, Kayla sort of closes off, Jack being the good boyfriend he is gives her his space, but the more he gives the more she drifts away, this goes on for a month or so, slowly he's seeing very very less of Kayla, no text, calls or even meet in person, Tara's ridden in guilt and Jack reassures her, slowly she's letting it go, it's all good on one end but on the other end...nothing. He tries to reach her because well, he's worried and impatient now. He goes to talk to her at her house, (insert argument in which Jack's trying to get her to open up and Kayla's reluctant, but agrees...and that's where your part comes in). I'd leave a cliffhanger when Jack gets stabbed and passes out, i can picture the conversation like: Kayla: Oh my God, Oh my God, Oh my God! Jack!, shit so much blood! Jack, stay with me! Jack, don't go, don't die Jack! I love you, Jack, please Jack! Jack: Hey, it's ok, i love you, it's ok, shh...don't cry, its...ok. Kayla: JAAAAAAAAAACK! (this is where he passes out)

I can see Joe's trust in you was well placed, now that was AWESOME man, Although, bringing Brad back is just pushing it a bit too far, but then again, it could be like a nice starter for Brad to you know, apologize for his actions? seek forgivenes? I dunno whats the right word here, my brain won't co-operate right now, haha. But yae, i can totally see that happening, this needs to happen.

Now that's how i'd do the story from this point. Although, this may seem a bit sadistic but i wanna see Jack dead and Kayla crying her eyes out, i dunno, perhaps too much Game of Thrones does that to you? Anyway, THE BIGGEST SPOILER is the title itself if you look at it, "She is The One", it's like almost telling us that there's a big chance they'll end up together (unless Joe goes all George R.R. Martin on us). Oh, and from a guy who also did pretty stupid things in his teen years, yeah, i was clingy as hell too, and every relationship, every crush blew up in my face, until when i turned 20, and i met her, my ex, she was just like Kayla in personality, but in appearance far from it, black hair, green eyes and two piercings on her bottom lip, damn she was amazing, and i was crazy about her and she was just as equally crazy about me, unfortunately it was short lived, just like Kayla she wanted a threesome...with another dude, and that thing f---ing freaked me out, i declined because that's where the similarities ended, unlike most people that i met on the internet the past 6 months, i do not share my girlfriend. We broke up shortly after on a completely unrelated issue, anyway that was 6 months ago, and since her just the concept of another guy with my girl freaks me the f--- out, whether im there or not, i just can't stand it. You might have seen a couple of my comments on the threesome and a follow up threesome with a guy, it's because of that.

Dude, you just gave an amazing idea, Tara and Kayla, dirty girl on girl action! Now is that epic shit or what?!?! The only reason i'm actually considering an MMF threesome is that Jack was okay with the idea, we all know that's only going to make matters worse, and since Joe himself said the next chapter has way less emotional stuff in it, at least its not in that one. Personally, i'd prefer we just move on from this threesome business, it just really complicated stuff and it really hurts to see Kayla and Jack like that, i'm rooting out that Kayla forgives him and nobody sleeps outside of their respective relationships anymore (with or without consent of their partners, whether they're present or not, i'ma one woman man and the idea does not sit too well with me).

Yeah, i agree, it's really good, but i'd prefer if Jack got wounded, like really close to dying, and Kayla full on crying and sobbing, and begging Jack to not go, and stay, live. So, when Jack survives ('if' he survives, personally i'd be half tempted to kill him right there), Kayla forgives everything and they have like a really emotional moment, and everything is good. No, wait, even better, Tara dies, Jeff tries to kill Kayla and Tara saves her and gets stabbed instead.

I don't see Kayla letting the threesome slide without a significant event happening, the only exception to the rule will be another threesome, a MMF threesome. Judging by the amount of hints Joe has provided us, i'd say the chances of that happening are small, but it could happen. Since, Joe said an old familiar face will return, i'm guessing its the significant event, and most probable are The Return of Brad, The Jeff Strikes Back (get it? you know where you have seen similar titles, come on you know young padawan). Now, lets say, Jack gets really injured, like really really badly, that will make Kayla freak out over the idea of losing Jack, she that Jack's well being is more important than some stupid threesome, and forgives him, Jack recovers, I love yous are spoken, Happily Ever After. Now that was the happy version, now for the more interesting versions. Jack decides to give Kayla a MMF threesome to even things out, it does not go anywhere near good, Jack reacts badly going into a deep depression and refuses to talk to anyone including Kayla, his life starts to fall apart and eventually he kills himself. Or, Kayla cheats, or they break up, or someone else kills Jack, or something else equally horrible that breaks Jack and Kayla up. In short, there's no version in which there's a happy ending.

