Chronicles of Quinn Kane -- Review Replies

[JayDee]

I gotta agree with SlapNuts really. And not just because I still feel kind've like I affected your celeb porn career. I think if you press on and write what you like to write you'd surely find it happier and more fulfilling experience as a writer! That's all. As a hobbyist I've generally gone with what I felt like writing. The thing with written internet porn is a lot of positive and negative comments you get are not necessarily about the quality of writing (although for the record, I think the first three chapters flowed well!) but about the specific kink/fetish/whathaveyou used and how much it aroused or un-aroused the reviewer. There will always be folks who particularly like a specific thing, no matter how niche, and generally an even more vocal subset who don't like it if a story with one kink type (molested tv star) suddenly includes another (florida's family values) - I got a bit of a negative feedback from putting a rimming scene in one story that hadn't had anything like that in previous chapters, but I thought it belonged there, so I was like screw it. I got that one licked.

I think that's probably why you've had some less positive replies here thought, but there will undoubtedly have been still far more silent perverts reading and enjoying what you did wrote. Hell, folks just tend not to review a lot anyway. On the other hand, cheerfully taking the Charles Dickens route is kind've awesome too. Though you might have to spend time in downmarket east London drinking pits and whorehouses for research.

(Not the East London of South Africa, although I'm sure it has many fine drinking pits and whorehouses).

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I gotta agree with SlapNuts really. And not just because I still feel kind've like I affected your celeb porn career. I think if you press on and write what you like to write you'd surely find it happier and more fulfilling experience as a writer! That's all. As a hobbyist I've generally gone with what I felt like writing. The thing with written internet porn is a lot of positive and negative comments you get are not necessarily about the quality of writing (although for the record, I think the first three chapters flowed well!) but about the specific kink/fetish/whathaveyou used and how much it aroused or un-aroused the reviewer. There will always be folks who particularly like a specific thing, no matter how niche, and generally an even more vocal subset who don't like it if a story with one kink type (molested tv star) suddenly includes another (florida's family values) - I got a bit of a negative feedback from putting a rimming scene in one story that hadn't had anything like that in previous chapters, but I thought it belonged there, so I was like screw it. I got that one licked.

There's definitely a part of me that thinks "Damn the torpedoes!" and wants to stay the course, but the Alice material is not something that I had planned to let take over the story anyway; she was never going to be permanent, so I decided to get rid of her early. You're probably right that I am lending too much weight to a vocal minority, but I am still new to this and don't yet have the courage of my convictions In my mind, reviving the character in a different story enough "sticking to my guns" for me. Besides, as I've mentioned, I was a little wary that Alice didn't belong in Quinn's story anyway. (Sort of your point about mixing fetishes.)

I am expecting the inevitable "more kids!" comments to start trickling in after the next chapter, though...

Off to the drinking pits and whorehouses! Or was that drinking houses and whore pits? Oh, well, I'll figure it out...

PS: Regarding the celeb porn material, I stil think it was the right advice, and the right decision!

Edited May 24, 2015 by NecroNOMNOMicon

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Look, it's an out-and-out rave review! I'm so chuffed right now!!!!

Loyal reader Mikhail Arbatov had this to say:

Mikhail Arbatov 2015-05-24 id # 3000227249 I am not usually into reading these sort of stories but being the curious person that I am I checked it out and lo and behold I am hooked. You've got guts writing this sort of fiction much less publishing it. Cheers for being so daring and taking a chance. You are very creative too and it's very well written with vivid and graphic details including describing the scenery. I hope this continues.

Thank you so much, Mikhail! I really needed to read something like this to help motivate me to carry on!

I'm so glad that someone mentioned the writing, and not just the plot. Thank you!

Keeping reading and reviewing, folks! :Eye:

-Necro

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Hope everyone in the USA had an enjoyable Memorial Day today. My story got a review that really made my holiday...

One Katniss Everdeen (Where have I heard that name before?) had this confession to share...

Katniss Everdeen 2015-05-25 id # 3000227274 Hello and Happy Memorial Day!

I don't usually read stories featuring a female protagonist in these types of situations which is usually taboo with me but told myself to be brave and to just go ahead and click the story to find out what it was all about. I can now proudly admit that I did and thanks to you I have discovered a new fandom that I had thought I would never actually enjoy reading. I look forward to seeing how this progresses.

It's my new secret addiction thanks to you.

Aw, Katniss, I am so glad that you decided to be brave, and that you chose my story on which to take a chance!!

