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  2. Snake_King's Story Discussion Thread

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    Just now, Snake_King said:

    I don’t know about yandere syndrome, as the most common examples I’ve seen of that tend to be of the “stabby-stabby” variety, and that’s not what I’m going for.

    Maybe that last one.

    The girl in question was a high-achieving valedictorian whom everyone, even the hero, Angel Blade, looked up to, and for the most part, appeared to be sane.  She’s attacked by a gang of monsters who nearly assault her before Angel Blade saved her, and then she does end up assaulted by a monster (who turns out to be the deen of her school).  When Angel Blade comes to save her, the girl (in something of a dazed trance) lezzes out with AB, and when AB nearly gets assaulted by the same monster, the two end up working together to take it down.  The girl expresses her thanks before fainting, and that’s the last we see of her.

    Needless to say, I imagine someone wouldn’t be all right in the head after experiences like those.  So, I considered a type of follow-up where the girl expresses her gratitude, and it’s clear that her experiences have changed her a good bit.  What do you think?

    You know OLD isnt explicitly staby-staby yandere. It's just that the person is doing everything they can to be with the one person they love above all others. It's not always violent, but it can be more subtle like manipulating them and their friends, finding any excuse to he around them, subconsciously forcing and training them to be obedient, etc.

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    5 minutes ago, Snake_King said:

    Been re-watching the hentai Angel Blade lately, and I’ve been getting some story ideas, but I’m having trouble putting them together.  Namely, the title character saves another girl from the monsters, and they’re hints that the two may have some feelings for each other.  My idea involves the girl being a little too grateful towards Angel Blade and is all over her due to her experiences.

    However, because of that “too grateful” bit, I’m wondering if there’s some psychological disorder or whatnot I should be aware of.  You know, kind of like Stockholm Syndrome, except here it’s aimed at your savior, not your captor.  Does anyone know of such a thing?

    I think that's just Obcessive Love Syndrome. (Aka yandere syndrome).

    It can also be Erotomania (Falling in love with someone of higher status, or someone you think is higher status) This can be applied to heroes or saviors as they're often seen as above others in the eyes of the mentally ill person.

     

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    3 hours ago, Guest Random Fan said:

    My endowed human. 

    I’ll be doing two versions of this. For Spike’s Harem, Big Macintosh had a little too much cider at a party and wound up knocking up the flower trio. Daisy, Lily, and Roseluck, thus freeing spike to get his ladies. 

    Twilight & Rarity – Spike is worrying about what to do with his new size after having it magically enhanced with the spell. However, he runs into a problem as Rarity comes over to talk to Twilight about an upcoming gala, and getting her a new dress, and a suit for Spike. When Twilight leaves to get some notes to give Rarity to help inspire her, Spike tries on his suit. Unfortunately, Spike winds up tripping and tear his boxers when he’s changing and falls out, with his dick out for Rarity to see. Spike runs off embarrassed. Rarity finds him a bit later in his room. She calms Spike down, before giving him a quick kiss and seducing him. In the middle of their time, Twilight comes back and witnesses them going at it. More than a little turned on, and repressed, she strips and pulls out a karma sutra book, out of apparently nowhere, and joins in. After calming down, Twilight grills Spike about the spell he mentioned, and she realizes the effects of the Spike. Spike, upon learning he’ll have a lot of girls going after him, simply shrugs and asks, “How many could that be?”

    Applejack & Rainbow Dash – Dash and Jack are in another one of their competitions. Having done practically every challenge in the book, they decide to have a sex game, whoever lasts the longest without coming wins. They look for someone to use and soon find Spike, the spell affecting them almost immediately. The duo grabs Spike and tells him they need help. Going to AJ’s barn, they strip and tell him the challenge. AJ goes first riding Spike hard and strong, being timed by a stopwatch. Dash takes her turn next, saying the obligatory “Ten seconds flat” line, riding Spike at a hard fast pace. In the end, Dash loses as her wild pace, and lack of experience in sex, as opposed to AJ, who while strong, took her time. As AJ is declared the winner, she bends over to let Spike earn his reward for helping them and presents her ass. Of course, Rainbow doesn’t want to be outdone and demands her own anal experience as well. 

