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  1. yukihimedono

    Character's job title

    What about “Curator” or “Concierge”?
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    Histrionics

    In regards to the article, I agree with Desiderius and Dirty. It was only 187 words with no real explanation of how to use Histrionics other than to say “don’t use it”. (And yes, I actually checked his word count.) Honestly, in my opinion, that article was a joke. Just telling others that such devices shouldn’t be used is a little presumptuous considering there is no context to the advice being given. The author does not know the degree of writing experience of his audience and does nothing to exaggerate on the meaning he is trying to convey, which leaves the readers confused and unsure of how or whether to use this literary device. That would be like having a gay character not be flamboyant in any way or having a surfer not use any beach slang. It also constrains the character and his/her actions within the work and, if a writer is attempting to create a realistic situation with real characters, then such actions like slamming a door or punching a wall or throwing a book would be necessary as they are real-life actions taken by real-life people. Okay, I’m done ranting now.
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    Character Building

    How much time do you spend trying to create the Perfect Woman? She's brilliant, passionate and the life of the party. She can cook, clean, raise children and hold down a job with no problem. There's nothing she can't do. It's a great thing to dream about but there's a problem – no one, even characters, are perfect. In any movie or novel you read, there is always some obstacle that the heroine has to overcome and these barriers allow the reader to connect emotionally to your character. If you start out with a perfect character then there's no place for them to grow with the reader. There isn't anything compelling them to follow your story and character, wanting to know what will happen next or will she be okay. That doesn't mean she has to have gone through some horrible situation but small problems can mount up, so keep that in mind. Regardless of the genre there are eight basic heroines. The Boss is a take charge woman. She demands respect and her goals are her most important things in life. She doesn't accept failure and she won't give up. She's a workaholic, confident, competitive, arrogant, and her attitude must be consistent with her behavior. Imagine how she would act in a situation – I use key words like the ones listed in the previous sentence. Examples: Working girl climbing a corporate ladder, a pampered princess. Katharine Hepburn is a good example. She's played many 'boss archetypes' (Eleanor of Aquitaine in The Lion in Winter). The Survivor is mysterious, manipulative and has many charms. She's street smart and her intelligence is always hiding behind a seductive smile but she always keeps her wits. She hides a very strong streak of distrust in anyone and it's second nature to size up everyone in a room the minute she enters. Cynicism guides her every action. Her survival instincts gives her the means to do whatever is necessary to come out ahead. She skates on thin ice and may seem more of a villainess than heroine. Eventually a hero comes who is able to see through the wall she built around herself. Examples: Margaret Mitchell, who crafted the icon of a Survivor through Scarlett O'Hara in Gone With the Wind, Sharon Stone in Basic Instinct, Madonna in Evita, or Bette Davis in just about anything. The Spunky Kid is funny, supportive, reliable, the All-American Girl. She's not looking to be at the top, just in her own little niche. She's the team player, always ready to lend a hand. She maybe a cheerleader but never captain. She doesn't have any enemies and plenty of friends. Her humor helps her through the bumps of her love life, "ever the bridesmaid" ring a bell? She's more comfortable to hang around the guys than dress up. She never runs away and can forget the differences between her and the hero if it can stop an escalating situation. She also worries for others more than herself. Examples: Meg Ryan in Sleepless in Seattle, Melanie Griffith in Working Girl, and Janine Garofalo in The Truth About Cats & Dogs. The Free Spirit is "original", playful, fun loving, acts on a whim and follows her heart, and not head. She sets trends and is always looking for new experiences. She travels through life with a hop, skip and jump always stopping to smell the flowers and admire the colors. She can be a little ditzy but is sincere and willing to help. She scoffs at danger and resists any effort to be pulled to safety, enjoying the excitement and would be high from the adrenaline rush. Examples: Lucille Ball, Goldie Hawn, Jenna Elfman from Dharma & Greg, and Calista Flockhart in Ally McBeal. These women share sincerity and imagination, with a strong sprinkling of an impulsive need to meddle in their friends' lives. The Waif is the original damsel in distress. Think Cinderella, Sleepy Beauty, Rapunzel. Her innocence evokes a protective urge from the hero. She has a tremendous amount of will and will endure instead of fighting back. She's pure at heart, too trusting and insecure. She seems untouched by the harshness of the world and is patient and adaptable to any situation. She'll carry on looking for the day she will be free of her suffering but takes little action to bring herself closer to that day. If she's cornered, she will take desperate measures when there is no other option. Examples: Marilyn Monroe in The Misfits and La Femme Nikita (I guess I could see Nikita as a waif in the beginning). The Librarian is prim and proper but has a passionate side. She's learned to lead with her brain and not her body. She doesn't wear revealing clothes and always has an answer, which can make her quite stubborn to others opinions. She's serious, efficient, and may have to overcome feelings of inadequacy. She's prefers a well-reason debate to settle differences, is practical and takes a moment to study the situation, trying to find the easiest way to safety. She can take care of herself but wouldn't turn a man down. Examples: Shelly Long in Cheers, Shirley Jones in The Music Man, (wonderful movie), Ellen Barkin in The Big Easy. The Crusader is a modern heroine who doesn't scream in fear. She's not a damsel in distress. She has a mission and marches over anyone in her way. This woman is headstrong, tenacious, keeps her eyes on the goal and brushes off any opposition. You can't calm her down or force her to do anything and she doesn't need to be protected. If you aren't helping her, then you're in her way – or even an enemy. So if she has to save or protect something, she's a crusader. Examples: Sarah Michelle Gellar in Buffy, Lucy Lawless in Xena, Wonder Woman, BatGirl, Supergirl. The Nurturer is not always Suzy Homemaker but she takes care of everyone else. She listens, is happy to see you, serene, capable, optimistic, calm, cool, collected and always has the answers. Her role is to take care of family and friends so anyone can depend on her. Examples: Julie Andrews who played Mary Poppins and Gabrielle from Xena. (Will eventually post the Eight Male Archetypes.)
  4. Feedback use to effect me and how I would write a story. I had one work called ‘The Gates of Heaven and Hell’ and it ended up with two split timelines – one that the readers seemed to like then the one that I originally envisioned. Needless to say that the “favorite” version was never finished. I lost interest even though readers seemed to like it because I wasn’t as invested in that storyline as I was in my original one. That taught me an important lesson. I think it’s a Catch-22. It’s hard to find a balance between what you enjoy writing and what readers will enjoy. If you aren’t happy then chances are the work won’t see a conclusion. Plus, you have those readers who are ardent followers of a writer and will read anything and everything said writer publishes. My process is different now. I tend to write several chapters before I consider posting any work, and most of the time it doesn’t see the light of the internet. LOL. Saying all that, I do have one work where I have had lots of reviews and that has encouraged me to continue writing, though things don’t get put out there as much. And I do work collaboratively with other writers and readers. There have also been suggestions (some in reviews and some emailed to me) that I have taken into consideration and even implemented into the work. I believe that it’s based on a “case by case” scenario. There are some stories that you create and don’t want to see major changes and then there are some that you feel free enough to take those risks. I think it depends on how you feel about a work as to how it progresses, whether that is the pace of your writing or the plot of your story.
  5. yukihimedono

