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Review Replies for Loving Sarajevo Epilogue

So like I always say, thanks to everyone that read, rated and reviewed. This was the first story that I posted and I was a little underwhelmed by the response at first and almost pulled it off the site. It actually took a bad review (or maybe my response to a bad review) that got people riled and let me know that they were actually reading to keep me from pulling it and never posting on AFF again (I almost didn’t post Falling for Him here and that would have sucked LOL). So thanks to that reviewer, never has a bad review helped so much.

Anyway, I’ve enjoyed hearing what you all thought about the story and your feedback on whether or not to add a couple of chapters at the end when I thought it was over was invaluable and made the story so much more complete. I still need to go in and do some edits but the basic story will not change. Thanks for overlooking all my mistakes and sticking with it.

So on to the final review replies:

Magusfang: Yeah, now looking at it, it may have worked to have Hana there for the proposal but like I said, she would have stolen the show.

Tahn: I’m glad that you left feeling satisfied. Thanks for following along and for your many reviews, I really appreciate every one of them.

Alasdair-you: Thank you so much. Glad you thought so and yes sometimes I have to just write in the fuzzies because that’s just the way I like it.

FortunateM: Thank you once again for your support. I’m glad that the ending was satisfying and yes, they are going to fill their house with kids and love. Thanks for all your reviews early on you were what kept me going.

Sephla: OMG, thank you so much! Wow almost embarrassed, notice I said almost, at the praise but I’m so glad you liked it. Thanks for letting me know.

Aduil: I’m really glad I could entertain you, stuck on the couch huh? Yeah been there before it sucks. I do have a story for Matt and Payne but it needs massive revision before it will be ready for public consumption so I’m working on it, just gotta be patient. I also have a story for Garrett and it will include Gage and Nikola too since it’s the invitation to their wedding that sends him into a tailspin, no more spoilers though. Thank you for your reviews, they always make me chuckle.

Mary: I’m so glad that you came out of your comfort zone and took a chance on a Slash Original and liked it. It makes me happy to know that something I wrote could catch your attention and not make you swear off the genre forever. Thanks for your review and I hope that you check out some of the other Originals on here and find a few more gems along the way.

So that’s it. It was hard to see it end even for me but just know that Gage and Nikola are out there living a happy life together. That’s the best I could do. Thanks again for all your support.

CL

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Review Replies for Falling For Him Chapter 22

Thanks to everyone that read, rated and reviewed, I appreciate your support. Thanks to all those that left me a review to let me know what they were thinking. I always like to hear what you guys think so don’t be shy. Also feel free to leave any comments, questions or just about anything else you want here in this thread, that’s what it’s for after all.

Okay so we’ve had some developments in the story so far that are a bit trying for poor Gavin but buck up because you know what they say: What doesn’t kill you makes you stronger. That will be true for him so just think of it as character building for him.

So on to the review replies, there’s a few so whew:

Tahn: I know I like that he’s finally going to step up a little and take some control of his life too.

Moku_Sui: Yeah, I think maybe Gavin will see that keeping his parents in the dark on that front wasn’t actually the best route.

Psy-girl: Yeah, I think maybe hearing that Lex loved him maybe helped him make a decision with his parents. Cassie will be dealt with of course you know how the legal system is…

Anon: Thanks for you very animated review. I know I think Gavin and Lex compliment each other’s personalities pretty well and Gavin is coming into his own with his help.

FortunateM: You know, I just imagined what my mom would have done had she thought one of her kids was in trouble. She always had a huge purse so it seemed natural. You’re right, I think the air needs to be cleared on all fronts and yeah, Riley’s right too. Thanks for your review again!

Hideandgoseek: Well your issue has been addressed and thanks for your input. Now gotta go put all those capital d’s in the darn thing…*grumble grumble, darn English majors* Glad you still like the story.

Tnels: I know, I think he finally has something worth fighting for! You’re right I don’t think that his mom is a bad person, it’s kind of a lot to take in and being taken by surprise like that would kick off an unsuspected reaction. Poor Lex getting beaten down by a purse ninja, it will be a story they can tell their kids someday.