    Pinkie Pie – Pinkie is in charge of the shop while the cakes are on a family trip with their kids. Spike comes by after a long workday hoping to reward himself with a nice, sugary treat. Pinkie pulls out a special cupcake that she and Mrs. Cake made before she left. After helping Pinkie close up shop, he joins her in the kitchen for treats. At the same time, the Cake twins are asleep and Mr. and Mrs. Cake are getting frisky. She presents her husband with a special cupcake that they both eat. However, they spit it out when they realize it has spice cake in it, instead of red velvet. Cupcake’s freaks out, revealing that she had made a special “lovers” cupcake that was meant to get them both in the mood, as opposed to the super spice cupcake experiment Pinkie was working on. The two realize that Pinkie had, most likely, eaten it already. Meanwhile, Pinkie goes into a lustful frenzy after eating the aphrodisiac-laced treat and pounces on Spike and bang right there in the kitchen. Gummy walks in on them and, in a rare show in intelligence, walks out and runs water over his eyes. 

    Fluttershy – Fluttershy has been trying to get Spike’s attention for a while now, but hasn’t had the guts to do so. One day, she finally works up the nerve, only to get an eyeful of Pinkie and Spike making out. Heartbroken, she rushes off heartbroken and feeling betrayed. Rarity finds her friend and tries to help her until she learns it is about Spike. She invites the girl to her home, where she offers to help her build confidence by modeling some new designs...which happen to be skimpy lingerie since she is one of the few people who know about her secret titties. Their judge, of course, is Spike, who freaks out at the sight of the two ladies, and admonishes Rarity for giving Fluttershy fake breasts and is shocked to find them real. Rarity helps ease Fluttershy into a seductive lap dance, and the two ladies lay with Spike. Meanwhile, a bird sits on a tree and watches before flying off. The bird lands at Fluttershy’s cottage where the animals are preparing some food for themselves, something they learned to do if Fluttershy was sick or out of town. The bird tells them that Fluttershy has taken a mate, and they cheer in happiness.

    Trixie, Sunset, & Starlight – when Spike is alone at their home, Trixie, Sunset, and Starlight all show up for a surprise visit. Twilight is happy to see her friends/rivals from her academy days. When they see Spike they immediately tease him, remembering how easy it was to make him blush, only for him to turn it on them. Sunset and Starlight stop, not seeing it as fun when he doesn’t blush, but Trixie doesn’t. The entire visit, Trixie makes naughty motions and glances at him, teasing him. Eventually, Spike excuses himself and Trixie soon follows, teasing him and asking if he’s going to jerk off to her. Having finally had it with the cocktease magician, Spike grabs her, throws her into a spare room, and proceeds to make his cock disappear down her throat, fucking her face wildly. After getting a taste of her throat, he then pins her down and fucks Trixie’s brains out. However, they didn’t notice Sunset and Starlight who came looking for them, thinking te got lost in Twilight’s large home. They are shocked to find Spike in this state, and with matching grins they join in, both riding Spike to the point of exhaustion. At this point, they are joined by Twilight who simply brandished a potion, something Spikes recognizes as stamina potion, and walks in locking the door behind her. 

    Vinyl Scratch & Octavia – Pinkie drags Spike on a date night to Manehattan, apparently using some fourth wall breaking power. They were literally in town one second, and then in the city next. In the club they go to, they find Octavia and Vinyl, both playing their mix of classical and turntable music, getting the club pumping. Pinkie and Spike are separated by the partiers. Octavia and Vinyl are both now off the clock and jump to the dance floor. The dancing gets the two a little hot and they jump back into a back room. Vinyl makes the first move making out with Spike. Octavia is reluctant but joins in when Spike's pants come off. Vinyl is a wild ride, going to the rhythm of the music bleeding through the walls, while Octavia was relatively gentle. Spike and the duo of musical babes rest for a time, but Spike is drawn away when he hears the sound of Pinkie's party cannon going off. 

