BashfulScribe

Enh. I'm fine with being small potatoes, I'm just happy with what I have. I wouldn't trade the more awesome dedicated fans like you for a billion fans.

She's certainly an unpredictable character. I've also got a story-based reason why Nicole warms up to him at all as opposed to her over friends with benefits, but I'd rather keep it to myself and have the reader make their own conclusions.

Y'know what? Fuck it. I normally don't like forums, but this is where I'm gonna stick updates from here on in because Twitter's 140 character limit is stupid. Because I was on a roll and because as Jashley agrees with me, the ending to BMS chapter 14 seems like a cop-out high school sex story ending, I went straight into writing chapter 15 of BMS. Which is fine, seeing as it is incredibly more popular than GBM. I'm about halfway through it as we speak. And I want to freaking finish it considering I have, and this is no hyperbole, dozens of other story ideas and I realize if I keep gonig at my current pace I'll literally never get to write them. It's raining right now. It's really pretty outside. That's all I have to report for now.

I did! I'm just waiting to get to an opportune moment where I can dedicate my time to wholly responding to you. In advance I'll say thank you and you're awesome, but I'll leave the version without brevity to the email.

Absolutely! The wait will be shorter for the next chapter. **Don't hold me to this**, but I want Being More Social, the entire story, to be done for the end of summer. I'm taking less work hours to try to make it happen.

...Oh, right. Chapter 14 of Being More Social is out. I'm on a roll so I'll probably also do 15 before I return to GBM.

Oh snap! Thanks, guys. I appreciate it. I'll correct it in the morning.

Really? That's kind of stupid. Unless their popularity has massively spiked or the law is cracking down on them to monitor uploads, I have no clue why that's going on...

Thanks for the tip, Guest N! I know more of you would prefer an update for Being More Social, but whatever - The Good, the Bad and the Molly Chapter 4 was released today. I hope you all enjoy and if you don't, you know where to find me so you can yell death threats at me.

Side note - I really hope Samsung tablets are good. I picked mine up for cheap after seeing the cheapest possible iPad was $450. Sadly I'm no longer the starry-eyed Apple fanboy I once was.

Good news and better news. Good news is, I recovered all of my writing. Better news is, I don't like breaking promises and I'll have an update to my writing this week (before next Monday).

Hey all! Bittersweet update. I've been fairly silent for the past little while because my writing tablet has been fighting a battle to keep its screen working that it just lost a few days ago. The stuff I thought I transferred didn't transfer successfully so it took me a fair amount of time to transfer and it was all for naught. I don't like abandoning my writing and trying again when I know what I have so far is correct so I'm gonna dedicate at maximum another week to getting my content back. If I do within the week, I *promise* I'll update within February. If not, I'll slip back into my normal sad unproductive self and go back to my 'the next update will happen when it happens' mode.

Also I've been trying to make it a new year, a new me. I'm writing for these stories every Sunday and trying to contribute to my Twitter at least once a day so people can stop hounding me about how it's 'pointless.' Is there any preference for me to keep contributing to these forums with what I'm up to as well? I can do that if need be. I sure will be using this forum to shamelessly promote the crap out of myself if I end up contributing to something else that has tangible form or gets posted to the internet.

It could go either way if we're dealing with hypotheticals. I mean sure in the short term he'll be upset but I could make the case for his parents looking at that as him being upset over not smoking anymore or some stupid crap along those lines. I'd like to think Nicole was looking at the long-term when she made that call. I don't normally raise points over my own story because I prefer to tell it in the story itself, but remember that this isn't the first time Nicole made a rash decision that has a lot of implications, just because she figured it was her responsibility alone to make the call.

Another Canadian-ism that eagle-eyed Jashley13 pointed out to me... Turns out only Canadian schools have constables. It's really hard to write a 100% accurate story about an American school when the Canadian school system is the only one you know.

Again I reiterate, you guys are fun.

I'm glad I could entertain! As always, comments and criticism on said new chapter are welcome.

You guys are fun.

Christmas day.

woo update time yay party Chapter three of GBM was uploaded today! Any criticism, I'd love to hear it! As for Being More Social, I'm as slow as ever. Especially given the situation I've built for myself, I just find this one particularly challenging to write. I'm very sorry for my slow style of writing. I imagine it alienates a few of y'all. Thanks for sticking with me. Y'all are the best. <3

No, it's okay. No need to at this point. I just wanted to get back up to 90 on both stories, and I did, so everything is golden.

Holy shit... You guys really delivered. I have no clue how you guys managed to do it, but you did it... I'm genuinely floored. The ratings are back to their old state. There is *no need to needlessly upvote the story anymore*, so please disregard my previous post.

