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Review responses for "Just One Rule" [The Loud House]

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Here, I’ll post responses to any reviews of “Just One Rule.”

Summary: Sequel to “Enter the Sandboy.” All summer, Lincoln Loud has been having regular sex with all ten sisters and his mom, on just one condition: no sex outside the Loud house. But now that a new school year is beginning, will Lincoln be able to resist temptation? Spoiler alert: No.

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From Fairy-Slayer on August 17, 2020

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Good opening with a very intimate look at how things and attitudes had changed now that they had been enjoying the new system for a while. 

Part of why I wanted to write a sequel to "Enter the Sandboy" was to look at how the situation set up in that story would have evolved over time. Given that the Loud kids are famous for their "creative conflict resolution," I figured they'd work out a system for satisfying everyone's sexual needs.

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Lola's little quirk is kind of cute, but maybe kind of expected that she'd be "pushy precocious," but it's a little sweet that she tries to be more appealing to Lincoln. Maybe she's growing up in some very good ways too… especially how hot & horny she is. Nice that it's all still very exciting for her.

I enjoy writing Lola. I also wanted to make sure she got a full-on sex scene in this story because she didn't get to go all the way with Lincoln in "Sandboy."

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Meanwhile it's not surprising that Lynn would bring sports into it, with the snap pose being a nicely suggestive way to start. It's cute how she's the one tryst of the day keeping ideas to herself and hoping to work them in over time versus Lola just going ahead full speed every time. (The fact that we get some insight on Lynn's thoughts but not Lola's suggests she's not interested in other types of lovemaking…yet. Oh the possibilities!) If she'd brought that up before sex perhaps Lincoln would have gone at it a bit harder, though maybe Lynn knew that beforehand too.

(…or maybe I'm just reading way too much into it.)

 

She just wasn't quite ready for fifth base yet. One of these days...

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Both liaisons plus how quickly they all went for the jar is a nice reminder of how accustomed they are to boinking pretty much any time they want. Then along with Lola's special lingerie and how she gets them, the bit about Lori's ambivalence is a nice little bump in the road that seems perfectly in-character. I forgot though: Is Lori also bound by the Just One Rule?

She'd be allowed to bang Bobby if he showed up, but otherwise, yes, all the Loud kids are.

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Great call using the end of summer as the catalyst for some new conflict, with the additional benefit of so much temptation. 

That was part of my impetus for writing the story.

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It'll be interesting to see Lincoln falling prey to the all-too-human tendency to take plentiful things for granted. I just wonder if he'll stop appreciating his new joys at home or, even worse, start to resent them. 

There are still things at home that Lincoln can’t get anywhere else, as we shall see.

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Lynn's comment about sneaking in some grab-ass was cute while also reinforcing how they've all gotten used to boinking any time they want. Restraint doesn't come easily to kids, but if that weren't true then we'd be out of a job.

:)

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Thanks for a great running start into the next phase. It should be an interesting journey.

Thanks for giving this story its first review!

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From Pixel-King on August 18, 2020

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I see Fairy-Slayer has dropped by, excellent. You're another one of my favorite delightfully degenerate gentlemen.

Why, thank you. :)

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Glad to see a continuation of Sandboy, and it will be interesting to see where you take this.

I felt like Sandboy left us with a lot of interesting possibilities to explore.

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I'm so glad you keep creating content on this site! Mostly it's a trickle of mediocre material here, but you consistently deliver quality writing. It's a real skill to weave together smut and plot, and to do so while adhering to sound grammatical principles is admirable. You are definitely in my top author list.

Thank you!

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Ya' know, it's amusing on its own, but this show was basically designed to be the perfect fap-fodder for incest-loving lolicons, not to mention all the thicc ladies and myriad cuties his sisters bring home. Really hits all the fetishes and potential kinks.

Absolutely. A lot of cartoons I have to watch for a while before I start getting ideas about how to write porn of them, but for The Loud House, it’s just way too easy. :)

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Never-ending Haareeemmmm! (Aah Ah Aaah, Ah Aaah Ah, Ah Aah Aaaah!)

Eh-hem, excuse me, I was momentarily overcome.

