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  1. No lol, I always draw up a blank when it comes to the flirting and dialogue. I saw a fanfic once with the teasing teacher type, Naruto with an OC Hyuga Anbu for a sensei that he runs missions with. And the interactions between them was amazing, the fic is taken down now but comparing my dialogue with it shows how pathetic mine is because I get too rushed.

  2. I asked for Oc's to be honest because I've seen literally like all canon male's and find them lacking. The Oc's though can be specifically tailored for the situation.

    What do you mean by psychology? Personality wise, I make her bored. Her husband is always working, he son is constantly training to take her husbands position, her sex life is terrible and she's an S-class kunoichi so missions are boring aswell. She's a bit too old for pranks now, so after heading to the market once in her kunoichi gear, she notices one teen practically drooling over her body and decides to tease him, finding amusing out of his reactions.


    Do you know what kind of story you're going with? What kind of Kushina your going with and how the first chapter is going to go, the first time she cheats on her husband and is fucked silly by a well hung teen?

  3. In reply to warlock, I don't really like Sasuke or Kiba for lemons. Sasuke is far to emo-like and asexual, he literally cares nothing for girls in canon, And Kiba? Well, he's the butt monkey of the konoha 11, him doing it just makes it lose its luster for me.

  4. Hmm. For instance. while she's staying at a hotel coming back from a mission in the hall she passes by a teens and hears him say something like, "Damn, check the tits and ass on that babe." cuz he says it loudly and boldly Kushina turns and winks replying "Oh you like them, here i'll give you a much better show." then continues on walking, making sure to strut, swinging her ass from side to side as she walked. Then later on she could meet up with him again and he boldly speaks up with, "Hey baby, you gonna give me an even better show this time?"

    Followed by teasing dialogue by her and possibly a wager of some kind that the kid wins to get her in bed with him.

  5. Seeing as Naruto is my favourite character in the manga, I'd preferably have him off banging the likes of Ino/Hinata/Tenten/Sakura/Satsuki(Fem Sasuke) and the like or make it Naruko and eventually have her join in on the sex. If I settled on Naruko I'd have the student be an orphan and she could act kind of like a teasing older sister.

  6. Not really, the only know he's strong as hell. Just passing greetings.

    Kushina has a good idea, the way her students leer and grope her are dead give aways.

    They're basically netorare stories, so while Kushina loves them, the sex-slave only does what her master wants after she's fucked completely stupid.

    You got a good idea of what you want to do with what you're writing?

  7. Naruto's kinda like 15-16 in my head for these stories, while the students are around 12-14 so different clicks really. And met in passing, nothing more really because Minato has his hokage work, Naruto has his 'konoha 12' and kushina has her student/s. It's their own things to keep them occupied, nothing really to do with them.

    And yeah, that's pic I used.

  8. I was going for more Naruto going through basically his teenage rebellion phase and having a mother everyone wants to fuck wouldn't help at all. So in these sets he'd distanced himself from his parents a bit and Kushina returned to active Kunoichi duty. And the thong strap thing would be more like when she's alone with her student or something to tease him more.

    http://fc06.devianta..._jehanaruto.jpg for the story with Jokuro, Ringo and Zongo didn't you?

    Err, this ink just redirects me to this page.

  9. As for the Hinata thing....well maybe something along the lines of Naruto is already cheating on Hinata, their whirlwind romance burned out for him and he sort of just lost his passion for her, which leads to Hinata feeling lonely with Naruto at work constantly and unknown to her giving her sister or Tenten or Ino or something a pounding. Making her fall back into her docile ways which makes it easy for the sons friends to coerce her into bed.

    Because all her friends are also busy (Unknown to her again her husband is busy giving them a pounding, the female ones atleast) She becomes even more lonely, which when her sons friend shows interest in her and begins visiting and speaking to her, brightens her day a bit more every time he visits. Until finally they get more bold and actually actively flirt/grope her and Hinata docile and as lonely as she is doesn't tell them to stop and soon she's on her knees submissively sucking their cock etc etc.

