mymw Posted March 24, 2010 Report Share Posted March 24, 2010 (edited) Looking for a beta to look at the pacing of the sex, to see if the buildup is effective from the foreplay to the climaxes and etc. I'd also like for the beta to check if I'm spending too long describing a sex act, or if the sensations are realistic, lol. No need to pay special attention to characterization or grammar, I'll work on it myself unless you want to help, so this will be a quick job! The pairing is SLASH/yaoi and from Naruto (Sasuke/Naruto), but from what I'm asking you don't need to know the characters. Warnings, the sex has bondage, fingering (a little rough), rimming, and toy play. The characters can be loosely described as Naruto needing to be touched and wanted by the other character, Sasuke, because he misses him because they are estranged for complicated reasons, and Sasuke being in enough lust (and a little love) to succumb to Naruto's begging. It's mostly a PWP and the pace I'm referring to is purely sexual. Basically, I want someone to read it over and help to make it hot and not have the reader be skeptical of the character orgasming too quickly/much or something. Thanks for the help. Edited March 24, 2010 by mymw Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reyoki89 Posted March 24, 2010 Report Share Posted March 24, 2010 If you're still looking for a beta, I'd be happy to offer my services. My email I check most often is renaheartfield@yahoo.com if you are. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mymw Posted March 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 25, 2010 Thanks, I'll send you an email. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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