Lisa: Oh you just don’t like anyone being mean to Lex and Gavin. Mona’s just being an overprotective mommy. But yeah she can be a bit much but I still think her heart is in the right place even though her attempts at protecting Gavin are misplaced. I’m glad I could brighten your day a little, sorry to hear about the kitty.

Fiona: Yep I like him too. And you’re welcome and thank you for reviewing.

Magusfang: Told you! See that’s what a purse ninja is.

Mary: Hi Mary! I’m so glad that you’re enjoying this story. I promise my updates are pretty regular so you normally won’t have to wait too long for them. Thanks for giving my stories a chance and for reviewing to let me you like them!

That’s all for now. Chapter 23 is up now!

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Review Replies for The Heart Wants Chapter 2

Oh well here we all are again. Thanks to everyone who read, rated and reviewed once again. I get that the first couple of chapters are a bit off(?). I don’t know but the next couple of chapters are better I promise.

So on to the replies:

Aduial: LOL you made me laugh, yes they can just go and well you said it best Thanks, I’m glad you’re enjoying the story. This one is a bit different for me, more angsty so it’s not quite as easy to get into it. I’m glad you’re happy that it’s gonna be more than 3 chapters, sorry for the misunderstanding!

Lisa: Oh wouldn’t you like to know?? Ha Zeb’s gotta keep his secrets for a bit longer but they will come out eventually. I know Justin’s a big guy but he’s by no means the biggest especially on the football team, some of those guys outweigh him by more than fifty pounds And yes I did most definitely mean psych major, I had changed it in one doc but unfortunately it wasn’t the doc I uploaded. I went in and changed it, thanks for the heads up!

Okay so chapter 3 is up!

[Sunflower Review Responses and Discussion]

I read it and I think as far as PWP goes it was well written. Of course I needed to look up your martian, he's green! For some reason that made me laugh...

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@magusfang, true, one would probably do just as well

Review Replies for Falling For Him Chapter 21

Thanks to all that read, rated and reviewed this chapter. I guess there’s not a lot to say so we’ll get on with the replies. (excuse me if they’re a bit muddled, it’s 4am and I can’t sleep so…yeah)

Tahn: Yeah, she’s something isn’t she? But she does love her baby. Yeah that would be funny if he kissed him but I think Lex is too nice to lay one on him just for the stun effect.

Jo: You get the prize for being the first person to tell me that a chapter is too short. I think Gavin’s mom is just a bit over protective but her hearts in the right place. Who knows where Gavin will end up, maybe his house burning down was a good thing?

Aduial: I know, I love Lex too! I think Gavin’s mom is sort of a hoot and yeah, she’s not like my mom but she reminds me of a friend’s mom so I have a soft spot for her. Plus any mother will tell you that even their grown children are still their babies. I think Gavin needs to tell her about Cassie too but no blood baths. I hope you enjoy Loving Sarajevo!

Peabody: So glad I could surprise you, sorry it wasn’t a pleasant one though. Like I said, she’s a hoot but I’m not sure she’ll be all that understanding about her baby’s new squeeze.

Psy-girl: Yep, he should be worried she’s a bit much to handle all in one go. He’s thirty but she still sees him as her little boy, it’s kind of sweet in a demented sort of way! Gavin’s going to…not telling and Lex’s secret has been put on hold since the fire is more pressing for them all but you’ll find out in about three (?) chapters, I think.

Magusfang: You love her and you know it! She’s obtuse, where do you think Gavin gets it from, he’s a bit like his mother he even rambles like her sometimes see foreshadowing at its most subtle…LOL Shhh don’t tell Gavin that he might have to grow up some and yes someone will put the purse ninja in her place…

Lisa: I loved writing her babble, it just flowed out and I had to stop myself from letting her go on and on because I could write her all day long. Yeah she’s controlling and she’s helped Gavin become what he is somewhat but his father isn’t the best role model either and like it or not we always end up marrying someone scarily like our parents. Lex’s secret will come out soon enough I’m afraid. Still sorry about Agent.