  10. Yeah, there was no incest in them. I'd think her relationship with them would be more distant, her excuse being something like she's training her 'apprentice'.

    http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs28/f/2008/058/e/5/Kushina_by_jehanaruto.jpg - This could be one, an outfit from her teens except now she's much more volutpuous, the shorts clinging to her full rear and zipper being zipped down to show her deep well of cleavage. Maybe some thong straps riding up her hips added in for emphasis.

    http://thumbnail.image.rakuten.co.jp/@0_mall/yu-pi-/cabinet/03294964/03296495/cosplay/img59499421.jpg - Possible a very short Kimono like this, except much more revealing due to Kushina's more volutptuous body.

    Heck, even tight spandex shorts and a plain Jonin vest that can't zip up all the way due to her large breasts.

    I personally would prefer it if she wore sexy lacy underwear aswell, the bra for instance barely being able to contain her big tits.

  11. As for the Hinata thing....well maybe something along the lines of Naruto is already cheating on Hinata, their whirlwind romance burned out for him and he sort of just lost his passion for her, which leads to Hinata feeling lonely with Naruto at work constantly and unknown to her giving her sister or Tenten or Ino or something a pounding. Making her fall back into her docile ways which makes it easy for the sons friends to coerce her into bed.

  12. Well, I see it more along the lines of Kushina's prankster attitude maturing a bit as she grew up. As a Kunoichi, she has no problems flashing a bit of skin to distract enemies for a kill, and she also finds it amusing that the teens she teases would most likely be going home to beat off to the thought of screwing her silly.

    Also, for instance because of this attitude if her student gropes her or a teen leers at her she promotes it because she finds it amusing. Well that, and she'd take a certain bit of pride in her student becoming a man among men, not realizing that soon she'd be getting a taste of it.

    Generally, I'd give the teen/student quite a bit of previous experience despite their age and that they have a real talent for the sexual arts. Hung like a horse, incredibly skilled at bringing pleasure to women and with shinobi training to give more stamina and strength for like say a standing up position while lifting Kushina.

  13. I'd generally go the route where Kushina is repressed, due to her husband being too soft with her in bed and only average sized. Not really slutty in the sense that she'd blow anyone who wanted her, but enough that she has no qualms about teasing teenagers practically drooling over her. I like to see build up before the sex starts, some examples can be found on page 2 of this thread where I posted some un-finished lemons of my own.

    It would be best kept secret since her husband is the hokage and would probably butcher whoever was banging her. A cheating fic because again Minato would murder whoever was banging his wife. You can add Naruko if you want, if not just mention them in passing to clear up that she is a milf.

    Sexy-outfits are a must, is all that really comes to mind fully.

  14. How would Sarada's Sharingan help her get him? Naruto's a kage, no silly little genjutsu could trap him. Hell even then, it would be almost impossible because of all the tailed beast chakra in his system.

  15. They could be simple enough. It isn't a far stretch from canon to say Kushina was a prankster and really competitive.So she could find it amusing to tease teens that are practically drooling over her. Or hell, with a Genin team she could lose a bet which leads to fucking. The noble one, basically if they're high up enough in the government Kushin would be forced to obey them. (Mind you, in real serious fanfiction that would be completely wrong because the daimyo really do have little power in the villages, not to mention they're easy targets for assassination.)

  16. While there is still little known about canon Anko, the fandom casts her in the role of a hardened woman, quite sadistic, always up fora good laugh and a quite at home with sexual debauchery and finds perverted actions all in good fun, and is even quite the ease.

    Enter a student graduating from the academy, who while good with the natural shinobi arts, shows alot of promise in the art of assassination, espionage, interrogation and the like and the Hokage offers him as an apprentice to Anko.

    The apprentice himself should be a perverted lech, and makes no effort to hide that. Leering at Anko, and even boldly groping her when the chance presents itself - Anko true to her fandom attitude should condone it, and even encourage it and tease her student.

    The student should be hung like a horse, and under the few months of being Anko's apprentice, already abused is status as an 'adult' as a shinobi and began breaking in whores - his target is to screw Anko senseless and the chance comes in the form of a bet in some form of competition against Anko the bets being something along the lines of humiliation for him and his term is that if he wins he wants to fuck her.

