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Once the time turner gets written in, “linearity” is out the window Not that it was the first point of non-linearity, as I’ve also got some “alternate reality” creeping in too. Thus, quirks are starting to appear, like new yet old paintings showing up on the walls at Hogwarts.

If the author has a forum account as well as an archive account, you could PM them. Otherwise, unless they've put an email address or something in their profile, a review might be your only recourse. If it were me, I'd be glad for someone to point out a problem like that, even in a review. Remember, the author can always delete the review if they take offense -- or after they have fixed the problem you pointed out.

This is more of an issue for me on the reader side of things. There was a story I was curious about which I kinda wanted to read but the formatting of the first couple chapters is off. I looked at some of the later chapters and they seem to fix it later but I’m a little put off by the first several chapters. Would it be considered bad of me to point this out to the author? I feel it’s probably better to do one on one but I’m not sure how to go about doing that. Rather than get a moderator or admin involved in it directly. I could write a review but that feels too public and somewhat mean.

I guess I’ve gotten into your head? My bad.

Naruko admits that Sasuke is the most handsome and strongest shinobi among their age group, and according to Hinata he also has the biggest cock, so she decides to steal him with the help of her best friend Hinata before Ino and Sakura. One night while Sasuke is sleeping in his bedroom Naruko and Hinata sneak into his bed naked. Usually Sasuke ignores the girls that are chasing after him, but it is impassible to ignore Naruko and Hinata when one of them taking his whole massive cock in her throat while the other sucking his balls. Slutty Naruko RTN Hinata NSFW: https://rule34.xxx/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=3545397&tags=hyuuga_hinata+naruko+sasuke_uchiha+ https://rule34.xxx/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=2835476&tags=naruko++sasuke_uchiha+ https://rule34.xxx/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=2586205&tags=hyuuga_hinata_%28naruto%3A_road_to_ninja%29+sasuke_uchiha+

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45182. @WillowDarkling Also the 18th of this month was the 45th anniversary of the last major Mt. St. Helens eruption (USA state of Washington). I remember being driven to see the aftermath, but I was too young to really understand it.

Heh… was recently thinking of this thread while working on my potter fanfic as it involved a time turner

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Hi Winkey, the "bad ending" you describe would probably fit in better as an alternative ending for Natla's Revenge. I've done a Natla, Mary and Sam ending, so I'd probably use that for the Sybil Ending. I teased Lara having her Title and Estate stolen from her by Sybil in the other endings, so it would be perfect here. The original idea was for Sybil to be the new Countess of Abingdon and Lara forced to live her her old house, but as Sybil's maid. That's essentially what most of Voluntary Enslavement is about, hence why I haven't bothered to do the last ending for Natla's Revenge up til now; but I like the idea of Lara becoming property, because bitchy Sybil thinks that even indentured servitude is too good for Lara. She wants Lara to be her property! Also, unlike this story, that story had forced bestiality in it (see the Sam ending and the Mary ending), so Sybil could get Lara some friends to play with. I want to finish the current story first, but I'll get to writing the Natla's Revenge alternative ending next. Good idea - cheers!

I’m looking for this fic where LM/SS and HP/DM have established relationships, and the story plays out at mostly at Malfoy Manor. Harry realises that Lucius is abusive, and comforts Snape in the middle of the night(s), over time falling in love with him.

45180 = 4 * 5 * 9 * 251 Also, it’s the zip code for Colonia Pedro Moreno, Zapopan - Jalisco (Mexico).

I know, I liked that very much but would love a more humiliation driven take on that. It was just part of her overall debasement and not the main theme in my opinion. But I totally get that it's done with this as far as you are concerned. Ponygirl fits her even more now that you mention it. Will wait in anticipation

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Hi Wonky, glad you liked the chapter. I already did the puppy dog thing in Chapter 22, but I do have a pony girl scene planned for later. Thanks for the good wishes.

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I loved loved loved the new chapter. My biggest fetishes is petplay, so I would love to see Mary trying to transform her into a feet loving little doggy. What is a better position to sniff and lick feet, to suck on beautiful toes than on all fours. This will be extremely humiliating for Lara, who in that time frame (1 week, 2 weeks, or even 1 month) will not be allowed to talk, being punished when she speaks like a human and not bark like a dog. Mary could even use sensory deprivation in form of a nice thick hood and earplugs to rob Lara of her senses and become entirely dependent on Mary to guide her along the mansion. Over time Lara will crave every order, every interaction to break the deafening silence the hood and plugs punish her with. She will become even more desperate to please, to do everything even if that means debasing her. She will do it all happily since it means someone is paying her attention, someone sees her worthy of their time. There will still of course be resistance from Lara, which will be either punished by paddle or whip, or worse, by ignoring her for long stretches of time. Lara will learn to avoid those punishments and simply accept everything Mary makes her do as law. This could lead the way for two outcomes. One is that this is a temporary thing for a week or a month, with Lara coming out of the experience even more broken or docile. The alternative could be a petplay themed “bad end” ending, not canon. In this reality Lara becomes Lassy, Sarahs and Marys pet doggy. She is no longer considered human, Sarah even registers her like one would a normal dog and pays taxes on her. She is property, in every fiber of her being and in the eyes of the law. Still a part of high society, just in a cruel perverted way as she lazes next to Sarahs feet on the ground, being groped, petted and made fun of by the other members of society. In my opinion this would be the ultimate fall from grace next to objectification, turning her into a statue or something in Sarahs office. Lara is not even considered human any longer and has hit total rock botto. Either way, every time you finish your updates I yearn for time to pass by quicker, just to read your next chapter. All the best to you and your family and I hope you have a great day!

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You’re definitely right and I think I’ve done an okay job so far. I’m pretty far into chapter 2 or what might be considered character 2 of a story and I think I’ve come up with an interesting way to do it. Basically, each character has their own somewhat different relationship to the main villain character and I’m telling the story of different ways they came to be taken over by the villain. Kinda built around similar themes. So for instance, character 1 has resisted many things about the villain all throughout the narrative. Their story is all about kinda finally giving in to everything. However, with character 2, it’s more of a twisted love story where they think the villain is in love with them only to realize once it’s too late that isn’t their dynamic at all. I’m also sorta outlining character 3 and this one is more about the character’s ego and how the villain metaphorically strokes it for their own purposes. Whereas character 4 it’s a mystery they’re trying to unravel. At least that’s how it’s kinda playing out story wise. We follow the characters at different stages and how this lead to their downfall.