    Reviews anyone?

    Warning: THIS IS A RANT. My rant. Why is it that no one reviews stories anymore? Everytime I read something, I comment - even if it sounds super corny! I think it encourages the writers to work more knowing that there are people that are enjoying their work. And it's a great way to develop your writing skills. It encourages them to continue and get better! I sucked major (really) when I first started writing in 1998. (I think I'm revealing my age, >,<") It's been over ten years and I've gotten more comments and likes from those horribly written fics than I do now. Why is that!? Criticism can be bad or good but at least it's something, right? It's within in the perception of the receiver as to whether they take it with a grain of salt or blow it out of proportion. Even though I was starting out, the negative words didn't get to me. The encouraging responses from others were what I focused on. People were reading my work and liking it! It made me feel really happy that my ideas were something worthy of reading. Are people afraid to say anything now? What's wrong with 'I liked it' or 'good job' or 'interesting'? A word at least! I beg you readers, please do something! I'm sure that, for people like RosieB, Wheezambu or QuirkySlayer, reviews are what kept them writing through the years. I don't know anyone who hasn't heard of 'Beside You in Time', 'Possession' or 'By the River of Shadowed Moments'. These weren't written quickly but, at the same time, are some well-written and thought-out stories that have so many complexities. Sure you have to wait for chapters but I don't mind and several hundreds of others don't either. To be honest, I've written thousand of pages, several oneshots and tons of ideas, but most of my work isn't published. I don't post it because I don't see a point - to a certain extent. I do have friends that read what I write and urge me to continue but I write for myself, like every other fanfiction author, more than anything else. And like everyone else, real life gets in my way, but I believe that I would post more if I knew that there were people that enjoyed what I have to write and say. I feel like I'm in a stalemate. I only get feedback from a limited audience and would much rather prefer honest thoughts from others. I'm never going to met you. And even if I do, what are the chances with seven billion people on the planet? So please, take a minute or two and just say something. If you like an author, review their work - encourage them. If you don't like a work, at least find something nice to say to balance the negative comment. You don't have to be harsh, bad comments can be more helpful than good ones if they are worded correctly. And if you don't want to post it for others to read, then PM them. Just do something.
  6. Sent you an email. XD

  7. I can't wait for the anime con!!

  8. It's taken me about a week but I got my desktop running now. Put another gig of ram in, had to default to CS3 but I have all of the FF .docs from my laptop (now backed up) on it. Now I have to go find my muse. ;(

    1. sumeragichan

      sumeragichan

      *pokes* Where do we need to start?