It's terrific that you've discovered something new that you can enjoy. (And don't worry, your secret is safe with me...)

I will do my best to keep the story entertaining. I don't want to let down any of my readers.

Thanks again...

Keep reading and reviewing, folks! :Eye:

-Necro

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Here's a timely chime-in...

Your friend and mine, the prolific Anonymous, asks:

Anon 2015-05-27 id # 3000227318 How is chapter 6 coming along? Will it be posted soon? Are you still going to continue this story or were you too upset with what you thought were negative reviews and have decided to put it on hold for now? I wasn't complaining just didn't like the addition of Alice and her father, and wanted the story to focus on the perils of Quinn, and only Quinn, which is what attracted me in the first place. I guess when a child enters the picture it makes the story seem to real and it's not as fun to read.

Funny you should ask, Anon, as I just finished writing Chapter 6 not an hour ago. It's currently marinating in its own juices while I take a break to clear out the old grey matter and give my eyes a break. I'll go back to it in a little and do all the editing. With luck, it will be posted tomorrow.

The story is definitely still on track; still going where it was always headed -- but with an alteration of cast. Alice makes her final appearance in Chapter 6, so get ready to pop the champagne, all you Alice haters! The focus will remain on Quinn and only Quinn -- but I am adamant that she has a supporting cast to play off and to keep things interesting. Trust me, readers. I will be checking ID's at the door, and no one under 18 gets into the story.

You do raise an interesting point, Anon, to wit: adding a child making the story seem more real and not as much of a lark. I hadn't considered that. Perhaps a child makes some people instinctively more protective of a character than they would be about an adult. Indeed, someone in this thread suggested that Quinn brought all these unfortunate events on herself! Surely they'd never say that about a kid! I wouldn't mind hearing from others their reasons for not liking the introduction of Alice. Too real? Too over-the-top in the opposite direction? Not a good idea to mix fetishes/taboos?

Don't worry, she's gone for good; I'm just interested in where I went wrong.

Alons-y, Quinn!

Keep reading and reviewing, folks! :Eye:

-Necro

[Guest Guest]

It wasn't that I hated Alice but guess adding a child just made story too realistic to suit me and sadly there is enough bad stuff that happens in the real world as we all hear on the news. I am excited about you adding supporting cast like those guys in the bar (chap 1) and the van (chap 2) and even the hunter but just not the addition of kids. Now, should you write another story one day featuring characters like Alice, then that's great I just wouldn't read it but I know other probably would. Go for it and I wish you well.

I don't think I'll be able to sleep tonight wondering what you have planned for chapter 6 and how you are going to write out Alice...... I will read it and say a fond "au revoir" to Alice and that it was nice meeting her and her daddy. but this is Quinn's adventure and Alice can have her own story one day.

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I don't think I'll be able to sleep tonight wondering what you have planned for chapter 6 and how you are going to write out Alice...... I will read it and say a fond "au revoir" to Alice and that it was nice meeting her and her daddy. but this is Quinn's adventure and Alice can have her own story one day.

Awesome, Guest, I'm glad you're psyched about the next chapter. So am I!

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It has finally been published! The long-awaited sixth chapter in the epic "Chronicles of Quinn Kane" series was just published!

Featuring -- by popular demand -- the final appearance of Alice, the little girl who divided a fandom.

What is Alice's final fate? Does she die an unlikely heroine? Does she go out like a little bitch? Or -- most shocking of all -- does she live?!?!?! Does she exist inside a snowglobe, or is she is bed with Bob Newhart? If you're betting she's at peace in a hippie commune... well, you lose.

And what about her father? Does Alan drown in the bathtub or get elected president? Does Quinn kick him off a moving vehicle or hang him on a meat hook? Will he ever learn to play chess?

Warning: Any, all or none of the above scenarios may or may not actually happen! You have been warned!

Keep reading and reviewing, folks! :Eye:

-Necro

[CL Mustafic]

You know, I haven't read your story because it's not really my kind of thing but I have been reading you thread, (don't ask me why because well just don't) I think I may have to actually read The Chronicles of Quinn Kane because if it's half as entertaining as you thread it will be worth the time.

I'm gonna try out the first chapter and get back to you...

[Guest SlapNuts]

A toast to you for an awesome new chapter.

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You know, I haven't read your story because it's not really my kind of thing but I have been reading you thread, (don't ask me why because well just don't) I think I may have to actually read The Chronicles of Quinn Kane because if it's half as entertaining as you thread it will be worth the time.

