crazychickhull Posted May 18, 2015 Report Posted May 18, 2015 Anything and everything story related Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 18, 2015 Author Report Posted May 18, 2015 So hi guys and gal's I've been writing for a while but never really had the guts to post any before. I like honesty and constructive criticism. So.if you think my writing is crap say so as long as you tell me why. Not just slate it for fun Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 18, 2015 Author Report Posted May 18, 2015 And my forum http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/59875-crazychickhulls-crazy-corner/?p=373560#entry373560 Quote
Rescue25 Posted May 18, 2015 Report Posted May 18, 2015 As I said in the review too short. I think both ch 1 & 2 should have been 1 chapter and some more added.. Go ahead and make another chapter but make it longer. B Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 18, 2015 Author Report Posted May 18, 2015 Thanks will do might take about a week though. Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 18, 2015 Author Report Posted May 18, 2015 Some stories I'm reading right now. Loser - dedicated quill http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600103553&chapter=1 Even if he wanted to - penny 101 http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106982&chapter=1 Northstar - magusfang http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107109&chapter=1 Boy in the grass - magusfang http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107108 Girls in the grass - magusfang http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107111 Shadows in the grass - magusfang http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107725&chapter=1 It's your fault I'm like this - omnipotent despot http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600102262&chapter=1 Sister sister - that-one-guy http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107123&chapter=1 The Chronicles of the People of Sklar - angeldust http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107333&chapter=1 Several by eve Leigh: Control http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107308 Becoming http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107510 Taking chances. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107448 If I find any more I like I'll post them here. Quote
magusfang Posted May 19, 2015 Report Posted May 19, 2015 (edited) As I said in the review too short. I think both ch 1 & 2 should have been 1 chapter and some more added.. Go ahead and make another chapter but make it longer. B Gotta agree, too short...was just getting into iy and BANG, hit the EOC wall, ...of course I have been known to be a bit verbose... Edited May 19, 2015 by magusfang Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 19, 2015 Author Report Posted May 19, 2015 Going to start writing chapter 3 tomorrow I'll try and make it longer this time I have a lot a want to put into it. Rescue25 1 Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 21, 2015 Author Report Posted May 21, 2015 So chapter 3 is up not as long as I would like having trouble with the Sex scene. Guess you'll have to wait for that. 😜 Quote
magusfang Posted May 21, 2015 Report Posted May 21, 2015 It's easy: put tab P into slot V and bounce until a leak is noticed. Rescue25 1 Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 21, 2015 Author Report Posted May 21, 2015 It's easy: put tab P into slot V and bounce until a leak is noticed. Lol 😁 Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 22, 2015 Author Report Posted May 22, 2015 Rescue 25 thanks for the review I'm not the planning kind of gal. I sit I write but there are only a couple more chapters to go this started off as just a title Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 22, 2015 Author Report Posted May 22, 2015 If anyone has any ideas for titles I'll see if I can come up with anything. Or a 50 word teaser. You all say you can write long stories so.I challenge you to write a 50-100 word story. It has to be complete Quote
magusfang Posted May 22, 2015 Report Posted May 22, 2015 ok, 100 words exactly" She slowly reached for the doorknob, her hand shaking lightly, and taking a deep breath before grasping it, she threw the heavy door open hard. From the doorway she saw the old man sitting at the desk, piles of gold coins arrayed before him, and the gun in her hand lifted, seemingly of it’s own, and fired with an explosive roar that hurt her ears. She looked over the dieing man, and out of the large window behind his desk with a sad sigh, at a large tree on the cliff and the dark storm clouds roiling in the distance. the longer version is here: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107120 Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 23, 2015 Author Report Posted May 23, 2015 Too much? No I loved it. My heart was beating fast. Quote
magusfang Posted May 23, 2015 Report Posted May 23, 2015 little darker than what i ussualy write, i'm kind of a happy ending type of guy Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 23, 2015 Author Report Posted May 23, 2015 It is happy she gets her release. Quote
magusfang Posted May 23, 2015 Report Posted May 23, 2015 She died though... plus she just gave her pain to the Capt who shot her, now he has to live with what he did. Oh he can say it was a mercy killing but trust me, that won't help in the middle of the night when the nightmares come... Think I was in a bad mood when I rote that, best part is when she shoots the guy who hurt her Quote
Guest Soulvanguard Posted May 24, 2015 Report Posted May 24, 2015 If I may interject (somewhat new around here), I kinda had a somewhat dark lemon idea for series in Fate Stay Night. Any of you know of anyone who would be willing to take a stab at it? Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 24, 2015 Author Report Posted May 24, 2015 If I may interject (somewhat new around here), I kinda had a somewhat dark lemon idea for series in Fate Stay Night. Any of you know of anyone who would be willing to take a stab at it? I don't usually do commissions but email me and I'll Have a look-see Quote
crazychickhull Posted May 24, 2015 Author Report Posted May 24, 2015 Soul vanguard if you look through the forums you will find a place where you can post your request where more people will see it. Quote
Guest Soulvanguard Posted May 24, 2015 Report Posted May 24, 2015 Well thanks for willing to look at it, I appreciate it. Also thanks for telling that there is a place to post where I might get more people to look at it, in case you turn it down. Anyway now I just have to figure out how to email you. Hopefully I don't fumble up to much (lol). Quote
magusfang Posted May 24, 2015 Report Posted May 24, 2015 upper right of the page, click the little envelope then compose new...pretty easy from there Quote
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