    2. yukihimedono

      yukihimedono

      I'll have to check my email and see what I did with the chapter you sent back to me. XP

    3. sumeragichan
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    Misplaced Story

    I was wondering around and found this fic, 'So Sick' in the wrong subsection of anime. This is the only work by the author. Title: So Sick http://anime.adultfa...hp?no=600041906 Category: Anime Fandom: Kamikaze Kaitou Jeanne (not listed) Originally placed in: Pretear
  10. I've got bad, horrible & good news. !st, my harddrive crashed, #2 I lost a ton of stuff (most of which can't be replaced + business stuff + videos of my family), #3 few were FF related. It took me almost a week to get everything off. ;(

    1. sumeragichan

      sumeragichan

      *cries* I have what you sent me... *hugs* That's not good

    2. DemonGoddess

      DemonGoddess

      man oh man, I've had that happen to me before as well. Reminds me, I need to do a backup...soonish

  11. For the past year, I have been using one-word prompts to write drabbles and oneshots. I find that it's a nice break when writing multi-chapter fics and it helps "freshen" me up when I return to them. I hope this helps you too. Prompt: scurrilous - grossly or obscenely abusive Sample post taken from rules. Pen Name: Apollo Story link: (Link) Review replies link: (link, if you have one) Type of fic: Drabble Rating: Adult ++ Fandom: Original Pairing: N/A Warnings: M/M, PWP, Oral, Bond I don't plan on closing this thread. I hope that I posted this correctly.
  12. yukihimedono

    Attack site

    Thank you so much! I'm getting the same thing and it's driving me crazy. It took me thirty minutes just to login. I swear I'm about to throw my laptop out a window.
  13. Games of Thrones was so F*CKING awesome and yet I'm so F*CKING pissed. I've got to get the second book but I don't want to wait a year for season two. SO UNFAIR! *sobs*

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    2. Daye

      Daye

      If you've already read the books. you don't have to wait that long for new stuff; Dance With Dragons, the fifth book is out in july. (supposedly, with martin you never know)

    3. DemonGoddess

      DemonGoddess

      I know, I've been waiting for that book for years.

    4. Daye

      Daye

      still if he doesn't come out with the sixth and seventh books more quickly, the shows going to out pace him. If it survives that long anyway.

  14. I've been in a slump lately. My muse seems to have abandoned me for the moment. Any suggestions? I've tried just about everything.

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    2. Keith Inc.

      Keith Inc.

      Just write.

      I sit and type everything that comes into my mind. After a while, the muse gets tired of 'Is this working i don't konw if this is working it is boaring ah! i said boaring! like screwing a pig into a wall what an image can i use it? naw. God this is boring.

      Then she gets pissed and give me the next chapter.

    3. yukihimedono

      yukihimedono

      My solution was yard work for three days. I shunned everything else. Got a nice tan thou. XD

    4. yukihimedono

      yukihimedono

      @ Keith: that's the reason I have tons of have started stories on my hard drive. LOL! Ironically, I came up with three different stories while on my so-called 'break'.

  15. yukihimedono

    Hopebringer Jem's challenge to all!

    So theme-wise, it would be plays. Are you looking for either original characters or ones from a fandom in as the "characters" from the play?
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    Hopebringer Jem's challenge to all!

    Does it matter which playwright we draw from? For example, can it be a modern playwright or should it be one that the playwright had passed (after so many years, the play can be used without paying royalty fees and etc.)?
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    Beta and Brainstorming