Well that’s all for now Chapter 22 is up!

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no not even a little one but you can hold on to the hope that there might be one in hearts. I'm still not sure what will happen to Zeb's dad. Maybe give Zeb a knife or I may have to borrow your prison scene for him Of course he doesn't have nanities so it would probably kill him and wouldn't that just be a bummer?

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Review Replies for The Heart Wants Chapter 1

Thanks to everyone that gave the story a chance and read the first chapter. I have to admit it took me a couple of chapters to get into the swing of this one but that’s true with most of the things I write.

On to review replies:

Aduial: I’m glad you like it but the first 10 chapters are all Shane, then Justin gets his part and Zeb gets to go last. Hope you’re not too disappointed.

Alasdair-you: Yay! I’m glad you’re glad and thinks for the help with deciding the POV change, I’ve got four chapter’s in Justin’s POV done and it seems to be going really good so far.

Than: Yes speedos don’t cover much and you’ll get to see what he’s hiding in the next chapter.

KoKoa_B: Hi K, thanks for checking out my story. Yeah, Shane’s confused as to his orientation too, kinda part of the plot LOL. Anyway glad you like a slow build up, this one is actually quicker than most of my stories but still not in the first couple of chapters. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Lisa: I’m glad I could cheer you up after the whole Agent thing, sorry again about that L I’m glad you like it so far and yeah Shane’s a pretty good guy most of the time but he also has a problem with people who don’t like him, just makes him try harder.

Thanks for the reviews, Chapter 2 is up now.

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@Tahn: Thanks, I'm really glad you liked it, thanks for reading and reviewing too!

@Magusfang: Where were you when I was writing that scene? I guess I never thought to include Hana in the proposal, you're right it would have been cute because I could see her making all kind of demands before accepting. Princess themed wedding anyone? Honeymoon at Disneyland? I knew you'd enjoy the Nun story

Review Replies for Falling For Him Chapter 20

Once again thanks to everyone that reads, rates and reviews, I value each and every one of you! I know I keep saying it but it truly does make my day, everyone likes to know that what they do is appreciated and us writers are a needy lot so just know that your words mean more than I can say.

Oh boy, I sort of knew that I’d get a bit of a response out of Agent’s death and I’m sorry that he had to lose his life but he did go out a hero and as Lex said he had a good long life so even though it’s sad he’s in a better place so we can all be happy for him.

That being said, onto the replies:

Moku_Sui: I know I’m sorry I should have handed out tissues at the beginning of this chapter. Cassie has really gone off the deep end but hopefully this time she did something bad enough to get her out of Gavin’s life for good, we can hope…

Magusfang: Oh my god, don’t give me any ideas. There will be no stabbing

Jo: I’m so glad that I’m not boring you LOL, I know poor Agent…

FortunateM: Thanks, glad the emotions got through, I’m not great at conveying emotions through my writing so it’s something I’m working on and hopefully improving at. I’m not trying to startle you guys with my twists, this story just seems to keep surprising me too. At this point I’m not even sure where they’re going to end up, just hope they end up together…kidding, just kidding or am I…

Tahn: Aww man, I’m sorry I made you cry but like I said, he died a hero so there’s that. We’ll just have to wait and see about Cassie…

Psy-girl: She is crazy, the funny thing is, I actually knew a woman that burned down her ex’s garage, thankfully it was detached but really some people! And yes, he’s in a better place now.

Tnels: I’m sorry, I knew Agent’s death would be hard on everyone even if he wasn’t a huge part of the story. I know Cassie is just a b**** but some people just don’t know when to stop. Yeah Gavin’s mom is sort of a whirlwind so hold on to something…

Aduial: I know I hate when writer’s do that to me too and then I have to wait, good thing I’m not evil so you don’t have to wait long…

Lisa: Oh come on Grady’s not that bad. I know Agent’s death came as a shock, I wasn’t sure I wanted to write it. I tried but that just what it kept coming out as sometimes I don’t have any control over what the characters do, I know that sounds crazy but I guess I maybe a bit unhinged. Anyway, I know how you feel I cried over the mouse in the Green Mile before John saved him people and their pets have always been a soft spot for me. Hope you enjoy the new story, it took me a couple chapters to really get into the swing of it with that one.