I'm gonna try out the first chapter and get back to you...

Yay! I hope you like it!

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A toast to you for an awesome new chapter.

Yay! Thank you!!

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Chapter 6 is live now, and it has started to bring in some comments!

First up is Anon:

Anon 2015-05-28 id # 3000227338 "Bye, bye, Alice and I hope you get your own story one day!"

"Alan, I hope you don't become fodder for the gators."

Now, we are back to the action and Quinn is taking dead center stage once again. She was born for this and it's the role of a lifetime for her.

Awe, I love Golden's but just can't picture them hurting a fly let alone Quinn but Doggies do love their peanut butter. I love cliffhangers as long as the wait to find out what happens next isn't too long.

Yes, Quinn is now back in the spotlight. As for the Golden retriever, I'm sure he means no harm. It's just the wonder peanut butter... The.. the.... peanutbutterpeanutbutterpeanutbutterpeanutbutterpeanutbutterpeanutbutterpeanutbutterpeanutbutterpeanutbutter

Keep reading and reviewing, folks! :Eye:

-Necro

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Next, let's welcome a new reader!

Registered member CL.Mustafic has some thoughtful commentary:

CL.Mustafic 2015-05-28 id # 3000227340 Let me preface this by saying that I kind of figured that this story would be a bit outside of my comfort zone when I began reading it. I'm going to try not to let my dislike of some of the subject matter color my review of your actual writing.

I think that your style is very good. I'm not one that goes for overly descriptive writing ie some times a chair's just a chair I don't need to know the color and texture of it unless it's some thing crucial to the story. I think you strike a good balance of being descriptive enough so I can picture the scene without going overboard. I also liked that given the subject of the story it didn't just read like porn, there was an actual story behind it.

I didn't see too many mistakes either with your grammar or word usage so that was refreshing. All in all if you wrote something that didn't make me squick out I'd probably read it. But to each their own and good on ya for writing what you want and putting it out there for people like me to dislike. LOL I'm kidding really it didn't freak me out too much just a bit. I also know it was my choice to read it and just so you know, I'd do it again.

CL

Thanks for giving my story a chance and being a big enough person to put aside your personal preferences in order to give the story a fair shake. That's very cool of you!

It is tough to balance descriptive writing with overwriting -- and, heck, sometimes I just feel like rambling on and on because I'm into it -- so I'm glad you can appreciate some necessary detail when some folks just want to get to the dirty part. I do really want this to be a story, not PWP porn. There's still plenty of dirty stuff, but I like to there's also something to give fans of the particular fetish more than just porn.

I like to do a read on the story that is just for grammar and spelling, and it is frustrating when I go back to check a posted chapter and find a mistake. It really bothers me!!

Very pleased that you were willing to fight your squick factor and power through a read. It sounds like you enjoyed it to the degree possible, and that makes me happy. Again, thanks for making the effort!

Keep reading and reviewing, folks! :Eye:

-Necro

Edited May 29, 2015 by NecroNOMNOMicon

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Next up, frequent correspondent SlapNuts!

SlapNuts 2015-05-28 id # 3000227344 I think we are getting back to some of the good stuff!

Yup, Quinn is going to be stuffed just like she was destined to be. Oh, oh, oh, Claire knows who Quinn Kane is!!!!!!!! Well, Quinn wanted to be a movie star and I think she just got her wish, LOL.

Yes, we are definitely getting back to the good stuff, with Quinn back in the spotlight, just where she belongs! Stuffed... and overstuffed, as the case may be...

Yes, Claire knows who Quinn is, but just what does that mean for the hapless movie star?

Yes, Quinn is about to be introduced to a different segment of filmmaking... where it's possible she may become a big star!

Keep reading and reviewing, folks! :Eye:

-Necro

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Chapter 6 brought these thoughts from thoughtful reader Katniss Everdeen (there's that name again...)

Katniss Everdeen 2015-05-29 id # 3000227353 Wow, I didn't see that coming! I wish I could jump into story and rescue Alice from their clutches. As for Quinn, I have nagging feeling she's going to be introduced to something she's never experienced before and that Claire & Fleur will be willing participants. As I stated before, I usually don't go for these types of stories and believe me I read & review tons of other stories here but this genre is a first time for me. I still can't believe I am reading a story like this and liking it so does that mean I am going to Hell when I die? I guess I should be going to confession and repent, LOL.

I'll bet Alice wishes you could help her, too. Maybe you'll see her again someplace. (Do they have Hunger Games in Florida?)

