NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 11, 2015 Report Posted May 11, 2015 Welcome to my first review replies thread! I hope to be very busy here, and I hope everyone has fun. "The Chronicles of Quinn Kane" is all about the trials and tribulations of my OC, Quinn Kane, an up-and-coming young actress who has just about the worst luck possible. Read the story here: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107728 My very first review comes from an anonymous reader: Anon 2015-05-10 id # 3000226902 Oh boy, this is interesting and I hope you continue it because I want to see what happens to her next. Thanks for reading, Anon, and thanks even more sharing your opinion! I'm so happy you've enjoyed the craziness that has befallen Quinn so far and are interested in what happens to her next! I have a good idea what's in her immediate future and I'm working on the next chapter now, but I will drop this hint: more of the same, but different. Keep reading, folks! :Eye: Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 11, 2015 Author Report Posted May 11, 2015 (edited) The next review comes from a registered user!! JayDee 2015-05-11 id # 3000226922 I've read the three chapters up so far! I think Quinn is described very attractively in part 1, and I don't think I've seen one like this before where the story starts with dry humping like that - probably more realistic than the stories that start with full public penetration!Then, yeah, bad luck with the dogs and being grabbed by those assholes, but the bit with Maggie licking Quinn was hot. Sort of kharmic for the three assholes I see! I guess the drug actually helped her come through the crash 'cos she would have been a lot limper bodied.I will certainly try and check up for further updates."They had not reanimated like zombies in a movie." - you can save that as an AU story for Halloween Thanks for reading, JayDee! I'd love to think I did something a bit original (or at least uncommon) with the opening chapter, but I was just trying to write something interesting that I would enjoy reading. I was thinking it seemed a bit more believeable than actual public penetration. And yes, Quinn is a hottie!! Yep, those three assholes definitely reaped what they sowed -- but at least some it was hot while it was happening. And how ironic that drug helped Quinn survive... Hope to see you around for further installments. Thanks for your great comments! Keep reading, folks! :Eye: Edited May 11, 2015 by NecroNOM Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 13, 2015 Author Report Posted May 13, 2015 Big day today, as Quinn's tale of woe has attracted not one but two great comments! The first Anonymous reader says: Anon 2015-05-13 id # 3000226975 I've been reading up on animals in the Florida Everglades to imagine what kind of creatures Quinn will come across that might molest her, lol. There are plenty of mammals, reptiles and amphibians plus plenty of other ones for you to choose from. I wonder whether there are any sort of clingy vines she might find herself stuck in. I hope you continue this and update soon. Okay, another fan of molestation via animal! A swamp animal this time! I think I may have found my people! And clingy vines? Let's just say great minds tend to think alike... Next, another Anonymous reader: Anon 2015-05-13 id # 3000226980 Oh, I just saw your post for this story under the Promote a Story section of the forum but it would't let me leave a comment so I am letting you know that I want you to see more of Quinn's misadventures! I'm glad you're eager to see more of Quinn. I promise I'm working on the next installment! Keep reading (and commenting) folks! :Eye: Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 14, 2015 Author Report Posted May 14, 2015 (edited) I'm back today with another interesting comment that was also filed yesterday, but came in after I had already posted. It seems the 13th was Quinn's lucky day for reader reactions. Reader Olaf wrote: Olaf 2015-05-13 id # 3000226991 Um, I don't know why but find this story pleasantly entertaining. I hope no one thinks I am a weirdo for liking it. I'd like to think it's my amazing writing skill that has you enjoying the story, Olaf, but it's probably more that the events are... well, a little weird. I've tried to go off the beaten path a bit and find, if not an original spin then at least a less-used one, on some standard tropes. Just trying to write a story that I would like to read. And saying you find it "pleasantly entertaining" really brought a smile to my face. Thanks! And, while I have not been here a long time, I have no problem saying that this site is very tolerant and welcoming -- almost to a fault. If anybody does think you're weird, I believe they will probably keep it to themselves and just move along. This site seems to me to be very much a "live and let live" place, so I wouldn't worry. In fact, I don't worry -- I just write stories about women molested by animals and that's the way it is. (And