    I like to read about bouncing big tits and butts, fucked senseless girls with ahegao faces and the girls fucked ragged by giant cocks. So if somebody could take this kinda challenge up I'd like it, maybe someone like Ronin who seems to have alot of skill for these types of lemons.

    Also,the pic that inspired the idea - http://rule34-data-002.paheal.net/_images/6d2019a29d154ce52cfd5141bdaf3fa3/1326289%20-%20Anko_Mitarashi%20Mei_Terumi%20Naruto%20Reit.jpg

  17. Hmm, moves a bit too quickly here. Like you said, Kushina doesn't really come across as Kushina here. Not to mention you have more than one person talking per paragraph, that's a big no no in a fic. Plus, he isn't really endowed to the point where he could break her. Good try though.

  18. I see alot of people wanting Sasuke-esq versions of this kind of thing. I don't really see the appeal. In canon, he's more of a whiny emo. Not to mention, he has a too slight build for me to see him in this role. Bishounen do not make well for this kinda role IMO.


    I have created a template if anyone wants to use it for a Kushina x Noble story, it doesn't have any sex in it though and was created purely to set the scene and build up anticipation.

    It was a sunny day in Konoha, not a cloud in the sky. Kushina Uzumaki walked towards the main gates of Konoha; today she had been given a misson to escort a young noble by the name of Yuuto, the grandson of the Fire Daimyo.

    Her husband, the fourth Hokage, Minato Namikaze had briefed her several days ago on the specifics, the brief outline went as follows; “You are to escort the Fire Daimyo’s grandson to Kirigakure, to ensure his safety and attend to all his needs; a shinobi from Kirigakure shall also be accompanying you.”

    The 38-year old jonin woman who didn’t look any older than 20 despite having a 16-year old son was wearing her standard jonin outfit; a Konoha headband, her long red hair tied up in a high ponytail with strands framing the sides of her face, a flak jacket over a black short-sleeved T-shirt and form-fitting pants that showed off her shapely legs and round butt.

    Kushina knew that this mission would take the best part of a week to complete, since Kiri was far away and the only way there was by boat.

    The Daimyo’s grandson had personally hand picked Kushina for this misson, he had apparently seen her in Konoha before and wanted her to by his bodyguard. Kushina had her suspicions as to why she had been personally chosen by the Daimyo’s grandson; normally clients didn’t get to choose the shinobi they hired. That was usually the sole decision of the Hokage but since this was a mission related to the Daimyo, it was a special case.

    The reward for this mission was huge, it was 3,000,000 ryo and for a mission that was really only at A-rank level despite officially being S-rank it was unheard of, even the hardest S-rank missions were very rarely given a reward this high.

    Kushina wondered if Minato had had the same suspicions that she did, surely he must have realized why she had been handpicked by a pubescent teenage boy? Especially when the mission debriefing specifically stated that she needed to “attend to all his needs.” It didn’t take a genius to work out that being a bodyguard was only part of what was probably going to take place on this mission, for the best part of a week.

    The thought made Kushina shudder. She was somewhat shocked that her husband had given her this mission in the first place, it might have offered an enormous amount of money, but it was hardly as though the village was going through hard times. But she figured that due to it being a Daimyo-related mission, he couldn’t turn it down. Still, she had a pang of dissapointment that he could seemingly give his own wife this mission so easily and act like it was just any regular mission.

    The Uzumaki-Namikaze household had been completely normal since the debriefing, neither she nor Minato talked much about the mission since, she had wondered if it was just an unspoken rule between them about what was probably going to happen on the mission. She concluded that this was probably just an understanding between shinobi, as one of the shinobi rules states “A Shinobi Must Endure”.

    Their son, Naruto Uzumaki was about to be promoted to jonin, she was so proud of him but was dissapointed that she was going to miss his promotion, but she promised once she got back to Konoha she would give Naruto his present for becoming a jonin.

    She was brought out of her thoughts as she saw several people standing at the entrance of Konoha as she reached the gates…

    I'd love to see more of this.

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