Daimyo's Den - Discussion Thread

[C_Wade]

I hope I’ll be able to finish the chapter tomorrow, there are still 4 scenes left, but most of it is smut, so there is still hope…

[Ookami88]

Since Tenten’s chapter is most likely just a few hours away, I’d like to go back to Hinata’s future episode, and basically any episode what I have to say soon can apply.

See, it’s not only the actual intercourse that I find interesting in lemon stories, in this case there is also the breaking part that can provide a good deal of entertainment. One of the most interesting methods I like is whn the girl is so engrossed with at first unwanted pleasure, that when you take it away from her, she starts begging for it after enough time passes. Afterwards, she’s ready for anything that’s thrown at her and she accepts it with a smile.

How does it ties to Hinata? It’s just that she’s a strong but also a very reluctant person. She’s not going to agree to anything relatively sexual from the get go, and even if she was captured and sexually tortured to break her, it would take a considerable amount of strentgth and ability. Therefore, the best strategy for a person like her would a restraint and slow inducing into the pleasure. First slow teasings, then intensify them, until she gets an orgasm after orgasm.

What do you think? Pleasure or Pain for initial treatment?

[Guest snake1980]

not sure If u have a  idea for ino yet but I might have one what do u think of one of the daimyo advisers knows about what he been doing and ask for a favor from him.  in the pass say his son had a eye on ino and when ever he would see her she would shoot him down and never even give him a chance his son so he would like to change that so after talking with the daimyo they come up with a plan were he would ask for someone to escort the adviser out of the capital to inspect some of business they are partner in and during that he would turn ino into his pet and ether keep her for himself or give her to his son.

[C_Wade]

So, to address a few things:

The Tenten episode. Right now the first chapter clocks in at a little bit below 11k words, which is way too long in my opinion, considering it is still missing two scenes that I actually planned to write in my first draft. However, they will be moved to the second chapter, which makes Tenten’s fall seem a bit rushed in my opinion.

But, as I discovered, writing Tenten is just no fun. There simply is no ‘connection’ between me and her character, which would encourage me to ‘break’ her. She simply is completely unremarkable character wise, which I think is one of the reasons I’m not very satisfied with the current episode. Nevertheless once I’m done with proof reading and minor editing I will still publish it, simply to get it over with.

@Ookami88 yes, the ‘breaking’ is a part I often enjoy as well, and can be a lot of fun if done properly. I agree with your opinion of Hinata and personally prefer pleasure as the initial-, and overall-treatment. That becomes rather obvious when you read the Tenten episode imho.

@snake1980 I already have a few Ideas for Ino, but I will add yours to them. I will consider them all once I start writing and choose the one I like the most.
 

[C_Wade]

The first chapter of the Tenten episode has just been posted, check it out:

http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106100&chapter=4

 

The longest chapter yet with a little more than 11k words. I hope you all enjoy it!

Thanks to everyone for your support, I really appreciate it.

[Guest Omega]

That chapter was suuuuper awesome

[C_Wade]

Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it.

[redlox2]

just read and posted my review on first TenTen chapter!! so is it multiple chapters as the Daimyo hasn't actually gotten a turn yet?

[Ookami88]

While Tenten’s first chapter isn’t the very best to be honest (spotted a few spelling mistakes, some repeats, and it does seem a little rushed), I still enjoyed reading it and can’t wait for the next part!

Anyway, back to the topic of pleasure-breaking I began, there is one particular method that I find endaring and think would be very effective against Hinata, to be more exact erotic tickling and orgasm denial. With this method Hinata would have her naked body tickled by ink brushes, feathers, fingers etc, and be brought to the very edge of her climax, but never crossing, always left hanging. After a prolonged time of such treatment there is no way she won’t start to try to get the most of the sensation on her own, only to be denied release once more. When things start to be the most unberable, at the question “Do you want to cum?” she would shout “Yes” in a begging manner.

What are your thoughts?

