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Interesting. Maybe it was just my frame of mind when I started reading but I found myself angry most of the time while reading this. Had my Dad ever screamed at me and threatened me like Jack's Dad did, I can promise you we'd have come to blows. I was also a little pissed at Becca there at the end. Blaming Jack for Craig's mood was way out of line, at least in my opinion. I guess getting me all worked up and angry is the mark of a good writer. Well done, Joe!

Knowing the difficulties he had to go through, he doesn't want his kids to suffer the same fate. Like I said, it's probably NOT the case considering the way Joe has written the rest of the story but at this point, nothing would really surprise me.

While it's probably not the case, it wouldn't surprise me to find out Jack's parents are siblings and had to move away from everyone they knew and loved and that's why the grandparents aren't mentioned. Love all the speculation, especially the outlandish ones. We always need some comic relief to keep us sane.

Magus is a master of giving you a perception and then changing it. Stay tuned. Things aren't always as they seem.

LOVE the story order of this chapter, keeping us waiting to see Max's fate although I'm a bit surprised you didn't milk it with sad, horrified reactions of the rest of the "family" that was on the sub. Still, overall a great chapter. Oh, and I LOVE the Virtual World!

Had a hard time reading the rest of the story after the explosion that seemed to signal Max's demise. I was so bummed I waited until this morning to read the rest. I guess I'll hold judgement and wait to read the next chapter before I decide to riot!

Are you forgetting Emma and Nadi are both knocked up and are at home with Marge and baby Cynthia while Max and company are halfway around the world in the sub? Just give it time. Absence makes the heart grow fonder!

Actually loving the character development with Pell & Simpkins. Always nice to see the nerd get the hot girl. So many characters, so little time. At least it's quality time. Still waiting on the interrogation of faux David. Should be interesting. Thanks for having Gerald stand up to Joanne and the back and forth between Legion and Carol and company was very cool! Nice chapter!

AMEN to THAT!

WOW, Northstar was AWESOME! Thanks for not leaving the last one with a cliffhanger other than thinking Elliot is one lucky SOB.

I was thinking the same thing about Rick. That really would be evil and I'm hoping it's not the case. That would TOTALLY suck!

While I'd love to read another Northstar, leaving us hanging in with GITG in the meantime is just plain MEAN! Amy's not one to make an emergency call like that unless it's important so now I'm a little worried. Kinda bummed Cynthia isn't really Cynthia. Now I'm wondering who the hell she is and why was Umstead pretending to be David and why is Cynthia calling him Dad? Brainwashing or an evil plan? Also gonna have to go back and read the last chapter or two of Northstar just to remember what was happening.

Nice! Glad to see Cynthia is really Max's sister but not sure I like Amy getting a hold of her so soon! Like the backstory on Gerald and Joanne but I still want to flush her, unless she actually DOES have redeeming qualities that none of us can see.

I say flush Joanne. I don't think there's any changing that evil. It's not like she was an inherently good person who was brainwashed. Then again, maybe it should be left up to Gerald and Evan, AFTER they regain their spines. Getting back to David, perhaps he was always Peter Umstead to the government but David Johanson was an alias for secrecy sake. Maybe he's Cynthia's father but Rick is really Max's father. Only our evil genius knows for sure.

It's almost impossible for me to pick a favorite part but I really enjoyed the way you wrote the whole Coach Walburn suicide and Jack's subsequent PTSD. I've also really enjoyed the evolution of Jack and Kayla's relationship.

Holy Crapanoli! That was AWESOME! (Sorry, just watched The Incredibles and the kid on the bike popped into my head). DEFINITELY worth the wait although the Cynthia cliffhanger pissed me off! I was already thinking "David" wasn't really David when he seemed so incredulous towards Max's "toys". Really hoping "Cynthia" IS Cynthia, though. The future tryst implications could REALLY be fun, especially with Alice and Amy. A Cynthia/Alice hookup would be SO cool to read. I also see some more interesting stuff happening in the VW. Besides the Samantha/Gerald/Joanne storyline, they'll have to interrogate David/Peter as well, most likely in the VW. DEFINITELY interested to see how that goes. Mike, Leia AND Mel? Sure didn't see that coming. Nice twist. I guess "The Family" tends to rub off on a person.

Hmmm...either he's gonna surprise us with multiple chapters or RW stuff is still on the warpath. DEFINITELY hoping it's the former.

Went back and read the last chapter again in anticipation. Once again, jonesing....

Personally, I'd like to see what happens during Junior and Senior year as they mature. Also looking forward to seeing what the deal is with Alan and Amanda. Great job!

Yeah, I'm jonesing a bit as well. Checking once in the morning and once in the evening hoping for a tidbit. Waiting patiently isn't my strong suit.

Chapters 1-10 are already up. Bash has already said he's busy and Chapter 11 will be a while. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107539

While waiting for Magus to finish his holiday, I started reading some other stories and came across this on Literotica. It's a little out there unless you're a sci-fi fan but it's VERY well-written and I'm pretty sure Magus would love as much as I did. Book 1 is reminiscent of The Fantastic Four while the continuation book, Book 2, combines Star Trek and Guardians of the Galaxy. Fun read with lots of hot Magusfang-type sex and imagination. I think you guys will enjoy! http://www.literotica.com/s/a-twist-of-destiny-bk-01 http://www.literotica.com/s/a-twist-of-destiny-bk-02

Come on Joe, apples and oranges. You and BashfulScribe are both gifted writers with slightly different styles, even though the subject matter is similar. Just glad to have you both on AFF! The more, the merrier!

All I can say about that chapter is Bravo! VERY well done! As for future chapters, with Volstok dead there's no one to pay off the other bad guys so they're gonna be crawling out of the woodwork, plus I doubt he was the head honcho anyway. I'm guessing it's gonna be a wild and bumpy ride going forward. As for the next chapter's title, I vote for "Samantha Rides a Buffalo".

Great news Conman! Fingers crossed it all works out for the best.