First fanfiction - please help me decide if I can hack it as a writer

[mannahpierce]

Topic Title: In the cold of space you find the heat of suns

Topic Description: Naruto fanfiction

This is my first fanfiction. I have written fiction for myself for forty years (scary thought) but never shared any of it with anyone. Recently I reached my fiftieth birday and decided that I needed to find out if anyone else would want to read it. So I an writing this, which has characters from Naruto in a world that had grown in my head over the last twenty years. I chose this site because I have enjoyed reading so many of the Naruto stories posted here.

Title: In the cold of space you find the heat of suns

Author: Mannah Pierce

Summary: The Uchiha clan was the greatest of the spacer families before they were massarced. To rebuild the clan, the single survivor, Sasuke, must 'walk the way' by starting out with a traditional spacer crew. Can they keep his identity secret long enough for him to survive to adulthood and lead a new Uchiha? How will the fox-boy they inadvertently acquire affect Kakashi's carefully laid plans?

Rating: Adult+

Pairings: Various but mainly Kakashi/Iruka and Naruto/Sasuke

Spoilers: None – the story shares some plot features with the original but develops differently

Feedback: Desired greatly

URL: http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600102093

Thank you and regards

Mannah Pierce

[Animedevildog]

I shall take a look at it and give you my assessment. Just from what you have posted here, I am already interested.

[marley_station]

Topic Title: In the cold of space you find the heat of suns

Topic Description: Naruto fanfiction

This is my first fanfiction. I have written fiction for myself for forty years (scary thought) but never shared any of it with anyone. Recently I reached my fiftieth birday and decided that I needed to find out if anyone else would want to read it. So I an writing this, which has characters from Naruto in a world that had grown in my head over the last twenty years. I chose this site because I have enjoyed reading so many of the Naruto stories posted here.

Title: In the cold of space you find the heat of suns

Author: Mannah Pierce

Summary: The Uchiha clan was the greatest of the spacer families before they were massarced. To rebuild the clan, the single survivor, Sasuke, must 'walk the way' by starting out with a traditional spacer crew. Can they keep his identity secret long enough for him to survive to adulthood and lead a new Uchiha? How will the fox-boy they inadvertently acquire affect Kakashi's carefully laid plans?

Rating: Adult+

Pairings: Various but mainly Kakashi/Iruka and Naruto/Sasuke

Spoilers: None – the story shares some plot features with the original but develops differently

Feedback: Desired greatly

URL: http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600102093

Thank you and regards

Mannah Pierce

I have been following your story. I thought you were already a published author. You certainly write like one.

[Guest sylvir]

I reviewed the story and now I'm posting a reply here. I really want you to update. Sorry that you had to make a livejournal account to reach me but a couple months ago this site had a really bad troll and spam problem and I didn't want my email visible to those types.

Like most fan fiction there are understandable problems. A few more details would give the story more depth and something for the reader to hold onto. As I'm reading I notice that just when I'm geting into a chapter it is over and I'm moving onto the next. For a first story this is very good and I mention that a lot because I want to read more.

What I like most is the originality of the plot. Unfortunately with originality comes fear. Readers will fear reading something that is different. Also the story is in the less traveled AU/AR section. It will seem at first that no one is reading but the hits and reviews will pick up. Also I have found that it you post something in the future that is more traditional then people will visit your author profile to read your other works. Don't get me wrong, I'm in no way saying that you have to write something to purely please others. It is just that it is a trend I have noticed in the 4 years I've been hanging around.