Anon: Hello! Nice to see a new face around here, thanks so much for the compliments. I try to actually tell a story, it may not be the greatest story, when I write not just provide a platform for smex. LOL Hope you continue to enjoy it.

Okay, that’s all for that chapter so thanks again and Chapter 21 is up!

[Mix Beer With Liquor and You Will Get Sicker]

I totally forgot about this story. I couldn't remember the name of it or who wrote it when I went back to read the rest of it (only got to chapter 5 before I quit for the night, stupid me didn't bookmark the page). I don't remember how I stumbled upon it the first time but I know it wasn't even near the new updates page, so I'm really glad you posted a new chapter because now I can read it from the beginning again! Thanks for updating!

CL

[Magusfang's Corner]

Alrighty then, I just finished BITG and read the first chapter of GITG...this is just fair warning Magus, when I catch up I'll be fangirling and bugging you for updates.

I liked BITG, the only thing that made it hard to read was all the sex *ducks so the old men don't throw things at her head*. I know you explained that you wrote this while posting on another site where they threw a fit if there wasn't sex in every chapter but it would be interesting to see what type of story this would be if you went back and just chopped down some of the smex. I'm interested in the plot, loved the idea in fact, but sometimes you throw conversations into the sex scenes so it makes it harder to skim them and not worry that I'm missing something important.

I also love the idea of (not just the emotionally and physically abused) kids being raised in a non traditional family so I'm really looking forward to the birth of Max's baby. I would love to see Max get all the women pregnant at one time, oh the hormones, he'd have to run and hide.

Anyway going to keep reading and expect to be caught up in about a week so that I can lobby for the T-girl or better yet a flamingly gay man...

CL

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Review Replies for Loving Sarajevo Chapter 26

Okay so this was the last chapter but I have an epilogue so that’s going up today.

I want to thank everyone that took the time to read Loving Sarajevo. To everyone that left me a review to let me know what you thought: I appreciate it really I do. Like I said, I almost pulled the story at the start but the couple of reviewers that let me know they were there kept me posting so an extra thanks to FortunateM and Zas for your early reviews.

So on to the replies:

Alasdair-you: Thanks I’m glad you liked the end and yes I’d be exactly like that if someone bought me a house! I love HEAs so I always make sure my guys get one. Thanks for reviewing.

Tahn: I’m glad you loved the story, thanks for sticking with me and letting me know that you were enjoying it.

Sephla: Oh man you’re making me blush. Thanks for the compliment! I’m glad you’re satisfied with how it all worked out and thanks to you and all the reviewers that gave me feedback when I needed it. I agree that the extra chapters helped to make the story feel more complete. Hope you enjoy the rest of Falling for Him.

Well that’s all for now. Thanks again for sticking with me through my first attempt at writing. I know it needs some editing but thanks for overlooking my mistakes.

I’m going to post the epilogue and also the first chapter of a new story I’m working on so if you’d all be so kind as to keep an eye out for The Heart Wants and feel free to let me know what you think.

CL

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Review Replies for Falling For Him Chapter 19

Hello! So thanks again for reading, rating and reviewing. A few things have happened in the last couple of chapters I’ve written that make me wonder what the heck is going on with this story so as of right now I’m not sure where it’s leading. Guess we’ll find out together.

So onto the replies:

Tahn: I warned about the drama, I’m sorry just a little more and then maybe one more and oh who am I kidding I have no idea how much more there will be until they get their HEA but they will. It’s a little creepy that I know when you’re about to go to bed don’t you think…

Psy-girl: I’m not sure it will ruin the relationship besides Gavin owes it to Lex to be the understanding one for a change right? Anyway Lex won’t get a chance to tell the doc his secret in the next chapter, too much going on for that…

Aduil: Aww thanks I’m glad you like it. I think sometimes you need lemony fluffy stuff too. Yep more drama, sigh, but that’s life. Thanks for the compliment it means a lot that even one person thinks it’s good and don’t worry I won’t give it up if the updates end it means either someone broke all my fingers or I’m dead…morbid.

