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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    More reviews? I'm not used to this attention... <curls into fetal position, rocking in dark corners>. Another review from an anonymous reviewer, the first in a long time on Blood Prize: From ANON - Crazychickhull on March 12, 2019 Just stumbled on your stories I think they are great I read the whole of blood prize in 2 sittings it's fantastic couldn't put it down keep up the good work can't wait for more installments Firstly, hi, Crystalchickhull. Secondly, I'm really glad you loved Blood Prize. And finishing the entire thing in two sittings (you can't see me, but I'm blushing right now...), it must have really pulled you in. And I have a few chapters written and "stockpiled" for post, so they'll have a few more for sure. .
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    Last Full Measure

    Chapter 10 (Just A Little Chop) posted.
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    Finding Inspiration

    Damn. Looks like a better Jaws movie than 3 or 4. Lol
  4. Well, regarding Walter and the brilliant insanity that is his character, I can imagine how fun it would be to write. Lol. He is definitely an intriguing mix and both in the show and in your writing, it strikes a balance that would seem to work only with him. Lol. Bumpy starts are fun. And I definitely enjoy them, adds realism to the tale. So now I have something to look forward to more . lol. Yes, certainly have to hide the sausage - I mean, hide what's been going in - on, on, damnit, on… And you're quite welcome. It's beautifully written.
  5. I think the dark pit might be breaking to see some light.  A tiny sliver, but that's enough, right?  Pull myself back through, carry on.  Despite what has happened in that time, I want to say thank you, to all you guys.  I appreciate it.  :hug:.

    1. InBrightestDay

      InBrightestDay

      Good to know you’re feeling a little better, and always happy to help however I can. :hug:

    2. Tcr

      Tcr

      It's getting there.  And thanks, InBrightestDay.  It's what I like about AFF, the community supports one another.  :) .  Been posting, so there's something good.  :) .

    3. JayDee

      JayDee

      I hope ya keep improving.

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    SinfulWolf's Review Responses

    Well, I think you forgot to reply to mine on Coming Home. Lol. Second, all these great reviews around you, now mine feels lacking. Lol. Always good to see great writers getting great support. . I don't think I have to reiterate it constantly, but your sex scenes are always interesting, enjoying, and hitting exactly what they need to be (hot, disturbing, uncomfortable) depending on the situation. I know you've said you struggle with dialogue, but the interactions between them are great. And your dialogue has improved greatly, even from the first time I read yours, so it's excellent and great to see. Kudos! And you did the human chess match, with verbal sparring, extremely well, keeping it interesting all through, so that's another kudos! And elegance seems to be your strong suite. You always, masterfully choose your words, whether in Blood and Lace, Coming Home, Closing Time or others. And in doing so, you expertly paint the picture and image of the scene. I feel like I just gave another review...
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    Finding Inspiration