    Zecora – Spike, needing to get some special ingredients for Twilight, heads off into the Everfree forest. Unfortunately, Spike winds up getting caught up in a trap. Thankfully, it is Zecora’s trap, one of the things she uses to capture food for herself. She takes Spike back to her hut, where she attempts to fix Spike’s leg. Zecora senses strange magic around Spike’s abdomen, from his magical subspace boxers of course, and pulls them off, thinking he has been affected by something. She is shocked to see the large dong and begins to seduce him. During their sex, she uses her typical rhyme speak until her brain becomes too jumbled and says, “Screw it” before speaking normally. By the time Spike finishes, it is nighttime and unable to go out into the forest at night stays with Zecora who pulls him back into bed for another round. 

    Maud, Marble, & Limestone Pie – The stony pie sisters visit Pinkie to spend the day with her and to check out Maud’s new place. Unfortunately, Pinkie forgets about the food, mainly because she was excited. After leaving, the trio of sisters interrogates Spikea bout what their sister means to them, even the normally shy Marble. After finding the answers good enough, they all decide to go for a swim. Now in bikinis, the trio seduces Spike pinning him with strength far greater than his own and having their fun one by one, testing him to see if they can keep up with their family members. Pinkie shows up at this point and joins in screaming “Pie Sister Orgy!”

    Sugar Belle & Little Strongheart – Spike and AJ are heading towards Appaloosa for a party to celebrate the anniversary between the natives and those who settled there. Spike finds Sugar Belle who flirts with him a bit as they meet and reunites with Little Strongheart, who is not so little anymore. After the party, both girls a little tipsy and Spike guides them to Sugar’s house. However, once there, Spike is grabbed back and snuggled by both busty babes. They wake up and see Spike’s morning wood. With smiles, they seize it and have sex.

    The Dazzlings – the trio of singers arrives in town, wanting payback on Twilight and her friends for exposing them as fakes, using recorded audio to sing. They decide to target Spike and try to seduce him. They continue this for an entire day, only to fail as Spike remembers them. After getting the OK from Twilight about them, Spike goes for it. The trio is shocked at the sudden reversal but goes for it anyway. However, afterward, the main girls arrive decked out with strapons and saying that if the girls want in, they should learn about their...status quo. 

    Gilda – During a visit with Fluttershy, Spike notices that she’s a bit more sensitive than normal, especially her tits. Spike asks what is wrong, and tells him how Gilda has been harassing her. Spike looks upset and comes up with a plan. When Gilda next harasses Fluttershy, she pulls her into an alley, and Spike jumps her, leading to a threesome that claims the punk girl as his next harem member.

    Twilight Velvet, Posey Shy, Cookie Crumbles, & Cloudy Quartz – an inopportune moment hits the girls' band. While having a full schedule on Mother's day, they have Spike keeping them company. Showing the lovely ladies around time. As they visit a spa that was reserved for them. They talk about their husbands and how their love lives have all but gone extinct. They realize they have a prime chance at having some fun, as Spike is supposed to do whatever they want. They go back to Twilight’s home and give him a wild ride one by one, revealing a kinky side to each of them. 

    Spoiled Rich – Spoiled has been keeping an eye on Spike ever since he began to get laid with the various ladies around town. She came up with a plan to blackmail the boy, delivering juicy gossip and information, so that she can become more popular and eventually move out of town and into Canterlot, where she belongs. Unfortunately, you never plan something like that when one of his girlfriends can predict vague and immediate instances. Spoiled is held captive by Rarity, Dash, and AJ, later joined by Spike, while her daughter Diamond is out with her friends. The girls decide that it was high time that someone removed the stick the woman had up her ass, and Spike does so, fucking the woman’s brains out until she is begging for it. 