[Guest snake1980]

nice but I know u are going to have everyone from the leaf but what about other villages? like suna since u could have temari show up to talk about trades between there villages? but when she gets there she see both the fire and wind daimyo there and both use her and when the wind leaves temari goes with him

[redlox2]

Just now, Guest snake1980 said:

nice but I know u are going to have everyone from the leaf but what about other villages? like suna since u could have temari show up to talk about trades between there villages? but when she gets there she see both the fire and wind daimyo there and both use her and when the wind leaves temari goes with him

he has said he might do other villages AFTER the leaf. if he does i would want hot Kunoichi like Yugito and Samui!!

[C_Wade]

@redlox2 It will be two chapters, just like the previous episode. And also thanks for the review!

@Ookami88 Thats what I feared, tbh it was rushed, I wrote more than half of it on Sunday in one go…

As for the pleasure breaking, the orgasm denial is a good idea, as is the tickling.

@snake1980 as redlox already said, I might do other villages after Konoha is done. It depends on how far I take the story and how long my motivation for it lasts.

[Ookami88]

Don’t worry, sometimes you just can’t get the chapter right, no matter how hard you try. I know it myself.

If I may be so bold, I actually thought out the way this could be used on Hinata – she comes to the Daimyo’s palace, both for her mission from the Hokage, and to play diplomat for her clan. Hinata is greeted according to her status, and even given a room of her own. After retiring for the night, Hinata notices an incase inside the room, which was lit and gave a pleasant aroma. Not thinking much she went to sleep. The incase was actually a special mix of herbs which made Hinata’s slumber much deeper, making her go into a hypnotized-like state (you know the trick, you talk to a person while they are asleep and after they wake up they either do the thing talked to them or say something that was programmed in their sleep), also it was making her slowly aroused. Daimyo’s servants then come in and start slowly and sensually molest Hinata’s body, massaging and teasing all of her sensitive spots, until she climaxes at least once, all the while calling her ‘Sex Slave-chan’, and after she orgasms they would call her ‘Cum Slut’. This continues for a week or two, Hinata never remembers what happens at night, the combination of incense and molesting takes a toll on her body in the form of suddenly feeling very flushed. During one particular evening, when she’s alone with the Daimyo and some of his servants, during his talk he says ‘Sex Slave-chan’, and Hinata instantly feels hot and bothered, like she her clothes were suddenly constraining, the touch of fabric teasing her skin and slowly bringing her to an orgasm, along with the unyielding need to masturbate, even in front of the Daimyo. At first the Daimyo was showing concern, but he knew perfectly what was happening, he called the girl ‘Sex Slave-chan’ a few more times, which really makes her desperate to cum, until he finally said ‘Cum Slut’, bringing Hinata to an overwhelming orgasm.

Don’t really know how to tie this together, but here’s what I thought out about Hina’s further breaking: Hinata is naked, blindfolded (special seal to prevent her from using the Byakugan), tied to some-sort of a table that keeps her positioned vertically at 70 degrees, but it was constructed like those X tables, but leaving her butt in the open, and her feet also were in the air (I’m not really good at describing these things, sorry for confusion), and very very aroused. She hears door opening, several people coming in, and before she could respondto them, Hinata feels their hands and ink brushes on her sensitive skin, making her squeal in laughter, which then turned to moans as the intruders started to tease her erotic places. What was the most painful for her to bear, they always stopped whenever she was close to climaxing, waited for her to calm down, and then started again, repeating the process several times, until she was begging them to let her cum.

Like I said, I’m not really good at this sort of thing, but I think that this kind of scenario would suit in breaking a gentle person like Hinata. Add to that the nyotaimori idea I mentioned several posts ago, and I think this could be one of the more excitingly erotic episodes in the entire story (not the ‘Most’, but ‘one of them’)!

Hopefully my rambling here helps even a little.