Lisa: Yes we haven’t seen the last of Cassie and of course Gavin blew everything out of proportion it’s how he is, in his mind things always seem bigger than they are. Yep, Lex has a secret but it’s not so bad really and unfortunately we don’t get to hear it for a couple of chapters…sorry.

Well that’s it next chapter is up.

CL

[Magusfang's Corner]

magus . do you think you can update within tomorrow.. just can't wait anymore.. lol

magus . do you think you can update within tomorrow.. just can't wait anymore.. lol

Please please, pretty please, can you update!!! Oh wait, I'm still on the first book, stop writing so I can catch up!! *runs and hides so the legions of magus fans can't find her*

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@magusfang: Thanks for your two cents, now I have exactly...two cents LOL. I know Hana is adorable and that's why I had to limit her involvement in the story because she just takes over...you know what they say, never work with animals or children.

Thank you, you nailed Gavin's (well not really cuz Lex would beat you down) character. I guess I thought it was pretty evident from the beginning that he was not the most confident man in the world.

Feel free to put in your two cents whenever you like.

I wrote that before you came up with IKEA porn by the way so I'm totally taking credit for it.

Review Replies for Loving Sarajevo Chapter 25

Thanks once again to everyone that reads, rates and reviews.

I'm a little short on time today so we're just going to get right to the review replies so I can post chapter 26. Only the epilogue left after that.

Tahn: I’m glad you like them together, I think they’re good for each other. Yes, it’s been an interesting journey but all good things must come to an end, but don’t worry Nikola and Gage will show up in some of my other stories so they’re not gone forever.

FortunateM: I’m glad you approve of these final chapters. I’m hoping that with the last chapter and the epilogue everyone will be satisfied that the outcome is clear. You’re welcome thank you for reading.

Kew: Thanks and always happy to hear from you too!

Mafusfang: Nope, one more and then an epilogue (gotta set up my next story). Yep gotta say that I know a few men that would have put JJ six feet under too.

So on to the next chapter…

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Review Replies for Falling For Him Chapter 18

Once again thanks to everyone who’s reading along with me. A big extra special thanks to those that rate and review, I appreciate everyone of them.

Still a little way to go on this story but building up to some big drama so hope you all don’t mind too much.

So on with the replies :

Tahn: I’m so glad you were happy to see the update but I’m sure that everyone was happy you didn’t wake them up. Yeah I’m not sure how people can have normal families and still turn out crazy and yes she will probably hurt someone eventually…

ForutnateM: Yes, Cassie is a manipulative person to be sure and I think Lex’s acceptance of Gavin’s quirks is just what Gavin needs to get his confidence back. Gavin is talented in many ways

Rukia Isaioi: I’m sure if your friend Cassie was like this Cassie she wouldn’t be your friend so don’t feel too conflicted about it. I don’t think Gavin’s secret is that bad either, you know him he’s a little bit of a drama queen sometimes and I think Cassie exploits that too. Explanation upcoming…

Psy-girl: Can’t agree more, she still is.

Housewolf: Thanks, glad you liked the chapter. Yes it’s about time that Gavin steps it up a little but he’s not too confident in himself you know? Yeah Cassie is not my favorite person either and she can get worse believe it or not…

Kew: I’m glad I can make you happy every few day. Thanks for the review.

Tnels: I know, Gavin can get his freak on when he wants to. Ah Cassie, yep she’s something. I think his secret isn’t going to be that bad…

Aduial: Yep you know what they say and a leopard and it’s spots. Poor doc, everyone wants to know his secret, geez can’t a guy get any privacy…No he can’t.