it's going to get weirder...) And, for the record Olaf, I certainly don't think you're a weirdo. I think you are a person of refined taste! Keep reading and commenting, folks! :Eye: Edited May 14, 2015 by NecroNOMNOMicon Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 16, 2015 Author Report Posted May 16, 2015 Leading off with yet another comment from Anonymous (jeez, that guy is prolific!): Anon 2015-05-14 id # 3000227005 Oh, in case you haven't read this story yet, I think you will enjoy it! Although, it's still a WIP and hasn't been updated in months but I am sure author will return some day to finish it. At least, I hope they will!http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107161 You are correct, I am enjoying that story! Great call -- thank you! (In case you're curious, It's hard-core dog-on-girl material -- and plenty of it!) Would like to see more. Now a word from Nathan_Reed: Nathan_Reed 2015-05-15 id # 3000227032 I like this even though it's some what twisted. I remember reading another story sort of similar to your first chapter but not quite about a young man hitchhiking with a truck driver who dropped him off at an isolated bar somewhere in Mexico where the lad was subject to various forms of rapes/torture including fisting/object insertions while it's all being video taped and being raped by dogs. He was basically made into a cum dumpster whore but story was never finished. I think it was removed for some reason. Only "somewhat twisted," Nathan? Guess I need to up my game!! Haven't seen that other story, but I'm sorta glad I'm not the only one who thinks of sick shit to write when daydreaming. Keep reading and commenting, folks! :Eye: Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 16, 2015 Author Report Posted May 16, 2015 Happy Saturday! I'm happy because my story got another review! It's from Anonymous -- but I have reason suspect it's a familiar reviewer with no name... Anon 2015-05-16 id # 3000227051 Um, yep, (Kennel Club) is definitely hard-core dog-on-girl material along with plenty of other creatures/species thrown in including Kangaroos, gorillas, snakes, starfish, cats, birds, and many, many, more. Hey, maybe you can devise a way for Quinn's boobs to be used as a milking machine too! Yup, that would be super awesome, lol. I guess I should feel sorry for Quinn (but I don't - she got herself into this mess so she's to blame for what's happening) I was wondering wouldn't it be way too funny for her to get arrested (much, much later - since I hope this is a super long story full of Quinn in lots of various states of unfortunate events) for the deaths of Maggie, Danny and Jeff.... her fingerprints and DNA must be all over the van.... then she could become jail bait for the other inmates and for those prison guard dogs!!!! Whoof, whoof, whoof! lol. I haven't had a chance to delve very far into "Kennel Club," but now I really want to check out that exotic animal actions! Interesting point you make about Quinn getting herself into this mess in my story. Some may suggest that her only "crime" was walking into a bar; but she was looking for an interesting experience,,, I doubt she'll ever forget this trip. (Assuming she makes it out alive and sane) And she sneaked away, so nobody knows she's missing and nobody is looking for her. But who would think to look deep in the Everglades? Poor Quinn -- or not! Yeah, um, about those fingerprints and DNA at a crime scene... You haven't been reading ahead, have you? No, wait, that's not even possible since I haven't finished even writing the next chapter yet. (Get out of my head!) Hopefully what's coming will catch even you by surprise, Anon... Keep reading and commenting, folks! :Eye: Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 22, 2015 Author Report Posted May 22, 2015 It's been a few days, but my story finally pulled in another review -- from someone with a name, no less! Yay! SlapNuts says: SlapNuts 2015-05-21 id # 3000227184 Dude, I would love to read more of Quinn's unfortunate series of events very soon. Will body modification be featured in this story? So happy to hear that you want to read more about Quinn! The good news is, the next chapter is almost ready to post. I am just putting on the finishing touches and editing it. (Yes, I do my own beta reading/editing.) It's the longest chapter yet, and should be up in the next day or so! I'm afraid I'm not a real big fan of body modification. I like tattoos and some piercings on women (nipples, for example), but a lot of the more extreme stuff doesn't work for me. This is in no way a judgment of or criticism of anyone who is into that; I'm merely saying it's not a good choice for me. So, SlapNuts, you might see some piercing during this story, but nothing hard-core. Sorry. Hope you'll keep reading anyway, though! That's all for today! Keep reading and commenting, folks! :Eye: - Necro Quote
