Hopelessly

[MisatosPenPen]

So I want to know what the readers think. I'm curious. I know what I'm doing, but maybe I can be swayed, for good or evil. (story is HERE)

[Guest caro]

dont !!!!! kakashi should keep his sharingan please pelase

[Guest DarkAngelJudas]

NO!! Don't take it, I mean come on, Sasuke is already going to get what he wants why the HELL can't he just leave Kashi with something that was GIVEN to him. Fucking Sasuke, if he takes his eye I'll wish DEATH UPON HIS ASS!

[Guest Ikke]

You should not take Kakashi's eye out.

Sasuke might hate a non-uchiha for having one but he is not stupid.

If Kakashi is to be the Hokage, the Sharingan will be a powerfull tool to keep control over Konoha and its undoubtly many dissidents.

Without the Sharingan Kakashi will lose much of his power and be more likely to be defeated in a fight.

Sasuke's decision to let Kakashi keep his eye will be a strategic one.

[MisatosPenPen]

Wow, people got here fast. Not one vote for? Continue voting until about Wednesday. And I think you might have to be registered to vote. Sorry, not my forum. *shrugs* I will count your comments as votes. (I voted randomly to test it)

Edited May 30, 2011 by MisatosPenPen

[CreepingDeath]

D:

I wouldn't want Kakashi to lose his eye either, so I voted NO.

[MisatosPenPen]

Come on peoples! Leaving it open for another day or two. (and yes, it looks like you have to be registered to vote, sorry)

[laurenloogie]

Heheh, I voted HELL NO. Sasuke's such an angry little shit. Sorry, Sasuke fans... of which there are many, I'm sure. At least Kakashi uses his sharingan for good. Meanwhile Sasuke's takin down Danzo (who's actually kind of a badass in the end), fuckin up Gokage summits, harassing Killer B... tsk. Ditching his faithful friends in Taka. And now he's implanted his poor brother's eyes cuz he abused his power and got all blind. I mean... Itachi used the mangekyo for ten freakin years, at least. Didn't see him losing his vision. Tsk. TSK! L on the forehead or whatever else.

[laurenloogie]

OK I'm not done, heh. I mean... Sasuke's so angry and he's a tortured soul or whatever... so he just needs to get over being so butthurt and screw Naruto. I'd laugh so hard if the actual manga ends up that way.

[MisatosPenPen]

Here are the review responces I had to remove from chapter 12 of Hopelessly due to the ToS of the site (only 600 words allowed):

Previously un-responded to reviews (sorry):
Disembodiedvoiceofthedying: No, no, you are not the only one who like the idea of Kakashi licking his own cum off the floor. I have Sasuke doing that in an upcoming chapter of Black Swan.
CrimsonxIllusion: Yes, I really started writing these stories because I couldn’t find what I wanted to read, I had to write it myself. I’m so glad you enjoy it.
KiraAmare: Don’t resist the fangirl squeal! You can’t resist the fangirl squeal! Awww, reviews like yours are the reason I continue to write in this lurid genre that I love so much.

Current reviews:
DarkAngelJudas: You are one of the very few in the world who could cow Sasuke. He’s hiding behind me as I read your review.
00-night-eyes-00:
Lady9: I am also a Creative Writing major! Didn’t learn a bloody thing, but it’s on my degree. Character has always been my focus in all my writing. I think you can see in Black Swan in particular where there really isn’t a plot. That one doesn’t really need a plot, but in my offline novel, I had to create a plot just to get people to want to read the character stuff, so I am so glad that you appreciate it. Tasteful is hard in this genre. In my earlier stories I bent over backwards to not use certain words and to keep it tasteful, but then I backslided into the gutter. But I still consider it art rather than porn and I try to make it more than just smut (but it does make me happy when people report nose bleeds). I really did take your review to heart and added two scenes that show a little more of others. Almost the entire story is from Kakashi’s point of view. The only exception so far (that I can think of) was when Sasuke and Sakura had their little chat and there are instances of slipping into Sasuke’s POV during a normal Kakashi-based scenes. I’ve been told that third person omniscient is not in vogue right now and several people who have been critiquing my novel have actually had a hard time reading it because they’re used to limited or first person. I studied lit and have read mostly pre-80’s novels so I’m perfectly comfortable with head hopping. There are two non-Kakashi-centric scenes here because you made me think about it. People who have studied lit and CW make the harshest critiques and it makes me happy that you’ve enjoyed it.