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  1. Suggested Reading

    in General

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    Okay, so the idea here is if you have found a good manga or book online that you would like to share, post it here as follows

    Example:

    Title: Bitter Virgin

    Summary (if applicable): Suwa Daisuke is the ladies man of his small town high school, and he has his eye on most every girl, except for one. Aikawa Hinako isn't his type, but when he overhears a deep dark secret of hers, he finds himself thinking of her more and more.

    Link: http://www.onemanga.com/Bitter_Virgin/

    It's very sad but well done

  5. The Poetry of Sex

    in Writers' Corner

    Posted

    I am very grateful for all the help I have gotten so far :D .

    I agree that using "penis" does sound too clinical but what I think the hardest thing for a writer is figuring out what euphemisms you can use, and defining the line between reasonable and ridiculous.

    But I guess that is something you have to figure out as you go along

  9. The Poetry of Sex

    in Writers' Corner

    Posted

    Oh and apart from the line that Keith pointed out, I'm afraid the "tiny love button" line made me giggle. Just goes to show, you can't please everyone. Write for the audience you want to attract to your story.

    Yeah, I really hope that the author was parodying sex when they wrote that line. Honestly "tiny love button" sounds like a kids toy!

  10. Lost in Translation

    in Fandom Resources

    Posted

    Okay, so a couple more things...

    As a Sesshomaru fan, I completely died at this one - Sesshomaru loses composure and becomes angry on the late Kagura's behalf - http://www.onemanga.com/Inuyasha/407/03/

    Even though there is ALOT of tension between the two brothers, InuYasha is willing to save Sesshomaru from death

    http://www.onemanga.com/Inuyasha/407/10/

    I know you anti-Sessh' prolly want to kill me but I have a point to make: http://www.onemanga.com/Inuyasha/409/14/ (you'll need to read the next few pages)

    ANYWAYS, thats it for now... XD I actually want to read the rest of this :D

    Oh an possibly one of Naraku's most bad ass form so far : http://www.onemanga.com/Inuyasha/442/08/

  11. Lost in Translation

    in Fandom Resources

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    Okay, so basically this topic is to show the differences between characters, plot lines, and ending of the manga and tv show.

    The one example I have for now is Sesshomaru and Kagura;

    1. Kagura becomes a protagonist

    I am pretty sure that it was in chapters 368-374 that Kagura changes sides, betraying Naraku, Hakudoushi and Muromaru (Naraku's incarnation; and I know muromaru is spelled wrong).

    2. Naraku returns Kagura's heart

    In these chapters as well, Naraku meets up with Kagura and returns her heart to her; then he peirces her with his tentacles (?) and injects her with his poisonous miasma, killing her slowly.

    3. Kagura was in love with Sesshomaru

    Sesshomaru meets with Kagura but is unable to save her with Tenseiga. Kagura thinks that Sesshomaru came for her because she smells of Naraku, but Sesshomaru tells her that he knew it was her. Kagura's final words were "in the end, I got to see you"

    Thats it for now... but you see the difference of portrayal.

    This is chapter 368 here http://www.onemanga.com/Inuyasha/368/01/

    and this is the exact page where Kagura says "in the end, I got to see you" - http://www.onemanga.com/Inuyasha/374/13/

  12. The Poetry of Sex

    in Writers' Corner

    Posted

    I have read several stories that involve explicit sex and I have found that sexual scenes written in an artful way are more of a turn on then those that well end up like this:

    Her slender, silken thighs opened to the sweetest, tightest piece of woman he’d ever had.

    Finally he was able to lodge himself within the tightest passage that had ever enclasped his throbbing manhood.

    He felt a moist warmth enclose the end of his throbbing manhood, and then more than the end.

    She saw the small sensual flare of his nostrils.

    And with each pulse came a sensual rain that eased his way even more.

    He continued his sensual movements, caressing her most private nub of flesh with his thumb.

    The tip of his finger found her tiny love button, and he rubbed it.

    He drew back to caress the nubbin of flesh now tight and throbbing with need.

    … he could part her legs and put his tongue on the burning pearl of flesh that made her scream out.

    I am reading a very interesting article right now about the mechanics of sexual scenes in writing. And reading through these examples of novel scenes, I have to agree with author of this lengthy article - these are terrible scenes that would drive me more to laughter than anything else.
    I’ll start with a theory: no matter how messed up we are as a culture when it comes to sex, no matter how obliged people may feel to disavow an interest in reading about sex, almost everybody is drawn to it. Because that’s true, some authors feel obliged, and write sex scenes for the wrong reasons. Usually this ends badly. The basic truth is this:
    any
    and
    every
    scene needs to earn its place in the narrative flow, and sex is no different. No matter how much I love a character and a story, I’m not interested in following them everwhere. The author can safely leave out bathroom visits, cutting of toenails, the phone call about the electric bill, the spilled coffee, the songs on the radio while the character drives to work. Unless something significant happens (Anna discovers a breast lump while she’s in the shower; Mary spills her coffee on her wedding dress accidentally on purpose) this stuff doesn’t belong in the story. In the same way, you end up with generic, boring, unnecessary sex scenes stocked with color by number orgasms
    unless there’s a compelling reason to include the scene in the first place
    .

    Carefully constructed, thoughtful sex scenes are one good way to show what’s right or wrong in a relationship; it’s in high tension situations that characters let go, and really, what else is sex about? Where else is character revealed in such a direct way? It’s not the only way to do this, but it can be a very effective one.

    So sex scenes go wrong because (1) the author writes such a scene for reasons that have nothing to do with characterization and story; (2) the author is personally uncomfortable with such scenes. In either case, a writer often resorts to shortcuts, and what is a shortcut in fiction? Stereotype and cliche. It’s hard to come up with an interesting, non-generic sex scene that’s motivated by the characters and the narrative, so some authors fall back on the tried and (supposedly) true. Then you’ve got a generic sex scene which is boring and (at best) poorly written or (at worst) unintentionally funny.