Hee-hee, I have that problem a lot myself.

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Keep on writing! I'm an infrequent commenter (my apologies), but a dilligent reader.

Plenty more story to come!

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Many thanks again!

Right back atcha.

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From YamiNoKami on August 20, 2020

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Nice to see a sequel. But can I make a request?

How about having Ronnie Anne pay a visit, find out about their new norm, get mad and bitch them out only for the girls to see/claim that she is jealous before they teach her a lesson. Like they hold her captive and tease her while she watches Lincoln bang one of them, being mocked that she'll never be able to handle Lincoln.

 

This story is fully outlined, and I don’t have any plans to include Ronnie Anne in it. If you want to see some Ronnie Anne action, check out “Twist My Arm.” 

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From Jomahawk2694 on August 28, 2020

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Happy to be your beta for this one, Glass. Seeing how awesome the first one was, I can't wait to see what directions you take this one in. 

I appreciate your help, as always. And I hope you’ll like where this is headed.

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As I said, reading that line "never ending summer" made me expect some kind of P&F reference, especially considering your repertoire here, but as you stated before, it would take a truly, TRULY sick bastard to try and mix Nick with Disney. 

Crossing over networks? I would NEVER! Oh, wait…

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As for the lemons, you know I love Lingeire, and Lola, so that opening lemon pushed all my buttons.

I couldn’t imagine Lola not insisting on having a proper boudoir wardrobe.

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The Lynn one was good as well, but I truly do hope you have Lincoln give her what she wants. (Namely, his cock up her ass)

Now that I’ve set it up, I guess I’ll eventually have to knock it down. 

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Also, with Lynn's comment about getting grabby with boy butts on the wrestling team, are you implying that the girls are becoming slutty to the point they just want sex, period? Because I don't feel like NTR would be a good fit for this story. Just my humble (and perverted) opinion. 

No worries, I’m not planning on depicting any of the Loud girls breaking the One Rule in this story. 

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Keep em coming!

Chapters, or readers? :)

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Joma 

 

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18 hours ago, neo4812 said:

read the newest ch loved it! hope darcie ne next!

Thanks!

The title of each chapter (which appears at the end of the preceding chapter) provides a clue as to which character(s) the coming chapter will feature. Although I’ll admit that the title of chapter 3 is not the easiest of hints.

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From Fairy-Slayer on September 01, 2020

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(Chapter 2)

Lovely job making his horrid summer camp experience pay off here – and he really proved Jordan right on the confidence angle. 

 

One thing I've learned to appreciate about writing sequels is that they give you the chance to evolve characters beyond what they were in the original story. I'm taking maximum advantage of that here.

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Their feverish quickie was fantastic, 

Thanks!

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and their mutual non-decision afterwards seems very in-character for their age and experience, plus it presents interesting story possibilities. 

Hmm...

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Mentioning the Rubicon (with the cute reference to Jordan) did a great job expressing his mixed feelings at the chapter's close.

Thanks. I started thinking about Girl Jordan, and the River Jordan, and "the die is cast," and then it just came together in my head.

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It's kind of sweet that the girls at home got him all the comfy & sexy undies he could ever want, since he's an aficionado of sorts, regardless of their own motives. 

They did buy him his original set of "victory undies" in canon (in the episode "Undie Pressure"), so it seemed like a thing they might do.

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Of course I also enjoyed the day's set-up with all of Lincoln's musings for basically any girl he saw, regardless of relative age. (Including Darcy was a welcome touch… to me, anyway. Not sure what Darcy would think about it. ;) )

You may have a chance to find out.

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Thanks for some great horny (outside of the) Loud House fun.

Thanks for another day-brightening review!

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From shadowmaster on September 20, 2020

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This was entertaining. I don't hope for you to do this (because you must be busy doing your own things), but could you please show us this "girl time" that Rita has with two (or more) of her older daughters? 

Don’t you worry, we’ll be seeing some of that later on in the story.

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From Fairy-Slayer on September 20, 2020

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(Chapter 3)

Beautiful job making Lincoln's ultimate wish come true, and in such hard-pounding style. 

