Heyoo

Hey, Glad you’re looking forward to it! Hopefully it pays off, taking kind of a gamble with it because as far as I can tell, there haven’t really been many fics on this site involving at least two of the women in it. As of now, AEW actually looks promising. I think the PPV model might turn some people off from that end of it, since it isn’t quite as convenient as only paying $9.99, but I think as far as competition or an alternative is concerned, they’re the biggest threat to come along in a while. Totally agreed with Becky. Have always found her to be the “total package” of the fourse horsewomen, as she has the in-ring skills, the mic skills (IMO the best mic skills of the four), and just the overall charisma to be a top star as we’re seeing now. (Pray that she holds onto the belt for a while, let her main event more than ‘Mania!) Trust me, I completely get the annoyance with Alexa’s booking, and I think truth be told, since her push isn’t as egregious now, I may be wearing the rose tinted glasses a bit as there were for sure some entertaining moments, but also a fair share of completely baffling ones (beating Mickie with a KO punch?) I am interested to see what becomes of Bliss/Bayley 2.0, but also a bit nervous, as I fear that they might have Alexa win the title again (which I think would officially be too far) because 1. it would help to deemphasize the brand split even further, which seems to be the direction they wanna go, and 2. it would work to deliver a middle finger to Sasha for sitting on the sidelines, something the ‘E is probably keen to do. As far as this chapter is concerned, it’s kind of a mix of both. Going in my plan was Alexa going to NXT and topping Liv, and maybe Ember, but after you threw out the Mickie suggestion, I discovered a scenario which I found both hotter and more narratively satisfying. Essentially, everything up to Liv asking to be Alexa’s bitch is from draft one, and everything onward is where I deviated from the original. Main roster Bayley has been a mess, but it seems like they’re actually rebuilding her now, which would make it even more upsetting if she lost to Alexa. I honestly really do like the Trish and Lita idea, but am thinking it might work better as a seperate oneshot. -Heyoo

Hi all! I feel kind of dumb doing this because I don’t have a ton of reviews or anything, but I just wanted to reply to the ones I have gotten thus far. If I get more I’ll add to this thread. REVIEW OF “ONE HOT NIGHT WITH HART AND FIRE” From MTL on June 02, 2019 Thanks for the shout out, and the review, much appreciated. I'm really glad you chose to post this instead of deleting it, as that would have been tragic waste, as this was tons of fun. Obviously I enjoyed the FF more, but I also enjoy reading MF, so I'm always up for a bit of MFF fun, and I think you made good use of some of the combinations you can get with that. Obviously you could have done more, but hopefully that leaves you room for the sequel, which I really hope you get around to, as I'm a big fan of Paige. Becky Lynch has had a funny career, hasn't she? There were moments on NXT, and when she first won the Women's Smackdown title, the company finally felt they were getting behind her, and I'd argue she could have been seen as a top during those brief times, but yeah, then she went right back to jobbing for everyone, which is definitely bottom material. If the last few years of the WWE's so-called main roster hadn't done an excellent job of crushing my enthusiasm for wrestling I would have probably already done a story where after years of bottoming Becky finally finds the confidence to be a top. Then again the more I see of her now the more I want to see her get her arse fucked, so these two fics have really hit the spot. I do think you've rushed through a few of the sex acts. Like, maybe focused more on what each character was thinking, and stretch them out a bit more? Just a bit of constructive criticism for you. Because don't get me wrong, I love your work, especially the dirty talk, and of course the lesbian strap-on anal. Exactly my kind of thing, and I hope you keep at it, because I'd really like someone else to be doing it. ******************************************** It is so surreal after reading your work for years to have you not only take the time to read something I wrote but then take time to write a review. A huge kudos to you!! I’m not 100% sure how soon I’ll return to this fic, as right now I’m focusing a lot more on the Alexa one and another (probably) one shot that’s a take on the classic “model tops a superior wrestler” story. I’m glad you liked it though! Paige is one of my favs too. Yeah, being a Becky fan over the years has been a definite rollercoaster. My three favorites on the roster have been Becky, Cesaro, and (of course he’s gone now) Ambrose, so there have been lots of ups and downs. To put it in perspective, the woman who just pinned Ronda Rousey in the main event of WrestleMania had just been rolled up by Dana Brooke in 60 seconds on a random SmackDown. How times have changed, indeed. I definitely agree with the rushing and am working to improve that. A lot of times I want to get to the “good stuff” without remembering that build up and description makes the fic that much hotter. REVIEWS FOR “ALEXA ON TOP” From A_Cool on June 02, 2019 Good work definitely looking forward to seeing Alexa top the other 3 ******************************************** Thank you so much! In these coming chapters, Alexa doesn’t get to the other three yet as Bliss is looking to get a few more subs to cement herself as a top, but I promise all three will get their chapter eventually. Although, based on the current story I have mapped out, I can’t guarantee she’ll end up topping all of them. ******************************************** From MTL on June 02, 2019 Of your two fics so far this is easily my favourite, for obvious reasons. I have real mixed feelings about Alexa Bliss. She's a great talker, and obviously really hot, but I don't think she's that good in the ring so I found