Remy_Maxwell

I think that would be a good idea with Sakura. Idk, to me she seems very much the type who when she does let go, she jumps all in. Like I can totally see her just as a type that if she was placed in a gangbang scenario, she would become enamored with such a thing. Far more so then even Ino, who to me is the type for legitimately ANYTHING once she gets the push. However, Ino needs the push, ie seeing someone take the step first. Sakura NEEDS the attention though. Her entire canon Part 1 character was derived from being someone that wanted attention, much like Naruto, albeit Sakura wanted that attention from Sasuke. In your story, Naruko provides a service where Sakura can easily get all the attention she could ever want. However, I still think Ino would do anything for anyone once she becomes attuned to it.

As much as I love Highschool DxD, almost 90% of all crossover stuff I see has Naruto. There are a couple good ones with Itachi, but rarely up the smut factor involved. I’d honestly love to see one with Itachi, but honestly his character follows too much on the good-natured motivation(hence Angel, but all fics I’ve read take him down the Devil path) and he hasn’t really shown a drive towards personal goals of any kind, thus my leaning towards Sasuke whose motivation can be either good or evil, but almost entirely self-serving, the way any good devil in DxD should be. And yet, I couldn’t see him being a legitimate reincarnated devil considering all the power he wields by the end, even if he is sorely outclassed by Naruto who is a legitimate walking God.

This Sakura mention for another chapter? Because I can see something like that.

You could end that with a Publicity tour… Also known as Streaking through Konoha, without a care of the bodily fluids covering their skin almost entirely!

I don’t know… My imagination is pretty wild. How about Naruko takes Ino into a flower field, where some half a dozen men are waiting? Things are wild, ends with a semen shower and no clothes for either of the ladies...

It would be great if you could get Ino more time in the future. Not now, but maybe next chapter or something? But without Sakura tbh. Like some one on one time with Naruko, Ino, and a customer of some import to Naruko’s ambitions. Beyond that, I don’t know, I just wanna see more Ino with Naruko.

That sounds about right. And would the change for Sasuke be for future plans, like just small stuff or overarching plans? That is, assuming I understood you right. It doesn’t matter to be honest, just happy to see one of my favorite fics updated again.

I wasn’t necessarily thinking of using Mizuki anytime until the actual night of the theft honestly. Yes using him now works, but given his character, his plans, it’s best to save him for a big full on rape/take everything out on her moment after she brings the scroll to him directly. This is because she already has SC jutsu and it would make for a shock factor of Iruka happening on Naruko being raped. How you use Iruka later on is up to you, but Mizuki is the core for basically that entire chapter of her graduation. Hell, the event could essentially play out with Sarutobi enjoying the whole thing, as despite his own feelings, he too lost something to the Kyuubi attack and that is the core of Mizuki’s issue with Naruko. As for how Sasuke plays into that, Mizuki is jealous so to speak. The ‘fox’ is supposed to be ‘his’ pet, supposed to do anything he says. Her showing interest in Sasuke, bending to his orders, their having sex on Mizuki’s turf, it’s all an affront to his control, his power. Mizuki can’t do anything to Sasuke, Naruko is fair game who wants the sex. This chapter’s moment could play out with basically Naruko asking to spend time with Sasuke later after her visit with the Hokage for ‘dinner’(which is their training session) and Mizuki asks for some time before that… Since the guy is a dominant ****, I highly request he grabs her twintails and pulls her back as he goes to town. Because I dig! It doesn’t have to be a long scene here, as Itachi is the core for the chapter, but the foreshadowing lays out well enough.

Definitely. I can’t remember if you used Sasuke in the Uchiha Police scene, but maybe the Tsukiyomi bit can be Naruko thinking she’s with Sasuke rather then Itachi to enforce his genjutsu? Or maybe the both of them? Idk, but the idea of using it as an easier setup for the Sasuke ploy would be worthwhile, whether shown or not… In fact, going with the clone bang shown and then leaving the scene Itachi casting Tsukiyomi but showing nothing can setup better academy chapters. Like Naruko and Sasuke being forced to spar and she purposely lets him into seductive situations, before letting him win, and going on to school sex… Which could lead to more Mizuki stuff if you’re intent on the Scroll Theft.

There is that potential tbh. If you’ll notice in the original Part 1 arc, before Karin was even introduced, Team 7 splits up with Sasuke going to get water or something while Naruto and Sakura try to open the scroll. This is cut off by Kabuto stopping them, but this is the only legitimate time Sasuke could have met Karin and saved her from the bear. Why not split Naruko from the group instead, save the girl, have some Lime Time, and then just have Karin tag along for the rest of the exam, which is basically 12 or so hours. This is because Kabuto joins the team for the rest of the way to the Tower, fighting the team from Rain. You basically bypass Orochimaru kidnapping Karin through this action(unless you use the filler backstory for her where she was already with Orochimaru at the FoD).

No sense in changing the plans you have for Wave after all. There’s so much potential in that arc as it stands to work with. Likewise the Forest of Death has a lot to work with, but it happens after so it helps in planning. Speaking of FoD, have you given any thought to how you’ll use Karin Uzumaki?