    Information on fiction: Fandom: Ruin Explorers (Anime) Title: Ruin Explorers (not original, I know) Pairing: Ihrie / OC / Lyle (other various pairings) Rating: Adult+ Story Link: Ruin Explorers Warnings: Abuse, Angst, H/C, M/F, OC, Tort, UST My personality: I'm laid back, easy going and am not easily offended, which I consider a plus. My desire: This was a work I started over ten years ago and was never finished. I really want to complete this. There is a great lack of fiction from this anime and I loved the OVA (though I was extremely unsatisfied with how it ended). Plus, my writing skills have greatly improved since then. Details about how I write: I started the revision process last month (on the May 15th) and having been steadily pumping out chapters. (I will not post what chapter I am currently working on in the forums.) I don't have a set limit to the chapters but I prefer to keep their length within a 5 to 12 page range - (my average seems to be 8). I think this helps me and it will give my beta an idea of the expected length. Something not too long is easier to "get through" than something 20 pages. I also like to post weekly. Details about the story: The story focuses on Ihrie, one of two of the main characters. She is cursed and I wanted to write about how she might have lifted her curse. I have several original characters since there was a limit to who was introduced through the anime. There are sex scenes and battle scenes that I have already written. {Examples of how I write sex scenes: Indelible (Inuyasha; Sess/Kag) & Rapturous (Ruin Explorers; Ihrie/Lyle), can also be seen as a prologue to this multi-chapter work.} I used several different generators to help me with names and such, which is why some of them look weird (I include pronunciations at the end of the chapters). Note: It's been a long time since I have written battle scenes so I do not have anything I can offer as as example. Everything I have is over two years old. Requirements: I would need someone to bounce ideas off of and offer them. Suggests would always be welcomed, even if you think they are 'out of left field', conversations and ideas evolve so I am willing to discuss even the craziest of ideas though I may not use them. I guess that's where my plot bunnies come from. (If I end up using any ideas, I give credit. So don't worry.) Helping me keep things 'straight' - like details, maybe something I missed/forgot or something seems confusing. Constructive criticism is always welcomed. I do not shy away from that. My feelings aren't going to be hurt and I would prefer someone likewise. If I reject an idea, I am not offending the architect and I would like someone who understands this. The warnings above pertain to what I had already planned for the storyline, which were written/flushed out chapters, and could change (which I'm willing). Please keep this in mind. I am well past that and am beginning to have some difficulties with coming up with plausible ideas. I don't want some 'out of left field' twist that won't make sense within my story (does that make sense?). I do not require prior knowledge since the world and characters were not that well flushed out. I prefer to communicate through email so having a forum account isn't a requirement. Though not required, I would also love advice on my writing. What you think, my details (describing and such), certain scenes (battles and sex), conversations and any other thing that you believe could be improved. Perks: First to read chapters, access to my notes and ideas, harassing or giving me a hard time is completely acceptable. Sometimes you just need a good kick in the ass to get going again. Thank you for reading my post.
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    Beta and Brainstorming

    Thanks for the compliment, Jem. I'd love your help. I'm not worried about a time schedule at the moment. I feel that I am far enough along that small delays won't hurt me so your sporadic net activity is not a problem for me. I'll PM you with my private email address.
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    Ruin Explorers

    Chapter 8 is up. Rating: Adult+. Feedback: Yes, please. URL: http://anime.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600051620&chapter=8
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    Ruin Explorers

    Hi, I just posted the first chapter of my multi-chapter Ruin Explorers fiction. Please check it out if you have time. Title: Ruin Explorers Author: yukihime Summary: With Rugudorull defeated, Ihrie and Fam set out in search to break Ihrie's curse, leaving Lyle with Rasha and Miguel to pick up the pieces of the fallen kingdom. The duo meet a new friend and stumble onto something that will change Ihrie's life, bringing secrets and feelings forward that shake the group. Set after the OVA series. Rating: Adult+. Pairings: Ihrie/Lyle, Ihrie/OC, Fam/OC. Spoilers: End of the OVA series. Feedback: Yes, please. URL: http://anime.adultfa...hp?no=600051620 Thanks, yukihime None of the chapters have been beta-read. After it's finished, I will then re-post the proof-read chapters.
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    New category (Manga)

    Thanks and you did. You're so awesome Dem.
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    New category (Manga)

    Catagory name: Red River (Anatolia Story) Section catagory to be in: Manga Do you have any stories for it?: Yes, a completed oneshot. Thanks.
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    yukihime user prompt #3

    I would love feedback. Hope you enjoy. Pen Name: yukihime Title: Accubation - word count 338 * Story link: http://manga.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600000000 Type of fic: Oneshot Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Red River Pairing: Kali/Yuri Warnings: AFFO, ChallengeFic, COMPLETE, Oneshot * added by me.
  24. Prompt three. Prompt: accubation - the practice of eating or drinking while lying down Sample post taken from rules. Pen Name: Apollo Story link: (Link) Review replies link: (link, if you have one) Type of fic: Drabble Rating: Adult ++ Fandom: Original Pairing: N/A Warnings: M/M, PWP, Oral, Bond I don't plan on closing this thread.
  25. Prompt four. I decided to do it a little differently, though it's a little late. Prompt: dolcemente - (Italian) sweetly Notes: There is not a set limit of words but it should not be something longer than a oneshot (or what could be passed as one). Sample post taken from rules. Pen Name: Apollo Story link: (Link) Review replies link: (link, if you have one) Type of fic: Drabble, FlashFic, Oneshot Rating: Adult ++ Fandom: Original Pairing: N/A Warnings: M/M, PWP, Oral, Bond I don't plan on closing this thread. I made a change that I forgot to post with the rules. That's what I get for posting hastily. Please see the note above.