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  1. I’m writing a story that is being told in 1st-person POV. The narrator is a teenager, and he will engage in many experiences over the course of the story. At various times, he will be drunk, smoking weed, or on ecstasy. I’ve been drunk (though it’s been many years), so I should be able to channel what that feels like, but could always stand to see others’ takes on it. And I have no personal experience at all with getting high. Yeah, I’ve googled “how does it feel to be high”, but that only goes so far. Does anyone know of any good examples in fiction (that you can link to) of a POV character narrating while inebriated in these ways, feeling the effects in real time with the story? Perhaps you’ve tried to write in this way yourself? If you can think of any, I’d really appreciate it. Thanks!
  2. My delayed reply to a new review of Fistbump 2 ... Thanks, George. The Epilogue ending was my original plan for how to end this fic over two years ago when I planned it out. I was completely new to writing at the time, and I think I was overly cruel in my attitude towards anyone who would read it. To have the sequel to the story end with an even harder kick to the pills then the original story did seemed like a good idea at the time, but as time went on, I softened. I think this is a good compromise to make. Plus, as you indicate, there was the issue of continuing the story. I think there are probably many interesting directions that the “faustian bargain” conclusion could go. Only problem is that I’m terrible at imagining supernatural and fantasy angles, and for the life of me I couldn’t come up with anything to follow the Epilogue that wasn’t really trite and derivative. I do realism better, I think. So having the twins go home with the happy ending actually happen works better for me. As always, thank you for the detailed review. E-o-F
  3. Yes, it was a conscious choice that I made all the way back in April of 2015 that I wanted to make this fic dark and intense. True, I didn’t really know much about writing at that time, and next to nothing about fan service to an established fandom, so perhaps I went too far. But there actually was a good justification for something extreme to happen to Dipper at that point in the story: I wanted the parents to know that *something* had happened between the twins, but for there to be a logical reason for them to not press the kids for details. A traumatic event such as a major injury serviced this nicely. I have never had an issue with substance abuse and addiction, but I did enough research to hope that what I was writing was relatable. I’m glad some of it found its way through. E-o-F
  4. HOLY SHIT I FINALLY FINISHED FISTBUMP 2! If there’s anyone still following the story, go ahead and check out the archive. Chapter 11 is up, and the rest will follow in the days to come. E-o-F
  5. Another nice review for Fistbump 2: Damn. Thank you for that, that was very nice! It is now only a few weeks away from it being a full year since I uploaded Chapter 10. I’m really sorry that I’m not getting this done. I have actually written a few hundred more words on Chapter 11 in the last several days, but I’m not at all happy with what’s coming out. I’m still struggling with my writing. One of my online friends suggested that next time I have time to sit down to this, I should try skipping to Chapter 12 and see if that unblocks the logjam in my brain. I’m planning on giving that a try. Wish me luck. E-o-F
  6. Just a note to say that for anyone waiting on me to finish “Fistbump 2”, I still haven’t abandoned it. Although I’m currently in a long period of not writing anything (for reasons of little time and lots of stress), the story still stirs regularly in my head. I fully intend to finish it. Stay with me! E-o-F
  7. (I'm abandoning my other thread below. "Fistbump" and its sequel(s) will continue in its own existing thread, and everything else I write (past or future) will be discussed here.) ***************************************** I had a couple of reviews for my new story "Unexpected". The first came after the first chapter was published: Yup. Couldn't think of any better encouragement for our little incestuous-twins-in-training. (There's a bit of a weird history to this fic which would colour the perception of how the movie and novels fit into my narrative. I might tell the whole story when I have more time.) And then this review immediately after I published the final chapter: That's high praise, thanks. If I can make the story feel important and engaging, then I'm succeeding in my writing. I don't want to write simple smut. I want the reader to care about these characters, and feel what they are going through beyond just sexy times. Dipper and Mabel deserve no less. E-o-F
  8. People keep finding this fic, even though I haven't added a new chapter in many months! Here's another review for Unspeakable: *blush* Thank you Anon. That's very very kind of you to say, although I might also suggest that you have missed out on quite a lot of Gravity Falls fanfics here and elsewhere if you think this is that good. And yes, I *will* be continuing this story. I just finished another fic ("Unexpected") that took my time, and I have another project that I have to finish with a friend. But it will get done eventually. I know exactly what needs to happen, I just have to write it. Keep checking back, or if you want to shoot me a PM I can let you know. E-o-F