    Stellar Flare – Going to visit his mother for her birthday, Sunburst is not looking forward to it and asks Spike to come along. After arriving, Sunburst is glad to see his town is looking like its old self. Stellar asks Spike if he wants a tour of the town and the trio heads off. That night, after everyone is asleep and Spike is in a hotel, he is visited by Stellar, who seduces him saying she is in desperate need of a fuck and him being there only made her even hotter. This leads to an intense rut, pressing Stellar up against and even out the window. As Spike leaves in the morning, he is shocked to find out that there are more than a few noise complaints...and that he and Stellar are banned from the hotel. 

    Tree Hugger – Fluttershy introduces Spike to Tree Hugger, and the two wind up in her special grove where she grows all kinds of medicinal herbs and incense that can be used for different reasons. While looking through her stashes, Spike accidentally gets a whiff of an aphrodisiac version that gets him hot and bothered. Tree Hugger, being a go with the flow type of woman, simply lays back and tells Spike to go wild and he does, on both girls until sundown. 

    Cherry Jubilee – Cherry has come to the Apple family, hoping to be able to strike a deal with them about going into business together. Now, Granny Smith is a stubborn mare and refuses, as does AJ. Dejected, she is comforted by Spike who gives the idea to show what they can do together instead of just making promises. After creating some hybrid desserts using cherries and apples, which wind up tasting delicious, the family decides to go into business with Cherry. AJ and Cherry have a few drinks of her cider concoction, the two get tipsy and when Spike tries to stop them, he gets pinned between both babes. This leads to Spike making an apple and cherry cream pie with both lovely farmers.

    Cheerilee – Cheerilee needs a teaching assistant for the day, and asks Spike to help her. Spike, unfortunately, proves to be distracting as some of the teenage girls can’t help but notice the handsome and powerful boy. After class, Cheerilee talks with Spike and she tells him about how she had recently gone through a nasty breakup with a womanizer of a man. Spike then offers to help her. Cheerilee smirks and asks Professor Spike to teach her how to please a man. 

    Sapphire Shores – After getting tickets to a show, Spike wins backstage passes with Rarity to meet Sapphire. Sapphire is more than happy to see Rarity, asking her to make her some new clothes, this time a series of lingerie. Rarity is more than happy to ask her, wondering if she will model some of it. Sapphire agrees and they use Spike as a judge. Both girls posing for him in their skimpy underwear. This leads to the girls getting into a brief contest, giving a lapdance to Spike, a contest Rarity loses. This leads to the pop star riding Spike hard and fast. Unfortunately, the moment is almost ruined when a paparazzi getting a picture of her in her underwear. After beating the peeping tom senseless, they all continue their fun, with the camera taking pictures...which they make sure to make personal copies and then delete off the camera later. 

    Ms. Harshwhinny – Canterlot is having a huge celebration in honor of Celestia and Luna’s reunion a few years back, the younger princess returning from a trip abroad. Twilight, of course, is a part of it as is Ms. Harshwhinny. Noticing that the older woman is under a lot of stress, he hands them off to Twilight before trying to help her relax, giving her a shoulder rub. The need and stress eventually get the best of the overworked woman and leads to her pouncing on the boy. They two proceed to tear up her office, almost breaking her desk with the intensity of their romp, and making more than a few of the workers there nervous. 

    Nurse Redheart – Harshwhinny, first name Carol, was a lot rougher on Spike than they thought. After his ride with the woman, Spike realizes he pulled a muscle in his groin. Nurse Redheart is in charge of his treatment, rubbing a special muscle relaxant on his crotch to help him. However, Spike gets hard and the nurse decides to help him out by giving him a blowjob. It then goes too far with the nurse getting a full treatment of sex. 

    Milky Way – Milky is delivering some milk for Fluttershy’s animals when she hears someone moaning outback. Thinking someone is in pain, she checks it out and is shocked to see Fluttershy, bent over in the open and moaning like a whore as Spike pounds her like a machine. Spike notices her and instead of stopping winks and goes right back to work. Milky after watching Spike pump the animal lover full of his seed, joins in, her overstuffed milk-filled tits matching Fluttershy’s in size and leading to some crazy milky action. 

