Beta Needed

[PornishPixie]

Hey guys, I’m looking for somebody to be a long term beta for a Nora Roberts offshoot that I’m currently working on. I haven’t finished a chapter yet, but I’m in the process of work on the very first chapter. I’m also writing out chapter outlines to see how far and where I am going with the story. I wanted to give you a rundown about what the offshoot is going to be like. I’ll give you an idea of what the book was about that my fan fiction is written after.

The book is called Black Hills and it’s about an eleven year old boy named Cooper Sullivan that is sent to spend the summer with his grandparents while his parents go through a second honeymoon to save their marriage. They pretty much always shove him aside and he is an inconvenience to them. He doesn’t feel love from them or anybody else until he visits his grandparents. They show him the love he was never given by his own parents and he learns to love and respect them. Through the summer he meets a ten year old neighbor girl named Lil Chance that becomes his best friend. The story skips ahead to when they are nineteen and twenty, at this point and time they have been best friends for nine years. They end up starting a relationship even though Coop lives in New York still. As the summer comes to an end and Coop is about to leave, they go on a trail ride and end up finding the remains of a dead woman. Coop has to leave a couple of days later, but it’s something they will have to live with forever. They try to maintain a long distance relationship unsuccessfully. However, Coop is the one to call it off because he wants Lil to have the opportunity to follow her dreams which she would have thrown away for him. So they split up for good. Coop goes on to be a New York cop and then a investigator. Lil heads off to school and ultimately opens an animal refuge in the black hills she’s called home since she was a girl. They go on with their lives. Coop sells his company in New York to come home to his grandparents when his grandfather breaks his leg and needs help. Lil and Coop butt heads because he hurt her and yet he wants a relationship with her again. To help the relationship along they are both involved in a series of events. He goes with her camping when she trail rides up to check a refuge camera that is being faulty. There they trap cougar for tagging, but before they get to it a psycho shoots and kills it. To make it worse, a few days later the man kills a wolf and hangs it from her gate. They he come back and releases one of the tigers at the refuge. While all of this happens, Coop stays with her in her cabin at the refuge to keep her safe. They find out this murderer is the murderer for the woman they found ten years earlier. They also come to find out he’s killed many people from different states. He’s after Lil because he sees her refuge as a prison for wild animals. He has some make believe idea that his Sioux blood gives him the right to kill anybody on the Sacred land of the Sioux and Lil looks like a good hunt. Anyways he captures Lil’s mom to bait her into going into the mountains where he’s been hiding out. She goes, he releases her mother, and they begin the hunt. The police, Cooper, and multiple search parties go after her. However, Coop releases Lil’s favorite cougar to help track her. Coop finds Lil first, the cougar kills the psycho killer, and then the book ends with everybody happy and safe and with Coop and Lil as a couple.

So that’s where my fan-fiction takes up. I’m going to write about their life moving on from that point. It’ll involve the marriage of Tansy(her best girlfriend) and Farley(a man very much like a brother. It’ll include the expanding of Lil’s cabin, the expanding of the refuge, and so on and so forth.

I’ll need help with the following things:

- Grammar

- Comma usage

- Tenses

- Word usage

I’ve been told my writing isn’t so bad to deal with, but I’m looking for somebody that will be an ongoing helper with all of the above listed. If you’re interested in helping me out with my story please e-mail me with something about fan-fiction beta in the title so I don’t delete it. I'd appreciate it if you'd also tell me if you've worked with fan fiction beta-ing before and if you have worked with what I need help with.

E-Mail - caughtinthestorm@hotmail.com