  9. Fistbump 2 gets another review in the archives: Thanks for reviewing, George. My apologies for not having finished this yet. Gotta get this done before the end of summer, for sure. It's now been well over a year since I started this fic. I think the biggest flattery you made is for my dialogue, which I've always felt insecure about (particularly Mabel's). If it felt authentic, then I guess I'm doing something right. And yes, that discomfort and fear surrounding everything about their relationship is what I wanted to convey. Getting that feeling across was the primary thing I wanted to accomplish with this story. E-o-F
  10. A couple of lovely reviews for both of the Fistbump stories: Not sure how to adequately respond to such praise, but thank you! And I am holding off until the fic is complete before I post at AO3. I've made the patrons of two web sites wait for me to finish this: I don't need to inflict my tardiness on one more. :-P E-o-F
  11. Brief little review left a couple of weeks ago... Well, I *did* try to warn you at the very start that this would be a much different story. Plus I used the word "angst" about five times in the content warnings, so I thought that might also have been a bit of a clue :-) Whatever. Sorry you don't like where I took the story, but it is what it is. Better luck next time. E-o-F
  12. Thank you for the supportive review, George. Coming from you, this really means a lot. Your feedback on what can be improved on is appreciated and entirely valid. I've re-read this a couple of times, and I've noticed some things that are clumsy and make me cringe a bit as I read it back, without the investment I had at the time. I hope you forgive the shortcomings on the failings of a very, very inexperienced author: as I've mentioned before, I've *never* wanted to write anything in my life before, and it's been a quarter century since I've been forced to do creative writing of any kind. I'm happy you liked the revelation of the fistbump in the final chapter. It was one of the first things I thought of when I was imagining the plot of the story, and I knew I wanted the story to end that way, on a sad note. As far as the sequel goes, I'm sure you've already read in the post above yours in this thread that I'm no longer able to write with anything remotely close to speed. There are two chapters left to go, and they won't be very soon. I understand if you want to wait until it's done before you dive into it. Again, thank you for the feedback. I notice you've posted another chapter of "Comfort and Joy", so I'll check into that shortly! E-o-F
  13. Got a review of Chapter 10 No apology needed. *I'm* sorry it took so long to deliver the chapter. The good news: the next chapter is the make-or-break moment. Either they will figure out if they can be together or not, or it will be decided for them. But that moment is coming. The bad news: Well ... uhm ... so far I've written about 200 words of Chapter 11, plus some small sections of text that I've collected from inspirations over the last several months. The truth is Chapter 10 only got done because I had an entire day to myself to finally finish it off, and those days are few and far between. I don't know when the next one will be. A while, anyways. Sorry, but it'll be done when it's done. E-o-F
  14. Well they said it would never happen, but now it has ... I've posted another chapter to this story! WOOT! E-o-F
  15. Got a review from GreyNeko: So yeah ... the resolution of this short little fic may not be the most realistic. But c'mon: it's Christmas! Fluffy and happy endings are the order of the day. That said, though, glad you liked it. It was a fun one to write. As far as your suspicion that this story may be me compensating for what may be coming in "Fistbump 2", I offer only a "no comment". ;-) E-o-F
  16. This will probably be a short-lived thread, since I'm not going to be expanding on this story after Chapter 2 is posted 24 hours from now. But any discussion is welcome! E-o-F
  17. I received this email, and with permission, I'm reposting it here: How flattering is that? To have someone write me and tell me that I, of all people, have inspired them to take the leap and try their hand at writing. Holy crap! This is about the nicest thing anyone could say to a rookie fanfic writer like myself. Thank you very much! I appreciate it more than you know. E-o-F
  18. I forgot to add my comments to this portion of DemJoBoys post: Can I say that I'm flattered by your opinion of my story, because honestly I have *no* experience with any of this kind of angst in real life. (My issues are familial, largely revolving around my relationship with my wife, and challenges with our daughter.) So if this story rings authentic to someone who actually has been through similar trauma, then that is high praise indeed! Thank you very much! E-o-F