Guest SlapNuts Posted May 22, 2015 Report Posted May 22, 2015 Thanks for responding to my review! I hope to see Quinn subject to some body piercings and tattoos, or not, it's totally up to your genius mind what happens to her...... Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 22, 2015 Author Report Posted May 22, 2015 Thanks for responding to my review! I hope to see Quinn subject to some body piercings and tattoos, or not, it's totally up to your genius mind what happens to her...... "Genius mind"? Are you auditioning to become president of my fan club? LOL Thanks, dude! Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 22, 2015 Author Report Posted May 22, 2015 Hey, look who's back: It's SlapNuts! SlapNuts 2015-05-21 id # 3000227186 Yo, I was just wondering whether Quinn will be running into Mr. Sunglasses and friends again from the The Purple Dolphin. You don't have to answer because it's probably a spoiler and I will continue reading to find out. I was thinking they might come across her while she was wandering around the glades....... Spoilers! Keep reading and commenting, folks! :Eye: -Necro Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 22, 2015 Author Report Posted May 22, 2015 Just in case anyone thinks my last reply was a bit of a dodge, I'll let y'all in on a bit of behind-the-scenes info... I was working on Chapter 4 this morning and thought I had it all worked out when I suddenly realized that I didn't. The story demanded something more, and by the time I was finished not only was the reworked chapter the longest one yet, it was very, very long! Now, I don't think it's fair to expect readers to slog through a 6,000-word chapter this early in the story, so I'm going to split it into two parts, which may not be equal in size. (Just for comparison, the chapters have been running about 4,000 words each.) The next installment(s) will be a bit of a change of pace, with more world-building and scene-setting. However, there's still non-consentual sex -- but of a very different (and very taboo) sort. Keep reading and commenting, folks! :Eye: -Necro Quote
Guest SlapNuts Posted May 22, 2015 Report Posted May 22, 2015 Morning, Sunshine! Thanks for the interesting behind- the- scenes info I have a feeling that Quinn is in for one hell of a road trip.... Hey, since you will be splitting chapter 4 into two parts, how soon will the second part (chapter 5) be posted? Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 22, 2015 Author Report Posted May 22, 2015 Hey, since you will be splitting chapter 4 into two parts, how soon will the second part (chapter 5) be posted? I'm probably going to hold off for a few days to give people time to digest Chapter 4 before adding Chapter 5. As I said, I thought it might be overwhelming as one big chunk, so I don't want to just go ahead and dump two big pieces on the same day. Quote
Guest SlapNuts Posted May 22, 2015 Report Posted May 22, 2015 I just read and digested chapter 4. I am not into reading stories featuring the rape or molestation of minors. Since I don't know the direction you are going with this, I am gong to bypass reading it for now. I don't know how long Alice and her daddy will be featured but am skipping reading those particular chapters. I will return once story gets back to focusing on Quinn's sexual escapades. Keep up the good work and happy writing. I am not criticizing it's just not something I like to read. Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 23, 2015 Author Report Posted May 23, 2015 I just read and digested chapter 4. I am not into reading stories featuring the rape or molestation of minors. Since I don't know the direction you are going with this, I am gong to bypass reading it for now. I don't know how long Alice and her daddy will be featured but am skipping reading those particular chapters. I will return once story gets back to focusing on Quinn's sexual escapades. Keep up the good work and happy writing. I am not criticizing it's just not something I like to read. No problem at all, my friend. Go in peace. That's the reason for the warning tags -- to help folks steer clear material they wouldn't enjoy. I have no quarrel with anyone's personal tastes. Alice and Alan will be around for at least two more chapters, but I'll be sure to give you a heads-up whenever the story moves on from them. Keep reading and commenting folks, even if you just want to express disappointmemt. All feedback helps! -Necro Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 23, 2015 Author Report Posted May 23, 2015 Speaking of expressing disappointment, we have these comments from Anonymous Anon 2015-05-22 id # 3000227205 Not quite what I was expecting..... slightly disappointed but will wait to see how this plays out in next update. Anon 2015-05-22 id # 3000227206 I was talking about about chapter 4 not the story itself! Sorry you were disappointed in the latest chapter, Anon. I hope you find the next installment more to your liking. Though, may I ask, what exactly were you disappointed by? Did you not like the new characters? Did you want Quinn to be more front-and-center? Too much travelogue? How do I get back in your good graces? I knew I was taking a chance with this chapter, but I really wanted it to be different from the previous ones. It was a conscious decision. I wanted to bring in some new characters to help Quinn carry the narrative, but maybe she got pushed too far into the background. I also knew it was taking a risk to indulge in all the world-building, too, but I did a lot of research about the Everglades and felt compelled to use as much as I could. Let me know where I went off the rails -- or if you liked the change of pace! (Somebody liked it, right? Right? Anybody?...) Keep reading and commenting, folks! :Eye: -Necro Quote
