C_Wade Posted March 14, 2017 Author Report Posted March 14, 2017 Well, I don’t know how mahjong works, and I don’t think a lot of other people are familiar with it beyond it’s name. That’s why I think dices or poker might be better choices. As the focus of the story/episode is not on the gambling/game which would need to be explained, however poker and dices are familiar to everyone. I know Ah! My Goddess, even though I never watched/read it. Quote
knowpein Posted March 14, 2017 Report Posted March 14, 2017 (edited) Kushina Edited February 1, 2018 by knowpein Quote
C_Wade Posted March 14, 2017 Author Report Posted March 14, 2017 @knowpein don’t worry about the mistakes, I understood everything and that is the important thing. That really was very detailed, and there were a lot of good ideas, I most likely will use a lot of them, so thank you for that. I won’t follow it word for word, but I really like the idea with the inspection and the ‘tests’. The version 2 was really good as well. Otherwise, a small status update. The Tenten episode is going good as well, the first chapter is about 1/3 done. The episode will most likely have 2-3 chapters, since I’m already at almost 5k words and I didn’t even start with the smut yet... Quote
Guest snake1980 Posted March 15, 2017 Report Posted March 15, 2017 well sounds good to me on each person or person get a scene or 2 and they could be different ages like for example say one of them is a son of the person and he has plans for her. another could be he has her work in a nursing home and wear a skimpy outfit and all the old man are feeling her up and stuff and u can guess were it goes from there. Quote
C_Wade Posted March 15, 2017 Author Report Posted March 15, 2017 I’ll try to add a bit of diversity to it, we’ll see what exactly will happen once I actually start writing it. Quote
knowpein Posted March 15, 2017 Report Posted March 15, 2017 8 hours ago, C_Wade said: @knowpein don’t worry about the mistakes, I understood everything and that is the important thing. That really was very detailed, and there were a lot of good ideas, I most likely will use a lot of them, so thank you for that. I won’t follow it word for word, but I really like the idea with the inspection and the ‘tests’. The version 2 was really good as well. Otherwise, a small status update. The Tenten episode is going good as well, the first chapter is about 1/3 done. The episode will most likely have 2-3 chapters, since I’m already at almost 5k words and I didn’t even start with the smut yet... thats Great hear you understood… I was just typing whatever came to my mind without looking back… hope ideas help you…. really looking forward for TenTen arc and the kushinas…. You could also use uzuki yugao… with Damyo and involve Baki from suna… maybe plot could be daimyo lures her to get her revenge against suna shinobi… instead becomes his plaything and plaything for suna diplomats... Quote
C_Wade Posted March 15, 2017 Author Report Posted March 15, 2017 Every Konoha Kunoichi will feature at least once I think. It depends on how long this story continues. Quote
knowpein Posted March 15, 2017 Report Posted March 15, 2017 edited out last post seems readable now Quote
C_Wade Posted March 15, 2017 Author Report Posted March 15, 2017 @knowpein yup, it’s fine, don’t worry about it A question for everyone concerning the Tsunade episode, what should happen with Shizune? I had three ideas on the general path for her. Simply cut her out of the episode all together (she just doesn’t go with Tsunade to the Daimyo) Have her there but without including her in the smut (She could be used as a threat to make Tsunade compliant, i.e. if she doesn’t cooperate with the Daiymo they will hurt Shizune) Or somehow include her into the plot, and sex. (I would welcome ideas for that if that is what you want to see, e.g. Shizune sees what the people plan to do with her master and offers her own body to one of the debtees, if her waives the debt in return) Quote
knowpein Posted March 15, 2017 Report Posted March 15, 2017 3 minutes ago, C_Wade said: @knowpein yup, it’s fine, don’t worry about it A question for everyone concerning the Tsunade episode, what should happen with Shizune? I had three ideas on the general path for her. Simply cut her out of the episode all together (she just doesn’t go with Tsunade to the Daimyo) Have her there but without including her in the smut (She could be used as a threat to make Tsunade compliant, i.e. if she doesn’t cooperate with the Daiymo they will hurt Shizune) Or somehow include her into the plot, and sex. (I would welcome ideas for that if that is what you want to see, e.g. Shizune sees what the people plan to do with her master and offers her own body to one of the debtees, if her waives the debt in return) combination of 2nd & 3rd one seems better shizune offers herself but doesnt know the people will continue with their plans with her master…. after dealing with her… and then have Tsunade show her Shizune’s state to make her bow... Quote
C_Wade Posted March 16, 2017 Author Report Posted March 16, 2017 yes, I can see that happening. Quote
Guest snake1980 Posted March 17, 2017 Report Posted March 17, 2017 shizune well I might have a idea for her she is with tsunade. the Daimyo tell tsunade about the debt she racked up and how she can pay it back and lets her think about it. while she is thinking he goes and talks with shizune and talks to her about her master debt since a few have come to him about the money she racked up. shizune ask him if there anything she can do to help her master out and he could tell her yes one of the people she is debt needs help taking care of a few people and if she helps out for a while he will forget about the debt. was thinking she could work at a clinic and have to check on people that come in. if u know what I mean and they can be from teens to old men. and the kicker is both tsunade and shizune don't know about the other doing the deed just that they are trying to get the debt gone. Quote