Bloody hell, that's damn brilliant. Although it could use some work, but still man, bloody well done!

Yeah man, i'm pretty stoked for the next chapter as well, Joe is an excellent story teller, i just hope Joe and Kayla make it....without any more tormenting acts like the one we just witnessed in the previous chapter. Oh yeah, and Zombie Walburn is my favorite theory, though it would be better if he came back not as a stereotypical zombie, moving all slowly groaning and stuff, it would be pretty badass if he came back as like a lich or something.

Go back to the time of Walburn's suicide, Jack finds Jeff's text on Kayla's fun, completely blows up on that fact and when he finds out that Kayla's first time was with Jeff, so in order to compensate Kayla suggested the threesome, now in hindsight she's regretting that decision. So i honestly don't know how Kayla gets over that fact, there may be a chance of a MMF threesome but since Jack's initial reaction was a "NO! NO! NO!..." and the only reason he considered the fact was because Kayla had given him a FFM threesome, so even if they do go through with the idea, the odds of the success of that event is really low, i.e. it will makes things way worse than they already are. So, the Jeff-Jack fight makes sense, Jeff comes back full on stalker mode, he's violent, let's say he's a danger to Kayla's safety, so after a really bloody and painful fight, Kayla realizes that Jack really loves her (i know she knows that already, but after the fight the idea is reinforced) and realizes that Jack will always be there for her, will protect her, etc. So, in this way the fight wraps up the lose ends.

I have a hunch that it could be Jeff, the crazy ex-boyfriend of Kayla comes back to get her back, and then Jack and Jeff fight for her, Jack wins barely and Kayla forgives him for the threesome.....but then again, things like that don't happen in real life and Joe's been really realistic so far, so could be anything...but yeah, that's a path i would choose if i wanted to wind up stuff, not sure if Joe wants to do that though.

Cool, thanks man.

Hmm, you do have a point there, with which i totally agree with by the way, i have like a gajillion possibilities in my head that what can happen next, but we'll have to wait and see what Jashley does, speaking of which any idea when's the next chapter coming out, he says it's going to be back on schedule, but i temporarily stopped following the story because of college and other things some months ago, so i have no idea what his schedule is, any idea?

Dude, its hard for some people to express and thoughts and feelings, trust me i know because i'm one of them, there's just so much stuff in our heads it takes effort to distinguish what's what, frustrating? yes, very, you have no idea. Uhm, yeah would be pretty pissed when Kayla said "how would you feel watching me with another guy?", i mean she said she was ok with it, and now she's being all bitchy because she can't stand the fact Jack slept with someone else? Granted they both care for Tara, but if it was that of a problem for her she should not have agreed to do it in the first place, so what's the rational thing to do here? Kayla slept with someone before she met Jack, Jack now slept with Tara in the form of a threesome, call it even and move one.

I'm ok with Kayla taking as long as she needs, she can take a billion years for all i care. Oh and yeah, Joe's excellent when it comes to realism, i am a dedicated romance/erotica reader and realism in that genre is fairly hard to find, at least that's what it was for me. I'm really not ok with an MMF threesome because i have had a really bad experience with one, my gf (now ex) said she wanted one and the idiot that i am i agreed, i watched in horror as another guy took her, its been 6 months since i broke up with her and have been single since then, not even a single date, you know i'm taking therapy because of that threesome.

Anyone know when the next chapter is going to be up? Sorry, but i haven't been checking up lately, i was busy with college, and now just have had the time to catch, Jashley says the next one will be right on schedule, since i have been out of the loop for months, i have no idea what that schedule is, so can anyone tell me what that schedule was...or is? P.S. I think i know what's gonna happen next, Kayla's gonna have a threesome with Jeff and Jack, and it's going to be far too tormenting for Jack, and....well i haven't thought about what happens next, may be they break up and the story ends?

Yeah, of course there will be problems, huge friggin problems, threesomes have a high chance of failing, which we can see here. Personally, the most disturbing part about the whole chapter was when she says that how would Jack feel about watching Kayla have sex with another guy, AND HE FRIGGIN AGREES!!!!!! Now i really don't know what happens next, but im really hoping they don't have an MMF threesome, that would be far too tormenting for me.....Sorry, i have had very painful experiences with threesomes.