[C_Wade]

The idea with hypnosis/subliminal messages was planned for kurenai and, to be honest, I can’t quite think of a way to include the word sex slave-chan (or similar) in a conversation without making Hinata suspicious. If the daimyo randomly says the word sex slave-chan and Hinata suddenly gets horny she would immediately make the connection, it would need to be a word that can be inserted into a normal conversation without arousing suspicion.

The second idea sounds good, I’ll see how I can work it in.

I’m sure I will find a Kunoichi that fits the idea, there are still quite a few left after all.

[Ookami88]

That’s okay, I’m just at loss on how Hinata’s breaking could start without it being rushed. As for the ‘sex slave-chan’ thing, while Hinata may make some connection, she has no idea what transpired all those nights, and the phrase makes her horny beyond anything she has experienced before in her life, and when it’s repeated several times, each time she gets a new wave of arousal shooting through her body like a lightinbolt, making it impossible to focus on anything. Also, when she hears the Daimyo say it the first time, Hinata may think that she misheard him, especially with that wave of heat suddenly striking her, after all, why should she suspect the Daimyo of some foul play?

Though, I do understand that since Hinata’s episode is quite far away from now, so you probably have no concrete plans for her, only ideas of what could be used. However, if you do have some scenariofor my fav character, I wouldn’t mind hearing it (PM is also acceptable if you want to keep it a secret )

[knowpein]

Nice Chapter….

Though Seemed a bit disjointed at start and somewhat rushed at start (while undressing and dressing scene of TenTen)….

Like cruel character of princess….

though I wonder if you could find Kunoichi like that… who takes pleasure in others pain subjugated to same thing….
can’t seem to find any….



The whole bit with guards was interesting…

looking forward for next

[Guest snake1980]

nice job on the first part of the tenten chap.  wondering who else will have a go with tenten since the guards are having there fun maybe u could do is they are in the city and she trades some time with tenten for some items some shops in capital? have to wait and see. but I have a idea to add  to the tsunade that I already talked about what u think of it starts in the leaf were the daimyo shows up to the leaf to see how things are going and he confronts tsunade there about her debts and that they will be showing up in the leaf to play the game and she will have a hard time hiding whats happening from everyone in the village?

[C_Wade]

First, thanks for all your reviews and sorry it took a while to answer.

@Ookami88 We’ll see, I still think the particular phrase ‘Sex  Slave-chan’ is a bit too obvious, I might go for a different term, otherwise I like the idea though.

Sorry to disappoint you though, except for the things mentioned in this thread I don’t really have any ideas and or plans for Hinata yet, as you said it is still quite a while off.

@knowpein It seemed it a bit rushed because it was rushed, admittedly not my best work, but I wanted the chapter out on Sunday. Glad you still liked it though.

As for the sadist Kunoichi, maybe Anko? I think she might fit what you are suggesting…

@snake1980 Thanks. So you want Tsunade’s corruption to take place inside Konoha? Did I get that right?

[Guest snake1980]

it could start there and finish in the capital but it would be different since it would be a lot harder to make sure no one finds out whats going on in the leaf then if she was somewhere else. its up to u its a idea to change it up a little since so far its been happening in the capital

[C_Wade]

I can see what you mean, will have to think about how I could make that work in the story.

[Ookami88]

I can agree with you, it was just a suggestion for that phrase. I simply had no idea what kind of word play could be used here… Something that could sound lustful and innocent at the same time… Though, I did some searching and I think I found something that could work! Different honorifics! During the normal talk the Daimyo refers to Hinata as Hinata-san, while in the night the servants are calling her Hinata-tan (a more cute version of -chan), the difference between them is subtle enough to take as mishearing it for the first time, hence why Hinata won't suspect such little thing to actually be responsible for her growing lust. As for the final strike, the Daimyo could call her Hime-chan, which triggers the overwhelming orgasm.

What do you think about this change?

[C_Wade]

That’s a great idea. And it fits really well too.

[Ookami88]

Glad you like it!

[Guest Turon117]

The princess in the Tenten chapter seemed to want Naruto as slave originally...

[C_Wade]

Yes, but the point was more to get Tenten angry.