Side note, if anyone one this thread is feeling super generous and wants to help me out, normally I don't ask for shit like this, but could I get some positive vote love for my story on XNXX? I only ask, I *only* ask because my lovely old friend named ToucanPlay purposefully downvoted my story (four times singlehandedly, may I add, so you know they did it by cheating the system since you can only vote once) for the sake of having it get a lower rating and thus making it unfindable to the general public. Normally I have a mindset of 'only vote positive if you actually liked it and want to' but since the intent was personal on thier end, I'll make an exception. This isn't 'boost my ratings arteficially', this is 'can my story have the rating it used to have before that asshat gave me a low rating just because they don't like me'. If y'all don't believe me, ToucanPlay is an old friend of Jashley13, and he has some colorful opinions of the user too. My story is at the links provided: http://www.sexstories.com/story/71530/ http://www.sexstories.com/story/71733/ Sorry for asking such a petty thing.

By all means, Penultimate - I don't see your comment as mean-spirited at all. I understand that 'scathing criticism' and 'being a pulsating asshole' are two entirely different things, and if you didn't care about the story, I doubt you would have dedicated this much time to a response to it. Most of the stuff you mentioned will, of course, be taken into consideration as I edit and continue the story. If you don't mind, I will comment in reply to some of what you have said - I realize justification in response to criticism is stupid (I myself believe in the philosophy of 'if you have to explain it you didn't write it well to begin with') but enh. I'll relish in the fact that it's my forum and I get to be a hypocrite sometimes. Firstly, you nailed the basis of both Aaron's and Daisy's characters. However, those were exactly the characters I wanted to portray for both. Aaron is an asshole going through a bit of an identity crisis, wrapped with shame and triggered by chance events. I wanted to go for the stereotypical story because the premise of BMS was different but the plot filled out, I feel, in a predictable way. This series, I'm trying to do the opposite. Predictable setup, unusual direction, just to get viewers to say, "Well, this is dumb. This is just going to be the traditional young adult e- Ohhhhh. Wasn't expecting that." This mindset, I'll admit, takes inherent faith, so it's only fair readers like you call me out on my bullshit. My only real response to that is, "Yeah, I know, just bear with me." Largely, this is an experimental story, where I'm trying out stuff that doesn't work. Daisy is a ridiculous character. No argument there. Another experiment, really. I didn't write her in as a plot device, though - rather, I enjoy stories that challenge our percpetion of what's too far. Naturally it's only fair to say, 'people like that aren't real.' My response is, 'What if they were?' I can, if need be, tone her down, should this opinion of yours be shared universally. Totally acknowledged on the prep encounter. This was an excuse to show how Molly reacts to outside forces on her life, and I'll admit, was written awkwardly. That said, people in colleges where I'm from are remarkably immature, especially considering these guys, while it may not have been expressly written, were straight out of high school themselves. I'm not from a really prestigious area, and in my experience, college freshmen are high schoolers that need a kick in the pants to get going with their lives. The 'fuckboy' comment is acknowledged. I wasn't trying to write it as an insult, more so as a term that inflicts a more 'personal' pain on Aaron, highlighting his insecurity. Clearly this didn't come across well - I'll work on that. Is it not a popular term? It is where I'm from, but again, not exactly Harvard. I will absolutely put my foot down when it comes to Chris. His real-life counterpart, while not represented in what happens to him, exactly matches that description, hourglass figure and all. He likes to keep his sexual life private, and while what will happen with his character, what he says and who he's with doesn't match what is true to real life, such people exist. He is absolutely a gay man and not a woman, but gay men can be like I described and there shouldn't be anything wrong with that. The slam dunk was indeed intended to be humorous. Do they refer to it as that? Perhaps not, unless they are a self-absorbed asshole. Don't worry, I don't want to talk about that scene either. Yeah, it's weird. I'm having a problem with repition with my series. As the eagle-eyed Joe Long pointed out, I repeated 'thrust' way too often in the first paragraph of chapter one too. Could you tell me where I overused 'beautiful'? It would help a lot. My sense of humor is very hit-and-miss. In real life I'm really not funny but once in a blue moon I am for whatever reason. No apology needed. It sounds like the main issue of my series besides what we've both acknowledged is that this series isn't for you. I love the constructive criticism, but even if I fixed all of that (which I will to the best of my compromising ability) I feel like it still won't be good to certain readers. Still, readers like you are very important, because they help me improve, so I hope you'll keep reading this series. Hell, if you want to tear me a new one with every chapter I'll be much obliged. I hope BMS and whatever series I release next will be more your speed. Thanks again for the lengthy feedback. <3

Very cool! I like your observations about the characters. Next chapter will be out on Thursday. Hope it continues to bring you joy!