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  1. So, to address a few things:

    The Tenten episode. Right now the first chapter clocks in at a little bit below 11k words, which is way too long in my opinion, considering it is still missing two scenes that I actually planned to write in my first draft. However, they will be moved to the second chapter, which makes Tenten’s fall seem a bit rushed in my opinion.

    But, as I discovered, writing Tenten is just no fun. There simply is no ‘connection’ between me and her character, which would encourage me to ‘break’ her. She simply is completely unremarkable character wise, which I think is one of the reasons I’m not very satisfied with the current episode. Nevertheless once I’m done with proof reading and minor editing I will still publish it, simply to get it over with.

    @Ookami88 yes, the ‘breaking’ is a part I often enjoy as well, and can be a lot of fun if done properly. I agree with your opinion of Hinata and personally prefer pleasure as the initial-, and overall-treatment. That becomes rather obvious when you read the Tenten episode imho.

    @snake1980 I already have a few Ideas for Ino, but I will add yours to them. I will consider them all once I start writing and choose the one I like the most.
     

  2. Well, I guess then there will be 4 scenes most likely, didn’t know whether you only counted things as smut that featured actual intercourse. There will be several scenes with larger timeskips between them, but most of the ‘action’ will always be written out (even if there are some fade-outs here and there)

  3. Thank you, glad to hear that you all are enjoying the story, I’ll do my best to have the chapter done by Sunday, since my holidays finally started today I will have the whole weekend without interruption to work on it.

    @knowpein I like longer chapters too, the reason why I said three was mostly because I’d rather give everyone a short chapter on Sunday, than no chapter at all.

    @Ookami88 Depending on what you count as smut there will be 2-4 scenes in the first part, provided I get everything done in time and won’t need to cut the chapter short.

    @snake1980 Thanks for the idea, but I think I already have enough for Tenten, as I said the outline is complete, now I just need to write it.

  4. Well, the intro is almost done, but it already has 2.5k words, than I have half a scene that will come a bit later, but which was still planned for the first part (another 2.5k).

    And then I have the first scene for the second (or third) part done.

    I would like to get it done by Sunday, but I can’t say it with 100% certainty.  Looking at my outline there is still a lot of stuff to write for the first part, so I might have to split the episode in three parts, although I would hate to do that…

    I hope that since I’m almost done with the intro (which was a total drag to write), that I’ll progress faster with the ‘fun’ part. And yes, there will be smut in both parts, although more in second, since there is no need for an ‘intro’.

  5. yea that would be one way to do it, I will keep it in mind. Naughty nurse Shizune certainly is appealing, she could provide some ‘night service’ to the richer patrons of the hospital, for some extra cash of course. Will see how that works out once I’m starting to write it.

    Still busy with the Tenten chapter atm, and it’s kind of a drag to be honest, but there is progress.

  6. @knowpein yup, it’s fine, don’t worry about it ;)

     

    A question for everyone concerning the Tsunade episode, what should happen with Shizune? I had three ideas on the general path for her.

    1. Simply cut her out of the episode all together (she just doesn’t go with Tsunade to the Daimyo)
    2. Have her there but without including her in the smut (She could be used as a threat to make Tsunade compliant, i.e. if she doesn’t cooperate with the Daiymo they will hurt Shizune)
    3. Or somehow include her into the plot, and sex. (I would welcome ideas for that if that is what you want to see, e.g. Shizune sees what the people plan to do with her master and offers her own body to one of the debtees, if her waives the debt in return)
  7. @knowpein

    don’t worry about the mistakes, I understood everything and that is the important thing.

    That really was very detailed, and there were a lot of good ideas, I most likely will use a lot of them, so thank you for that. I won’t follow it word for word, but I really like the idea with the inspection and the ‘tests’. The version 2 was really good as well.

     

    Otherwise, a small status update. The Tenten episode is going good as well, the first chapter is about 1/3 done. The episode will most likely have 2-3 chapters, since I’m already at almost 5k words and I didn’t even start with the smut yet...

     

  8. Well, I don’t know how mahjong works, and I don’t think a lot of other people are familiar with it beyond it’s name. That’s why I think dices or poker might be better choices. As the focus of the story/episode is not on the gambling/game which would need to be explained, however poker and dices are familiar to everyone. I know Ah! My Goddess, even though I never watched/read it.

  9. Hmm, that actually works too, I could make it so that the people complained to the daimyo about her not paying back her debts, and since they are all influential people the daimyo can’t ignore their requests. Shouldn’t be too many different people though… how many people do you think would be good, if each one gets 1-2 scenes?

  10. A young(er) Tsunade, she had her debts for quite a while so she must have started right away. Since her age is supposed to be 50 in part one I was thinking maybe early thirties? Don’t know the exact date Tsunade left Konoha, but I guess it was before the Kyuubi attack?

  11. I actually didn’t have an idea for Sakura yet, so that hospital one is really appreciated, most likely will use it.

    Don’t wanna spoil, but my idea for Tsunade was something like:

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    The daimyo buys Tsunade’s debts from her other debtees and calls her to his palace. Tsunade can’t refuse the daimyo who offers her bets to get out of the debt, however as Tsunade is not known as the legendary sucker for nothing, she of course looses every single one of them.

    Don’t know yet if I’m going to make this into lots of ‘small’ bets with increasing penalties, or one ‘huge one’.

     

    I had a few other ones, but this was the one I’m most likely going to use.

     

  12. 2 hours ago, Guest kkkzil said:

    Is it possible if you could post some concept art of satsuki?

    I didn’t rally use a picture for her when I imagined what she looked like but this one fit’s pretty well, except for the long hair. I didn’t find any good nudes though.

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    @snake1980 thanks, I’m glad you liked it. I already have an Idea for tenten, but still, thanks for contributing, I will keep it in mind should I ever make another Tenten episode

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