AnthonyFiction

This is where I will be replying to reviews left on any stories in the 'Your Art as a Sexy POV Story' series. Story listing: YASPS #1 - Ahri's Tease: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089288 I appreciate the fact that you took the time to review my story. However, my insistence on countering your first point is too strong. There's literally no reason to feel the need to write a negative review. What I meant was negative reviews without constructive criticism: i.e., "THIS STORY SUCKS, YOU'RE AWFUL," etc. A long time ago, people called these "flames." Not sure if they're still called that. That is not how you get better as a writer. I very clearly stated that I accept any and all constructive criticism. Negative reviews are pointless and have no place anywhere. Like I said in the opening notes, "Feel free to comment, just don't be a jackass." The 'lack of sex' was the entire point of the story. It's supposed to fuel your own imagination, just as a good piece of artwork (such as the one this story is based off of) would do as well. If you're looking for 'non-implied intimacy' I have an entire novel's worth in my story 'Time for School.' Thanks again.

A new series begins. YASPS #1 starts with Ahri's Tease by artgerm on DeviantArt. More information explained within the story's introductory notes. Author: AnthonyFiction Title: Your Art as a Sexy POV Story #1 - Ahri's Tease Summary: Ahri appears before an unsuspecting young man for a little late night fun. Your Art as a Sexy POV Story #1 - 'Ahri's Tease' by artgerm. Feedback: Reasonable comments/constructive criticism accepted. Otherwise, don't bother. Fandom: League of Legends Pairing: Ahri/Original Male Character Warnings: Anthro,COMPLETE,M/F,OC Solo story or chaptered story: Solo URL: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600089288

Chapter 20, the epilogue, has been posted. It's been an incredible journey, but every hero needs some downtime. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=20 Thank you all for reading!

Chapter 19 has been posted. Being a hero is sometimes dull work. But, at the end of the day, it still has its perks. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=19

Chapter 18 has been posted. The answers are finally revealed... http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=18

Chapter 17 has been posted. Having a crush usually doesn't have a happy ending. Some crushes, though, can have a more amicable parting... http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=17

Chapter 16 has been posted. Making amends for past transgressions continue with Samantha, Anthony's best friend from childhood. But just how deep does their bond go? http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=16

@Guest_Jamey Monroe: Thank you very much for finding my story fascinating. I truly did not think that anyone would think of this story as such, but is really nice. So is having an English professor reading my story, haha. Hot damn, has it been two and a half months? Go figure. Regardless, people like Jamey continue to show interest in the story and I appreciate the hell out of it - really. Considering the fact that I've been slacking on writing, it's invigorating to know that more people are still reading and enjoying this story. Thank you. I really hate going radio silent, but I don't want to ever make promises that I may not be able to keep. However, with that being said, I will make my intentions (read: not a promise) clear. I really did not expect that I would take this long to finish this story after starting it at the beginning of this year. My personal expectations were to have it finished by August at the latest. It is now the beginning of December and it's still not done. So, in the interest of moving the hell on already, I want to finish the entire rest of this story by the end of the year. I still have a decent chunk of story to write, plot points to wrap up and one very big action-fueled surprise before I can finally slap "The End" on it. So I'm going to be buckling down as much as I can this month to get this bad boy finished up for good. Please, look forward to it - because I am.

Chapter 15 has been posted. Tamara's birthday party didn't go as planned, but there's always a way to pick things up. And, who is the new girl at the pool? http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=15

Chapter 14 has been posted. Elizabeta knows what she wants and isn't afraid to say anything - ever. Tamara's birthday is also right around the corner. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=14

Thanks again for another great review. However, unlike the last ones, this one left me scratching my head. Specifically, this line: "That all the women have been riding their post orgasmic high for weeks without periods of insecurity or disbelief is the most unreal moment in a story about stopping time." So far, less than two weeks have even passed in the timeline. Aside from that, I really just don't understand what you're saying. What post orgasmic high? Why would they have periods of insecurity or disbelief? If you ever get back to me on this, I could address these concerns (if there are any? I really don't know!) and use it to make the story better. But regardless, thanks again for continuing to be a fantastic reader.

I'm glad that the aspects of the story that I always keep in mind are indeed being noticed! I strive for the believability factor as well as the elements of surprise and suspense. Thanks for the cool review and being such a loyal reader!

Chapter 13 has been posted. Sofia's been holding back, but clearly wanting something for a while now. Time to find out what it is. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=13

Very true. 100% true. During writing, I also felt like it was a little bit rushed. The problem was, as I've said before, for the most part I'm in the mindset of just getting the story done. I did feel as though if I'd done anything to make the scene longer, it would've felt like it was dragging on in my mind. I like to think of the story as a big piece of gum that you chew on. I don't want to keep overexplaining and extending something more and more to the point where all the flavor runs out. This is just a minor instance, but even still, I wanted to take the 'shortcut' this time around. Thanks for continuing to give the story a good read!