    Lol. I always have multiple tales going (even challenge prompts and, usually, have a personal challenge to push the writing and keep it interesting). Most of the time it works. Though, I have had that lack of inspiration flowing through all stories at once (especially the last few months (5x publishing rejections and their reasons killed my writing for months...)). Thankfully, I found a little shred and picked it up, put in the pocket, and tied it down.
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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    And back to Last Full Measure and @InBrightestDay. Always a pleasure to see you've reviewed. Thank you very much. From InBrightestDay on March 09, 2019 I'm back! Not much happening in this chapter, but it does some nice world building, explaining the conflict between the Rebels and the United Earth government, and it's rather nicely balanced. In quite a few works, the UEMC characters would be the bad guys, the storm troopers trying to kill an independence movement, but of course, as we've seen in conflicts across the real world, it's never that black and white. So the likable characters working for the UEMC balance out their colonialist goals, and the atrocities committed by the Rebels balance out their noble goal. Also, I couldn't help but wonder about the M-450. It's never explained beyond being a heavy weapon, but I can't help but wonder what it is... Also, this was interesting: “Corporal Olafsdottir, ensure everyone is aboard,” Celeste said, glancing between Sam and Tirsa. “I have nothing for you, PFC, though I’m sure Major Hamilton will.” She stepped away and headed towards the drop ship bay’s control room, where Hamilton and Finnegan were standing. “Get aboard, Sam, I’ll do a final check,” Tirsa said. Sam stepped aboard the drop ship and Tirsa took a deep breath. Not sure why youdidn’t get Ingvild todo this, SergeantMajor, but fine. It does make me wonder why Celeste did that. Perhaps she sensed some tension with Sam and, having issues with her own ex, wanted to give Tirsa a little space? Maybe it's something else. Either way, it's a nice little character moment. *** I'm back! YAY! Welcome back! Not much happening in this chapter, but it does some nice world building, explaining the conflict between the Rebels and the United Earth government, and it's rather nicely balanced. In quite a few works, the UEMC characters would be the bad guys, the storm troopers trying to kill an independence movement, but of course, as we've seen in conflicts across the real world, it's never that black and white. So the likable characters working for the UEMC balance out their colonialist goals, and the atrocities committed by the Rebels balance out their noble goal. I'm glad the nuances and subtlety of the world isn't lost too much in the mix of worlds. There are too many examples of real world conflicts that ultimately go to illustrate your words. Indeed, one of the other inspirations for LFM was the Anglo-Zulu War, specifically the Battle of Rorke's Drift. (The Battle of Castle Itter, known as the strangest battle of World War II, was another.) And yes, war and conflict are never as simple as black and white, at least never as teachers and instructors like to present. Also, I couldn't help but wonder about the M-450. It's never explained beyond being a heavy weapon, but I can't help but wonder what it is... Lol. The M-420, which will be explained a little more as the tale goes on, is a GPMG (general purpose machine gun) (thank you, @Sinfulwolf). I think I might have forgotten to change some of its designation though... oops. Also, this was interesting: “Corporal Olafsdottir, ensure everyone is aboard,” Celeste said, glancing between Sam and Tirsa. “I have nothing for you, PFC, though I’m sure Major Hamilton will.” She stepped away and headed towards the drop ship bay’s control room, where Hamilton and Finnegan were standing. “Get aboard, Sam, I’ll do a final check,” Tirsa said. Sam stepped aboard the drop ship and Tirsa took a deep breath. Not sure why youdidn’t get Ingvild todo this, SergeantMajor, but fine. It does make me wonder why Celeste did that. Perhaps she sensed some tension with Sam and, having issues with her own ex, wanted to give Tirsa a little space? Maybe it's something else. Either way, it's a nice little character moment. This was a bit of a twofer action, lol. First was, as you said, yes, a little of the "I see tension, here, I'll help you out, Corporal." The second was supposed to be this subtle start that, like Celeste trusting Lian, shes starting to trust Tirsa (not to mention a little bit of a crush on her). And trust for Celeste is not the easiest thing to come by. But, I'm glad you like it . Chapter 10 I hope to have posted within the next day.
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    Finding Inspiration

    Lol. Neither is mine, and I do the same thing. At first, I struggled to remember the dialogue, too, or even some ideas, but I started bringing a notebook with me and writing things down. (There's an entire scene in Chapter 10 of LFM that I wrote down at work because it just came to me (NSFW dialogue, lol)).
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    What Has Science Done?

    I may be exceptionally late... Probably exceptionally late... But... To add a two cents worth from someone who loves, reads, writes, and watches sci fi… The idea of monsters is all relative in terms of appearance. Centuries after everyone is twisted genetically, the "monsters" would become every day and would not be. It will just be the norm for people. That said, you can write the characters merely as any other, then a relationship environment can be created. I don't know... Maybe I'm rambling... atop being late.
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    Waiting for Rejections

    Well, like I said on your wall post: They'd be nuts not to take your work.
  12. For the first time in ten years...  this depression has gotten below the worst of anyone seeing it...  It's been a long time since I've lost interest in writing...  Or anything…

    That's a scary thought...  

    1. JayDee

      JayDee

      Shit, I know how that sucks. All I can say is I hope it gets better.

    2. InBrightestDay

      InBrightestDay

      I know what that feels like.  If you need to talk, I’m more than happy to listen, and if not, I hope you feel better.

      Joining the Hugs Brigade too. :hug:

    3. Tcr

      Tcr

      Thanks again.  @JayDee...  Last time had some antidepressants involved...  But...  Hopefully it goes in a bit.

      @InBrightestDay...  Thanks.  It's appreciated to have the option.  And thanks (:hug:to all).