    Meanie Pie – Twilight experiments with some magic and hits Pinkie with a spell by accident. When nothing happens, Pinkie brushes it off. However, Pinkie is then split into Meanie Pie, formed from some of Pinkie’s inner emotions. She grabs Fluttershy when she visits the shop, with Fluttershy thinking Pinkie is just being funny. Spike shows up and joins in for a threesome, railing the dark Pinkie, who immediately proves to have a different version of her. 

    Chrysalis & Cadance – Chrysalis sneaks into town to kidnap Spike. With all the love sent at him, he will make her more powerful than ever. She takes the form of Cadance to get under his guard. That night, she and Spike begin to have sex, only for the real Cadance to show up and spoil it. She gets trapped between the two and railed into exhaustion. In the end, she gives her love to Spike for showing her love. This has the effect of her taking a more beautiful and sexier form just before she passes out. Cadance then decides to reward Spike for his heroic deed in changing the changeling queen. Unfortunately, when they finished, Chrysalis regains her strength and pounces on him leading to another set of rounds. 

    Celestia & Luna – Tia and Luna invite Spike to their palace and they tell him that they know of his origins, something that had plagued him for years as he never knew his family. They reveal that Spike was related to a lord and is a member of royalty, almost rivaling the two women in terms of power and influence, which has only grown with his bedding of Cadance and Chrysalis. they also reveal an ancient honor-bound contract that engaged both Luna and Celestia to one of the royal bloodline’s descendants. With the intent of honoring the contract, they pull Spike into the castle chambers where they both consummate the contract with him. We find Spike living in a mansion much later with his harm all around him, and him being dubbed the pseudo prince of Equestria. 

     

    I really want you to get a discord server or something so we can talk in private. You are like the best guy when it comes to setting  up.

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    7 minutes ago, Jwsponky said:

    Okay, I shall attempt such.

    Be warned, Bobobo-bo Bo-bobo is the Shrek of anime. A parody of all thing in the anime genre. Like, the main character fights by inspiring people with his extending nose hairs. he’s accompanied by a guy made of jelly and a star man. One of his friends attacks with his with special fart techniques. And one of the characters is a sexy mini bomb who lives in a bearded man’s pompadour.

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    1 minute ago, Jwsponky said:

    Okay… though now I must ask what’s a ‘Naruto’?

     

    Naruto is the main character of an shonen anime/manga series of the same name. In it, Naruto is born and raised in a feudal society of ninjas and his sole ambition is to be the leader of his home village, also known as the Hokage. Unfortunately, there are some complications with that as some assholes attacked his home village by manipulating a giant demon fox on the day of his birth, forcing his father, the former Hokage, to sacrifice himself and his son by sealing it within Naruto. Now Naruto is determined to become the Hokage and earn the respect of his peers with some hard training, the power of friendship, and a small loan of unlimited demonic power.

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    13 minutes ago, Jwsponky said:

    And why would someone attack Santa Claus?

    Someone paid him.

    14 minutes ago, Jwsponky said:

    Aye, and to use the game ‘Rise of Berk’ as an example while there would be specialized jobs for some, like Gronkles, Hotburples, and Catastrophic Quakens making Gronkle Iron, most of them would be employed to gather fish, both as food and a source of life force, since in the first game anything bigger than a rat, could provide life force, and there are quite a number of types of fish in both fresh and salt water that would be bigger than rats.

    Considering the quality of Gronckle Iron, that would be fucking terrifying

    16 minutes ago, Jwsponky said:

    Repeated objection still noted and will be considered, though slight counter objection, given that if they were the Grimborn sisters in this story they’d get the same growth spurt as any other female in Hiccup’s domain, it would likely be hard to mistake them for male.

    Oh no, what I mean is that people might be turned off at the fact that, while female, Hiccup is still essentially sleeping with the Grimborn Brothers. And no matter how much you reiterate that they’re females in this story, people won’t stop seeing them as such. Which is why I suggested giving them each daughters/apprentices under their wing for Hiccup to fuck instead because the pleasure would be two fold. One, you have Hiccup fucking new girls into the harem, and two, those girls are in some way related to the Grimborn Brothers, meaning that Hiccup is getting one over on his enemies.

