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Hey Mal. Really enjoyed the Ariana stuff. Not the biggest fan of the hard rape genre, but this was quite good. Also, I know some people love it and it makes the eventual breakdown a lot more plausible. I was wondering, when you were beginning this story, if you always intended Emma to be in charge and (presumably) to stay in charge? Or was it it just something that happened after you developed the 1st third of the story? Curious if other plot paths might’ve crossed your mind back then.

Extremely well done getting over 100,000, Mal! Part of my really hopes you take this Ariana cat persona to an extreme. While it would make her a bit less relatable, the character created would just be so interesting. It’s not touched upon much in mainstream erotic lit. So seeing you work with it would be intriguing, to say the least. Your version of Taylor might be my favorite character on this whole site. Seeing her tortured this way was unique and I feel it opens a whole bunch of options up to you. I can’t wait for when you pair her up with one of the other more enthusiastic girls (Emma or Chloe, at the moment) in a scene with Alex or a guard. This poll is really awesome and I know you’d do a great job with any of the options. But personally, I gotta go with 1) Ariana Grande, 2) Taylor Swift, and 3) the fifth option.

Mal, have you ever thought of a spinoff series/shorts of fantasies that the girls of BDH have? For instance, you talked about having your Felicity story with Gal Gadot potentially be a fantasy of Felicity’s that happens within the story. Taylor could imagine having Alex all to herself or Chloe could get off on watching the other girls get raped as much as she wanted. It would allow you to 1) escape the gritty realism and narative limitations of BDH, 2) put the girls in different, more relatable situations (nightclubs, beaches, bars, concerts, etc) and in a variety of geographic locations, 3) to have a plausible reason for them to be slutty without having to establish the characters anew every time, 4) just have some creative freedom to not worry about inter-chapter connections, plotholes, and longer story arcs. In short, you could take your favorite characters, the time you’ve spent developing them, and the relationships they’ve developed, and put them back in the bigger world where you have more creative options. Just a thought on a fun way to get inside the heads of the ladies while exploring ground that is out of bounds for BDH.

I think the majority of fiction has an accepted condensed timeline in order to keep the story tight. Characters don't have to worry about sleep, travel time, going through the bathroom, etc. In this case, we can suspend belief that Alex can have sex four or five times a day, the girls are all squirting-multi-orgasmers, and they don't have periods. I think the reality is that many of these character developments might happen over a period three to five times as long, but we can suspend belief for the sake of keeping the story tight. It wouldn't be very interesting if there was a fast forward in every chapter, Cara/ ariana/ dove spent a realistic 30 days in transit, and everyone had an average amount of sex.

hmmmmm…. so what were Felicity and Chloe up to that they weren’t able to hear what was going on??? Maybe they were busy… On that note, how soundproof are the cells/ punishment room/ different wings of the harem? Like could one person hear someone else in another cell, even if they are just talking? Or is it so soundproof that you couldn’t even hear someone on the other side of the door?

Man I really hope the big surprise is something silly like Alex's room is filled with WWE posters and a wrestling ring lol. And they put on masks and they spend all day practicing staged wrestling moves. Would've been a good April fools joke for you to pull on us if they timing lined up. Also very curious to see what you have planned for Bella.

Mal, what are your thoughts on one of the more sexually experienced girls teaching one of the newer girls in the bedroom in a threesome/ some kind of group sex? Not just the technique, but also seduction, how to turn on guys or girls, dirty talk, learning how to maximize her own pleasure, etc. Most of the girls have come in with some natural bedroom skills (Cara is a good example). On the flip side, you sort of touched upon it with Taylor when she was new, but she wasn’t really taught by another girl. Alex broke her on his own. But now that Emma and others are well-ingrained in harem life, it might be a different/ less harsh way of having them go from normal people to actually enjoying harem lifestyle. Or maybe a good second step after some time in the punishment room. I know this is a pretty common plot of porn, but I think it would actually work in your story, since you’ve done a good job of developing the veterans’ characters and their sexual appetities.

Hey Mal. Fantastic job on ch. 28. It’s probably my favorite of the series. Up there with 9, 10, 22, and 25 for sure. The triple BJ scene was just about as good as it can get! I’ve really enjoyed the love “square” (is that the right way to describe it?) of Bella, Taylor, Cara, and Margot. It was really great to see them forget their drama for a bit and let loose by the pool. But now that they’re going back into the complex, I’m very anxious to see how their relationships will turn out. I think Taylor shouldn’t get that level 4 promotion because she stirs the pot so much. I also think that Emma will get wrecked when she hears about missing out on the pool party orgy. She works so hard (at least in her mind) to bring everyone together! Please keep up the great writing, Mal.