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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    Lol. Okay, you have a point... Welcome to this Tcr Nuthouse. And don't worry, JayDee. It's okay .
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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    Another on Strange Tales from Stranger Places. This one from @JayDee (who I believe is a first on mine, so... Welcome to tcr's nuthouse?... lol). From JayDee on March 07, 2019 Part 1 oneshot– The perspective from the alien works amazingly well. It also made me smile some, imagining the big alien trying to get some sleep when a capsule hits it’s dwelling. Can’t roll over and go back to sleep with that sort of thing going on! I was happy to see the tent code up the top, and this one delivers in a brief hot scene. The tentacles changing color with desire was a neat touch. The idea of so many more drawn by the pheromones... I guess it could either go Nightmare or Night out round Temple Bar. I enjoyed this’n! *** The perspective from the alien works amazingly well. It also made me smile some, imagining the big alien trying to get some sleep when a capsule hits it’s dwelling. Can’t roll over and go back to sleep with that sort of thing going on! I'm glad you thought so, JayDee. I kind of struggled with just how much to present about them in order to keep it hidden (hopefully no one reads the reviews, lol). Not to mention the opposite, being how much to reveal so it's not out of nowhere. It made picking words for every day actions that much more interesting. Lol. And LOL. Nope, just plain nope... no sleep there. I was happy to see the tent code up the top, and this one delivers in a brief hot scene. The tentacles changing color with desire was a neat touch. The idea of so many more drawn by the pheromones... I guess it could either go Nightmare or Night out round Temple Bar. I enjoyed this’n! I admit, the colour change was a last minute addition to add some unique features to Zenia and her race. And I'm glad it was a hot scene... First time writing tent scene, so I was nervous. Lol. (I know what I intended, but I like hearing what people think of it). I'm quite happy you did. Look forward to hearing more from you.
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    Blood Prize

    Chapter 20 (Courage and Cowardice) is posted.
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    Star Trek Adventurer

    Chapter 22 (The No Win Scenario) is posted.
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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    And, from the always great @CloverReef, on Strange Tales from Stranger Places, Come What May: From PlagueClover on March 06, 2019 First of all, I just want to say that this was well written. Though there were a few typos. I'll give one example: It wasn't so much a valley as more skin to Valles Marineris But those typos didn't really detract from it. It flowed fairly smoothly and was quite reminiscent of Mass Effect. Well done. I enjoyed it. Thank you. I really had several false starts for the challenge, so it means a lot to hear it was well written. Second... Maybe Hades Valley was more skin... lol. Yeah, I wrote it mostly on my phone and for some reason, my phone really wants either a snuff story, exceptional PWP, or implied bestiality... Kind of scary... I think it's possessed. I'm glad you liked it and I'm glad another inspiration for the overarching Last Full Measure universe came through. (On a side note, I seriously debated showing a backstory for Adara...). Thanks, Clover.
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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    And, from the oneshot collection, Strange Tales from Stranger Places, a review from @Sinfulwolf! From SinfulWolf on March 05, 2019 "Come What May" A short, and to the point little tale, that acomplished it's goal well. Interesting to see Celeste again, especially since it's not focussing too too much on her past, as her off shoots seem to do sometimes. I think it could have been a bit longer. Build up some tension on the mountain there, let the danger seep in just a bit. As is, it's mostly just being told it's dangerous. Thank you, Sinful. I had a rough time with this prompt before settling on writing in the LFM universe. I'm glad, though, that you found it interesting to see Celeste again. (It is her past, though... lol. The opening takes place one year after Christmas, Bloody Christmas) I didn't intentionally dwell on the dark side of the immediate aftermath of Mars. Admittedly, I agree, I should have let the danger sink in more.
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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    Well, we have a twofer today... One from @Sinfulwolf on Hunted and an anon on Last Full Measure... Both greatly appreciated. Hunted: From SinfulWolf on March 04, 2019 A very combat focussed chapter, and it's quick paced and brutal. You are certainly much better now than you were at the start of this story. The improvement is notable. However, this chapter is rather short and it's all just the one fight. I think this chapter could have been combined with the last, and the story would have moved forward just as much. You're most likely right. I did break the chapters for a couple reasons I can distinctly remember... 1) I wanted to add a little suspense into the mix (in the case of Lucretia, who appeared behind) and 2) I didn't want to whiplash the readers in the chapter with too much back and forth. Im not sure it worked as well as I had hoped, though. And thank you. I have tried to take some suggestions. And vampires aren't my norm, so I am a little out of my zone... But I'm glad you've noticed. And I hope you're still enjoying it. Last Full Measure: From ANON - boop on March 04, 2019 I'm really liking the main character! She's so strong and just unf, also very hot. I Love your writing style it flows so well and is descriptive! Short, sweet, and too the point. Lol. Thank you, Boop. I'm glad you really like Celeste. And I don't know what unf stands for, but judging from the after statement, I'm going with a compliment (and I'm glad you think she's got, too...) She probably the most broken of the characters I have written this far, so I hope she continues to be really liked . As for my writing style… Thank you.
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    Last Full Measure

    Chapter 9 (To Be Young Again) is posted.
  21. Woo!  Hunted has become the most viewed and Blood Prize has hit 1400!  Now...  if only reviews would come as freely.  Lol ;)

    1. Sinfulwolf

      Sinfulwolf

      Reviews are always sneaky.