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    4 minutes ago, Jwsponky said:

    MHA

    My Hero Academia. That anime in which only Japan seems to have heroes at the top of their superhero ranking list (or on the list at all), the main character is cries every other episode, and people keep trying to say how a piece of shit asshole who bullies weeker kids and tells them to go kill themselves while having everything handed to him on a silver platter is the a deeper and more complex character than Naruto.

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    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    Well, they wouldn't precisely be ghosts, they'd be more comparable to genies with the Tower Heart as their lamp.

    6 hours ago, Red_Light_Zone said:

    Oh, okay then, like genie nannies with their being tied to the Tower Heart.

    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    I have heard of the character, but since the game he is mentioned in is only available for the Wii, I cannot play it.

    You aren’t missing much, this is just the canon. But it’s the Overlord game so who cares anymore besides us fanfic writers? It’s also a good name for hiccup to go by because Hiccup isn’t exactly a name most would take seriously when compared to Gromgard.

    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    ...I believe I missed something. What does the Spanish word for wolf and the smaller members of the cetacean family have to do with anything?

    You mean you’ve never heard of the Main Man? The man who kicked everyone’s ass at least once including superman, Darkseid, and Santa Claus?

    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    I admit that given the fact the dragons in the HTTYD franchise are typically depicted as sentient/sapient, it was going to be more along the lines of dragons being citizens of Hiccup's domain, and ergo he works to protect the ones already under his banner, and recruit more when opportunities present themselves.

    Oh, kind of like how they are in the movies?

    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    Objection noted, and shall be considered. If I recall correctly you voiced it previously the aforementioned fair number of moons ago about the idea of Tuffnut being born a girl in this A.U, under the logic of while it is not impossible for a pair of twins to be a boy and a girl, it is decidedly less likely than two boys or two girls.

    Oh yeah, I remembered. I mostly objected just because I don’t like changing genders for no reason. If it serves no purpose other than sex, why change them in the first place? And then you’ve got people thinking that it’s yaoi or homosexual because they don’t understand that the characters change. Honestly it just feels like too much of a hassle unless you’re writing a Ramna fic. And at that point I’d say just make an OC.

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    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    1- Hiccup being trained by ghosts who’ve been less than impressed with previous ‘pillage and burn’ type Overlords, only I’d planned on the ghosts being the spirits of sorceresses sacrificed to make the Tower Heart (and idea mostly inspired by the fact that in the second game you have to drain Fay of most of her magic to repair the Tower Heart), namely Maleficent, Grimhilde, Ursula, Mim, and Mirage, who take in the young Viking and decide to raise an Overlord who is loyal to them and would try to find away to free them from the Tower Heart, and if once he’s grown they get to have their mutually enjoyed way with their trainee, then they aren’t exactly complaining.

    So he's raised by the ghost female sorcerers and female fairies, like nannies? Not bad, but making then ghosts might be a bit much, mostly because it would kind of be awkward to screw them. The reason I stuck with Gromgald is because he is the first Overlord, so he'd know more about raising an Overlord, like a badass mentor.

    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    3- The Minions original forms being okay as raiders but less effective as actual soldiers, though my plan was less replace them than upgrade them via alchemy, and create other ‘castes’ based off them to fight in the seas and sky as well.

    That's actually not a bad idea either. And without the proper management and a millennia of miss managment could have caused the once great forces to become little more than gimmicky imps. You can also make it so that Maleficent has some of them, what with her already having an army of pig faced imps. That and Hiccup and Gromgard were geniuses, so alchemical creations aren't too far a stretch.

    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    and your mention of the Dragon Hunters is fairly apt as well since I had been planning to have Hiccup encounter them during the montage style prologue and, since he lacks the forces to wipe them out at that exact moment, hire them to catch dragons for him, as unharmed as possible, not to form an army since if the Minions or castes derived from them are killed they can be revived at the price of a little life force, which Hiccup keeps a stock pile of for just such occasions, but for the simple reason of every dragon they sell to him is one they aren’t selling to someone who would kill it.

