mikepd_87

hey i kno i shud've asked for one a long time ago but i really need a beat for my story...if you can help plz give me a hand..... http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600097073

I need a beta to check over my story and tell me what needs to be improved on. I'm writing a Naruto yaoi story about Sasuke giving Naruto a birthday he will never forget.

Hey to the potential beta readers out there...I really need sum help im a newbie wen it cums to writing and i really wanna make this story good...basically Sasuke wants to give Naruto a happy birhtday vacation but things go wrong from there and then get a lot better so can anyone help? here's the link: http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600097073