  19. The good news, fine sir, is that I've actually done a bunch of work on Chapter 10 in the last few days, and was only here this morning to post about that very fact. So to find that you've gone ahead and caught up gives me that much more motivation. If I were a betting man, I'd say that odds are this thing (all twelve chapters and the epilogue) *should* be posted by Christmastime. (Unless life happens even harder than it already has been. If so, then c'est la vie.) You raise some very astute points. How the story is going to end is actually one of my prouder creative achievements. I don't want to spoil the ending, but I *can* say that I believe that I will not have to fear a "chanclas" attack from you after the story is done. I agree with your opinion about Dipper. We've seen him do some very brave and heroic things. But in my story he is caught in an impossible position. This is not the same as risking his life for his sister's safety, which he has done multiple times and he would do again without a moment's hesitation. This is about *them* together, and he knows that if they are not careful, he would be powerless to prevent the destruction of that which he wants to protect most (his new relationship with Mabel). In such a scenario, his parents must seem like a force far more threatening than any monster, demon, or machine he's ever faced. He's not a wimp by any stretch, but he is pragmatic. He knows he has to walk away from a battle that he would lose, and which would harm Mabel in the process. (And you're right, your synopsis of "Fistbump With a Vengeance" (HA!) would be a lazy way to go, and you need not worry: that is *not* where I'm planning to go with this.) Thanks again, and I hope you see an update fairly soon. E-o-F
  20. Ego inflation is rarely a bad thing. And mine seems to have a leak these days, so getting a pump every now and then feels really good. Thanks. :-) Calibre is a great program. I use it myself. Don't have a lot of time for reading these days, mind you, but that's another story. Yeah, it would be great if there weren't a lot of long-form fanfics that just never get completed. The best example in the Pinecest universe is Hide n' Seek over on Tumblr. 90000+ words, and no sign that it will ever be completed. At least it got left off at a good spot. I'll not bore you with why my writing capacity is down these days: you don't need the downer, and I don't need any platitudes. But needless to say I've got shit going on. It kind of messes with the creative juices. It's a good thing I'm not getting paid to write, because I wouldn't be earning much these days. Still, Chapter 10 *is* progressing bit by bit. And I've got portions of the remaining chapters already down, so who knows? I could hit a magical day of productivity and solitude that could result in everything getting done quickly. I just don't know. I'm so inexperienced at this, your guess is as good as mine. Being on the business end of a well-meaning beatdown with a shoe may actually be good for me, for a number of reasons. Your offer may be accepted at some point in the future. ;-) (And BTW, "Fistbump Harder" is the most awesome name ever: I wish I *had* called it that! I may have to use that in the future. Thanks!) E-o-F
  21. Despite almost no activity from me, people keep finding my stories! Here's a new review for Fistbump 2: Wow, thank you. Realism is what I'm going for, and I'm glad it came across for you. I've been asked elsewhere (on Tumblr) why I couldn't have told this story when the twins were older: why do they have to be so young (only 14 years old)? Some are understandably squicked by this story there, since there are younger readers. I get the objection. But right from the beginning, this is the story I wanted to tell. This is pretty much the most painful young love story possible. I knew that their complete inexperience and emotional immaturity would make dealing with their situation that much harder. Dipper breaking into tears often? Mabel's inability to control her emotions? Dipper not able to see any solution other than completely breaking things off with Mabel? These aren't actions of older teens or young adults: these are children, thrust into an impossibly terrible situation of discovering intense feelings for one another and knowing that it is incredibly dangerous to act on their feelings. I will finish this story eventually, but the next chapter will be awhile, I'm certain. Sorry. E-o-F
  22. OK, two (related) things about "The Tunnel": - If you had built up the release, chapter by chapter, surely you would have received at least *one* hate mail about that epilogue's ending! Since no one else has, let mine be the first :-) - You teased on Tumblr that you're going to write multiple options, to pick your own ending. No, damnit! :-) Just one real ending! Please? E-o-F
  23. It's all right on my AFF Bio page. Link here: http://members.adult-fanfiction.org/profile.php?no=1296961245 E-o-F
  24. New review for Fistbump 2: A review that perfectly gets across how you feel. I like it. Hope you come back in a few weeks or so for the continuation. Sorry for the delay. E-o-F
  25. No, that video was published long before I was even aware of the show, let alone started writing a fan fic. And there was no inspiration for my story at all, other than the show itself. I was completely unaware of Pinecest fics or art, or even of the whole concept of fan fiction at all, before I had already completed "Fistbump". It was a "whole cloth" creation, as I have never visited AFF, FF.net, Tumblr, AO3, or any other fan fic repository before the day I decided to see if there was anywhere I could publish my story. However, there *is* artwork inspired by the story: I know because I commissioned them! The artist is Pines X 2 on Tumblr. Here they are: Here's the link back to the Tumblr announcement. E-o-F
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