    Granted the Dragon Hunters wouldn’t know what Hiccup was doing, or the fact he was plotting to wipe them out if necessary, though ideally they’d stop hunting dragons and join his domain since more citizens means more tax revenue, their opinion on the matter being along the lines of “You paid us for them, what you do with them is your problem.”

    Oh cool, so it's like with Lobo and dolphins. An unstoppable monster with a love for a specific animal and would go literally to hell and back just for them. I like it.

    6 hours ago, Jwsponky said:

    I will admit I’ve toyed with the idea of Viggo and Ryker being born female in this A.U., for admittedly little more reason than the fact I’ve scrolled past many a Grimborn brother(s)/Hiccup story, a fair few Grimborn brother(s)/female Hiccup story, but no Grimborn sister(s)/Hiccup story and thought “Eh, why not be the first?”

    Eh... personally, I'm not a fan of changing the genders of characters in any capacity. So you need to really good at it to make it work. IMO, your better off making you own OCs than switching genders fir no reason. I've only seen this work in two stories fir different reasons.

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    4 minutes ago, Jwsponky said:

    If you wish to share it.

    So, what I thought of goes something like this:

    In the long forgotten past, you had the first Overlord, Lord Gromgard. Once the son of a disgraced Duke, Lord Gromgard dedicated his life to become a ruthless and insurmountable master of might and magic for conquest. He was already a powerful enough sorcerer to be considered a walking siege engine of arcane power as well as a talented warrior compared to the rest of the chaff, but he became an unstoppable juggernaut once he discovered the legendary Tower Heart (As he discovered it in the heart of a tower, Gromgard admittedly is not great at naming things). The Tower Heart was giant, indestructible orb of unlimited primordial power. Older and more obscure than even the gods themselves, anyone who had total access to the Tower Heart’s power basically had a fat “I WIN” button. Lord Gromgard had it all with the Tower Heart: an inexhaustible amount of resources, an unstoppable army of minions homegrown to do his bidding, celestial beings fearing his very presence, a harem to play with on his off days, etc. With the totality of the orb’s power, he was was potentially all powerful. Potentially being the operative word.

    While Lord Gromgard was as competent and capable as a relatively young lord had any right to be, not even someone like him was perfect. Receiving such unfathomable power in such short notice left him a bit… unstable for lack of a better term. He’d gotten uncoordinated and lazy, making foolish decisions unfit for a ruler, and eventually lost it all when he never practiced caution, allowing some ragtag bunch of nameless schmucks took advantage of his lethargic regime and decided to play hero. From that day forward, he vowed to learn from his mistakes and pass them on to his descendants, or indeed anyone willing to listen to the old spirit, by trying his soul into his personal spellbook (Magically enhanced to be invulnerable to damage of course) so he could teach the potential dictators the dos and don’ts of being an Overlord. To bad no of the fools could FUCKING PAY ATTENTION TO A GOD DAMNED WORD!!!

    His descendents all grew up to be the same generic “EVIL” fuckers we all know about in regular media. You know the ones, you Skeletors, your Voldemorts, your Dr. Klaws, any box standard cartoon villains who only sit in a dark room making up ludacris plans with ridiculous necessities that are inevitably stopped by some young, rag tag bunch of adventurers (sometimes, unintentionally). No matter how much he tried, how much he showed his descendants how laughably obscene the plans his descendants were, all they ever did was resent him for questioning their rule before going forward and getting themselves killed in spectacular fashion, even with the Tower Heart in their possession. Apparently, they forget the “Lord” aspect of being a “Dark Lord,” never actually ruling properly instead of being edgy, angsty, hammy man children with a several shit tons of issues. As a result, their rules become shorter and more laughable as time passed.