Guest SlapNuts Posted May 23, 2015 Report Posted May 23, 2015 Well, you did warn us, as well as, leave warning tags at beginning of chapter 4. The next installment(s) will be a bit of a change of pace, with more world-building and scene-setting. However, there's still non-consentual sex -- but of a very different (and very taboo) sort. I am not too disappointed it's just that particular type of scene is not my cup of tea. I did enjoy the change of pace, the travelogue, world building, and the new characters but not the minor abuse aspect of it. I did feel she was pushed into the background but am thinking you are leading up to something bigger here for her. I think I would have liked seeing her 'accosted' a little bit more before the Trapper found her. He could have found Quinn in a 'situation' instead of her being asleep. I know this is spoiler territory but am thinking Alan's wife is alive and was at their camp but the guy didn't know that. I don't know about Anon but you are still very much in my good graces. I guess Quinn needed a break from all the molestation she was facing but hope it doesn't last too long. I am really interested in learning more about the the trapper aka Amaury and what he meant by calling them trophies and what his 'home' is like and does anyone else live there. I guess my only real fault is I felt chapter was too short so hurry up and post chapter 5 so I can read what happens next. I will just bypass anything to do with Alice and skip to the more adult stuff. I read that you are working on a new story so hope you are still able to keep up with Quinn's adventures. How is chapter 6 coming along? Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 23, 2015 Author Report Posted May 23, 2015 I did enjoy the change of pace, the travelogue, world building, and the new characters but not the minor abuse aspect of it. I did feel she was pushed into the background but am thinking you are leading up to something bigger here for her. I think I would have liked seeing her 'accosted' a little bit more before the Trapper found her. He could have found Quinn in a 'situation' instead of her being asleep. I know this is spoiler territory but am thinking Alan's wife is alive and was at their camp but the guy didn't know that. I don't know about Anon but you are still very much in my good graces. I guess Quinn needed a break from all the molestation she was facing but hope it doesn't last too long. I am really interested in learning more about the the trapper aka Amaury and what he meant by calling them trophies and what his 'home' is like and does anyone else live there. I guess my only real fault is I felt chapter was too short so hurry up and post chapter 5 so I can read what happens next. I will just bypass anything to do with Alice and skip to the more adult stuff. I read that you are working on a new story so hope you are still able to keep up with Quinn's adventures. How is chapter 6 coming along? I am glad that you liked the non-Alice elements. Because there's more of that in Chapter 5. And you will get some of your questions answered directly, while others will be in Chapter 6. I did an extensive rewrite of Chapter 5 last night/this morning based on the negative reactions, and it's about 1/3 shorter now. (the better to get it out of the way sooner and refocus) I removed one whole Alice scene and reworked the other. Based on what had to happen leading out of Chapter 4, I couldn't quite get Quinn all the way into the foreground of the chapter, but she does have... well, a star moment. Chapter 6 has been completely reimagined, because I junked what I was going to do in order to truncate the Alice storyline. I just figured it out a couple of hours ago and haven't had a chance to write it yet. How are you with violence? It will take a bit to set this story on a new course, but I can get it righted by Chapter 6. What people want to see is more of Quinn doing what she does best. And I want that too. And don't worry about that other story... it was a simple palate-cleanser and I knocked it out in minutes! I have put other projects on the back burner while I retool the Quinn story. Quote