Quinn is in for an education, that's for sure! And someone has to show her the ropes (pun intended)...

I can't tell you how happy I am that you are sticking around!! For my own edification, when you say that this a first for you in "this genre," do you mean bestiality?

If you think you're going to Hell for reading this story, where am I going for writing it? As I tell so many of my real-life friends, I'll save a chair for you in Hell, right next to the fireplace!

-NecroNOMNOMicon

[Guest SlapNuts]

Guess who?

Couple of questions pertaining to chappy 6. Was this wording (Discontinuity) a way to letting readers know that was the end of Alice and her Daddy as we know them in this story? Then, when Quinn said; “Oh, shit... I am on a movie set,” she sighed. “With peanut butter on my pussy and tits.” was she just thinking it or did she speak it out loud? Please tell me chapter 7 is in the works and will be long and juicy.

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Guess who?

Couple of questions pertaining to chappy 6. Was this wording (Discontinuity) a way to letting readers know that was the end of Alice and her Daddy as we know them in this story? Then, when Quinn said; “Oh, shit... I am on a movie set,” she sighed. “With peanut butter on my pussy and tits.” was she just thinking it or did she speak it out loud? Please tell me chapter 7 is in the works and will be long and juicy.

Answers for your questions...

No, that was not the purpose of using [Discontinuity], which also shows up in Chapter 3. The word itself means a break in time or sequence of events. I use it to mean that an unknown amount of time has taken place. For instance, when the van crashed, Quinn had no idea how long she'd been unconscious, so I decided that readers should not know either. (Was it couple of hours or 24 hours?) And brace yourself: Alan isn't quite out of the story yet. He's still got another chapter in him -- but all in service of Quinn's tale.

Again, in the latest chapter, who knows how long Quinn was unconscious? I think it helps add a little suspense if the readers don't know that only two hours passed -- or was it two days? How long has she been missing? The longer somebody is missing, the less likely it is that she will be found -- and she is way past the 24-36 hour window during which most missing-person cases are solved. And, think about it: Is she still at Amaury's home or somewhere else now? Has she been fired from "Bikini Spring" for disappearing?

As for the peanut butter line, I think she kinda mumbled it quietly to herself, but it's fine if you interpreted it as something she was thinking to herself. Maybe I should change the styl and make her thoughts in italics so there is less confusion.

Chapter 7 is in the works, but it is coming along slowly. I have been very busy with real-life crap that is sucking up my time and will power.

What did you think of ending Chapter 6 on a cliff-hanger?

-NecroNOMNOMicon

[Guest SlapNuts]

Thanks for explaining to my lame brain that the purpose of the term [Discontinuity] means a break in time or sequence of events and now it makes perfect sense. Well, crap, I never thought that Quinn might have been moved to a different location but now that you suggested these possible sequence of events for me to digest I will be analyzing every single chapter in this way. You are brilliant my dear Necro! In regards to ending chapters with cliff-hangers...... ..... bring it on..... Oh, and sorry about real-life crap sucking up your time and will power.... Hey, leave Necro alone or else!

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Chapter 7 is live now! Yay!

Please pretend you remember me and my story and go read it!

It's the longest chapter so far, and I think it has some neat stuff in it -- and by neat I mean K9 sex -- though it also probably won't do anything to fight the reputation I'm getting as a bloodthirsty author...

Read it! Go, now!

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I know it's been a long time between chapters, but at least one reader has returned -- in more ways than one -- to check on Quinn...

JayDee had this to say about the return of the Chronicles:

JayDee 2015-06-11 id # 3000227548 ...and I'm back with chapter 7. Which is brought to us by Peanut Butter!

I didn't read the two previous chapters with the minor1 code, but from some of the comments on the forum I'm quite happy that Alan got what he got. That whole section was well written too, seemed pretty realistic.

Building the whole sex scene around humiliating forced orgasms on camera was pretty hot. I liked Quinn's reaction to her orgasms, and I liked Fleur's character too. She's a big dog lover, but not just in the sex sense. That's quite sweet.

Glad to have you back, JayDee, now that the kids' stuff has been (permanently) dealt with. Welcome back!

When people say Alan got what he deserved, I'm reminded of one of my favorite lines from Clint Eastwood's "Unforgiven." Willl Munny (Clint) says, "We all got it coming, kid." And realistic? I've done more than a little research for this story, so I'm glad a few people are noticing. It's absolutely true that alligators (and crocodiles) will drown large prey, not bite 'em in half like a cheap horror movie.

