I would like to take point on writing this story. I take two issues, about which I am vocal, and will place reference materials below.
Issue #1: I feel that the predetermination of Tracy as a victim falls into the “Women in Refrigerators” trope.
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Website/WomenInRefrigerators
Because of that, I feel that shifting the target from Tracy to someone else may be preferable.
Issue #2: On a much easier note, I would like to work with a wider cast of characters, rather than just the five you’ve listed. Let’s expand this little family!
-Paul, Age 16-19
-Tracy, Age 25-28
-Kevin, Age 26-29
-Twins (Amy and Lucy, Age 0-3)