Jo: I think you hit the nail on the head with him. Emotional abuse can be hard to spot especially by the person suffering it. They perceive how they are treated as normal or something they think they deserve. I think if you asked Gavin he wouldn’t say he was in an abusive relationship. I love Lex too.

Lisa: Oh yeah you were the one that said the leopard thing and you were right. Gavin’s parents will make an appearance soon.

Okay so that’s all for today…on to Chapter 19

Thanks again!

CL

[Magusfang's Corner]

OH NO! I'm just visiting crazy land not buying a plot...too many crazies in here for me, I'm just spreading some sanity. I'm like the sanity fairy, see my wings? *flutters away to spread more of what everyone needs*

[Magusfang's Corner]

I'm glad to see your wife didn't kill you magus but of course she's right you probably deserve it. I didn't know you were giving out awards or I'd have tried for something more sensational...guess I'll have to wait for next year. *accepts award, bows and leaves the stage to the swell of applause*

[Magusfang's Corner]

Now, now children, settle down. I'm pretty sure that magus isn't giving out prizes for the youngest reader...

[Looking for a beta for a m/m slash piece-just need an opinion]

Awww you're so sweet. Thanks, I'll get it to you in a couple of hours if that's okay. I'm in no great hurry. If I can return the favor let me know.

[Looking for a beta for a m/m slash piece-just need an opinion]

No, I'm not posting it yet. I figured that since I had two stories currently being updated, that I shouldn't overrun the page with my jabbering...

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This isn't a review reply but a request for a kind of beta reader, I only need one or two so the first couple people who are interested will get the job. LOL

So here's what I'm looking for:

I have an original story that I'm 10 chapters into that has three MCs. I've been considering splitting it into three sections each from a different one of the MC's pov.

I need someone to read the first 10 chapters-in one character's pov and then the first one, possibly a second one, that I have written in the second character's pov and tell me if it flows okay or if I should just stick to the first MC's pov throughout. (Chapters run between 4k-5k)

I'm not looking for someone to edit or proofread the story so please if that's not your forte don't worry.

I would like someone that is familiar with the genre and that will give me an honest opinion on what they think, so if you enjoy m/m slash all the better.

Here's a brief description of the story:

Shane's pretty sure he's straight which is why he's kinda freaked out when his new teammate, Zeb, catches his attention with more than just his dives. Justin is Shane's best friend, he's got a secret that he's kept for a long time he thinks maybe Shane's finally ready to hear it. Zeb's past keeps him from forming attachments to anyone. What happens when the three come together?

Warnings: Obviously it will contain man on man action, though it's not too bad in the chapters that I'd like read and those scenes are pretty vanilla. There's a sexual assault, also not graphic and mentions of abuse to one of the main characters but no actual depiction of the abuse. I can't think of anything else that would be objectionable.

Any other questions feel free to ask here or PM me, also my email address is bangbangramallama@gmail.com anyone can drop me a line there also.

Thanks

CL

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Reviews for Loving Sarajevo Chapter 24

It’s once again that time. I just want to thank everyone that reads, rates and reviews. I guess unless you’ve written and posted something yourselves you can’t really imagine how great it is to know that there are people out there reading what you’ve written. The fact that you guys are enjoying the story is just icing on the cake.

So any way here’s an update on how the story is coming along. I’m posting chapter 25 today and that leaves only one more chapter and then the epilogue. I have both written and am just doing some fine tuning on them. I hope that this will be a satisfying ending for all of those that have been following this story.

On a related note, I’ve started writing Garrett’s story and Nikola and Gage will play a pivotal role in his finding happiness. So you’ll get to see them again…

On another note not quite so related, after I’m done posting Loving Sarajevo I’ll start posting another story I’ve been working on. It’s one of my favorites and I hope it will be as well received as the others I’ve posted.

So without further ado, the replies:

Kew: I’m sorry for the wait, I’m trying really I am…glad you liked the last chapter.

Vidalbea: OMG I know, never would I have guessed that JJ was getting some on the down low. Yes, I think Gage was justified in punching him too. Thanks for the review.

