The Adventures Of Jaune

[Blueshirt]

I'm rather new to these forums, but I'm not new to writing, if a tad rusty.So I'd like to get as much feedback and critique as possible. 'Adult' fiction is a new venture for me, so I'd really appreciate it.

Author: Blueshirt
Title: The Adventures Of Jaune
Summary: Jaune makes his way around the girls of Remnant.
Feedback: As much as possible would be great, as long as it's polite (Even if you hated it).
Fandom: RWBY
Pairing: Multiple, but all involve Jaune

Warnings Femdom, D/S. In the future there will be some rape and even yaoi, but I will include a warning at the beginning of those chapters.
Solo story or chaptered story: Chaptered
URL: http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600094923

Thanks for taking the time to read.

[Blueshirt]

Chapter four is up. It doesn't introduce any new girls to Jaune's harem, but it is a special chapter in its' own way. Jaune has all three girls at once. Though he's not exactly in charge of the situation.

http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600094923

[Blueshirt]

Almost a year later and I’ve actually finished chapter five. It’s a character I know people wanted, Ruby Rose herself.