    Now, Gromgard was desperate for a proper heir, one that wouldn’t discard him the moment he says something displeasing because they couldn’t handle legitimate criticism or they decided that “he outlived his usefulness” and tossed him into the trash to be picked up later. Now years have passed and he suddenly finds himself in the hands of his last living descendant (on his mother’s side), a viking boy. A rather clever and even ingenious young boy with aspirations of leadership, a talent for problem solving, and he can hold more than one thought in his head. All he’d have to do is make him want to leave his filthy clan of barbarian folk. Not to hard as most of the clan and even his father and clan see him as little more than a talking fishbone. With this “Hiccup” (Okay, that has got to change) under his ghostly wing, Gromgard had hope that this child would take his lessons to heart unlike the long line of disappointments in the past.

    What he didn’t expect was for this Hiccup to surpass his expectations beyond his wildest dreams. Every test Gromgard had for the child was passed with flying colors at speeds even he did not anticipate. Much like his teacher, Hiccup grew to be a talented warrior and a masterful magi. When there was nothing left to teach, Gromgard and Hiccup made their way over to the Tower Gromgard and take the Tower Heart, only to find the once lavish tower is yet again destroyed and the lustrous orb of ultimate power had naught but a spark of primordial magic left in it. Turns out, while power of the Tower Heart had unlimited potential, the Tower Heart itself wasn’t unlimited. Several likely unsavory characters leached off of it, taking the power for themselves until the well had almost run dry instead of just taking the whole damn orb to begin with. But Hiccup was nothing if not a problem solver, and he capitalized on the mistakes of the idiots who stole his birthright. While the power itself is next to nothing, he can still sense who has it and where they are. All he has to do is find them, kill them, and restore power to the Tower Heart. 

    But there was another problem, his minions. Think of the minions like the Orks in 40K, an artificially made species of specialized warriors made to serve a grater master. Minions are in the same boat as they were hand made by Gromgard to be his perfect servants. Gromgard made them specifically based their design off of demonic entities, both in image and strength, with the added bonus that they won’t try to trick you and torture your soul like real demons. But with the tower heart as it is now, the minions are only simple imps. Still dutifully loyal to whoever wields the gauntlet, but utterly pathetic as an army. Thankfully, they have some uses like crafting and smithing and the like, but Hiccup will have to work fast so he can add some real power to his forces. Thankfully, there already is an available substitute: Dragons.

    He remembered his clan under constant attack by the beasts. Fire breathing creatures of legend, with the might capable of reducing kingdoms to cinders, the stiffies both Hiccup and Gromgard grew could be wielded as clubs. Of course, mastering dragons was no small feet. Sure, he could just hire/force dragon hunters to capture some beasts for him, but that’s not a permanent solution. what he really needs is an alpha, a powerful dragon for him to mold into something all dragons will be compelled to follow. Thankfully, there was one option, the illusive Night Fury. Said to be the offspring of lightning and death itself, this creature was the first step onto total domination (and it also made for a great friend.) While it wasn’t exactly large, it was fast, agile, and powerful allowing it to make decisive blows on to its enemies. All Hiccup needed to do was train it.

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    Just now, Jwsponky said:

    I don't know if I'd say its solid, but I have ideas for what I plan to have happen and an order to some of the things, but suggestions are welcome. If I recall correctly a fair number of moons ago when I first mentioned having a go of my own at the challenge you said ye had suggestions, but then never gave them due to differing sleep schedules, namely that I lean more towards being nocturnal.

    Oh shit, my fault man. Well, I'm awake now, so do you still want to hear it?

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    1 hour ago, Jwsponky said:

    Main thing that's giving me writer's block though is the fact that, similar to the upbringing of the Overlord in the second game, I'd planned for Hiccup to get removed from Berk at a young age, making it a fairly good bet that Berk would still be at war with the dragons when Hiccup returns, and if pro dragon Hiccup is the protagonist of the story, that would make anti dragon Berk, and the other Viking tribes, the antagonists of that campaign...

    Quick question, do you have a solid synopsis for your version of the story, and if not, can I make a suggestion?

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