 

Thanks! I wanted to create a wider variety of scenarios for Lincoln in this story than I did in “Enter the Sandboy,” and ramp up the intensity, too. Preg-sex with Mom seemed like a good step in that direction.

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Though I do worry about his guilt even more after such an emotionally charged time with The Supreme Sexual Being in his life.

We’ll find out more about his state of mind in the next chapter.

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BTW Lisa was cute with her self-control seemingly breaking down her logical mind a bit. Nicely done.

Thanks! Lisa is really fun to write because she’s highly cerebral and yet no less prone to human desires than anyone else.

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Whatever (and whoever) comes next should be quite interesting. Thanks.

Thank you!

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From Fairy-Slayer on October 01, 2020

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(Chapter 4)

“…near the rear doors.” Mmm! That's good foreshadowing. 

 

Heh.

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The set-up for Stella in the last chapter and a little, eh, deeper exploration at the beginning here made the payoff even more exciting. 

Whereas "Enter the Sandboy" was told entirely from Lincoln's perspective, I wanted "Just One Rule" to get into what the other characters are thinking, too. I feel like that really adds something, including opportunities to set up scenes.

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Along with the lovely action their sauciness in getting to it was fast & hot… and it's interesting how that thought occasionally pops up here and there (only to be dismissed once something better pops up).

Sorry, what thought do you mean?

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It's really sweet how Stella is as concerned about remaining friends with Lincoln despite her powerful lust for him. That feels like a very natural thing for a 'tween. 

In canon, Stella made a lot of effort to become friends with Lincoln and the others in his clique. I think she'd want to hold onto that regardless of how her relationship with Lincoln has changed.

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Now it'll be interesting to see if she can keep from letting anything slip about her new extracurricular activities – especially from Lincoln's other FWB. (And if she and Jordan ever did realize they were sharing him, would their reactions be different whether or not Lincoln was present at the time?)

A valid question.

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Lovely and fun chapter, and the title for the next one is rather intriguing too. Thank you for more very Loud fun.

Thanks, and thank you for another day-brightening review!

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I usually respond to reviews in the order received, but I let this one get past me. Nonetheless, your review is very important to us, so please stay on the line and- sorry.

From Aegis999 on September 30, 2020

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YES RITA IS PREGGERS!

Well, we don’t know for SURE that she’s knocked up. (Although that would be a tad anticlimactic, wouldn’t it?)

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I wonder if her sex drive is higher when she is preggers!?

Could be...

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On other note....I really want to see lincoln x Agnes Johnson, maybe lincoln is her last chance of concieving?

No spoilers, but there’s an upcoming chapter titled “Extra Credit.” That could mean anything, though. :)

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Plus having agnes in his pocket opens the door for lincoln to have a threesome with agnes and stella or jordan.

I’ll be blunt – I’m not planning that for this story. But this thing could end up becoming a trilogy…

Thanks for the review!

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15 hours ago, GeorgeGlass said:

>>Along with the lovely action their sauciness in getting to it was fast & hot… and it's interesting how that thought occasionally pops up here and there (only to be dismissed once something better pops up).

Sorry, what thought do you mean?

Ah, I think my thought was edited by Mr. Cockup:

Lincoln, Jordan, and Stella all have had moments where they consciously can't believe how forward or pushy they're being in the moment (or even well in advance with Stella). A youngster usually only feels that in retrospect. (And an oldster doesn't feel that often enough.) But again, when the thought pops up usually something else does too.

I won't ask for a spoiler because it could be many things, so I'll just call them "options" for now. :D

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18 hours ago, FairySlayer said:

Ah, I think my thought was edited by Mr. Cockup:

Lincoln, Jordan, and Stella all have had moments where they consciously can't believe how forward or pushy they're being in the moment (or even well in advance with Stella). A youngster usually only feels that in retrospect. (And an oldster doesn't feel that often enough.) But again, when the thought pops up usually something else does too.

I won't ask for a spoiler because it could be many things, so I'll just call them "options" for now. :D

Ah, I see. It wouldn't have been practical to make those realizations happen later on, so yeah, I guess I fudged a bit in terms of how self-aware these eleven-year-olds would be. Although kids on The Loud House do tend to be precocious.

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