:: makes notes :: more on-camera forced orgasms...

Fleur's instant move to protect Midas from cruelty was one of those cases of a character taking over and telling me she wouldn't stand for that, so she took action. I love it when that happens. She's a sweet girl. Depraved, but sweet.

I hope a few more folks will share their thoughts on Chapter 7. I can see people are reading; they're just not very talkative.

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Another Anonymous has a concern...

Anon 2015-06-13 id # 3000227577 Hey, did you remove the review thread from the forum page because I can't seem to find it only all these other posts/topics you have for various drabbles. I just hope this doesn't mean Quinn is taking a back seat now.

Nope, I did not move this remove thread -- I'm sure it just got pushed down the topic list by other, more active posts over the last few days.

And don't worry, nothing else that I write takes away time from Quinn Kane -- I do the drabbles to keep the creative juices flowing whenever inspiration for Quinn is coming slowly or if I need to change my thought patterns or just give the ol' brain a break.

-NecroNOMNOMicon

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Ths Anon has a new outlook on things thanks to the latest chapter...

Anon 2015-06-13 id # 3000227576 I am never going to look at Peanut Butter the same way again, lol.

Very realistic with the way the Alligator killed Alan so good writing.

Looking forward to Quinn getting down and dirty with the dogs.

I like Fleur because she seems to be a dog lover at heart.

Mmmmm.. peanut butterrrr..... Yum! I'm glad none of these girls has a peanut allergy!

Thanks for enjoying the end of Alan. I tried to make it worth reading.

Quinn will be plenty occupied with the dogs... and maybe a surprise in the future...

Yes, Fleur is a dog lover in every sense of the word!

-NecroNOMNOMicon

Edited June 15, 2015 by NecroNOMNOMicon

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Loyal reader JayDee is back with more thoughts...

JayDee 2015-06-27 id # 3000227853 "It’s only inhumane when a dog has to fuck an ugly chick,” - Oh come on! Dog's have way different standards of beauty! A dog's standard is "Is she in heat?" "If not, can I somehow stick it in anyway?" Dogs are the frat boys of the animal world.

Oh, wow, I made that note then kept reading and saw you covered standards in the very next bit of dialogue. I hadn't scrolled to it. That's a little scary!

Thought it was funny how Claire was trying to comfort her over the previous gang rape and Remy's just missing the point completely.

Ahh, the dog paw tattoo. I've seen that in a few things. I still like the idea of calling it the " Bark Mark" for Harry Potter stuff.

Hot orgasm with the dog, then funny again when he joins the kiss!

Still enjoying the heck out of it.

I suppose this means great minds think alike -- but then, what's our excuse?

Seriously, though, it's a case of a reader asking a logical question raised by dialogue; and that same question occurred to me as I wrote the line. Why would a dog share human standards of beauty? It's just logical.

Remy... he's kind of a lunkahead. Not mean-spirited, he just doesn't think things through, like that line that offended Fleur.

Gotta go with the paw tattoo, because I've se-- I mean, I've heard about it being in actual doggie videos. I'm not familiar with a whole lot of Potter fanfic, so I'm guessing they use a similar tattoo for werewolf lovers? "Bark mark" is a great name for it! And there was a commenter a while back who was interested in body modification. I hope tattooing qualifies...

Akira is a friendly pup!

I couldn't be more pleased that you are still enjoying this story!!

-NecroNOMNOMicon

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Another chapter is up (Chapter 9) and I am lucky enough to get another review!

JayDee 2015-07-07 id # 3000227996 Using the Ankh symbol in that way is a pretty cool idea, figured it was a flash forward until the puppies, then I wasn't sure...

I know an American Bulldog and it is very strong, made me wince a little to think about one of those going for it - think you're probably involving her trauma over it all in a more realistic way than most. I guess there'll be a knotting at some point?

I am not ashamed to say that I blatantly st-- er, borrowed the Ankh symbolism for death from the brilliant Neil Gaiman, whose wonderful personification of Death in the "Sandman" series wears one all the time. It's an homage, Neil, really! (pleasedon'tsuepleasedon'tsue)

Yeah, the American bulldog can be scary strong. And you know another strong breed -- the mastiff. Holy smokes, those things can pull a fully grown man on the other end of a leash! I wonder what Quinn thinks of that fact?

I also wonder how she's going to get through this latestest flashback-induced trauma. Well, at least we can count on Remy and Amaury to be sensitive to her needs, right? Right? Uh, guys...?

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