A Genjutsu is after all an alteration on one’s chakra. The thing about Perfect Jinchuuriki being immune to Genjutsu is because the bijuu and host work in tandem and share their chakra. The same applies to a seal that would disrupt a person’s chakra control as Orochimaru applies in the Forest of Death. So either way, but more likely the first option in Wave(although I honestly like using the Forest of Death better because with the Cursed Seal changing Sasuke on top of Naruko realizing her actions towards him have been influenced to a degree makes a better dynamic for growth on both sides).

Or, your could take it further, until the Forest of Death when they battle Orochimaru. The Seal that disrupts the Kyuubi’s seal also disrupts Itachi’s genjutsu.

You’re going with a Team 7 plan, so being more Submissive to Sasuke would actually be a good plan to take on until say the Battle of Wave when Naruko taps into the Kyuubi’s chakra unconciously.

I guess it works? I mean it’s better than nothing and also can work out in the future depending on your plans with Sasuke considering his role in the world.

Well, I was more thinking Itachi would use Naruko as a backup to his plans. Itachi was ordered to spy on Akatsuki right, but considering that Naruko was raped by the Police Force maybe he’d feel sorry for her on some level. He has no interest in her on a romantic level, but Naruko being the seductress she is sees Itachi as a good test of her own skills. Mutual benefit in the end, as Naruko learns of a threat to her(maybe) and Itachi has someone to help Sasuke. And as for the massacre happening already, its been like forever since i read the story completely…

So Shadow Clone this chapter, right? Well in that case, why not pull off Uchiha Massacre and have an Itachi Genjutsu run in Tsukiyomi?

Well, you left off with Hinata’s training last time right? Don’t you think a timeskip into right before her ninja exam is now in order? You could work off something like Naruko has finally pushed her Sponsor to the side, thereby having her as a Queenpin in the Underground...

Needs Lucy Heartfillia as Naruko’s main girl. I love me some Lucy… Just grab those twintail handlebars and pull! Also, considering Lucy is almost entirely Ms Fanservice despite being a very powerful mage, she would be well suited to the prostitution lifestyle. Hell, you could basically start the story with Lucy being sold as a slave to Naruko like canon did before Natsu rescued her. I am honestly disappointed at the lack of Fairy Tail stories on this site though. Like Highschool DxD which also suffers drastically, it seems perfectly suited to use in adult fanfics.

Gotta admit while I liked Loveless, I just think it stands better as a oneshot. The idea of using a Naru/FemSasu without having any cuckold in the way sounds so much better as a long term fic. This stems not only from my hatred of Hinata as a character, but also from everything Naruto and Sasuke go through in canon without Hinata even being present. Assuming the same events all happen the same way even with a Rule 63 Sasuke, Naruto still spent years chasing after her and when did Hinata ever say anything? Yeah… Just make something new without any Hinata pairing if you had intentions to continue, if only to appease those who would be offended by the idea of cheating. It’s not like their isn’t enough stuff elsewhere of anything, but it brings in a different readership and broadens the story types you have if you work a single pairing vanilla. Anyway Mark98, Naruto fans aren’t picky, butthurt bastards. Take it from me. I’m a Naruto fan. I may prefer the Rule 63 side for…reasons… but there’s a damned good reason why so many people like Naruto as the getting all the girls. He’s a well written character first off and he’s practically a walking God in terms of power. Compared to Sasuke, who has a much more complex dynamic in his writing(that many people who don’t understand only see as Emo), Naruto’s good nature and desire for everyone to get along is entirely easy to relate to and thereby give everyone and their mother. And by proxy because of how some of Sasuke’s actions are in fact irredeemable in the eyes of many, they don’t wish to see him ‘rewarded’. It’s a tough sell, but it’s like Kiba in a way only worse. Kiba is an ass, but he isn’t well liked as a main character. So people would be unhappy with him getting pairings. Give Shikamaru a harem, people would be happy because he’s a relatable character.

So I’m curious, you haven’t really said anything on it, but would you be following a standard canon path of Naruko ending up on Team 7? Because while that’s all well and good, in addition to the fact that she could essentially play Kakashi like a fiddle so to speak, have you thought about having Naruko go on Kurenai’s team alongside Hinata and potentially corrupt the Jonin or whatever your plans are for her that way? I mean yeah, it is kinda a cliche in and of itself to have a kunoichi heavy team for a smut fic, but the thought is there. And in other thoughts, have you considered using characters from other manga or anime for the Chunin Exams? It’s not like they have to have extensive use, but little Easter eggs for smut purposes here, there, and everywhere… Besides the fact that dimensional travel is basically canon as shown through various Space/Time Ninjutsu(mostly belonging to the Sharingan however), which is a convenient loophole. I’m not saying you have to, just that it’s an option. Also, can I throw this out as a potential outfit for Naruko? As a kunoichi, she isn’t always going to be wearing the same clothes for every mission. Besides, as a seductress, playing a part is part of her role, so she would likely need an idea of her ‘Marks’ tastes before going through with an actual mission. And this would work well for her I think...