    Which brings me to these examples. These sentences are from published novels, each of them from a different author, but you’ll notice that there are some striking similarities.

    He knelt between her silken thighs, his throbbing manhood poised at her entrance.

    Her slender, silken thighs opened to the sweetest, tightest piece of woman he’d ever had.

    Finally he was able to lodge himself within the tightest passage that had ever enclasped his throbbing manhood.

    He felt a moist warmth enclose the end of his throbbing manhood, and then more than the end.

    She saw the small sensual flare of his nostrils.

    And with each pulse came a sensual rain that eased his way even more.

    He continued his sensual movements, caressing her most private nub of flesh with his thumb.

    The tip of his finger found her tiny love button, and he rubbed it.

    He drew back to caress the nubbin of flesh now tight and throbbing with need.

    … he could part her legs and put his tongue on the burning pearl of flesh that made her scream out.

    If you’re writing about driving a car, the same terms are going to come up over and over again: steering wheel, ignition, stick shift, turn signal, key. The same is true when you write about sex: certain terms come up again and again. These happen to be terms which are loaded down with all kinds of secondary meanings and associations, and so an author chooses from variants available based on (1) the tone of the story and scene (2) the character’s leanings (3) the author’s own comfort level. It’s a simple fact of social conditioning that some of us just can’t write certain things down. Let’s take, for example, the range of euphemisms for the word
    penis
    . In the examples above we get the infamous
    throbbing manhood
    , but in each of those cases other variants could be substituted that would be far less coy. The same is true of cliches and euphemisms you see here for clitoris. The result? The reader’s attention is dragged away from the story.

    For example, let’s consider
    burning pearl of flesh
    . The thoughts that went through my head: Can a pearl burn, and if
    that
    pearl burns, she’s in pain and not having a real good time just now, right? Isn’t a pearl too hard a substance to serve as a metaphor here? And the color’s all wrong, too. And if the pearl of flesh is really burning, he’s about to get a big surprise — and a blister on his tongue. Maybe some sensual rain would be a good idea at this juncture, eh?

    The bottom line: a writer who can only be comfortable writing about sex by resorting to these kinds of suspect terms and images shouldn’t be writing about sex at all.

    Genitalia, erogenous zones and specific acts aren’t the only place where the unmotivated, uncomfortable or lazy writer will resort to cliches. There is a list of words that have been so overused that they should be retired, maybe permanently. Silken thighs, raven tresses, sensual anything — these phrases have been stripped of any meaning they might have once had. Now they are nothing more than placeholders, and funny placeholders, at that. When the author resorts to these terms, you really have come to the place where it would be possible — and preferable — to substitute “and then they had sex” for the whole extended scene.
    -

    Anyways, the reason why I originally posted this topic is because I need help. I want to be able to write the artful sex that isn't cheesy and I will admit that while I am knowledgeable enough, I don't know how to transfer that knowledge to the page in a piece of art.

    Oh and I would suggest reading this article ^

  13. Added through 7/15

    in Fiction Archive

    Posted

    Category name: Repo! The Genetic Opera

    Section catagory to be in: Movies

    Do you have any stories for it?: Yes. :D

    I know a few authors who would probably post their fics here along with the official Repo! board if they knew they could. :cry:

    I second this request... I would be up for reading/writing adult fanfiction for this one ^^

  18. Favourites?

    in Fiction Archive

    Posted

    I'd really like to have an option to save a story as a favourite or put it on a story alert, because I don't really want a million favourites under my favourite tab.

    Is there any way that members can have a place to put their favourite stories, so they are easy to find?

  19. I could use a little help

    in Writers' Corner

    Posted

    Okay, here's the dealeo.

    I am writing a story (InuYasha, SessxKag - Yes I know the pairing is overdone but here me out) and I am desperately seeking help with the title and summary.

    Now before you think this is a ploy so you guys will read my story, it is not an intentional one although that is how it would work out.

    Originally when I wrote the story, the title seemed perfect, but that damn little plot bunny in my head suddenly morphed into a monster of epic proportions (okay, well maybe not epic BUT you get my point). So, I need a more suitable title and I really need help with the summary - they are weak. Here is the information, if anyone can help me (I'll also be asking my beta) :

    Story Title: Serene Lies

    Summary: After Naraku places a spell on Kagome to manipulate her, the group must call on Sesshomaru for help. However, things become rather dicey when the spell is broken Angst, Death, D/s, Humil, Language, M/F, MC, OC, Oral, SH, WAFF, WIP

    Story Link: http://inu.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095475

    Bear with the short chapters please... I am in the process of editing them... But what I really need (as you can probably see) is a real attention grabber of a summary. Please, help?

  24. What's Your Fav Inu Story?

    in General

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    Oh wow... it's been a while for me. I remember reading a pretty good one like... four years ago. XD But I haven't read any recently. I think I should start searching for new fics. Specifically with Sesshomaru in them. XD

    I agree... I do like Sesshomaru fics... Although it would be nice to see some as a general fic where he is by himself

  25. I don't think I've raged so hard in a long time.

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    Okay, I'll admit that I am a Sess/Kag writer (don't kill me) but I don't really think its fair to group all those stories as fangirling stories. For instance, this story is my FIRST InuYasha fanfiction, but I also wrote a oneshot that is...well... I guess its General... Its a darkfic. >.< And my next one is going to be and InuYasha/KAg fic, and I have a Shippo/ Rin, and a Shippo/Souten idea coming up in the future...

    So it's not all fangirls... There are some of us who are writing the story for the challenge of it

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