her mega push annoying as I felt it came at the expense of better all-round wrestlers like Becky Lynch and Sasha Banks. Which is the same problem I have with Charlotte, who has exactly the opposite problem IMO, of being a great worker but dull on the mic. Although given those mega pushes it does feel like someone should write about one or both of them being the 'Alpha female' as I once refer to it, and this certainly feels like an amazing start to that with Alexa totally owning Becky, and already planning to do it to her little friends. I particularly loved Alexa taking a picture of Becky's gaped butt hole and sending it to the other women as a message. Maybe if she did it again, it can include an actual message, like another bitch broken or something like that. Again the dirty talk was amazing, and with more focus on just Alexa topping Becky the description felt a lot more vivid. A definite improvement on the first fic. But also did a great job at capturing what the characters were feeling, be that dominant or submissive, which made it that much more erotic. Was a little disappointed that neither fic included ass to mouth. Maybe you're not into that part, but I think it's a great explanation point for the dominance, and hope to see it included the future. In fact, I hope to see a lot more of this in the future, as it does imply that there is more, and I think it would be a tragedy if there wasn't. So allow me to speculate on what you COULD do for a few paragraphs... Bayley a bottom-in-denial? Really? I get that Alexa was rounding up, but I would said if any of the horsewomen were natural bottoms it was Bayley, and given her laughable booking Alexa should find that conquest easy. On the other hand Sasha Banks could totally be a bottom-in-denial, although it would be hot if she put up more of a fight. And Charlotte should definitely be a top IMO, at least at first, Alexa either really struggling to overcome her, or perhaps falling to her entirely. It would be interesting if Alexa got topped and maybe even lost her ass cherry to Charlotte before winning in the end. Or at least, that's probably how I'd do it. Then again, Alexa has an amazing ass, so I'd probably write her as more of a switch. There are benefits to focusing on the four horsewomen, and that's potentially a long series as it is, but I'd love you to include some others. Especially Mickie James, who is still probably my all-time favourite. Following the timeline she returned to help Alexa put Becky in her place once and for all, but Becky seems pretty broken at this point, so maybe Alexa makes Mickie her bitch instead? Mickie used to lose a lot, so theoretically she could be an easy conquest for Alexa. Just practice for a real challenge. Then again, Mickie could start out Alexa's partner in crime, double teaming Becky in convincing her to quit wrestling so she can permanently be Alexa's valet/full-time bitch. A position both Mickie and Becky, or at least Becky, could have once Alexa goes to RAW. You could possibly have her fuck Naomi's big black booty on the way out, but I'm not so big on her. After Alexa deals with Bayley, and also maybe after Sasha, there is Women's Evolution, where she feuded with two of my other favourites Trish and Lita. In this continuity she doesn't have to get injured, meaning that she can defeat both Trish and Lita, and dominate them with the help of her loyal pet Mickie (who is perhaps Trish's former girlfriend). Then at Survivor Series she could unify the women's titles, and make Charlotte her bitch. And... yes, I spend too much time on this, lol. You may have already thought of, even wrote, something like this, but if not I hope you'll consider it. ******************************************** Hello again! Glad you like this one even more. I actually really like Alexa and so I didn’t really mind her push...for the most part (that Bayley “feud”...yikes!), but I totally understand where you’re coming from (I think I have the unpopular opinion here haha). There’s definitely more of this story to come, I promise! I originally had a bit of a different plan, but you mentioning Mickie James switched things up a bit haha, although I kind of put my own twist on your suggestions here. Per not including ass-to-mouth, it’s a combo of two things: 1) I’m trying to figure out how to write it so it doesn’t just feel too much like repeating the initial lubing of the cock. 2) My initial plan was to not immediately go to ass-to-mouth so when it happened for the first time it would be a big moment. Again, however, I think the next chapter is shifting this plan because...c’mon, it’s Mickie James. You gotta have a little ATM. Re: Bayley, to kind of explain the rationale behind this, in this story, she is ranked as more dominant than Becky due to their booking at the time. This is a time period where Becky had lost her title without having any clean defenses, and was not too far removed from tapping clean to Natalya and the aforementioned 60 second Dana loss. At this time, Bayley was actually one of Raw’s top stars and in a few months would win the title and also go on to end Charlotte’s PPV streak so I kind of viewed Becky as the more natural bottom because of this. So the ranking in this universe is Becky<Bayley<Sasha<Charlotte. I actually had considered the idea of Alexa getting Becky to quit wrestling, because that level of brokenness is beyond hot, but even a fictional world in which Becky doesn’t wrestle anymore just depresses me haha. In all seriousness, I’m still definitely considering that plot point although it may not come about immediately next chapter. Hadn’t considered Evolution in this, although it would bend the timeline I had planned a little bit (December 2016-November 2017). Finally, without giving too much away, I will say one of the scenarios you’ve listed regarding Alexa & Charlotte is the currently planned ending to the story (kind of..) ******************************************** Overall, thanks to both of you for the feedback. Love seeing what other people have to say about these! -Heyoo