    2. Tcr

      Tcr

      That they are.  They're like a myth told in dark alleyways and hushed whispers...  Oh, sorry, wrong story.  :)

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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    And back to Last Full Measure (and @InBrightestDay). Another review to keep the shelves clean (so shiny...). From InBrightestDay on February 28, 2019 Well, finally getting around to the latest chapter of this. Sorry for how long it's taken! So...Celeste's problems just got a lot more serious, as far as I'm concerned. If she's literally jumping awake a split-second from killing someone, that's not just a problem, but a pretty disqualifying one. Like, she could kill someone if she's nappingand they try to wake her up. Once they're down on the planet, I feel like that's going to be a massive problem. In other news... “Are there are questions?” Hudson: "How do I get out of this chickenshit outfit?" Sorry. It was the first thing that came to mind. There is something I'm wondering about with regards to that Q&A scene, though. “Any idea of hostiles in the area?” Staff Sergeant Tsu asked. Celeste shot her friend a quick glance, but said nothing to Lian. “No intelligence on hostile numbers yet, no, Staff Sergeant,” Hamilton said. “We’re going in blind.” Aren't they in orbit? Shouldn't they be able to see the colony from space? I mean, sure, that won't tell them about hostiles inside of buildings, but they would know whether or not there were troop formations or vehicles outside. *** Well, finally getting around to the latest chapter of this. Sorry for how long it's taken! As always, never need to apologize. It's always a pleasure to get a review and seeing one from my fan, it's always great. As long as you're enjoying it. So...Celeste's problems just got a lot more serious, as far as I'm concerned. If she's literally jumping awake a split-second from killing someone, that's not just a problem, but a pretty disqualifying one. Like, she could kill someone if she's nappingand they try to wake her up. Once they're down on the planet, I feel like that's going to be a massive problem. It's a substantial and quite disqualifying issue. It will be touched on further down the line, in a different manner of effect. I did want to show that Celeste shouldn't be out there (a lot of it being her pushing her father to throw some weight around (something she did on Mars to disastrous results)). It's also a major play throughout the story, so I hope I work it out properly. In other news... “Are there are questions?” Hudson: "How do I get out of this chickenshit outfit?" Sorry. It was the first thing that came to mind. Lol. "When they said alien, she thought they said illegal aliens sign up." "Fuck you, Hudson." "Any time, anywhere." Bringing Aliens to mind, never apologize! Lol. Like I said, it and several others were inspirations for LFM. Besides, Hudson's one of the best of that group. Lol. There is something I'm wondering about with regards to that Q&A scene, though. “Any idea of hostiles in the area?” Staff Sergeant Tsu asked. Celeste shot her friend a quick glance, but said nothing to Lian. “No intelligence on hostile numbers yet, no, Staff Sergeant,” Hamilton said. “We’re going in blind.” Aren't they in orbit? Shouldn't they be able to see the colony from space? I mean, sure, that won't tell them about hostiles inside of buildings, but they would know whether or not there were troop formations or vehicles outside. This is definitely an issue, too. They say I saw it, they were able to scan the base and colony, but not find lifesigns (kind of like modern sonar) and the colony is kind of like spotting an anthill from a plane in flight. It's not huge. I know, this doesn't discount imaging technology (which I should have stated the terraforming provides a heavy cloud cover and rain... but I didn't think of that until 10 .... I'm bad, I know ...). Thank you, InBrightestDay. I hope I have your interest piqued for nine and ten .
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    Blood Prize

    Chapter 19 (Getting Through It) now posted.
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    Hunted

    Chapter 31 (To Hell and Back) is posted. I hope everyone’s enjoying it as much as I have been writing it. And remember, all concrit appreciated.
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    TCR's Review Response Thread

    With the start of a new challengefic story, welcome to the first review of "Strange Things From Stranger Places", from @CloverReef: From PlagueClover on February 24, 2019 LOL that was not what I expected at all. Nice little twist. And I like your use of the singular 'They', though I would suggest you thin it out a bit (where possible) to make it feel more natural. Lovely little oneshot, thank you. I'm really glad you liked the twist. I struggled to find a way to keep it from being too obvious while sprinkling hints throughout in order to make it less out of nowhere. I admit, I might have oversaturated it with They, so accepted.