Housewolf: I told you! Can you imagine poor Vicky, she needs to kick JJ in the balls, too bad his dad picked him up off the floor before she got there. (I’m not advocating violence and Vicky is much more understanding than I am, just saying). I think without the snake speaking directly in their ears they can be more objective and Gage’s parents really do love him. I love, love, love Payne his and Matt’s story was actually the first one I ever wrote but it’s so bad that it needs a major rewrite to be fit for public consumption. I’ll shut up now, I could go on forever. Thanks for the review, loved it as always!

FortunateM: It sort of surprised me too. I thought he was pissed because his cousin was with Lucas and Gage, no matter what he says to the contrary, had some sort of deep feelings for him. But really what kind of man would he be if he didn’t defend his lover, who’s far more important to him than either Lucas or JJ.

Tahn: I know Gage is a sweetheart and his family loves him. It will work out in the end…

Magusfang: OMG what are you doing reading a M/M story. Are your eyes okay? At least there wasn’t any naughty bits in the first chapter. And how exactly is anything I said about guys who drive pick em up trucks offensive? You should try out my other story, there’s no guy on guy action for most of it but there are a couple of m/f/m threesomes Thanks, it’s Minimalistic, that’s what I’m calling my writing style! I’m on chapter 19 of Boy in the Grass, it’s interesting so far…

Alasdair-you: Nope, Gage is a hothead most of the times and nobody talks to his man like that apparently. Bet his family is careful of what they say in the future. I’m the same way with my kids, if they don’t like you then, well then there must be something wrong with you. LOL Thanks for the review.

South wind: Well hello there, you’re new here aren’t you? Welcome, to the place where I ramble on about fictional characters as if they were real people. So if you knew why didn’t you tell me?? I was freaking surprised when the door swung open and there they were, I wanted to kick both of them. Uggh sometimes I wish they’d tell me what they were up to, oh well keeps life interesting. Thanks for the review!

Alrighty then, that’s all for that chapter. Chapter 25 is going up…

[Looking for a beta for a m/m slash piece-just need an opinion]

@magusfang, here's the blurb that I'll probably use. I'm going for the most cliches that I can get into one story I'm hoping there's some type of award for that...

Shane's pretty sure he's straight which is why he's kinda freaked out when his new teammate, Zeb, catches his attention with more than just his dives. Justin is Shane's best friend, he's got a secret that he's kept for a long time he thinks maybe Shane's finally ready to hear it. Zeb's past keeps him from forming attachments to anyone. What happens when the three come together?

Any other questions feel free to ask here or PM me, also my email address is bangbangramallama@gmail.com anyone can drop me a line there also.

Thanks again

CL

[Looking for a beta for a m/m slash piece-just need an opinion]

So here's what I'm looking for:

I have an original story that I'm 10 chapters into that has three MCs. I've been considering splitting it into three sections each from a different one of the MC's pov.

I need someone to read the first 10 chapters-in one character's pov and then the first one, possibly a second one, that I have written in the second character's pov and tell me if it flows okay or if I should just stick to the first MC's pov throughout. (Chapters run between 4k-5k)

I'm not looking for someone to edit or proofread the story so please if that's not your forte don't worry.

I would like someone that is familiar with the genre and that will give me an honest opinion on what they think, so if you enjoy m/m slash all the better.

Warnings: Obviously it will contain man on man action, though it's not too bad in the chapters that I'd like read and those scenes are pretty vanilla. There's a sexual assault, also not graphic and mentions of abuse to one of the main characters but no actual depiction of the abuse. I can't think of anything else that would be objectionable.

If you're interested please leave me a reply.

Thanks

CL

[Jaimie's Campfire (StarRebels)]

You'll have to excuse that review, I'd had a couple of glasses of wine and I tend to get mouthy even in written form.

But seriously are they gonna walk around naked for the rest of the book? And do you have a scat fetish because I think there's more poop in your first four chapters than in all of the other books I've read in my life put together.

When are you posting the next chapter?

CL