C_Wade Posted March 17, 2017 Author Report Posted March 17, 2017 yea that would be one way to do it, I will keep it in mind. Naughty nurse Shizune certainly is appealing, she could provide some ‘night service’ to the richer patrons of the hospital, for some extra cash of course. Will see how that works out once I’m starting to write it. Still busy with the Tenten chapter atm, and it’s kind of a drag to be honest, but there is progress. Quote
Ookami88 Posted March 17, 2017 Report Posted March 17, 2017 So, how far are you along Tenten’s chapter? Will you make it forthe first part being released this Sunday? And are we going to see some ero in it, or will we have to wait for part 2? Quote
C_Wade Posted March 17, 2017 Author Report Posted March 17, 2017 (edited) Well, the intro is almost done, but it already has 2.5k words, than I have half a scene that will come a bit later, but which was still planned for the first part (another 2.5k). And then I have the first scene for the second (or third) part done. I would like to get it done by Sunday, but I can’t say it with 100% certainty. Looking at my outline there is still a lot of stuff to write for the first part, so I might have to split the episode in three parts, although I would hate to do that… I hope that since I’m almost done with the intro (which was a total drag to write), that I’ll progress faster with the ‘fun’ part. And yes, there will be smut in both parts, although more in second, since there is no need for an ‘intro’. Edited March 17, 2017 by C_Wade Quote
knowpein Posted March 17, 2017 Report Posted March 17, 2017 Great to hear that… cant wait for the update…. I personally like longer chapters….but its ok. Quote
Ookami88 Posted March 17, 2017 Report Posted March 17, 2017 Cool, I was hoping that there will at least be some smut in the first part. Can’t wait for the chapter! Quote
Guest snake1980 Posted March 17, 2017 Report Posted March 17, 2017 ill be looking forward to see how u get tenten there and what will happen. well I might have a idea not sure what u wrote but u know how tenten is a tomboy well u could change that she has to wear a dress and do more girly stuff Quote
C_Wade Posted March 17, 2017 Author Report Posted March 17, 2017 Thank you, glad to hear that you all are enjoying the story, I’ll do my best to have the chapter done by Sunday, since my holidays finally started today I will have the whole weekend without interruption to work on it. @knowpein I like longer chapters too, the reason why I said three was mostly because I’d rather give everyone a short chapter on Sunday, than no chapter at all. @Ookami88 Depending on what you count as smut there will be 2-4 scenes in the first part, provided I get everything done in time and won’t need to cut the chapter short. @snake1980 Thanks for the idea, but I think I already have enough for Tenten, as I said the outline is complete, now I just need to write it. Quote
Ookami88 Posted March 17, 2017 Report Posted March 17, 2017 Well, I would count a scene where the breaking of Tenten begins as a smut, where the chapter doesn’t end on her simply blacking out, but includes her waking up in some compromising position and having been made to climax in one way or another. Vague, I know, but anything that doesn’t stop just before the good part starts, I consider smut. Quote
C_Wade Posted March 17, 2017 Author Report Posted March 17, 2017 Well, I guess then there will be 4 scenes most likely, didn’t know whether you only counted things as smut that featured actual intercourse. There will be several scenes with larger timeskips between them, but most of the ‘action’ will always be written out (even if there are some fade-outs here and there) Quote
Ookami88 Posted March 17, 2017 Report Posted March 17, 2017 Good to hear, and while most would count the actual intercourse, me on the other hand enjoy also other kinds of “playtime” that the girls would have. So, if those are included in those four scenes, then I’m really looking forward to the start of Tenten’s episode! Quote
knowpein Posted March 17, 2017 Report Posted March 17, 2017 5 hours ago, C_Wade said: Well, I guess then there will be 4 scenes most likely, didn’t know whether you only counted things as smut that featured actual intercourse. There will be several scenes with larger timeskips between them, but most of the ‘action’ will always be written out (even if there are some fade-outs here and there) can’t wait for actions on TenTen…I Definitely find non intercourse scenes much better...as part of preparing thats has to come... meanwhile I Have update Kushina Fight post…. Quote
C_Wade Posted March 17, 2017 Author Report Posted March 17, 2017 48 minutes ago, knowpein said: meanwhile I Have update Kushina Fight post…. What exactly did you update? just grammar and stuff? or actual content? I just read over it and I can’t tell if there is anyting different content wise Quote
knowpein Posted March 18, 2017 Report Posted March 18, 2017 20 hours ago, C_Wade said: What exactly did you update? just grammar and stuff? or actual content? I just read over it and I can’t tell if there is anyting different content wise I had added few ideas and quite expanded it….also corrected spellings wheresoever possible….So scenes were bit expanded….. Anyways waiting for your update…. Quote
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