Stormbringer

thank you for the high praise. that's exactly the reaction i was after. always happy to drown someone else in the despair x] Misery loves company, yano? sounds like you abandoned the promise of hope at the end of the tunnel and expected the trainwreck to happen, unlike the main char. no idea how you managed that, but good job keeping it real! hope it doesnt haunt you too much, though. i have a feeling that if it was an actual place - it would drive people mad. don't dwell too much on it, even if i did purposely sow lots of bleak ideas in there. currently trying to write a piece about outside world, but rules of that setting are so messed up and complex, i spend more time pondering than writing o,o well, eventually it's gonna happen. I completely understand the sentiment. after all that's happened, at least some sugar at the very end would have been healthy. however, that's just the life they're living - nothing is ever easy. in a sense, it is hell, and once in - no one escapes, do they? done all i could hopefully it's little better now.

haha cute comment x] made my day. exactly as you said. Human Feast never had to deal with emotions before, so he has no darn clue honestly the whole last chapter was an epilogue in itself. i had few reservations whether the true outcome should be revealed at all, leaving it in a happy place was a strong option. i guess it does pose few new questions though... although the points you raised will probably be left for sequel if i ever get around writing it. this story has a way of branching off and not dying until its 400pages long, so i'll gve it some time. perhaps a lot of time, because potentially there are great many things to cover still. to make the suspense a little more bearable, lemme share a few facts that were perhaps left out. Human Feast doesn't view Brat as a child. there is always an influx of new guys and thus potential to view events from the other end. there are backup 100% Human Feasts being built. Some of the other Longings escaped too and are hiding out in the catacombs. new stricter rules will be enforced within compound due to that breakout. and such. you're right about witnessing Human Feast's reaction, too. had to be quite an inner turmoil. makes me wanna witness it too a little see, the more you ponder on it, the more juicy situations surface. it just never ends... also whilst resolving their relationship would be nice, it was never something defined in first place. im inclined to leave it so, since no further relationship is possible. two people can't inhabit one brain. draw solace from the fact that Human Feast now knows, and he who has been Endless does too. no actual dialogue is really necessary imo.

hello again Jess x] not telling. you'll have to wait and see its a little funny though, just a while ago people wanted for things to be like they are now it's a little uncomfortable to discuss current events on AFF. if you ever want to share chapter by chapter impressions i suggest going there http://stormchainer.deviantart.com/

haha well said and so true. i feel the same. there are very few intricately deranged works of fiction. perhaps it was the need of this kind of fix that drove me to immerse myself in creation of whole new one x] thanks for pointing out strong suits of the story! :3 if you are planning to reread it, hang on for a bit ;] i'm pages away from completing it (will be total of 39 chapters, or 41 by AFF standards). then I'll edit the whole thing and upload clearer version ;]

To all who are waiting for updates, please bear with the hiatus for a little while longer. I'm writing the very ending right now. Will resume uploading chapters after the story is fully complete.

yeah i understand it can be taxing to go through all that dementia. good job bearing with it so far! i think we're through the worst part :] thank you for the feedback and interest thus far x] after i'm done writing (month, two maybe?) i'll do grand reediting and hopefully put all the dots on the "i". maybe you could give it another try then? ;] or, if you're not too busy you could always help me out on that x) as mentioned, characters are too obvious to me. perhaps it will always remain so and unless someone else points it out to me obscurity will remain.

first off, thanks for picking up this story. always wondered whether that summary catches attention. looks like it does x] was it accurate? did you expect something else from the get-go? now that you mention, the setting is complex. at least certainly distinct to ours. what better way to introduce it than with a blank, unbiased slate? glad it turned out to be enjoyable read rather than taxing as for the lack the articles... this might be the fault of english being my second language and we don't have them at all in my first... ah ahahaha ^^; well, i guess you won't be wrong to say its my manner of speech i need to enslave an editor, as mentioned before -.-; both for grammar and for the names >_> know anybody who would sign up?