Guest SlapNuts Posted May 23, 2015 Report Posted May 23, 2015 Dude, there was no intention on my part to influence you to do a rewrite. You are the author and it's your choice. I feel bad now that you felt you had to change anything at all based on my comments. Go with your gut and stay the course. If you would rather focus on Alice instead of Quinn, then go for it and the best of luck to you. I will stick around and read the next couple of chapters to see how it progresses. If I don't like it, then I will be sure not to leave a negative comment but keep my lips zipped. If you do stay on this course, I do think you should change the title and summary to reflect the new story line. Violence?! Quote
JayDee Posted May 23, 2015 Report Posted May 23, 2015 Ah, yeah, as I noted in the celeb thread I avoid minor1 (and the younger part of the minor2 range!) stuff, so I'll skip part 4 as well. Good luck with it all though, and I know you'll find quite a lot of folks who are into it! Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 23, 2015 Author Report Posted May 23, 2015 Ah, yeah, as I noted in the celeb thread I avoid minor1 (and the younger part of the minor2 range!) stuff, so I'll skip part 4 as well. Good luck with it all though, and I know you'll find quite a lot of folks who are into it! Not as many fans of the minor1 material as I was hoping. Or, they are less vocal. I decided to make that minor1 subject matter its own thing and chip it out of this story to return the focus to Quinn. I might continue to use the name Alice in a future minor1 story, but if I do it will be in her own storyline, not intruding on Quinn. I will keep Quinn in the realm of beasts, not kids! You can safely return to the Quinn story by the end of Chapter 6, JayDee. Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 23, 2015 Author Report Posted May 23, 2015 Dude, there was no intention on my part to influence you to do a rewrite. You are the author and it's your choice. I feel bad now that you felt you had to change anything at all based on my comments. Go with your gut and stay the course. If you would rather focus on Alice instead of Quinn, then go for it and the best of luck to you. I will stick around and read the next couple of chapters to see how it progresses. If I don't like it, then I will be sure not to leave a negative comment but keep my lips zipped. If you do stay on this course, I do think you should change the title and summary to reflect the new story line. I'll take that as a Yes to violence... Duly noted. And don't feel guilty or anything. As I said, I knew I was straying and I should have known better! I'm truncating the minor1 action so I can refocus on what my readers seem to want more of: Quinn x Animals. I'll still work up some youth-oriented material, but in another story series, so people who want that will know where to find it. Hey, Charles Dickens let his readers guide his plot choices when he serialized his novels, so who am I to defy what the people want? And one more thing: Alice was never going to take over, so I wouldn't have had to change the name. She was going to hang around once her father was removed from the picture and become a sort of a pal for Quinn. Y'know, with... sleepovers and playing dress-up and that sort of thing. But Quinn was always to remain the star attraction of the series. Got a favorite animal you'd like to see in the future? Quote
Guest SlapNuts Posted May 23, 2015 Report Posted May 23, 2015 Please tell me Alice will exit the storyline with the start of chapter 6....... I know I might piss others off by asking this but wish there was a way you could re-write chapter 4 minus Alice and her father and focus all attention back on Quinn but know that will just screw you up more. Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 23, 2015 Author Report Posted May 23, 2015 Alice will exit in Chapter 6. That's how I restructured the story. But there is no going back. I just now posted Chapter 5. Alice is still there, and she plays a key role in what transpires at the end of the chapter. If you were able to deal with Chapter 4, you can handle Chapter 5, because it is much tamer. (I wish there was an instant messenger app here so I could privately tell you what's up.) Quote
NecroNOMNOMicon Posted May 24, 2015 Author Report Posted May 24, 2015 Sad to say I have another reader unhappy with the addition of the Alice subplot which is now being excised. Olaf had this negative comment: Olaf 2015-05-23 id # 3000227224 Thanks for the warning tag and I should had heeded them. I did read chapter 4 to see what kind of trouble Quinn would find herself but now wish I didn't and am sorry to admit that story is now ruined for me. I am sorry that the Alice bits ruined the chapter for you, Olaf. For whatever it's worth -- as you noted -- I did try to warn you... I rewrote Chapter 5 (currently live) to reduce Alice's role substantially, and she will be exiting in Chapter 6, so I'm hoping maybe you'll give the story another try once Quinn returns to the spotlight in the next new chapter... Keeping reading and reviewing, folks! :Eye: -Necro Quote
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