Chapter 12 has been posted. Breaking up is rough and it's hard to do. However, some breakup's are necessary and for the best. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=12

Chapter 11 has been posted. Ms. Adanna's is the kind of hot teacher that everyone's been a student of at one point or another. But how receptive is she with time frozen around her? http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=11

I appreciate the fact you enjoy the story. Truth be told, I'd be interested like hell to see that out of a Nickelodeon movie, haha. At the risk of looking like a defensive twat, I disagree with your notion about the Sue trap. The main character is the only one with the Sue potential and, because of that, is the character getting the largest - almost constant - amount of character advancement. However, my apology to you or anyone who feels any of the other characters are underdeveloped. I truly feel that, from my perspective, they're getting plenty of love. I have gotten other reviews praising the secondary character development. You may have also noticed in my opening author note that I intend to make a series out of this. Because of that, I'm kind of itching to move on, so some people and sequences may be rushed along. It's unfortunate, but necessary for the series as a whole. Again, though, I appreciate it and I thank you for your review. I hope to keep you guessing and keep you in perpetual cliffhangers until the very end. I wanted to also take this time to apologize for the long delay. I've had to deal with some varied real life things that kept my mind off of the story for some time. It also caused me some distraction when I'd try to sit down and write some new content. Another problem was that I rushed into publishing the story with only two chapters. I blew both of them in a week, which was dumb. That left me struggling to keep up the pace and write new chapters as quickly as I could, which may have caused some burnout. Hopefully this new chapter will be enough to make up for it for now. It's the biggest chapter since chapter two, so plenty to read in the meantime as I get some more chapters churned out.

Chapter 10 has been posted. Natalie's an aspiring model, sure of herself and a perfect ten. She's also fairly open to trying new things. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=10 Note: I apologize for the long delay. I've had to deal with some varied real life things that kept my mind off of the story for some time. It also caused me some distraction when I'd try to sit down and write some new content. Another problem was that I rushed into publishing the story with only two chapters. I blew both of them in a week, which was dumb. That left me struggling to keep up the pace and write new chapters as quickly as I could, which may have caused some burnout. Hopefully this new chapter will be enough to make up for it for now. It's the biggest chapter since chapter two, so plenty to read in the meantime as I get some more chapters churned out.

Chapter 9 has been posted. With fame comes infamy. Nobody wants to be infamous, because sometimes that infamy leads to an ambush. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=9

Okay, wow! This is one mammoth post. I know you touched on the characterization before and I replied to it, but I shall reply to it again. As far as the characters go, I like to list out their personality traits in my head and then think "what would they do in this situation?" A little random trivia: I don't know how obvious this is so far, but the characters in this story are based off of people I knew in school. Obviously I took some creative liberty with their characters and changed their names as well. It is possible that such an aspect gives me an added depth to how I think their characters will act. The 'time stop staircase' idea is cool, but I will say that it's not something I could find myself using. However, there are plenty more new plot devices to come later in the story. I've always thought that 'female appendages' was a good synonym for 'breasts.' Personally, I try to keep the more "vulgar" terms to a minimum; which is why I don't use 'tits' or even 'boobs' very often. Though, the opportunity is always there - after all, this is a first-person POV story which lets me get away with a lot in terms of wordage. I'm always looking for synonyms to expand my vocabulary, which is why I usually have webster.com's thesaurus handy when I sit down to write. And finally, as for the rate of production, I've actually been struggling to hurry up and make new chapters. For one -- I made the mistake of not having multiple new chapters ready to go from the start, and two -- as I mentioned in the opening author note of the story, I intend to make this a series. So, a part of me is kind of itching to get to that next story. Thanks again for the great review. I think at this point, it's safe to say you're my biggest fan.

If anyone is interested in reading this completed novel, feel free to click the following link. Unsurprisingly, I will reply to any reviews here. http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856 Summary: An unremarkable high school student suddenly discovers an inexplicable, remarkable superhuman power inside of him. It doesn't take long for him to begin using it to his advantage, and make his fantasies come true. Fingering, HJ, M/F, Minor2, OC, Oral, SI, WIP Hot damn, the first review on this story. First off, thank you for the great review. I agree with your sentiment on the characterization, as creating those believable characters that people can relate to is what I pride myself on. As the character pool grows, it will be expectedly more difficult to kind of throw in the many characters here and there. I also know exactly what you mean with the long sentences. It's definitely something I notice myself do. The thing is, when I'm writing the story and reading it back, those long sentences flow well in my head just because of the timing of what's being said/acted out. It just sounds right to me and I have placed smaller sentences in at times, only to feel like the full stop was too abrupt or too sudden. Again, I want it to flow nicely and not feel so chopped up. However, I will take this criticism seriously and give pause to my punctuation in the future. Thanks again.

Chapter 8 has been posted. Who would have ever thought that a third party could know about Anthony's power? Lila's become a wild card. What does she want and why? http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=8

That update I said I was going to make on chapter two today has been uploaded. So what did I do, exactly? - All changes made were to the first half of chapter two and the very end of chapter one. - I updated my character to be a little more in line with how he acts later in the story. - The biggest change was to Jennifer's character. I made her less angry and more pleasant towards the main character. This should clear up the awkward dynamic the two had initially where their scene together felt pretty forced. Their time together should now make more sense and feel right for the reader. (Before I uploaded the story, I actually was struggling a little bit on the chapter since I'd gone through a few rewrites and just wanted to just finally get it finished. I'm glad someone pointed it out so I could go back and fix it!) - General grammar and sentence structure fixes Thanks for reading, and keep on giving me those constructive criticisms so I can make the story better.

Chapter 7 has been posted. How will Anthony react when he's confronted by an unpleasant person from his past? http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=7 Note: Thanks to some feedback that's got me thinking, tomorrow I'll be working on a characterization update and some other general updates in chapter 2.

Chapter 6 has been posted. Eve is a ravishing and wise young woman, but just how strong is her relationship with her boyfriend? Also, what happens when Anthony becomes part of an 'experiment' by his friends? http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106856&chapter=6