yeah >_< looks like i will have to do major re-reading and fix the nicknames issue. oh joy guess their secondary traits arent as obvious to people who didn't come up with them x/ will tune down on the pronouns, too, they must be the major culprit anyway. that... won't happen anytime soon though D: must... finish... writing.... it... stagnant huh. for the story following Newest, yeah, i guess it goes a little dormant. affairs of the new characters do overshadow him. figured it would be fun to see more Longings though. besides, there was a need to show lives of others, establish an actual norm, have something different to compare to. had to set up few things during that part, too. hopefully it picks up again after Lollipop comes back crashing into the picture. but yeah, in the end New Entry wasn't happy in that team. though, he stayed in place because, where would he go? he was afraid Happy held a grudge for his misdemeanours. Lollipop is a tough nut to crack, you can never know what he's thinking o_O it was too late to come crawling back anyway, don't you think? and whilst he was miserable with the Brat, at least he wasn't physically abused as with Tattoos and that's what really mattered to him. oh, and of course drugs - he really didn't care most of the time. spoilers -> if you expect him to become great general and overthrow this unjust system and all the bullies, i'm afraid you can be a little disappointed. the circumstances will keep forcing him down an ugly path. guess we'll have to wait and see whether his future choices are justified. btw, the allies aren't his allies, they're brat's. if he upsets kid, no one would have qualms about kicking him out. in fact Elite is eager to do just that =D being a standalone didn't work out back when he first arrived, either. besides, he needs the supplements. well then, as crazy as the circumstances are, i'm eager to hear what would you have done? =) lets see them plotholes huge thanks for taking some time to write me x] outside input keeps me sharp will surely address the raised points in my grand editing.

hey Jess, we meet again both 14.1 and 17.1 take place before the main story. just wanted to show what it's like in his head. obvious spoiler -> clearly, Master got resuscitated with their scifi tech btw, post-20th chapter upload shall slow down, it takes time to go back and edit old events. btw2 - good job, keep listing everything that doesn't appear to make sense if you come across it. will help me to edit and explain it better within chapters ;p

why of course there would be few chapters of peace x] without that theres no proper despair ;D and vice versa. such a simple moment turned out so beautifully. ending again, huh. you guys are really bothered by it x] nope not telling a thing =D its going to be around 35ish total i guess? not quite sure, maybe more maybe less. if i drag it out with some new content it can easily go 40+, though im trying not to (i originally planned to wrap it up around mid 20s but it turns out im very bad at calculating ). ill be starting 29th soon and really anticipate writing that end bit, so dont want to put it off anymore. looks like it's bothering me too, sigh T_T7 if there's any demand later on, i could just write few more xx.1 chapters with additional events. thanks for checking so often <3 keen interest fuels my inspiration to write x]

wonderfully sick thats exactly what im going for looks like i really need to do major re-edit of all the chapters and set fixed nicknames x/ that sounds like work D: i need an editor ._. "no clue where this is going, but i like it" amusing approach glad to keep the intrigue alive. linear stories with a couple made in heavens are not to my personal liking, so i try to shake things up a bit in mine. i think in a month or so it should be complete, im hovering over the edge of the few ending chapters atm, struggling to remember and tie all the loose ends and such. that said, i pretty much planned out the whole thing already. i could spill some spoilers, but you dont want to find out the great answer like this anyway x] i am very surprised to hear you guys still like Sunshine even after all this. got to admit, these few chapters were taxing to write. even though i always knew who he really was, it was still an eye opener. and you still root for him! so many hopes and wishes! dawww how cute x] well, its true that he is also just a victim in this so its hard to blame him.

discussion thread as angry mods didnt let me spam in the reviews do point out any gaps in logic or contradictions. im sure i leave out a chunks of important info since its only obvious to me, the author. that, and of course, im entitled to plain oversight. will iron them out eventually, hopefully with the aid of readers so fire away. names - as confusing as it is, it has to be this way. adds to the whole slave thing. also, as our perception about them shifts so do their nicknames. though, if youre referring to the technical side, be forgiving. that likely wont ever make real sense - it is a setting laced in scifi. oh that will be priceless, lol. happy to see you're enjoying it so much. though, i am mildly surprised you're still supporting that guy even post ch15. i'd figure that would be a major roadblock. anyway, all the answers in due time x] though i can tell you for a fact main has no Master. merely a test sample. ps, no love for the Shrimpy? even a little? poor guy he's completely out of your equation